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Story recap. There were four stories posted last thread.

Brat correction >>72561570
TAGS: Takanashi Kiara, SS, Shotacon, Oneeshota

Daydreams >>72444412
Tags: Shiori, (Light) Abuse, Doomed

At the precipice of madness. >>72568527
Tags: (Existential?) Abuse. Hakos Baelz. Gore

Gooberball. >>72613541
Gura, sexual, severe.

CONTEST ANCHOR
>The /wg/ Flash Fiction Festival
>Theme: Chuuba Abuse (Receiving or Giving) - To be tagged with either Sexual, Physical, or Psychological plus Severe
>Word count: 4channel's max character limit
>Time limit: 1 week from the anniversary on March 26, 2024
>Voting: Polling done through poal.me

>>72670403
Nerissa finally gets fed up with going to family reunions and seeing her sisters pregnant AGAIN, so decides that she'll be the one showing up with a bun in the oven, and enlists your help regardless of how willing or ready you think you are

>>72671556
I need white woman but I don't know if I do THAT bad

>>72671556
>Nerissa tries to rape you
>Put the most minimal effort towards resistance
>Flips over and deflates because She's a useless Bottom
And then you bully her with a creampie! Genius!

>>72671556
This reminds me of an idea I came up with the other day of trying to skirt around the idea of having kids with Kanata because you don't want to bring a Nephilim into the world and bring down the wrath of God.
Only to find out a Nephalim already exists

>>72674363
> sire a nephilim with Kanata
> move to the upper underworld layers to escape the angels' gaze
> angels and demons aren't at war anymore, but a lot of bad blood still exists
> some angel orders still religiously(w) enforce their rule and would hunt your family down
> the place is underground (no shit), a bit depressing for Kanata and for your child as they have some instincts about the Sun and being able to soar the skies
> kiddo bullied due to clearly being different from other demon kids in demon school
> kiddo hurts the bullies with angelic aspect so you move places and schools a lot
> no real guides on how to raise a nephilim so kiddo can't really get help from you, the local doctors or therapists
> everything fucking sucks

This came out really miserable. Please someone lighten this up

>>72675273
I think you're taking it the wrong way. My idea was never for it to be edgy. "A Nephilim already exists" just means that you meet IRyS and realize you have the wrong idea.
Imagine the tension between you and Kanata ramping up and reaching a boiling point only to be mind broken by:
>"HiRyS, it's IRyS!"

>>72672984
>save me white girl
>white girl
>white girl... save me..
>save me white girl...from yourself...

>>72644335
Sorry, I fell asleep.

The main takeaway is that Marine has zero self-esteem and self-worth and has crippling Imposter Syndrome.
Let's start with the self-esteem. Marine believes 100% that she is not attractive enough or good enough of a person to get a partner. That nobody would want to marry her despite statements otherwise. She thinks they're joking, basically.
Next, the self-worth. Marine, especially when she's depressed, often views herself as not good enough or worthless and that people don't really like her (that shes a failure). There's very much a sense she gets of "letting people down."
The Imposter Syndrome stuff is self-explanatory. Marine has a pretty severe case of it though.

Let's talk about Marine's view on a partner. Marine wants first someone who understands her and loves her, that is all she needs. She just wants someone to listen and be on her side. Marine’s ideal partner knows exactly what she wants. No need for her to think anything and never to go against what she wants. On the flip side, Marine is very much a people pleaser and a lot of her motivation is "doing right by her fans", to fill the hole she feels of "failure"

I think the key to writing a Yandere Marine would be to hone in on feelings of possessiveness. She has finally found her man and she will NOT let him go. Feelings of comparison should be a focus as well. "I'm not good enough" should warp outwards into "removing those who are better than me" Marine is the type of person who carries her burdens until she explodes.

Finally, some quotes from her I pocketed. Interpret them as you will.

"I want to cherish all of you who are following me, your messed up and useless captain."
"So when I was reading letters saying that I am hardworking I felt like I didn't deserve and I started feeling bad"
“I won't confess. Because I will feel sad if I get dumped. I’ve never confessed to anyone."
“I don't really care that much for height, weight, and age. I care more about how devoted to me you can be.”
“I want you to be able to understand what I want even if I am not saying anything to you, I no longer want to think anything”

>>72677817
>Nerissa decides to be a good wife and clean the attic, that thing you usually do
>drops stuff and books
>Learns about her past as a sadistic demon general
>learns about her war with heaven that ended with half of the hell population wiped out
>Learns about the man who broke her horn

If the fic was about a chuuba being forced to drink piss, what category of abuse would that fall under?

>>72680424
It can be any, really.
If the forcer is aroused by it, it's sexual. If that's not the case, it depends on whether the chuuba's physical or psychological reaction is on the forefront.

Noooo anon, what are you doing stop eating those Easter Eggs you don't know where they've been!!!!!

>>72670571
Top Dog
Tags: FUWAMOCO, Korone, physical

>Korone aggressively bursts into the Cover office lounge
>"I knew I smelled another dog around. So you two are the new hires?"
>"We sure are. I'm Fuwawa and this is my sister Mococo"
>"Whatever. Just know that Hololive is my turf. Stay out of my territory"
>"And what if we don't?"
>Korone smirks and cracks her knuckles
>"Don't try to test me"
>"We're not afraid of you, senpai"
>"Oh, you're not?"
>"We're not?"
>"Back me up here, Moco-chan"
>"Un un. We're not!"
>"Someone oughtta teach you kids who's in charge 'round 'ere"
>"Bring it on! We'll fluff you up!"
>"We will?"
>"Come on, Moco-chan, it's 2v1, we can take her easily"
>"Un un"
>"Then come at me, bitches"
>"Bau bau!" the twins shout as they charge forth
>Mococo tries to smack Korone in the face
>She blocks with a defensive boxing stance before countering with a punch to the stomach
>She follows it up with a few more hits to Mococo's body
>"Block, Moco-chan! Not like that! Block better!"
>Instead of joining in, Fuwawa stays behind and yells commands
>"Her left is open! Whoops, I meant right"
>"Haelp me!"
>"I am helping! I'm telling you what to do. Deck her in the jaw, Moco-chan!"
>Despite Fuwawa's guidance, or perhaps because of it, Mococo barely manages to land any hits
>Meanwhile Korone repeatedly pounds her body
>With the blonde's guard wavering, she is struck with a cross to her nose which breaks the cartilage within and sends her staggering back
>"My noese..."
>"Come on, Moco-chan, we can do it. I think the old lady is getting tired already"
>"I don't... I don't think-"
>"Shh, just focus on fighting, let me do the thinking, ok? Hit her with an uppercut, then a lowercut, then a middlecut. She'll never see it coming"
>Fuwawa shoves her sister back towards their foe
>Before Mococo can even parse her twin's advice, she is hit with another barrage of punches with barely any time to put up a defense
>She attempts to counterattack with no more success than before
>"Kick her in the balls Moco-chan!"
>"She doesn't hav- uhnf"
>Mococo gets interrupted by a punch to her mouth that knocks out several of her teeth
>Her defense falls apart entirely and her body becomes an all-you-can-punch buffet which Korone greedily devours
>A rib-cracking blow to the chest sends Mococo flying backwards where she is caught by her sister
>"Don't give up yet, Moco-chan! We're FUWAMOCO, we never give up!"
>"Please... No more..."
>"Here she comes! Go Moco-chan!"
>Fuwawa pushes her little sister, who barely has enough strength to stand, back into the fray
>Mococo gives Korone a pleading look which is met with a hook to the side of her head that drops her straight to the floor
>Korone turns to Fuwawa
>"Your turn"
>"D-don't count Moco-chan out just yet. She will destroy you if you turn your back to her"
>The brunette peers down at the dog at her feet, struggling to prop herself up on her elbows
>She picks up Mococo's body into the air
>She tries to beg for mercy but the mass of blood and teeth in her mouth makes it come out incomprehensible
>Korone slams Mococo down to a glass coffee table, shattering it on impact
>"Now it's definitely your turn"
>The brunette dog tries to attack Fuwawa, who dodges out of the way and runs around the room
>She runs up to her sister and lifts her up by her armpits
>"Come on, Moco-chan! Get up! I can't do this alone! We need to work together!"
>Korone approaches the pair, she winds up a punch aimed at Fuwawa's face
>In the nick of time Fuwawa manages to intercept it using Mococo's face
>The next few strikes also get absorbed by her little sister's already battered face
>Korone goes for a body blow but once again Fuwawa shifts her twin's weight so that her stomach takes the damage instead
>Wherever the brunette aims, her fists are always met by Mococo's flesh
>It's as if Fuwawa was born to wield her sister as a meat shield
>"Is that all you got, senpai? I can do this all day" she declares
>Mococo tries to protest with whatever little remaining energy she has but gets silenced by a fist in her mouth
>Korone pulls back her hand to see one of Mococo's canines stuck between her knuckles
>"I did it! I managed to hurt her! See, this is how it's done, Moco-chan! You just gotta follow up with a little…"
>Fuwawa attempts to hit her enemy using her sister's arm as a mace
>The attack gets effortlessly deflected and only serves to dislocate Mococo's shoulder (further than it already was)
>Annoyed, Korone pulls out the tooth and proceeds to tackle the twins to the ground
>Fuwawa tries to climb out from under them but gets caught by the collar of her shirt
>Korone prepares to pummel her face
>"Ok, we yield! We yield! Right, Moco-chan?! You win, senpai! Please, stop!"
>The brunette releases her
>"I'm glad you learned your place. Now, I hope you doggies like peanut butter"
>"W-what are you going to do to us?"
>"I have a little something you'll have to lick"
>"Um… Moco-chan, do you think your tongue still works?

Live!

>>72682583
Mogojan...

>>72674363
>IRyS comes back in time to ensure her parents meet and create her
>Pushes the two of you together, trying to get the two of you to loosen up
>Tries to tempt Kanata into doing it
>Tries to get you to shape up
> You are Towa

>>72686048
Don't worry IRyS, I'll give the gorilla my banana.

>>72682583
Yep, when it comes to telling a story of short form fiction the size of a 4chan post greentext truly is unmatched.
Funny, and just a bit hot.

>>72686374
Fuck's sake, I hate both of these jokes but that combination joke works really well.

>>72686048
>spoiler

>>72679012
I can't fix her, but I can make her feel loved and impregnate her and help quell her worries...for the most part. If she wants something vile I'd probably go "fuck no" ala Heartlock without ever agreeing to it and just breaking my heart by dumping her.
This is a pretty comprehensive post. Cheers.

Ollie Devouring her Anon
Cannibalism, Physical, Severe, Kureiji Ollie

Today I was issued a soul collection job by Calliope Mori. On paper the job wasn’t anything special. The soul belonged to a human male who was destined to be murdered by a coworker, or significant other depending on the perspective you viewed it from, over some dispute about a new girl. I think. I skimmed over the reasoning because caring wasn’t necessary. It was a Calli order so it's not like I could’ve refused due to my lack of interest.

I showed up at ten-thirty-something PM to a house. I didn’t take its location into much consideration since the scene was contained within the building, however I will mention that despite the house resembling a circus tent it was oddly gothic. When I had actually entered the house I was immediately met with screams, a pair of screams, constantly overlapping each other that originated from deeper within. I believe I had about ten or so minutes before the killing took place, so I took my time walking towards it. The noise came from inside a surrealist office. It had marble flooring with a checkerboard pattern that reflected a muted blue light from the chandelier in the centre of the room. When I entered I saw the soon-to-be killer, Kureiji Ollie, and her soon to be victim. I won’t lie, I didn't know who she was at the time. Calli told me about her afterwards. The victim was anything but outstanding. They wore a button up with a black blazer that clearly wasn’t tailored, the generic wage slave's finest, also black pants.

I chose to stand in the closest corner and watch from there. It didn’t matter where I stood because they couldn’t see me but that’s just how I like to do things. After some time, the scene finally progressed to a physical altercation, Ollie lunged forward and grabbed the victim’s wrists. I don’t know if it was due to the sudden force or some hidden strength but it brought them both crashing to the ground. Ollie’s legs flailed around trying to secure her position on top of the victim which made this horrible squeaking sound. One of her legs finally managed to go over the victim’s twisting body and she secured the full mount by slamming down onto them, with her full body weight, just above their waistline. The victim’s left hand broke free and frantically bashed and slapped Ollie’s face till she caught their ring and pinky finger in her mouth. I could see the fingers pushing against the skin in between her jaw as her teeth clamped down on them, keeping them locked in place as the faint goans of struggle became an outright scream. The victim tried moving as much as they could but Ollie had too much of their body restrained, Ollie reeled her head back and I could hear the muscle and bone start to break, tear and rip. The sound it made was akin to a combination of peeling sellotape and slime. Until, of course, she ripped the fingers of the victim’s hand. A combination of blood and saliva flew across both of their bodies, a thick stream running down from the corner of Ollie’s mouth. It went so far it almost got on me. I remember the moment right after this being the most peculiar part of the whole ordeal as, for a moment, both of them had essentially stopped. The victim was screaming, eyes locked on the oozing stumps on their hand as Ollie exhaled deeply through her nose as she swallowed the digits in her mouth. The slow ingestion on the fingers almost felt like a break between rounds in a boxing match. It made me kinda annoyed since I really wanted to go home. Though after this, Ollie’s head snapped downwards. Her teeth pierced through the blood-stained button-up, latched onto the base of the victim’s neck and tore off a chunk of their neck along with a section of their shoulder. Her hands clawed at the victim’s chest leaving long bloody imprints all over their body. As she tilted her head so that she could unhinge her jaw and bite down on almost half of the victim’s skull in one bite.

Luckily for me and probably the victim, in retrospect, by the time she started to devour the victim’s skull. They were dead. I simply took the soul and headed straight back to the Underworld. They tried to talk to me on the way back. I didn’t listen. When I returned to the Underworld I handed in the soul to Calli; clocked out from work and then had some tea.

>>72679783
>It was you
>In a past life, a hero ventured alone into the abyss and managed to rip off a horn from hello's greatest general.
>In his dying days he gave the horn to an archiver in exchange for a favor.
>Now Nerissa is sucking your cock and a voice from the past is screaming at you >It commands you to act.
>To finish the job
>To rip off her other horn.

>>72670571
Anchoring >>72687933

Also here ya go! Sorry for not replying to the anchor
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1armi02mkpLDPYy2wtSMkf3Akj9slAkcdbeJZpS02W80/edit?usp=drivesdk

>>72687826
Marine can be a moody and troublesome woman, and very much craves intimacy while also fearing it. But someone patient enough to break through and loyal enough to stay would probably work wonders for her. She has to learn to love herself first.
>If she wants something vile I'd probably go "fuck no" ala Heartlock without ever agreeing to it
If it makes you feel any better, I don't think Marine would ever suggest such a thing. She values loyalty a lot and the idea of her having to share you would drive her crazy. She wants to be the only person in your heart, period.
>This is a pretty comprehensive post. Cheers.
No prob, if you have any questions I'd be happy to elucidate.

>>72682583
>>72687933
Those are some great entries. I'm glad you guys came up with this little anniversary contest!

>>72679012
Aww...senchou...

You see this baby? I want to put a baby in it.

>>72690224
>She has to learn to love herself first.
In my experience that's a fucking mountain and a half in and of itself. The only other thing I'd take huge issue with is needing to be a mind reader; nothing pisses me off more than my SO not just telling me what's on their mind and going along with something and just getting angrier and angrier when I'm assuming everything is fine just because they never ever even attempted to communicate to me that something is bothering them dealing with that still haha.
Still would try. Marine deserves to be happy.

>>72697625
>Spoiler
My heart goes out to you brother. I have a similar situation with my own SO. She's come a long way over the years, but there are still aspects of herself that she has a lot of trouble with accepting. It's a hell of a mountain to climb, but I choose to believe the view from the top is unlike anything else. Keep doing your best. We're all gonna make it.

>>72700851
I'm tired, Boss...

New abuse prompt courtesy of Bae

You WILL finish your WIPs
Your favorite series WILL be completed
Your oshi WILL read your work

>>72703373
I feel like getting hit by Bae would either kill you or feel like nothing

>>72703373
i want to pretend bae can hurt me when in reality her hits barely hurt!

>>72704393
Got over 3k words done today. Feels pretty good, but I'm exhausted and there's still 2-3 scenes I need to write for this part to be done,

how come none of our resident elf fuckers arent writing flare putting your nuts in her mouth like a hamster after that really cute hologra

>>72704393
Sure, now gimme a working notepad because my phone is going schizo pressing sht I did not.

>>72706187
She's only half-ham...I mean half-elf.

>>72672984
>He doesnt dream of eating unseasoned chicken with Nerissa
More white woman for me

>>72704427
>>72704870
>Pretending to get hurt when Bae punches you
>Her hits are horribly innefective
>She's literally squeaking like a squeeze toy every time she manages to land a blow.
>Need to stop yourself from laughing every time you hear a squeak.
>Playfully hit her back
>Yamchadeathpose.png

No! Bad thread! No dying

Ollie is releasing a visual novel

>>72710035
It's called The Fingering

>>72707529
Bae ryona...

>>72670344
Tower of Tattle Part VI Episode 07:
A Strange Apocryphon
https://anonymousnovelite.github.io/TowerOfTattle/PartVI/episode07/index.html
Tags: Shiori Novella, FeMC, SFW, fantasy, mystery, nasu-inspired, childhood

Sorry for late update. Commitment that I've been in for six months just ended. Decided to just focus on that for the last three weeks of it so I could do that well, and also not be almost fully caught up so I can quality check Tower of Tattle better. Hope readers still stuck around and you enjoy this one

>>72694813
I can save her...

>>72697625
>In my experience that's a fucking mountain and a half in and of itself.
She's about half there I'd say. The way she talks about her interests and hobbies unabashed speaks a lot. Her embracing her age, even if its half joking, is also the right step. But I think the idea of sharing her ugly side scares her.
When you spend a lot of years alone, you begin to convince yourself that there's something wrong with you and that your loneliness is deserved.
Not that I would know.

>The only other thing I'd take huge issue with is needing to be a mind reader
To be fair to her, Marine is (probably, mostly) joking when she says that. Remember that she's playing the bit of an unreasonable boss (not paying her crew, etc) so I don't think she's delusional and above communication. She's willing to reconcile if she's wrong.
But you know what they say about jokes, the good ones have a nugget of truth to them.

>>72704393
I’m sitting on a finished document right now. The only reason I haven’t published it is because it’s the opening chapter to a series and I already have three other outstanding series I should have been working on, so releasing another series opener feels like some kind of taboo.
I only wrote it because it was originally supposed to be a one-shot for the first contest, but when I didn’t finish it in time I started adding bits here and there until it became an opening chapter to something bigger. It’s 15k words and if I release it now it’ll probably be another year (at least) before part 2 comes out due to my other WIPs.

How do I avoid stopping and having to fap while writing porn fics?

>>72717060
Write a fetish you despise.

>>72717808
I don't think I could write that at all

Poking my head in again. How's Ninisanni doing?

>>72717060
Masturbate prior. Once you get it out of your system, you can focus without any of that clouding your mind.

>>72721936
Allegedly from their last update. The Anon writing it is in scripting hell.

>>72721936
>>72722280
Can confirm. Am in scripting hell.
I got home from Easter celebrations at 4pm and was like, sweet, I just have one scene to script and stage and it's only two hundred and forty lines
Ten hours later, at 2am, I am finished with my scene, now free to play my video games before work at 8am.
It just takes a lot of time. I don't want you to feel too sorry for me, because it's a lot of fun. But I underestimated how much work it was while writing, resulting in me writing a lot of scenes that I now have to script. The bad news is that it takes a while, the good news is that it's more Ninisanni for you to enjoy when it comes out!
The only cope I can put out is that I am taking great steps to make it as kino and satisfying as possible, and I really, really, really, really, really hope you play it when it comes out. I wouldn't be working on it this hard if I didn't think it was totally awesome and would live up to your expectations.

>>72723220
I'm super excited to see what you've cooked up! It's potentially even more exciting than divegrass to me (and I'm obsessed with VTL). Will there be a censor option for streamers?

>>72723520
The game will be censored just like first one unless some generous samaritan teaches me how to unfuck my three years outdated stable diffusion to make nude filters. But even if that happens, I still would have a censor option for streamers.
Please maintain your excitement! I'm also super hyped for the release, but I gotta take it day by day working on one scene at a time.

>>72717060
If you can edge hands-free, it drives inspiration.

>>72723520
Speaking of board sports, have you considered entering in vgtc? Short for VT Grand Touring Championships?

>>72724152
>spoiler
Why not ask in /vtai/? That's their specialty.

>>72724152
>spoiler
I'm sure someone could help with it, but they're probably not here. This is the place where we close our eyes and hope AI writing doesn't overcome our supremacy that soon.

>>72725974
Because I'm shy. But I might, if I have time to implement it.

>>72726100
Why does your name keep changing?

>>72726455
He's shitposting in other threads

>>72717060
Implement speech to text writing. You can't jack off if you're literally writing with your voice right?

Has anyone made some stories involving emo Mumei? I’m shit-tier at searching through the archive

>>72726455
It's April 1st and I overinvested in the anime stocks.

>>72670571
Spineless
Tags: Sora, physical abuse

“So unfair,” you heard the old nurse say.
It had been a week since you stopped being able to speak, likely they thought your mind was gone. Soon enough it would be.
“How long has he been here?” asked the newbie.
“His whole life, I think.”
You weren’t sure anymore if your memories of being able to walk were real or just you picturing some of the few polaroids of your early childhood. Everything before the accident was fuzzy.
“It’s sad to lose him. It was so lovely how he would read to the kids and chat with the old folks.”
Your good deeds brought you no pride.
“Who’s this girl in the photo?”
“Oh, that’s that idol. Sora something.”
“A cutie.”
That made you proud. Sora-chan. Her purity, her optimism. Those were the things that kept you going. She was what made you want to do good. After all your hardship, this scumbag universe had better reward you. In your next life, you deserved to be her boyfriend. At least her pet.

That night a voice called out to you from the void, “Anon, your time has come. Soon you will be reborn.”
“As what!?” you blurted out without thinking.
“An ant,” said the voice. Before you could protest it cut you off. “That may not be what you were hoping for, but I will reward you. You may have one day of your deepest desire.”

When your eyes opened, the placid white walls and sterile furniture of the hospital had been replaced with a menagerie of pink fabrics and knickknacks. So different, yet oddly familiar. As you peered around the messy room, you slipped off the bed. Your arm and leg shot out to catch you.
It took a long moment to process this, but when you did you leapt out of the bed. You didn’t really walk so much as hobble, but the feeling was still remarkable. It brought a tear to your eye, which you brought your furry brown hand up to wipe away.
That’s when it hit you. Sora’s boyfriend… so it was true. You had always suspected it. Sure you were alone and miserable every second waiting for her to stream, but it was totally fine that Sora had her secret life. Yes, it was totally fine.
It was then that you decided to check for the other body part you had gone your whole life without ever being able to use. You felt around your groin, but found nothing but a strange flap.
“Ankimo?” came that voice from behind you. “Where do you think you’re touching?”
You turned to see Sora towering over you, gazing down with disapproval. You tried to explain yourself but all that came out was squeaks.
“No excuses. I don’t remember giving you permission to do that,” she said, folding her arms. Perhaps sensing your cowering desperation she softened up a bit. “Well, I suppose a little is fine.”
She went over to a locked cabinet and opened it. From inside she took out a large purple dildo with balls attached. You jumped a bit as she approached you with it, but she simply grabbed you and slipped the back end into the flap on your crotch. Like magic, you immediately felt a chill on the sensitive organs.
You had spent so many hours fantasizing about this. A working penis, erect and within your grasp. That joy that all other men experienced. You immediately grabbed onto it with both hands. The sensation was immediately amazing.
“No!” shouted Sora, as she sent her foot square into your plastic balls. “Hands off!”
The kick sent you flying, landing face down. You nearly vomited cotton stuffing. Your whole life had been suffering, but this was true pain.
From behind she stomped down on your cock and balls and ground them into the carpet. “You only get to feel good when I say so. You need to be punished.” She never took her foot off you as you listened to her pulling at something. It clicked when you heard the crack.
Were you made of flesh, her whip would have torn it open. If this was what Ankimo was into, you were made of softer stuff than he. Yet you couldn’t stop her, only her arm getting tired did.
She flipped you over with her foot and placed it right back atop your cock. “Understood?” Yet before she had finished speaking you were already thrusting your hips into her sole.
“You still really want to cum that badly?”
You nodded your head as hard as you could, terrified but willing to take the only chance you would ever get. Your one and only orgasm.
She giggled, but when she stopped what remained was an evil grin. “No. Not today.” She reached down and ripped the plastic cock from your fuzzy body, locking it back up in one motion, and returned with a paddle.

Later that night the two of you laid in bed, Sora’s sleeping breath warming your neck while your wounds throbbed. You didn’t dare to close your eyes. You couldn’t miss a single moment of this day. But regardless, the darkness still came for you. As your consciousness was torn from the borrowed body you thought, maybe being an ant won’t be so bad. If you were lucky, Sora-sama might step on you.

>>72726989
Google docs version of this retarded story.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTJ5EUj3fO-AnAaavvwpZNZojyXCMy8wpzPbwAeONdp0YVxiZAjhQ7EXCpVb9MWpDy52sJtsmVirWil/pub

>>72726699
No one has really made a fic about evil emo emu Mumei, or made much discussion about the idea of her being an emo gf.

>>72726455
Is something the matter?

>>72686048
MY BODY IS NOT READY

goddamn it I've been putting it off for too long, I will release the pilot chapter to my series today!

There's never been a moment where i thought about intercourse with older women.

Are there any cartographers/geodesists/radio tower operators present? I'm trying to learn how coordinates are given out over the radio. For example, take the coordinates:
41°20'23"N, 69°16'56"E
These coordinates will lead you to a Japanese garden in Uzebkistan. If I'm speaking to someone over a radio and trying to guide them to this location (without saying "go to the Japanese garden in Uzbekistan"), would I say something along the lines of:
>"The coordinates are fourty-one degrees, twenty minutes, twenty-three seconds north. Sixty-nine degrees, sixteen minutes, fifty-six seconds east."
Or do people generally use latitude/longitude when directing someone? In that case it would be:
>"Come to fourty-one tack three three nine nine. Break. Sixty-nine tack two eight two four."

Is there another form of communicating an exact location to someone when using a radio? Does it change between civillian and military use? Sorry if this seems silly and off-topic, but Google gave me very mixed answers and I need it for a story.

>>72731184
You can check out Radio Commander and see how it handles radio chatter

>>72731184
Anon... No one here has military autism. You can just abstract that shit via saying "Pekora relayed the coordinates".

>>72731490
>No one
Doubt

GUYS WAIT SHUT UP
PEKOMAMA IS REAL NOW

>>72734249
always has been

>>72734249
Our literary libido manifested her.

>>72734249
>barely taller than pekora
This is information I didn't know I wanted and needed.

>>72734249
HOLOMILFS GEN WHEN
GIVE US MAMAMORI
GIVE US PEKOMAMA

>>72734249
Its such a shame we'll need to wait until next year for her to stream again.

>>72734249
I need to go reread that chapter of cover high

As if I needed more motivation to continue my story so it gets to the next arc. Thank you based cover gods.

rise

>>72707212
>unseasoned chicken
Kek

>>72707529
Or it actually really hurts. Just like with Joey from friends

>>72735061
I prefer to imagine her 6 feet tall.

>>72739710
I feel you, but I think her being almost peko sized adds a delightfully sexy contrast to her demeanor. A mature, and refined woman who is is meaty in the right spots and small enough for you to place right on the kitchen counter and start doing what rabbits need to do.
And good lord that tail! That's a whole fist full of cotton.

>>72731184
If it's military they use UTMs instead of decimal degrees most of the time, which you can convert between with websites online. The UTM zone is usually implied so that isn't spoken unless there's a reason or you're travelling to a new one.
But a smaller level team like a squad or platoon would likely just get a bearing and distance to travel. i.e. "Head North at 110 for 1.3 km to next objective", as they may not have time or the ability to calculate that bearing from UTM coordinates while in-field.

>>72726471
>He's shitposting in other threads
Retard of the year award goes to you.

>>72740252
I get the appeal, I just prefer women that are almost as tall as me. If you ever had a much smaller girl you might agree that it's not quite as romantic when her lips and gaze are awkward to meet.

>>72731184
Seems oddly specific

>>72742117
It's most definitely for Holoslavia Operation Nimrod

>>72741568
I'm not super tall, but I've been with girls who are super short, like 4'11 5 foot territory, so I see what you're saying. It's definitely a lot easier when you're close in height, but there is also a nice romantic flourish in leaning forward to kiss your shorty, and bonus points for them getting on their tippy toes to reciprocate.

>>72742832
If we're going small, I'd love a really short and fit girl who spends a lot of time with her feet off the ground being lifted by/clinging to me. Like Ayame or Bae

>>72743418
Reminds me of the prompt where Towa has your dick in her mouth as a cigarette substitute all the time, so you have to carry her around upside-down if you want to move around the house.

>>72742277
Oh, no, I don't have anything like that in there kek
I am looking forward to what anon is making though

>>72670571
32 Second Idol Meeting
Tags: Bae, Mumei, physical

Bae was three hours into her morning zatsudan stream. She had a cup of coffee beside her mousepad, freshly brewed with a splash of cream. This was her second cup of the stream and her third cup of the day.

“I’m so tired~,” Bae sighed into the mic. “Have you ever had one of those mornings where you just can’t wake up?”

[More caffeine?] suggested someone in chat.

“Nah, I got plenty of caffeine! It’s not working, though…maybe I should go for a run or something.”

Following a small yawn, Bae downed the rest of her coffee in four big gulps. It did nothing to rouse her tired brain, but it did plenty to hasten her upcoming idol meeting. She clamped her legs together, thick dancer thighs rubbing against each other as she tried to delay nature’s call. But Bae’s bladder was at her limit. Both hands dove down between her thighs to press against her crotch. She was squirming so much that her hips were bumping the armrests of her chair. She didn't have long before the dam would burst.

“U-um, I gotta go to an idol meeting! I’ll be right back!”

Bae hastily dragged her model offscreen and muted her mic. She was so desperate, so panicked, that she nearly knocked over the stand.

“Why do you always cut it so close?” muttered Mumei from beneath Bae’s desk. She’d been kneeling under there since the stream started, careful not to make any noise or accidently jostle the setup. Most of Mumei’s outfit was resting in a neatly folded pile at the foot of Bae’s chair, leaving her completely nude save for the boots and leggings. Her naked plump owl butt rested on her ankles. Around her neck hung a bright red dog collar with a golden dice-shaped tag reading ‘Property of Hakos Baelz’, the leash of which was in Bae’s hand.

Bae flipped up her multi-colored miniskirt. The only thing covering her chubby pussy lips was a tiny black g-string which she quickly pulled to the side. “Bro, hurry up! I’ve been busting for a piss for hours!”

Mumei pouted. “Then you shoulda said something earli-”

With a hard yank of the leash, Bae drove Mumei’s startled face deep between her thighs. Mumei’s lips pressed into Bae’s bare pussy (a familiar place) and she dutifully opened her mouth wide.

With one hand keeping the leash taut and the other pressed firmly on the back of Mumei’s head, Bae leaned back and, after a heavy sigh, started emptying her bladder.

Mumei barely had time to catch her breath before a strong stream of piss powerwashed the back of her throat and knocked her uvula around like a speed bag. Despite serving as Bae’s urinal dozens of times before, Mumei instantly gagged and nearly let the first mouthful of piss overflow from her bulging cheeks. Fortunately she found her composure and took a good long breath through her nose while she choked down the first acrid-tasting mouthful. The flavor was especially bitter today. Bae usually had a glass or two of water to dilute the taste, but this morning was just one coffee after another. Mumei found it incredibly hard not to wince as more and more of Bae’s foul amber waste simmered on her taste buds and sluiced down her throat.

Bae closed her eyes, content. She could feel Mumei trying to pull herself free and hear the pained gurgles preluding every swallow. “Oi, stop being so dramatic! This is nothing compared to that karaoke night with Promise.”

Mumei tried to mumble something combative but her mouth was full of Bae’s sweaty cunt and there was too much piss drowning her airways to vocalize coherently. How much more did Bae have saved up, anyway? Mumei was up to what felt like the twentieth swallow and Bae’s bladder wasn’t showing any signs of flagging!

This was par for the course, unfortunately. Bae pissed like a racehorse and it was a constant struggle for Mumei to keep up. Her throat never stopped bobbing and her stomach never stopped filling during all thirty two seconds of Bae’s piss break, guzzling her steamy urine like an upturned bottle of champagne. Fuzzy black spots began creeping in on the fringes of Mumei’s vision.

Thankfully, the end was near. With a final flex of her pelvic muscles, Bae finished atop Mumei’s tongue, and the rat’s body relaxed. Mumei didn’t need further prompting and shoved her tongue deep into Bae’s muff, swiftly slurping every last drop from her tight inner walls. Not only was Mumei’s tongue more thorough than conventional toilet paper, it was also much quicker.

Mumei pulled back, her face a flushed mess. “Oh gosh. That was a lot.” The taste of Bae’s piss and pussy juice refreshed itself on her tongue when Mumei licked her lips. Feeling kind of woozy, she quietly retreated back under Bae’s desk.

Bae unmuted. “I’m back, I’m back! Okay, where were we?”

[So fast! Is your bathroom really close by?] asked chat.

Bae smiled and pat Mumei’s head. “Yeah, I guess you could say that!”

I want to fuck Suisei in the ass so hard that her cock releases a meteor shower

>>72744047
Hot

>>72739710
Getting manhandled by tall chuubas.....

>>72744337
I'm not sure if she would enjoy that

What did they mean by this?

>>72745700
Like mother, like daughter.

Hmm...I do wonder, did Pekomama dabble in warcrimes too? Maybe she taught her daughter the ropes?

>>72747573
how do you think pekomama consolidated her rule? it wasn't through diplomacy, i can tell you that

>>72747982
I feel like she would be great at diplomacy. But she also had an army of loyal simping knights.

>>72748248
Well, Mr Ambassador Anon, your meeting with the Queen of Pekolandia is up next. Time to find out just how good at diplomacy she is...

>>72748248
>Queen Pekomama is actually an extremely kind and personable sweetheart
>But if any politician pushes their luck even a little it's war and their nation's gonna get turned into a fucking example

>>72749559
This queen can fucking slay that's for sure.

>>72747573
I like to believe Pekomama used to be a brat like Pekora until she got pregnancy correction

>>72751046
Kek
I do wonder, what is her actual name...

Eko? Kora?

>>72749745
>The humanising of war? You might as well talk about humanising Hell! The essence of war is violence! Moderation in war is imbecility! ... I am not for war, I am for peace. That is why I am for a supreme army. The supremacy of the Pekoland Army is the best security for the peace of the world.... If you rub it in both at home and abroad that you are ready for instant war ... and intend to be first in and hit your enemy in the belly and kick him when he is down and boil your prisoners in oil (if you take any) ... and torture his women and children, then people will keep clear of you!"
>"...also have you seen my darling daughter? Isn't she just the cutest? She just turned five and is learning to read~!"

>>72754354
>Pekomama teaching anon the finer art of war and regaling him of tales of political dominance and intimidation that ended wars without raising a single lance.
>All while braiding her daughter's hair
>"Would you like me to show you the proper spear technique of our renowned Pekoland knights? One who is properly trained has the ability to out maneuver and subdue at least ten men. My little Peko learned when she was just a youngling, she was so cute when she picked up her first spear."
>"MOM!"
>"And maybe if you catch on quick enough we can see how you perform with a...different spear."

>>72679012
I forgot I had this soundpost. Should have used it instead of a meme image but well here's an example of what I mean.

A friendly reminder to all adventure writers: it is mission critical you include your barely disguised fetish in scenes were it doesn't make sense or is tonally off

>>72756026
I assure you, dear reader, dedicating an entire chapter to a sequence where anon lick's Suisei's sweaty feet as a proof of his loyalty is vital to progressing the plot....

>>72670403
Chuuba of your choice day trading

>>72756799
You better be actually writing this

>>72756026
I assure you that Botan having a full and dense jungle that I will dive head first into, and ask her to dig her nails into my scalp to keep me servicing her is integral to the plotline. I will also let you know that it is of vital importance in the grand scheme of things that she uses her tail to not only stroke me, but later wrap itself around my leg to pull me into her harder. This will be on the test.

>>72756026
I was essential to the plot to have Fubuki almost rape anon. It added depth to both of them. I swear I'm not just saying that after the fact.

Will write the first prompt that replies to me ending in a 3. I don't care how stupid it is, but I would prefer it be something someone has wanted to see attempted for a while.

Rules:
- 1 week delivery guaranteed
- 3k to ~5k word oneshot
- current hololive girls only
- all genres and/or fetish tags acceptable besides loli (nothing under JK; /ss/ is fine though because I'm a hypocrite) or wedgies (sorry wedgie Anon I already wrote you a story)
- must provide a more detailed prompt than, for example, "hag sex" "fubuki butt" "sex with hags" "suisex" "sniffing smelly hags" (or some unholy combination of these examples)
- no references to or parodies of other media properties
- I might ask a few short questions for clarification, but this will not be a collaborative effort. Be detailed in your prompt.
- if no one rolls a 3 I'll pick the first person to roll the next highest number at thread death

>>72761761
Taking Mori to a bar, getting her absolutely sloshed (you just nurse orange juice as the DD) then slipping laxatives into her last drink. Upon getting her to her house, you take advantage of her weekend state to tie her up, wait for the laxatives to activate, and then force her to shit in your mouth.

>>72761761
New cover employee Mr. Anon is assigned to be Suisei's temporary manager while her regular manager is on break. He quickly learns Suisei's true personality is a lot more sadistic and domineering than the persona she puts one. Suisei uses the opportunity to mold the fresh, naive employee from a manager to an assistant of a more personal nature, making him do degrading things to entertain her (insert suismell, suifeet, sitting on his face, ect.) as he starts to like it against his will.

>>72761761
Sneaky sex with your older sister suisei and trying to not wake your parents up. The room is barely illuminated and you catch a glance of her Suijamas, and your little shota cock going inside her Suipussy

>>72761761
Nerissa laying eggs and getting more and more flustered until she's shaking and nearly criying while begging you to stop looking at the dozen she just popped

>>72761761
In the post-apocalypse Roboco finds the last human alive(You), and her 'Human Reproduction Protocol' activates, resulting in her dragging you to a relatively safe area and raping you until you inseminate the stored human eggs in her body. The eggs are expired though...

>>72761761
Trying to get Mori to send you off into the afterlife to dodge the frankly boring and lifeless existence
After that, choose your own adventure:
- isekai into the demon world where you find your niche
- she forces you to fight her seriously in some sort of manifest ego/ideals battle (because she believes otherwise and thinks you are a little bitch whose rotten ideals need to be broken down)
- cute romcom moment where she absolutely refuses to end you because in her eyes you gave her an idea to create and gave her the confidence needed to grow beyond the title of "death's apprentice"

>>72761761
Suisei and Fubuki swap their shotas. Fubuki's isn't consenting, but Suisei's little brother is having the time of his life.

>>72761761
Coco challenging Elira to a fight since there can only be one dragon chuuba.

>>72762933
FUCKER, WHAT A SHIT IDEA

>>72762933
>current hololive girls only
Sorry but DQ'd twice

>>72761761
Pampering Mio during her pregnancy and sipping on her milk straight from the source

>>72761761
Hunting down the last of HoloX, Kazama Iroha resulting in a samurai death battle

>>72763263
Mio milk wins. Are you sure you don't want to expand upon that at all?

>>72763566
Sure, lemme get home so I can sit on my pc comfortably

>>72763566
>>72763755
Okay so, I want to pamper Mio while she's on materniry leave. I'm talking waking up at 5 am so I can haggle with a farmer at 6 to get the best strawberries and mangoes. Then I go to a 24/7 konbini and buy two cans of whipped cream and her favorite chocolates.
When I come back, Mio has awoken and she's desperate for her cravings, and I have to tell her to keep her hands off the strawberries while I cut the stems for her. Then I caress her ears and belly while she gulps down on chocolate, fruit and cream.
Later, she starts lactating, and I have to collect it in bottles, but of course, the faucet's too strong and I can't let it go to waste.

>>72765094
How does Mio feel about all of this? The doting I imagine she says you don't have to go so far but secretly enjoys. The drinking her breast milk part I could see going a few different ways...

>>72765294
I want her to act annoyed (but secretly enjoys it) and she treats me like a brat she can't stop spoiling

>>72765433
Any pregnant sex / nursing handjobs or just purely drinking? My first instinct is to end it with slow, careful sex for the purpose of inducing labor.

>>72765699
Add that in, absolutely. Gentle sex and words of reassurance for the future mother of my triplets
Oh yeah, they have to be triplets

>>72765094
im sorry i read all of this with his voice

>>72765924
Alright. Sounds good. See you in a week.

>>72766140
Thanks.

>>72670403
Now that pekora is pregnant with triplets, her husband (you) needs an outlet for all the stress and lust accumulated.

Luckily, Pekoland's tradition allows you to solicite your mother's in law help. But you wouldnt do that right? you wouldnt share your bed with an old stinky hairy hag that hasnt had action in over 15 years would you?

>>72767766
No, I wouldn't. I'd ask Pekora's coworker Fubuki for help.

>>72767766
Of course I wouldn't. I am 100% faithful to Pekora and if I've got stress / lust all pent up I would take up a hobby or just start jerking off until it all goes away.

>>72770378
You could ask your pregnant wife to jerk you off.

>>72767766
In a real-world context I'd say no, but if it's Pekolandish tradition it would be rude to spurn the accomplished matriarch.

>>72731438
Haven’t heard of it before, assuming it’s a game. Might check it out.
>>72731490
I considered that, but there’s more dialogue that comes after the coordinates so it felt weird breaking up the radio transmission just to say, “they then relayed the coordinates.” I also wanted the provided coordinates to lead to a real life location as a kind of Easter egg.
>>72740903
Nice, this is super helpful. I’ll do some research on UTM coordinates. Thanks.
>>72742117
>>72742277
Holocalypse remake

>>72771214
You could but I don't think that's what >>72767766 wants with his scenario.

>>72771724
Yes, but he wanted you to go for Pekomama with his scenario which was already declined anyway. I'd do it if it's proper tradition, by the by

>>72771956
I'm just not okay with cheating scenarios in general (the prompt itself makes me thing of sgs) but if Pekora was 100% okay with me letting out all my pent up stress / lust on her mum then I would gladly do so as like what it was said before, its Pekoland tradition thus okay, right?

>>72772291
She'd probably be okay with it as per tradition, as long as you tell her that she's surpassed her mother.

>>72772291
>I'm just not okay with

Have you considered being less of a bitch? It sounds like it might seriously benefit you.

>>72772291
>sgs
Did Towa crying break you that bad? Damn
Same

>>72763263
Nice desu<div class="xa24desu"></div>

>>72771653
I see, so this is the first /wg/ fix set in Uzbekistan.

Guy running the contest here. Alright anons, only 8 hours remain for the Flash Fiction Festival. You can check out the countdown here: https://www.tickcounter.com/countdown/5046902/contest-ends-in
I gotta ask though. Once the contest period ends, how many days do you think the polling period should last? By that I mean the period wherein people read the fics and vote for their favorite ones? I was thinking either two or three days

>>72774456 (me)
*8 hours and 40 minutes
but yeah

>>72767766
hell no i wouldnt breed this hairy butthole hag until she's pregnant.
No way i would bang her so hard the sound leaks through the wall.
Like, just the idea of her degenerate sounds filling the room and pekora listening the animalistic grunts and moans her mom can produce its just disgusting.
I dont get how someone would want to pleasure her so hard she wets herself

>>72774820
I get it, so you're saying you'd use protection and practice safe sex while banging peko's mom. All the while her womb hungers for more and more

>>72774106
*Uzpekostan

>>72774106
Kek, the Uzbekistan garden was just an example. I couldn’t work the plot into the geography of planet Earth so I made up a fictional world this time round.

>>72774456
It's almost done, but I gotta figure out how to properly condense it.
>Write what I think would be 70-80% of it
>over 6k characters
>fuck

>>72774456
Three days is always a solid amount. Honestly might do something legit with the apathetic deadbeat thing after the comp is over ngl.

>>72777465
>apathetic deadbeat thing
Was that inspired by Numbered days? That fic kind of reminded me of that but lije without the reaper actually interfering.

>>72778207
No. But if it's a good read I'll definitely check it out. I need to get my next weirdo narrator fix! This was just a weird The Stranger/Outsider meets Hololive lore situation since I'm rereading right now.

>>72776213
I don't know the specifics of your story, but you can always condense anything 'transitionary'. Sequences where characters spend their time going to places, non-plot relevant conversations, etc.

>>72776213
Worst case, you can always turn it to greentext. By nature, that style can condense a lot of words.

>>72670571
Pretty;Psychotic;Protector

Tags: Zeta, Sexual


"....AH!"
The whip striking you across your naked torso awoke you in your usual spot, spread out on a horizontal wooden X with your limbs tied to one of its ends. At least there was a headrest.
The lights in the prison dungeon turned on and your usual torturer greeted you, sugary-sweet as always.
"Good morning~"

But today she had more to say before getting back to her favorite hobby.
The gray-haired girl caressed your cheek with her left while her right scratched across the mark her whip had left on you.
"Great news, soldier! The war for the Southern Islands is over. What remains of your comrades here, and your allies on The Peninsula, has been merged with your main force in the homeland. There's going to be amnesties!"

You could only respond with a grim laugh.
"Amnesty? Not after what I did with that Pavolia chick. Even though I didn't force myself on her."

Agent V7 responded with five lashes to your chest (that you endured silently) and one lash to your crotch (that got the kind of high-pitched yelp she loved out of you).
"Smart women offer themselves before enemy forces use force to force the issue, soldier. You know that."

The girl climbed on top of you, her modest chest on your belly and thick thighs around your neck. The big innovation of today was her not wearing anything at all, looking even better naked than you had imagined she would, and revealing that her hair was gray and long everywhere. You could feel her heat, her quick heartbeat, her nipples hardening against your muscles.

"But you're right, the family advertised a reward for your death and..."warned" against letting you go free."

You had dreaded that outcome after being captured, but now it felt almost relieving to have it confirmed - the last doubts removed. What felt the opposite of relieving was Zeta choking you with her sweaty thighs; though holding your breath was wise anyway, considering how close her stinky pubic jungle had gotten to your nose.

"You have no value as a prisoner now, and I could use that family's reward! Luckily for you, I've grown quite fond of you~"
The beauty began running her hands across your muscular hips and thighs, playing with your dick and balls whenever her hands came across her beloved toys.
"And I could use a victim without value...I'll kill one of the less fun prisoners and pretend he was you to get the reward, before taking you home. Right after our morning routine tomorrow!"

The agent's soft voice and skin, plus her delicate fingers being 100% focused on jerking you off and fondling your balls now, got you diamond-hard despite your body's increasing panic over lacking oxygen. How hard the meaty, muscular legs of your potential savior squeezed your skull was only a tertiary concern at this point.

"I know being a victim isn't great, but it sure beats being a soldier on the losing side. Do you disagree?"

The agent spoke as deliberately as she moved, and your survival instinct began to overrule your pride.
"Ugh...a...air...pl-...please! Air...a-AHH! FUUUCK!"

Only once Zeta's fist clenched around your left testicle did you manage to force a good amount of air past her thighs' stranglehold. Though your scream probably wouldn't have been as strong without the awful pain of Zeta digging her manicured nails into your glans.

"Ugh, this is so half-assed - you can talk, but not really. You know what? Since I can't afford you ratting me out, I might just cut out your tongue. Or claw and bite it out, like this..."
Increasingly animalistic noises escaped your throat as Zeta clawed at your foreskin, followed by heavy breathing as she slid further down your body, releasing your neck just in time. Once the basic need for oxygen was met and Zeta's teeth were starting to dig into your cock you finally managed to speak with intent, forgoing all claim to pride and defiance.

"Mercy, Agent! Mercy, Miss Zeta, I beg you!!!"

Her hands and mouth left your crotch alone as she spun herself around on you acrobatically, her gray eyes meeting yours as she smiled.
"Mercy for what...your poor precious thing, or your tongue?"

All you had left was pleading.
"...both, maybe?"

The most endearing torturer in a century laughed her soft, refined laugh.
"Well, I'm quite fond of CBT...and I can't exactly have that without your C and B. But your tongue, your potential traitor tongue...you should prove what it can do for me, hm~?"

Zeta sat up and planted her cheeks on your face, supple enough to make breathing harder again.
"Time to eat out a hot&humid elite agent, soldier! First the back, then the front. Hope you don't mind the undergrowth~"

Your favourite Guns N' Roses song came to mind as you obliged. Anything better than being executed for some light war crimes, right?
It was human nature to downplay the severity of the inevitable, of course...but deep down, the most rotten part of your brain told you that being a long-time victim of this agent might be kind of hot.

>>72782577
someone planted the idea of zeta and bae dual thighjob in my brain and now im dead. Nice fic btw

>>72727176
It’s over bros…
Any stories about goth Fauna at least?

>>72735749
>that bit of visible skin under her tail
Holy sex
>>72743808
Got a link to it still anon?

>>72670403
Being Marine's househusband

>>72786490
I dunno if I want to write my autobiography...

>>72670571
An Orca's Awakening
Tags: Chloe, Koyori, physical

“And this is the brains of our organization. Chloe, meet Koyori.”

“Oh Lui-nee, you actually brought me a real live orca! I know I’ve been asking for new subjects but you really outdid yourself.” Koyori exclaims, checking over the newcomer who was garbed in torn rags that barely concealed her figure.

“She’s not a subject, she’s our newest member.” Lui corrects her while placing an arm over the girl’s shoulder when she shudders away from the coyote’s prodding. “Pending your approval of course. Try not to get carried away please.”

The orca lets the strange girl in a lab coat take her by the arm and whisks her away with an excited, but disturbing giggle. She had only ever known servitude, and by some miracle, an accident freed her. The first person to greet her at the start of her new life was a kind, gentle faced woman. She offered her a choice, the first she had ever been given; come with her and help create a world where she would never be in binds again, or walk away.

The room she was pulled into was like nothing she had ever seen before; strange colored lights blip along metal window boxes that look to be part of the far wall itself, white tables that hold glasses of all shapes and sizes that pop out with curiously colored mixtures, and other strange devices.

“Hello? Orca? Are you still in there?” Koyori breaks her out of the fleeting stupor.

“Huh? Y-Yes.”

“Wonderful. Can’t do a proper examination if you’re already too broken to speak.” The coyote chirps.

Koyori sits down on a mobile stool, and pats the plain chair in front of her.

“Let’s begin. What would you say your pain threshold is?”

“I was a slave, so I was beaten nearly every day.”

“So pretty high? Good. I’ve read about the resilience of orcas. They say your kind are tougher than iron, but what else are you capable of?”

“How should I know?” Chloe shrugs.

“Then we’ll learn together.” Koyori’s fangs glisten. “Let’s continue. Stand and take off your clothes.”

Chloe sighed, but did what she was told. It was first nature.

Malnourished
Strong frame
Powerful lungs
Well endowed

After the initial assessment, came the experiments.

Incisions along her stomach to examine her blood, blue flame held over her skin until it discolored, pulses of electricity forced through her system by a taser. Chloe begged her to stop but to no avail. All in the name of science Koyori would say, but the look of manic delight on her face told a very different story.

“As I hoped, an orca demi-human is a prime specimen.” Koyori jots down a few more findings and hums a thinking tune. “Just one more thing before we move on.” She hands Chloe a vial filled with a deep purple liquid. “Drink.”

She chugged the entire vial. As soon as the thick substance slithered past her throat, she felt a violent urge to vomit. She fell forward, her palms and feet burned against the cold floor. All her wounds from today’s ordeal pulsed, and she felt as though her insides were being rearranged. Then as quickly as it came, the anguish left in a hot flash, she stared at her own reflection in the puddle of sweat that lay underneath her. She also noticed something harrowing, all her wounds and burns, they were all gone.

Koyori nods and writes on her pad. “Excellent. How would you say you feel right now”

“Like I want to die.”

“But you won’t~ which is good. I still have some refinement to do in my calculations. Now go wash up.”

“Wha? I’m not done? After all that?”

“Of course not. I have a good idea of your physiology, but I need to assess if you can actually be of use to us.”

“But Lui said-”

“Lui wants results, and you’re going to help me deliver. My other subjects are too fragile, but you can be my greatest guinea orca, and one of our greatest weapons.”

Over the week Chloe was ordered to ingest strange chemicals that rattled her from the inside, fight strange machines and even murder mutated beasts. Any defiance was met with harsh punishment, and all she could do was follow orders, like always. The worst part was, she was beginning to enjoy the violence, the feeling of bone snapping under her foot, it felt relieving. The realization was sickening.

As Chloe sat in her room contemplating her chosen fate, Lui paid her a visit.

“Good evening, Chloe.” She wears a bright smile. “I have some good news.”

The girl is handed a neatly folded stack of black and plaid clothing, with a white eyed mask resting on the top.

“My darkness would officially like to welcome you to HoloX. I know the past week hasn’t been easy, but it is all so that the world may be repainted. No one should have to live in chains simply for being born like you did. By helping us, you’ll always be free. Will you join us? Will you join me?”

Without a word she grabbed the mask. “For my darkness.”

>>72790282
Published link of this.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTmUNC1aGPnqKX-VarT_GWiiMlvGA9LrM1PT3hLPlv_sFuhHfTh4O2f3L103STYbeFEJ1Uk8-iOiXZl/pub

>>72765943
>I BREED YOUR HAG ELI

>>72670344
Beasts of Rebellion: Pilot
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQCs6viIgE_hJnGx-8lEX8xJvJ-tdHpjAGqJuGEtY3hy5x2PhpKeYcx75roOwULJMPzW8frKmQjh_V3/pub
Tags: Kurokami Fubuki, Takane Lui, Chuuni, Shonen, Action, Romance

My take on Kurokami's errand boy prompt. This is my first action-oriented fic so I hope it turned out alright. I hope you all enjoy

>>72798139
Not finished reading it yet and don't hate what I've read so far but the font size makes me feel like you're either legally blind or trying to cover up how much you've actually written because you feel it wasn't enough

Guy running the contest here. Less than two hours left before the /wg/ Flash Fiction Festival ends! Good luck to those who still want to submit their entries before the deadline.

>>72670571
Another Dress Ruined
Tags: Akira Mazono, Physical, Severe

“Is the subject ready for testing?”
“Yes, we are now ready to begin the procedure.”
“Understood,” the man in a white coat responds, shuffling through his disheveled notebook. He flips to a page that is blank, save for a faded “INSTITUTE” on the top of the paper.

“Alright, Doctor. We’re bringing her in now.”

From behind the glass, the doctor sees her. The female subject is brought in by two assistants by wheelchair. They bring her to a surgical chair in the middle of the room; they then begin to strap her in with leather cuffs, as well as attaching a variety of monitoring devices all over her arms. She giggles a little and says ‘thank you’; the two assistants finish strapping her to the chair and walk out wordlessly. She sways her head back and forth as she hums merrily, staring at the two-way glass.

The doctor flips a switch; a mechanical hiss fills the sterile room as the ceiling opens, revealing a massive machine. The instrument hums along with the test subject as it adjusts itself, almost stretching like a cat. It lowers steadily until it is inches from the test subject’s head.

A steel pole ending in a cross.

A screwdriver.

The doctor presses a button as the intercom screeches to life. “Can you say your name, please?”

She nods.

“My name is Akira Mazono!”

“Good, good,” the doctor replies. Subject’s cognition is working normally. He takes another glance that the helpless guinea pig before him.

It’s almost as if she’s getting ready to go to a party. An elegant black dress. Red frills. Gold buttons. It’s nothing short of perfection. Her dress is almost as dark as the circles under her eyes, letting her bright violet eyes emerge from her dusky eyebags. Her pretty pink hair is ruled by an unruly pink strand that refuses to go down.

And crowning her head is a large, shining screw sticking out of her skull.

This is her purpose.

The machine lowers further. More nervous glances from the test subject. A metallic shnk is heard as the steel cross fills the screw’s slot. The doctor notices the change in her pulse.

“Will I be okay?” she asks to the void.

Silence.

She’s about to ask again when the intercom screeches.

“It’s okay,” the doctor’s voice finally replies. “It just wants to pet you, that’s all.”

“Pet me? Like when I pet my stuffed capybara?”

“Yes.”

“Then…” she says, her smile growing wider.

“...Please give me lots of love!”

“Of course,” he obliges.

Click

The machine whirrs as it begins to power up to full strength. Her smile flees her face as she looks up at the machine, but she does not say a word. He places two fingers on the rotational knob as he turns it slowly.

She winces in pain as the screw begins to dig into her.

“Hwah! That, that hurts!”

“It’s normal. It will only hurt for a little while.”

“O-okay…” she whines out. Her heart rate begins to elevate gradually. Doubt lingers in her eyes as they stare at the glass fruitlessly.

The knob is turned a little more.

“HYAHHH!” she sobs out. Tears start to run down her face.

The steel threads of the screw begin tearing through her brain. She lets out a deep, guttural whine as she begins to squirm in her seat. The EKG monitor shows her pulse beginning to fluctuate erratically.

“Please. Please! StHAP!” she shouts. A small trail of blood begins to run down her face, threatening to fill her mouth with the taste of steel.

“You’re doing well, be strong,” the intercom says. The grip on the knob gets tighter as it is twisted to the right.

One full rotation.

The glass only barely suppresses the subject’s horrific howls. The trickle of blood now turns into a cascade, a deep crimson paints her face as it floods into her mouth. The screw sinks deeper in. The subject flails wildly, but is unable to escape the confides of the surgical chair. Her pulse skyrockets as the EKG begins to beep faster and faster.

“UGYWAAAA!” Akira cries out, tears now pouring from her eyes.

“IT HYURTS PWEAHSE PWEAHSE!” she begs. Her pleads reach no one. The screwdriver twists further, and the screw complies. Simple physics, that’s all.

Two full rotations.

Akira rocks her head back and forth uncontrollably; a glint from the roof of her mouth tells the doctor that the screw is now all the way through her skull. Blood trickles from her head and the top of her mouth as they spill over. She cannot even speak anymore; she can only scream.

One final rotation.

The screaming stops.

“EheuEhuehEbwheeeeh…” she mewls out as her head droops over, her neck unable to stay straight. Normal brain function has ceased.

Blood, spit and brain matter mingle into one they pour from her gaping mouth. The droplets splatter all over her perfect dress.

Another successful experiment.

Another dress ruined.

>>72754354
>>72755297
Meanwhile, Pa and Mamapeko rule a province in my game's world. They are reputed to have among the best military in Savan bested only by the capital province's and the imperial guard.

>>72756026
I'm writing the script for an Fire Emblem mod, does it count? So far, all I did is make a chapter boss imply gangrape on Suisei via battle dialogue.

>>72798139
Your action feels a little calm. I'm not sure if it's the sentence structure or the used vocabulary but it feels too controlled, as if you're describing a slow dance.
Other than that, I'd say keep at it. I can tell you're ESL so good job writing this, take your time to work on your improving your prose.

And that's a wrap! The /wg/ Flash Fiction Festival has officially ended with 11 entries in total. They are as follows:
Pestilent Angel >>72348044
Daydreams >>72444412
At the precipice of madness >>72568527
Gooberball >>72613541
Top Dog >>72682583
Ollie Devouring her Anon >>72687933
Spineless >>72726989
32 Second Idol Meeting >>72744047
Pretty;Psychotic;Protector >>72782577
An Orca's Awakening >>72790282
Another Dress Ruined >>72801059
Thanks to all the anons who participated! If you submitted a fic within the contest proper and it is not on this list, please let me know immediately.
Polling will now commence. To give anons time to read all the entries, it will end in three days and two hours. You can keep track of the countdown here: https://www.tickcounter.com/countdown/5079276/wg-flash-fiction-festival-polling-ends-in
I'll put out the poal.me poll once this list is finalized and it's been confirmed that there are no more stragglers.

>>72805265
Oh, different Gen 0 today huh?

>>72804296
Nice job pachi pachi

>>72786094
If you're passionate about the topic, try your hand at a short piece yourself! Or at least leave a prompt that might inspire someone.

>>72786094
Not really.
In general, outfit fics are pretty rare. Even more for council since for some reason no one really writes about them outside of the brrat writer.

>>72806675
But I don't want to write. I'd rather bitch about the lack of niche fetishes that appeal to me here and suggest you guys do it.

>>72807292
/wg/ was built up by /jp/ veterans when /vt/ was still young, and the thread culture has always been more focused on HoloJP than the board average. The younger EN gens came a bit too late.

>>72809162
i disagree completely with your statement but i dont think that's the issue here.

The issue here is that Mumei, like gura and ame, presentes herself as a streamer with no layers (what you see is what you get) and all the complexity and details are hidden behind giga autismo (like her not wanting to say aminal was a dog despite...it barking) moments. This is great from a streaming perspective but from a writing angle it leads to the awkward situation where writing her tends to get samey/its difficult because the complexity is subtle.

Its like Roboco. There's years and years of footage, but people here scratch their heads and go "shit...huuuh...robot sexo" because its really hard to get across her wittyness and smug humor in text form. Council's casual clothes didnt stirr the pot either because its a cyberpunk outfit, a casual korean and 2 librarians.

TLDR: Is a mumei thing. Fauna got fics, Kronii got fics, Bae got fics and even Sana got some.

>>72727176
>>72786094
i might have missed this. Any ideas? i cant promise ill get to work on it but as a former metalhead that hung with the emo crowd i wont deny my interest

>>72811188
For some reason, thinking about Emo Mumei makes me think of the past. Which reminded of that prompt about grooming the hags in their heyday via MySpace.
So how about a fic about grooming an emo mumei on early social media?

>>72786205
It's been discussed multiple times, the most detail was in >>55213159 and its replies.

>>72803155
I'm ashamed to admit I'm actually not ESL, just someone who was a little too eager to pump the fic out before doing an extra proofread. I appreciate the feed back though

>>72809917
In those cases you just pull from the lore and work from there. When it comes to writing chuubas, you can pull from both the real person and the character more or less, depending on what they or the story need. See for instance a few Mori stories; some of them pull more from the "grim reaper doing her job" angle while others go with "autistic rapper".
So Mumei the autistic streamer is hard to work into a text format, but Mumei the psycho/guardian of civilization gives you a lot more to work with. She is a case where pulling a lot more from the lore is basically necessary; not for the story, but for the character herself.

CLEAR

>>72798139
I like what I see so far. I think the font size and indentation could be eased up a little bit, that way you can fit more into a readable paragraph without it getting out of hand. This would also help you string your action scenes to be more seamless. I kinda get the vibe that the first action scene might be meant to play out like it was happening in slow motion, given the countdown, but later on when things get more fast paced, it'll be better to have your actions strung together more tightly.
I also enjoy that you have a very clear dish in the works for characters like Lui. The ending was nice, but I'm not sure how I feel about the cliffhanger/opener for the next scene. Your idea might have been to really nail home the idea that the MC is in this crazy life now, and he hasn't even scratched the surface of what is going on, but instead of this abrupt happening, he could reflect on the deal he just made, and how things are even more dangerous than they seem. Also girl flips toward Kurokami swinging her leg down, swinging let leg down. Minor spelling mistake.
Overall I liked it. I think I enjoyed thirsty Lui the most since I want to give that beautiful hawk a circus of children, but that's just my own bias. Keep it up, it's clear you want to give this story of yours life, and I think you can continue to make it better.

>>72804296 (me)
Alright anons, here's the poll for the /wg/ Flash Fiction Festival, with all 11 official entries listed: https://poal.me/b1ka6g
At the end of the polling period, I'll post the results here in the thread and compile all the entries in a rentry.
Have fun reading the abuse fics, and good luck to the contestants.

>>72815596
thank you for your feedback. this is probably the last time I trust grammarly for shit.

as for your other points, I wasn't aware font and line spacing played that big of a factor in things like that. i'll have to fiddle with the setting some. As for the first fight scene was intended to more display how much stronger kurokami is compared to grunts, thus being able to take them out under 30 seconds, as counted by Yuki. The end, like wise, is supposed to be the hook to display the next enemy, and thus, part 2 will show how kurokami faces a tougher opponent with chuuni powers as well.

Outta page 10 with a topic:

How do I magicalize doxxing? Currently, it is dark magic that reveals all your vital information and makes you experience all the worst-case scenarios you can think of.

Nope, no dying today.

>>72818387
That sounds like two separate things. You have one side that can reveal a person's information to you, maybe through a spyglass, orb that you ponder, or maybe even just your own special eyes. Then you have some mind fuckery that seems to be implanting a person's worst fears into their head and making them experience them. Cool ways to do that are via a whispered suggestion that has the dark magic to worm its way into the brain and fool a person's senses, you could use the environment itself to administer the toxin, via the air, water, or even a visual stimulation.

>>72818387
I guess something like scrying? But it looks deep into the heart of the chuuba and reveals their vital info, their worst habits, and what they truly are in the dark.

>>72818387
Alternatively, maybe you an have doxxing be a foul forbidden magic by focusing on this aspect
>reveals all your vital information
because it reveals the unique words of power that can instantly destroy whoever it's said to.
...
Probably not, now that I think about it. That's kind of setting up the gag to be something like bad guy casts dox and utters [ROOMMATE name] to instantly destroy *insert chuuba here*. You can't really do that, even if it's for a fic.

>>72818387
you can always use the "names have power" excuse as in knowing the name and ability/powers of someone allows you to know how to counter them

>>72817197
Yeah the intent is surely there, but I think to that end you can keep in mind for the future that quicker is better in terms of showing a gap in power. Like a nonchalant backhanded fist into the face of someone running up to her, and then she kinda just kinda stroll through the rest, breaking a nose with a simple twist of her grip, that kinda stuff. Make use of an intimation factor as well, as soon as goons see someone sparking with magic that they can't match, they'll play whatever cards they can to hightail it outta there.

>>72822560
Getting caught in a chuuba gang turf war, who's side are you picking?

>>72823679
>You would be wise to join my gang, nanoraaaa

>>72823679
the Mafia

>>72820459
The chuubas in Aurorai have no other name than their Holo name. So for example, Noel is Noel, Calli is Calli, etc.

>>72818639
Lets see...once the Dox Majica hits its target, the caster can peer through the victim's thoughts and memories, which does include vital info. The caster can then extract their fears, their insecurities, their hidden thoughts and make Persona 5 shadows of persons look nice by comparison.

>>72818651
All magic so far in Aurorai are tome-based. Though this may be the exception, seeing A. Its experimental B. Debate was so fierce those who disagreed with its use and even existence formed a whole separate nation.

>>72819476
Yes, I do indeed have it as this "Voldemort of magic spells" in that people expect the worst when they hear that this spell has been used in any way. Maybe not their real names, because they dont exist in Aurorai, but certain words regarding certain dark memories, which again can be extracted with Dox Majica. It can be "dango", "lean", "betreyal", or anything related to a really bad memory.

Keep in mind this is for the FE mod.

>>72824094
If this is for your mod, since it doesn't likely have any influences on the gameplay, you can just have your bad guy find this shit via his dark magic hands or orb. That's usually how FE villains do their thing right? A literal handwave and the bad shit happens.

>>72824094
oh if its the FE mod then its easy
>Dark magic siege tome that acts like a torch

>>72712468
Man... You really need to consider doing a mass chapter release at some point. Because, if I remember right you're writing this arc this way as training for making a web serial, and this kind of pacing for this arc doesn't really work for a web novel unless you're literally throwing out chapters daily.
It kind of reminds me of those manga that are a better read when binged/ read all at once rather than serialized since this arc has been a slow burn.
I know this kind of biased by way of this coming after a hiatus but like this is what your readers are going to feel if you do this there.
I wish I had something to say about the chapter itself, but this really is just an in-between buildup chapter that drops some breadcrumbs to follow.

>>72824672
May very well be what I do. And it hits a certain Guardian (aka Holomem)

I said survive!

i need the most chuuni chuuba shouting the most cringeworthy attack names

>>72804296
Thank you for organizing!

>>72828024
the first month of Nerissa fanart...where she was a cool oneesan...now she's a gay cat...

There's not enough fics about ame's sweaty pubic jungle

>>72834627
A cat?

>>72835217
ever seen one of those sad cat pics? she constantly looks like one

>>72835420
She can be a cool gay oneesan cat

>>72835609
Nerissa will NEVER be cool

>>72835737
I accept this challenge. I WILL make her cool.

>>72835917
(me)
That was the wrong image, just pretend I posted a cool Nerrissa and not a more threatening looking group.

>>72670403
Kobo aggressively taking the lead in sex with her oji-san boyfriend because he's too shy and insecure

>>72835917
>>72836010
Nerissa's overwhelming girlfailure energy corrupts even our writers.

>>72836010
I got you.

>>72835917
Hmm
What if
> new intern at HoloX: Nerissa Ravencroft, Daemon of Sound
> everyone tries teaching her their brands of cool
> Laplus tries to teach her in the ways of chuuni roleplay, Rissa nearly dies of cringe
> Lui is putting her through various etiquette and erudition gauntlets to raise her womanly charms, only gets girlfail moments instead
> Iroha is trying to hand her a sword to spar - too weak, basic calisthenics is the limit
> Chloe, wised up to her weakness, gives up on teaching her weapons and just has her practice running, hoping to graduate to parkour soon
> Koyori is trying to make her into a supersoldier but demon physiology keeps screwing everything up, and chemistry isn't something you pick up over a nice quiet evening at the library

>>72834869
>Trapped in a stuffy, claustrophobic spaceship with a sweaty astronaut Ame....

>>72670403
Cover opens the HoloMoms branch and while they go through the process of hiring managers, they put (You) in charge of onboarding. Unfortunately, you are little more than clay in the hands of mature older women so who's in charge changes really fast

>>72836688
I already feel the failure overflowing in my bloodstream. It's so over.
>>72836797
Thanks mate, we might be back.
>>72836949
We are so back.

>>72838918
I wanna be groomed by a lonely hag....

>>72838918
specially if you were the manager of their daughters and they all have very good info about you

>>72838918
>>72839712
Pekomama's sadist personality...

>>72823258
so just wondering since I never had to do anything like it. if I rewrite an entire scene, do I repost the fic of the story, ancher? or do I leave it?

>>72842809
Depends on you. Rewrite or just do it secretly

>>72842809
If you can, just edit the one already linked in the archive. You can mention it in the thread if you want to.

>>72842809
Depends on what you're setting out to do. Either way if you want to rewrite something, you should, but if you want more feedback on it, post a shout out in the thread and see if anyone has anything to say on it. If you do your rewrite and you're satisfied on how it looks over the original, you can also just keep it secret.

clear

>>72834869
imagine the smell

>>72834869
the ame doll outfit stays on during sexo

>>72849241
>not getting IN the ame doll outfit with her and fucking in the ame fumes gas chamber

>>72849438
nta but I'm still waiting for that sequel to Run that takes place during HoloFes where Ame and her brother need to get in the Smol Ame suit, and end up fucking each other while everyone passes by, unaware

>>72806675
I’m not the best writer and I struggle at accurately writing someone else’s personality and manners or speech but seeing as there aren’t really any stories about them I might as well try my hand at them
>>72811188
I was thinking of a story of emo Moomers inviting normie anon to a concert of her favorite band or them coming back home from the concert. Just really something themed around her being an late 90s / early 2000s so could also be about hanging out with her at wherever emos hung out back then
But that idea the other anon had also sounds fun so I’ll throw in my idea about meeting emo Mumei in real life after interacting on MySpace for awhile

>>72850617
No one is amazing when they first start out, but you can ultimately keep improving if you got the guts and passion to see your stories through. A 2000s emo mooms story would definitely hit me with some nostalgia. The MySpace interaction angle is something that resonates deeply with me.
I was a guy who started out as a heavy metalhead, found emo girls that way, then became a major ska head towards the end of my high school days. Emo girls were intersecting with all of it.

>>72838414
>asteroid clips the ship
>both of you tumbling around in zero gravity
>Ame's fat sweaty ass smashes directly into your face

>>72852442
>Eating her ass in gravity zero while ame is unable to pry you away from her sweaty asshole

>>72843029
>>72843729
>>72844875
Alright. I touched up the font and spacing, and I updated both the fight scene in the alley to make it more minimalist, as well as the ending to get rid of the cliff hanger and instead swap it with a "set up"

hopefully these changes make it a little better.

>>72856566
I definitely think the fight scene has been improved. It works better that their first actual interaction comes later on at the school anyway, so to me this is a positive change. I also think the ending is more nicely wrapped while getting your readers ready for the next part. Also try to keep in mind when you use the same words back to back, using a synonym makes the reading flow a little better.
Way to take the feedback and turn it into your stomping ground.

>>72857741
>Also try to keep in mind when you use the same words back to back, using a synonym makes the reading flow a little better.
I'll try to keep an eye out the next time I skim through my fics for this. thank you again for your feedback.

>>72798139
first of all, congratulations on capturing that "No nonsense 2010 battle harem" feel. Its such an unique feeling that makes me go "god damn i want a violent tsundere to stall this plot! this rules!"
I think the Lui characterization is top notch, specially with the exchanges and teasing. Is it a bit cliche? maybe,but i have nothing against those if they are well executed and here works great.

But with that being said, i think the problem with your fight scene AND the narration is that it...lingers in scenes. Its like are describing cgs in a game, and that makes it all look static.

>“What makes you think you can interrupt important Omaru-za busin–” his words suddenly halted with his body launching up in the air. In the time I blinked the muscle-bound man had suddenly vanished and in his place was the woman with her fist in the air.

Here, for example i can picture the scene clearly...but it isnt that dynamic. IF anything, calling back to that 2010 harem feel, it feels like a freeze frame where the scene goes.
>Girl punches
>Guy flies away. Stops in the air
>Everyone looks at him
>we describe how he looks
>time resumes
>He lands

My two cents here would be triying to paint the movement rather than the "keyframe" moments
>"What makes you think you can deal with Omaru-"
*CRUNCH*
The gorilla never finishes his sentence as he sails across the alleway over Ace and his gang, eyes white as he crashes into an open trashcan. In just a second, this girl has sent a man twice her stature packing.

Of course this is just an example. I think the idea of her being faster than you can follow works, but it needs to have a change of pace or it feels static and almost like its a turn based rpg fight. The flicker is a perfect use of that freeze frame effect.


Now the narration has some trouble. It describes some things to paint the scene (the meal with Lui) but it doesnt "move". It feels like we go from scene to scene and anything inbetween scenes is implied. I think that just needs you finding a comfortable spot to work that good narration and tiying it all, because while im pointing out negatives, i quite liked it!

TLDR: try and "move" the scenes, you dont need specific details but you should iron some minor ideas (if its a western city but a japanese meal...where's anon from? it feels weird!) and keep grinding, this has a lot of potential

Also a good excuse to post gyaru bae

I wanna add something to deranged kemono thoughts... anyone up to suggest a girl or an animal?

>>72860681
Anya

>>72860887
oh yeah that's good. Any animal you'd want to suggest? she strikes me as a reptile but im open to suggestion.
Then again im probably gonna mull it over while i take a shower

>>72861092
>Any animal you'd want to suggest?
Nah I'll leave that to you

>>72860681
How about yourself you fucking slob

>>72861194
well shit, that came out easily. Red panda Anya is a thing there, so thanks for the idea.
The idea of tiny wife climbing stuff is really appealing
>>72861871
me? sorry im not particularly cute even if im a half animal chimera.
Unless you meant sloth, in which case i say fuck you sloths are not animals, fuck sloths i hate them so much they are shit and garbage like koalas.
they should go extinct instead of other cooler animals

>>72860681
Since that guy was requesting it earlier, how about Emo Emu Mumei?

>>72862504
kek that sounds dumb. im in.
Will probably take a bit longer because i might pack it with something horny for lamy

>>72670403

Something that ends in Lamy freezing (you) solid and adding you to her collection. Maybe the warmth of alcohol ends up getting so, so cold.

>>72859934
I think I understand. Try to describe the scene as a scene and not like a picture in my head. I'll try to keep this in mind for future chapters. thank you for reading and your feedback as well!

>>72862063
Cute. I like it.
>Kinda likes getting manhandled. Will never initiate fun time, but also never says no
>Not a biter, but she digs her nails in your back
Oh yeah, I'm imagining alright.

>>72839712
>Pekora's paranoid you're trying to fuck her mom so she's always watching you
>It's actually Pekomama doing 99.9% of the work in trying to get you into her
>Pekora goes insane because she never

>>72865685
>because she never sees you actually doing anything it's just her mom getting hornier and hornier
This edible ain't shit I told myself

>>72857741
I can't decide if those hips are widening too radically or if they're perfect.

>>72865764
I'm in your walls. I'm the one causing your house to settle.

Can you forgive the Nijisanji moderator for not showing any remorse?

https://imgur.com/a/KaSXNKF

https://x.com/ashiki_games/status/1775379594293747736?s=46

>>72867895
Sir this is the fanfiction thread

What if emo Mumei but she's actually thousands of years old like in her lore?

>>72869137
>A deific millennia old entity thinks the mid-to-late 2000's was the apex of human civilization
Same Moomers, same...

>>72869137
>Emo Mumei hating Goth Fauns since she looks nothing like a real goth.

>>72871007
Hottest librarian there is.

Getting close to bump limit, hopefully someone will be around to bake.

>>72798139
Noice, love how it's going Anon. Best of luck on this project.

>>72873064
what's an uncomon bread for /wg/

>>72873255
Pumperknightkel

>>72873346
didh't we have a noel themed bread a week or so ago?

>>72873255
Did we have threads about all DEV_IS members yet?

>>72873418
you know, I don't know ive seen either Raden or Kanade themed breads yet

>>72873462
I can bake a Ryeden bread if we get to 310

>>72873550
you cheeky little skamp

>>72873633
I was leaning towards her to begin with.
And I cant come up with a good bread pun for Kanade

Alright, super early but whatever.
Baking, stand by

>>72874111
Other Oreo woman bread Baked. Migrate when ready