/wg/ - Writing General - Chuuni Edition

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

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"Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction?"
Yes.

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em.

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

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Story recap! There was 2 stories posted last thread

>>68750290
Tower of Tattle (Update!)

>>68841600
Eternal Night.
TAGS: Nerissa Ravencroft, SFW, Fluff

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this is my first time baking so apologies for any mistake.
not that any of you are here today, since its 14 and that means all of you are laying pipe (like me) with at least 3 different women

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>>68929275
>>68936291
Your nearly endless optimism is a genuine inspiration to me NinisanniAnon, please keep strong for all of us

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>>68958899
>3
Try 5 different women

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Up

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>>68958899
I think you baked it just fine

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>>68958899
>3
My count is up to 9.

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>>68958410
Teaching Kiara how to shoot a gun because your country is losing the war so everyone needs to be ready to defend against the brutal invaders that are coming across the border

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>>68932664
Thanks for the advice. I'll refer back to this once I start writing. Glad to know my issues are all mostly in my head.
Maybe I should watch Frieren and take notes.

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>>68929603
>>68878151
Which are your favorite ball worship moments? I havent read many fanfics here so the most I remember is Ayame kissing and fondling them in Onis Rebellion

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>>68969156
NTA but POLlatio 2 - ReLOADed is entirely that and is great

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Speaking of ball fondling. Which hag would be more prone to play with their man's balls? My moneys on pic related, and I might try to explore that more unless someone has a better candidate.

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>>68958899
>3
Try 1 who's your one and only true love

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>>68969492
Botan would be prone to biting them while in heat.

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>>68969867
I know, that's why she's my first choice. I'll be damned if I don't include that fun little fact about lions. If Anon hasn't reached orgasm number 20 yet, he ain't allowed to go to sleep.

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>>68969492
Korone would while teasing that she might crush them, but never going any harder than a gentle massage to get you in the mood

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>>68969492
If you fail to get Koyori pregnant for too long, she will tie you down and empty a syringe full of her "fertility drug" directly into one of your balls.

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>>68970852
That doesn't really sound like pleasurable fondling, but I like the way you think.

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>>68969492
Choco
Aki
Marine

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>>68971111
It's pleasant for her

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>>68970852
Honestly a yandere Koyo fic where she injects you with some weird fertility hormonal drug that will literally kill you if you don't empty your balls in the next hour or something could be something good

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>>68971373
That don't mean I ain't kicking her away from my nuts while she holds a sharp object.
>>68971323
Marine is an interesting choice. She comes off as much more of wanting to just get straight to the good bits. Yeah she'll give you a killer blowie to get you ready, but once you're slicked up and ready to roll, it's into the pirate booty you go. She could probably want to play with your balls in a teasing way, since it would ultimately give her a level of control and authority over you.
Choco and Aki are great choices. We don't talk enough about how Aki probably can perform over twenty different ways to make you cum in your pants with her dancing and grinding.

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>>68971963
Marine would do it to tease you and rile you up. so that you snap and pounce her. Alternatively, since she likes being put in her place, you could cockslap her and order to give you attention and she would do so gladly.

Aki is absolutely the kind of woman who could suck chrome off a trailer hitch. Zero doubt in my mind.

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>>68971551
>>68970852
Killing would be a bit much for me, but it could be a drug that enhances your balls' productiveness so that after enough time without an orgasm, your sack feels like it's about to burst.

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>>68973338
>Implying Koyori isn't already perfecting a drug to reduce your refractory period to mere seconds while also increasing sperm production by 300%.
Formulas currently show that if a full dose is administered, if you don't cum at least once every 4 minutes, your balls will feel like they're on fire.
>To this end Koyori is also developing a lubricant that is meant to increase hers and yours sensitivity 200%.
Science aided sex is simply the best.

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>>68966698
Now this is some nice art.

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>>68972437
That's gonna be a fun dynamic to explore more. The blatant sexual teasing from a woman with a powerful libido that isn't afraid to flaunt it.

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>>68969156
I wrote an entire fic about Risu worshipping a bunch of nutsacks so
that one

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>20 minutes to page 10
We're healing....

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>shit's going so fast and I'm trying to keep worthwhile threads alive while processing all the bullshit going on that I can't even think about writing rn

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>>68979043
I know how you feel dude. I'm going to try and decompress tonight with a few chill music tracks and see if I can't get back in the writing mood. I know if I can get manage to get some more done, that'll go miles for my own relaxation.

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>>68973627
That's fine, just don't administer it by a syringe to the balls.

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>>68980276
Don't mind this coward Koyori, syringe my balls at your leisure

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Rise

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>>68980276
That is the initial plan, but after some resistance, she might have to resort to syringing your balls. Besides, it's the quickest way through your system so it starts to work.

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We ever get that Roboco fic?

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>>68984667
Recent events are making my brain go numb.
Help me out a little by answering a question for me.
What’s a good spherical object to compare to describe the size of the nuts? I usually write big ones in smut so I’m not sure how much to scale them down for this one.

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>>68984973
large marbles are kinda appropriate. There's also those metal clank balls that are part of those pendulum machines.

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>>68985496
Gotcha. I’ll do my best to get back to it as best I can. Sorry for being a weird temperamental guy.

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>>68984973
>>68985693
Mate with everything going on please don't worry about it. Take care of yourself and be well, that's far more important.

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>>68985693
It's all good dude. You didn't come off as weird or temperamental, so don't worry about it. We're all just here to enjoy writing and reading fun little stories.

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>>68991607
I want Botan to steal me away from my gf.

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>>68991673
But what if Watame just lets Botan think she's stealing you when it's all just a clever ruse to lure her into your bedroom where the true predator lies in wait?

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>>68993683
Also good, also very good.

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>>68994302
She will go to great lengths to land even more women in her bedroom to share with her man.

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>>68995443
You've giving me really nice thoughts. Turned this whole thought on it's head too, you're clever.

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>>68991673
Me be like: what gf?

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>>68996372
This sheep has that effect on people, myself included.

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>>68997749
I just didn't expect the role change like that, it's very, very hot, though.

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>>68997850
Contrary to appearances, Botan is actually more of a sub and power bottom, while Watame is more brazen about such things once she has a feeling of comfort with the person involved.

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>>68973627
>Koyori is also developing a lubricant that is meant to increase hers and yours sensitivity 200%.
Man, this just reminded me of that ancient Koyori prompt of her developing a super anal lube that gives her mind breaking orgasms but also slowly turns her into a dumb bimbo. I think discussion went a few directions for it, one went to expanding it to all of HoloX getting corrupted and turned into bimbos due to lube enhanced anal. Another was an anon posting their maledom degeneration outline where the premise would be about Koyori writing a science log that slowly degrades into horny nonsense each day as the effects of the lube wrack her mind until the last entry is her a mind broken fat assed bimbo writing about what her master (former assitant) does to her daily as the final entry she's writing because he found the log funny after discovering it.
Though I'm pretty sure the anon who wrote that outline is never actually writing it because they're unironically one of the netorasefags, specifially the one who got put in chastity.

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>>68999306
I could see that. I'm just more of a sub myself.

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Valentines fics doko?

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>>69001259
my oshi hates romance! i dont like seasonal stories

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>>69001603
Who are they?
--inb4 you jump on me like an alleyway robber, I'm accounting for either gender

Yes, I said it. EITHER gender. Not ANY.

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>>69002831
Its bae lol.
Its not like she hates romance, but more like she doesnt "get it". she spoke a bit a few times but she loves making stuff for other people but kinda cringes/doesnt know how to feel when people reciprocate.
Also doesnt know how to flirt

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>>69003058
Lets be brothers then (I main Mori)
I do see your point.
Fun fact, I've dreamed of her twice for really random reasons

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>>69003058
That sounds like the set up for a romance fic ala The Right One. Where you're just a very close friend with her and do stuff like living in the same house, having sex, and hanging out at fancy restaurants; you know normal friend things.

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>>69004286
There's also a lot of potential in the idea that Bae only knows relationships at a very base need level.
>Another body to help with finances
>It takes two to tango, it just works
She can grasp a needed partnership, but not love.

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>>69004286
>>69004638
Well since Lost and Found is in the fridge, i can say that the idea of not knowing about romance is indeed featured in chapter 3.
I had that idea because while i understand people complaining about characters going "omg...do i...aishiteru them?", i also think its an important realization people with a crush get. That one moment where you go "ah!" its a really important emotion i think people dont give enough attention. Picrel was my inspiration.
In general, that's the one thing i havent changed over the 4 or so rewrites of it kekwell that and Towa being the one brutalized by kanata in that chapter

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>>69001259
after trimming off a lot of fat, my fic will be ready to ship out hopefully before midnight!

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>>69005319
You hit the nail on the head where there's that one moment where you realize it. I have three distinct moments with that for my wife. It's pretty surreal and you seem to remember everything going on around you when it happens. There's also like an overwhelming atmosphere of serenity right after it happens too.

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>>69001259
Right here.

>>68958321
It's Valentine's Day and your girlfriend Marine has a surprise for you.

Sea Salt Chocolate (10 pages, 3639 words)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSoH2Wd4DMDLGvL3jzoZJ9DUjIh78TJ7cv7lHZdsCHEUgrBgZMOdNL_HfyFOGoHGs6HvdbjCGbzth2w/pub
Tags: Houshou Marine, Fluff, Comedy, Valentine's Day

A bit of a strange fic I admit, but I hope its enjoyable

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>>69007647
>Marine valentine's fic
>No individually impregnating each one of her eggs with a cumshot

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>>69007647
Very cute. I would expect these kinda antics from her. The simple but fulfilling nature of a healthy relationship are shown with bright colors in this. Well done.

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>>69007647
think its cute, that goes without saying.

But i feel like its too...sane? The comedy isnt fully landing because its not crazy enough and as a result, it kinda sticks out like a sore thumb.
So while i liked the romance, i felt like the comedy is a bit too disconnected from it and doesnt exactly add anything. It doesnt help that its the same bit twice...and that bit is kooky and zany but the resolution is unexpectedly down to earth.
IMO i would have pulled back the joke something like marine realizing that she made a mess in the sheets or that the chocolate tastes weird/getting chocolate eaten out of you feels ticklish or gone even further Anon is sawing through it while Marine mops and mentions "she's never buying discount chocolate ever again" while also mixing up the bit The second time marine has to melt you out of the chocolate because you wanted to make your skin smoother for her

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catalog is gonna get faster because Scarle Is MIA.
Hold the line and please send support to Scarle, she deserves it

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>>69007647
Cute, a bit more on the fluff side rather than the comedic side.
That tv scene better not be foreshadowing another fic you're making

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>>68983801
> balls are separate from the immune system so a sufficient crack in the hemato-testicular barrier will lead to immune cells going there and causing nigh-incurable inflammation
> and worst of all, infertility
Same goes for the eyes and some other organs. If your yandere gf ends up gouging out one of your eyes, there is a non-zero chance that your other eye will also follow from the autoimmune reaction

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How come no one mentioned Noel for the number one ball huffer? She would worship them and sniff them like crazy

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>>69015413
Only hamster nuts, though

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>>69015571
Well shit then call me....huuuh...ah shit alvin is a chipmunk... dammit....g-force?

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>>69015907
why didn't you think of hamtaro...you know something she would have seen as a kid...?

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>>69016077
It's funnier imagining Noel being a fan of G-force.

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Who are the most westaboo in HoloJP?

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>>69018500
Foobs I think

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>>69018824
Nah, not Foobs. She's open to it but doesn't seek it out except for when it comes to capeshit.

>>69018500
Korone by twenty miles.

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>>69018500
Subaru, you know, the only one to bother learning english

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>>69018500
Doog

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>>69015413
>>69015571
This is all just making me think of a Noel romance smut fic where she huffs your balls with the ending revealing you were a hamsterboy all along.

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>>69015413
Gonna be honest, when I read the word hag I don't think of Noel

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>>69019538
Isreal?

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>>68958321
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQ2S2zLiuzmQq0VfxAIPS-qmwK3ayAyllIQK6i8kgdVv4q4hIcDO5NXJyrkwiwl-E-kWQrI513ikZkV/pub

Shameful Desire Part 2: Regretful Desire

Tags: Sakamata Chloe, NSFW, NTS+NTR, some romance.

Thank you to those who've been waiting for my next entry, I tried to do something a little different this time around

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Um, what happened to AA?

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>>69025846
On the job hunt so he activated THE FAILSAFE while he's indisposed

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>>69009036
Thats for White Day

>>69010738
I'm always worried about writing Marine a bit too slapstick when it comes to her antics so I'm glad to hear it went over well. Thanks for reading, glad you liked it

>>69011338
I agree with you actually. It's not quite a comedy but a bit too bizarre to not have some sort of tag imo. So I split the difference. I wanted to keep this short (under 5k) and have it be more fluff than funny, so I didn't stuff it full of gags. Probably should have though. Thanks for reading and the feedback

>>69012644
>spoiler
All my stories have happy endings, that's my writer's guarantee

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>>68958410
Hololive and Nijisanji do a month long talent swap to exchange ideas.
Everyone at Hololive is confused at how Rosemi flinches when management talk to them
Mori is chained in the office toilets as punishment for not paying for her managers dinner

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>>69025846
Left. He's no longer in charge of the archive.

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>>69025842
Honestly was hoping you'd lean more towards Chloe's eventual moral degeneration and fall

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>>69025846
He lost the archive in the divorce. Now the former Mrs. AA will be in charge and is going to force us to exclusively write nijisanji yaoi.

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>>69025846

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>>69030917
>tfw I'm responsible for one of the two niji yaoi fics we have
I'm safe!

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>>69030917
Ya
Bai

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>>69025842
Man, this fic's NTS angle continues to be the most interesting part of it. Smut's played entirely for drama rather than fappability but honestly it's at the perfect length for pure drama; any longer and you'd have to commit to making the full smut scene.
I see you're taking direct inspiration from the Hyper Leather Vector Chloe idea. I take it she was some kind of assassin prior to all of this.

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I had a dream where Shion gave me a blowjob.

We were both third or second years in high school (I think third) and weren't exactly friends, but I guess you could call us acquaintances. Knew of each other, exchanged pleasantries now and then, etc. Definitely not close. Iirc she was one of the popualr girls and wore really trendy fashion to school and I was a bit of a nerd, but only because I had decent grades. I still had friends and compete decently in sporting events (this is all just information the dream fed me).

Our class was sent to some camp excursion thingy for two nights. I'm pretty Shion was asking for a favour (we were standing side by side, watching the campfire at night) and wanted to borrow something I had brought in my bag to use for an activity tomorrow. I don't remember what she wanted to borrow/use, but I remember being fine with and on board with letting her use it. But as we were discussing it she offered to suck me off (she used those exact words) in return. It wasn't even in a sexy, seductive way and wasn't said jokingly either. She just offered to as if giving me a couple of bucks in return for the thing she was borrowing.

I was, of course, very happy to accept and we went into an alleyway (for some reason we were suddenly between some red brick houses and not at the campgrounds) where she proceeded to give me (supposedly) the best head of my life. It didn't end up as a wet dream but it somehow felt really good. After I came in her mouth she swallowed, wiped her lips and we walked back out onto the campgrounds.

What's kind of weird is this felt like some kind of business transaction, but not as in it was cold and quiet and serious, but kind of like how a semi-regular at a store would exchange greetings with the owner before buying something. She seemed happy to fellate me, but not overjoyed. Like I said before, it was as if she was just passing me a couple of dollars to borrow the thing I was offering. She wasn't disgusted, aroused, apprehensive, cheerful or anything. Just neutral (and like I said, this doesn't mean cold or serious or emotionless. Neutral as if she was eating food or applying makeup), and slightly pleased that she would be able to borrow whatever it is I was lending her.
After that I think we sat next together on the bus back home and briefly talked about the blowjob, laughed it off then never mentioned it again.

O witch of the crescent moon, what spell did you cast on me?

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>>69036654
>I had a dream where Shion gave me a blowjob.
That’s all I needed to hear. I’m in.

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>>69037173
You want to suck his dick that badly?

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>>69030917
Nah, she isn't into yaoi. If she was in charge of it she'd much rather you write hardcore Pekora punishment fucking. Every time she sees the rabbit she says she wants to see her spanked until she's crying for whatever stupid shit she's done then hardcore nakadashi'd. That prison outfit activated the same neuron in her that it activated in me.

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>>69037682
Post pics of your wife's tits?

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>>69036654
Shion with rrat!ayame characteristics?

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>>69038795
I think it's a bit different. Rrat!Ayame would take pleasure in giving (You) a blowjob and would tease you about your reaction. She'd also do it for free.
This one felt like she was sucking your dick as a favour, but one that she didn't mind doing at all. Her thoughts on the blowjob were completely neutral.

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>>69037682
Would she read it if someone wrote that? I feel like we owe her a bit for supporting the archive indirectly.

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>>69036654
>>69039380
This sounds like the "casual sex world" idea from some time ago, where sex isn't really a big deal. I can see (mostly) limiting that to handjobs and oral sex, because there's really no reason for not giving them more often apart from cultural/psychological ones.

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>>69025842
Spending Valentine's jerking off to cuck porn!
This was charming though CC, nice job. The dream sequence was really hot, and the extensive aftercare made sure it didn't prematurely jump the shark.

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>>69014930
That sounds like the kind of schizo twist you'd see in a betrayal/ntr fic where they reveal they're doing it under orders of *Insert NTRman cucking you here*.

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>>69025842
Your prose needs time and practice to mature. There's nothing necessarily wrong with it, but it has no really strong points either. The delivery of some of your lines and scenes is really good, and they carry some nice punch to them. That said, I'd recommend culling the use of exclamation marks unless it's in dialogue. If you're looking for emphasis, you can use strong verbs.

Anon's mentality as well as the reaction he has to both his fantasies and the unfolding events were mint. Chloe getting all sadistic was hot except for her calling you 'cucky'. That just felt silly in my eyes, but you did a great job with everything else.
>No matter what happens, all women will cheat on you. And you have no one but yourself to blame~
Ouch.
I felt fuzzy when Chloe told Satori to fuck off and how she made sure that only her boyfriend gets the videos.

You're making a very interesting story, Anon. I'm all along for the ride now.

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So what's a fic that's been on your backlog of things to read from here and why haven't you read it yet?
Hardmode: No holojourneys

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>>69046544
Cover High
I was super charmed by the first two chapters, but I don't want to read something incomplete. Unless I hated the story midway, I'd drown in disappointment.

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>>69046544
No specific desires. I guess I haven't read any Ayame stories so probably one of them.

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>>69046544
I want to give a fresh look at tower of tattle.
First time i passed because the gimmick was annoying in docs, but now that it has its own site it might be better

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>>69046544
No such thing with me...until >>69025842

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>>69049258
Those two goofs are just doing their best to get by. Of course they'll get a tip.

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>>69046985
Same desu
i really like the chapters that I have read but for some reason sitting down to read the rest has just been in my backlog for years now.
>>69047175
How can something be in your backlog if you don't even know if you want to read it?
>>69047869
The gimmicks are better implemented at least. They still feel a bit half baked conceptually but at least they're easier to read through.
>>69047872
I mean I liked it as a follow-up to the previous chapter. If you liked the drama of the first chapter it's more of that.

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>>69046544
Auntie’s Little Secret
Read chapter 1 and I really like the switching present therapy session and re-experiencing the past, now I just have to get through the rest

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>>69054740
>you dropped this
*between
>thanks, me

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I need some healing fluff in my life.

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>>69052612
I meant to say that my interest got piqued.

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>>69055778
Got a specific chuuba you'd like to read some fluff on? There's surely a few good ones in the archive to help ease your soul a bit.

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>>69054740
>ALS
Man, I love that fic but I wish we had seen the bad ending

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Woah there, up you go. I got distracted by Choco's sex filled 3d live.

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>>69046544
I'm going through ALS one chapter at a time. I'm in the middle of chapter 7, and things are falling apart. I don't know how to feel about this story anymore.
I'm pulling myself out of my immersion here to say that I think it's well-written considering the very difficult subject, and I like the way formatting is sparsely used for emotional effect.
>“Kon kon…” She smiled. It looked natural enough.
Jesus Christ, man. I can only imagine how hard it was to write this story.

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Live you fucking maggot. That's an order.

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>>69060046
Debating if Reine should go on the same arc later on...

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> Victory or Death, Death before Dishonour
WRYYYYYY THEY ARE FUCKING RUINED FOR ME NOOOOW

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>>69062255
It's over...

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>>69062252
Like regretting that she fucked her nephew? I'm not sure if the setting you're building up between them wants to take too similar of an arc. Your MC seems more than old enough to understand sex and his own choices, so Reine is unlikely to think she "ruined" him in some way. The two so far come off as one black sheep comforting another, which is built off mutual interests and at least attraction from the guy's end.

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>>69063966
No, the whole "its affecting her work and thinking of graduating". Unlike your (?) Kenji, my planned equivalent is far more a straight rival and not as nice.

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>>69064573
Ah that part of it. And nah, not mine. Just another anon who took notice of what you were cooking. If you do have a rival planned, consider making it a rug muncher. You can really fuck with Reine's turmoil on the situation if she originally or primarily is into girls but for some reason she swings the other way when it comes to her nephew. Which can also make her question if it could be a long lasting thing or not, since her preferences could betray her again on a whim and she wouldn't want to trap her nephew in a relationship where she would suddenly lose sexual interest in him.

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>>69064923
I dont think I have it in me to make Kiara an antagonist...

What I got planned is forced marriage to some suit picked out by her sister Reisha.

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Unrelated to the specific conversation you two are having, I've wanted to ask if there is any meaning behind the protagonist's name Basuki rather than just the generic anon. I looked it up and apparently it's a normal name in Indonesia, so I guess I answered my own question.

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>>69062255
>elira is a manipulative bitch in DbD
Israel

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>>69065493
Everyone's name so far is.

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>>69065601
Really disappointed with her imo. Iirc, she was among those who played Metal Slug with the former Selen, along with Finana.

Heartbreaking. Even more, males also got involved which means more fuel for the "KILL ALL MALES IN VTUBING" group.

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>>69065299
Doesn't have to be Kiara, just another bombshell of a girl after Reine's clambake.

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>>69066913
But...all bombshells I know are Holo...Yopi? Moona? Who else is Reine involved with?

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>>69067187
You were going to create a male character for a rival role
Why wouldn't you be able to create a female character for a rival role

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>>69067187
What >>69067383 said. I assumed the idea would be an OC who is after Reine's affections either because she likes her as a person, status, money, all the above.

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>>69067383
The goal for Reisha and allies is to "correct" Reine to be more regal. So far, I got her and Astria, Basuki's ma pinned as villains.

>>69067493
Hmm...maybe not arranged marriage, but just somebody to keep Basuki apart from his beloved auntie

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>>69069045
The arranged angle could work as an ultimatum. You don't necessarily have to fully explore that path and implement it, but simply mentioning the threat can do a number on your protagonists. You might need to properly go into where the other rival comes from, since if Reine is mostly a shut in due to streaming, it would be hard for her to go out and meet someone to form a strong enough attraction for them to actively meddle in her love life.

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>>69069465
This rival is handpicked by Reisha and approved by both the Pavolia matriarch and patriarch.

Also in debate is whether if they know incest is brewing and how, if ever.

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>>69069688
Gotcha, that can work, but you'll want to keep in mind what they might have over Reine to even make her entertain the idea or not just flat out refuse. That could be laws, exile, etc. Money would likely not be a good bargaining chip since you already establish that she is pretty successful within hololive and could easily move out and live on her own. I think incest would be the last assumption they would make, and only some pretty glaring evidence or vibes would cause a person to consider the taboo possibility. If nothing else, they would view Reine and her nephew as bad influences on one another.

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>>69069045
>The goal for Reisha and allies is to "correct" Reine to be more regal.
Reine spanking here we go

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>>69070408
Hmm, threat of excomunicado aka stripping them both of the Pavolia priveleges they enjoy? I already pulled the "hey, aint they too close card" so...

>>69071877
Kek

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>>69072199
Them being too close isn't exactly a problem per say from their pov, more of an annoyance at best. It's when they view their relationship as a roadblock to the goals they THINK they should be working towards is when they would really analyze how close they are. Again, stripping things like privileges wouldn't affect Reine too harshly, since she has the income to provide for herself at this point and would likely welcome not feeling like she owes her family anything anymore. What you could do is spin it so it's not her name and such they would be stripping away, but her nephew's. Reine would more than likely want to make sure his future is not stained because of her own actions, and you can also play a bit of mystery with this idea in that she isn't allowed to tell him about the ultimatum. If you really want to pile on the finality of the situation, make them put it in writing and have her sign it.

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>>68958410
Day after day, both you and Bae keep getting raped by irys.
Everyone in the office has given up on helping. Bae has to drink bottles and bottles of water to keep herself hydrated while you need to up your protein intake or you cant match the succubus.
But TODAY that stops. Both of you will join forces and finally rape irys

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>>69052612
>How can something be in your backlog if you don't even know if you want to read it?
I don't have a backlog, just a vague idea that I want to read fics about every chuuba I watch eventually.

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>>69051451
I'll give them my tip

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>>69073101
Why not
>Irys is her usual self (aka a tease)
>Both of you are triying not to get fired over breaking cover laws
>Irys keeps slutting it up. Tension rising
>Until x happens and both of you double team her
And then you end the Fic with both completely spent perking up as irys fingers buttholes because she's a freak

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>>69073101
You should use Moco-chan as a distraction so you can gain the upper hand.

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Page 10 get outta here.

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>>69073318
If you watch ojou what are you waiting for? You cant go wrong with almost any story about her from the archive!

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>>69073824
I can very much see how IRyS would be blabbering while having fingers up multiple butts.

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>>69064573
NTA but I think you're looking too deep into it.
You can just have them fuck with some minor drama. Keep in mind the fic you're taking inspiration from went through WIP hell for a long time.
There's plenty of doujin about fucking your aunt where the whole drama is just that it's a barely incestous relationship, and like that other Anon pointed out, there isn't the leverage for something of the magnitude of ALS.
In that fic, Fubuki destroyed the bond she had with her innocent nephew by acting on her intrusive thoughts, subsequently ruining his life.
Basuki on the other hand, like that anon said, is old enough to understand sex and incest. If Reine asked to fuck, would he say yes or no?
Make their relationship work first, and everything else regarding drama and whatnot can come afterwards.

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>>69042855
good critique anon but i must offer one critique of the critique, in that "cucky" is an intentionally cutesy/demeaning staple of works like this that has pretty universally good reception among cucks. unsure if i've just been gaslit into liking it via overexposure or not but it really does it for me and probably does for CC, too.

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>>69081860
Eh, fair enough. I'm more into straight up cheating than Netorase, so everything regarding cuck-powerplay is lost on me.

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>>69075885
I really enjoy staring back at her

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>>68958321
IRyS calls up Kiara ready to brag about how Calli is cheating on her on Valentines and she’ll never feel Kiara again after her CockRyS while fucking Mori only for Kiara to point out after IRyS speech is done that they were never dating but IRyS did just spend Valentines fucking another woman instead of her wife.
TL:DR IRyS thinks she’s cucking Kiara with Mori only to realise eventually the one being cucked is Bae.

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>>68958410
IRyS calls up Kiara ready to brag about how Calli is cheating on her on Valentines and she’ll never feel Kiara again after her CockRyS while fucking Mori only for Kiara to point out after IRyS speech is done that they were never dating but IRyS did just spend Valentines fucking another woman instead of her wife.
TL:DR IRyS thinks she’s cucking Kiara with Mori only to realise eventually the one being cucked is Bae.

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>>69083981
So Irys is like "Hey kiara, I'm fuckin your bitch" only for Kiara to be like "bitch aint mine no more" and then Irys remembers that Bae is her wife so the rat is actually the one getting cheated on?

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>>69083981
>>69085227
i mean this can work if Kiara waits for irys to finish then goes "cool beans" and passes the phone to bae?
otherwise what am i reading here?
Also ill rather have Kiara giving her friend Mori a gift on her birthday and inviting her into your bedroom, where the two of you fuck the shit out of her

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>>69086070
>Spoiler
Now we're cookin.

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>>69086070
>Mori still has feeling for you, but missed her chance and Kiara snatched you
>she's a good sport about it, but cant fully move on
>which is why on her birthdya Kiara gives her some cat lingerie and tells her that she has one last chance that weekend
>Meek Mori getting absolutely devastated by you (threesome, still finds Mori sexy, Kiara is riling you up) and Kiara (Threesome, finds mori sexy, is riling you up, might or not want you to stuff her like a pastry)

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Not yet! Hold it in for a little longer~!

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>>69089162

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If you're gonna write, write like you're the third monkey on Noah's yacht.
And brother, it's starting to yab.

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>>69091910
I think I just gotta a little more writing left to do before I can proofread and edit.

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>>69071877
Pavolia-sama, we have reviewed your nearest video broadcast, and it appears to be the same story all over again: you engage in lowly arts, you talk to people of common origin as if they are your equals, and you thank the peasantry for donations as if you were a beggar grateful for alms.
Our scribe has cobbled together a "stream high-lights" video recording for our lesson. You are to bare your buttocks and lay down over my knee facing the video screen. We will watch the video together, during which you will explain what kind of conduct you should have engaged in. Incorrect or sluggish answers will result in further punishment. Do you understand?

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>>69091910
Did something else happen?

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Rise.

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>>69095518
Nah same shit as always

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>>69047869
>>69052612
>tfw not only does no one like the gimmicks and they're also the most annoying to put into html
i'm glad the new site makes it a bit better though

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>>69057506
Forgive the late response. No one in particular though. I'd love to hear your recommendations.

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>>69089162
I'm letting it out, Nene! Take my Subway 3" with extra mayoooo!

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>>69097235
Well for shorter one shots, Polka has an ample supply of fluffy stories; A Down Day with Low Pressure Polka, A lazy Day with Polka, A Crash Course on Fennecs and Love. That's just to name a few.
Holomoms is a fluffy greentext that is bound to brighten anyone's day.
If you want to strap yourself in for a longer ride, any of the long running series we got has its share of marshmallow fluffy moments and focus. Pick one that sounds interesting and enjoy.

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>>69035921
Thank you, I hope I can keep things interesting rolling forward. I loved the HLV-Chloe greentext.

>>69040991
After all the things nightmare Chloe was saying, I felt kinda bad for Anon. Thank you!

>>69042855
thank you for your critique, I hope I can maintain your interest with some of the things I have cooking for part 3.

thank you once again to everyone who read my fic. please look forward to the next part.

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The "I want to cuck him" to "I want to fuck him" pipeline

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>>69100745
>Suddenly, she realized it wasn't about the size of his dick, but the size of his heart.
Poetry

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>>69102731
>Poetry
Piss off early, tomorrow's really yesterday?

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>>69102891
Fubuki's Fububoobies Finally Finished Fondling my Phallus.
While Mio's Mammaries Made My Mellow Mind Much More Manic.

One mouth and four titties, truly a problem.

Then, Botan's Bouncy Bonkers, Watame's Wonderful Watamelons, Lui's Luscious Lady-lumps, Korone's Kemono Knockers, Marine's Marvelous Moons, and Fuwawa´s Fierce Fucking Fondlers.

Made this problem, worse all the more.

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>>69096831
This is a very cute Shiori.
I swear I'll give your story a read this week in exchange.

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>>69096831
I liked the gimmicks, my favorite one was the CYOA chapter. It's just sometimes the implementation was rough. I respect the creativity and ambition though.

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>>69103961
Exquisite alliteration.
>Fubuki's Fububoobies Finally Finished Fondling my Phallus.
Now I'm hard, too.

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>>68958410
falling in love with your english student Moona

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>>69108681
The tits on her 3D model are truly insane. I want to molest her while she stares at me with her dead eyes and insults me with improper grammar tenses.

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>>69109170
Moona has the mind of a 12 year old so she would be totally okay with being molested as long as she gets a turn and can laugh

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>>69109341
I like the under highlights of her hair. What do you call that anyway when they got a different color like that on the underside of their hair like that?

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>>69098939
I want a happy ending to all of this.

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>>69060046
>things are falling apart. I don't know how to feel about this story anymore.
In a good way, or a bad way?
I was thrilled by the decay of their relationship in a 'Oh fuck what now?' way.

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>>69096831
I did say I like how they're implemented, it's just that the story gimmicks are inherently gimmicks that are kind of out of place within the medium. I do like the story being told with them; even if it does feel like they're Shiori and Redacted getting thrown into video game puzzles.