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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

previous thread:>>51401301

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... were two stories posted in the last thread.

Balsa: Chapters One and Two: tags: (you), Botan, Nene, Polka, medieval fantasy, adventure:>>51502967

Ruffling some Feathers:TAGS: Takanashi Kiara, NSFW, Hatefucking, Oral Sex: >>51509763

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Solving the mystery of why all the hags are retroactively turning back into JKs.:>>51434453

Tickling Luna's feet until she pisses herself.:>>51440081

Something similar to POLatio but with Mel and she needs cum to survive.:>>51444683

Reine asking (you) to write fanfiction of her fucking Kiara.:>>51462776

Miko awkwardly performing a striptease for (You) because she wants you to get an erection at the thought of her and she's fed up not being seen as sexy.:>>51492002

Misery (The book) but with Sora as the captor and you as the victim and somewhere in rural Japan.:>>51492133

Gal Polka cleaning up her act to ask (You) out on a date:>>51502532

Lamy insists that she's not high-maintenance or difficult to deal with, so to prove a point (You), her bodyguard, and her switch roles for a day.;>>51507462

Shion giving you CBT while mocking you for getting hard from it, and for the pathetic sounds of agony you're making.:>>51523455

As you walk out of your apartment, you hear something in the backyard and go to check.:>>51533028

Vesper and Bae have lovey dovey age difference sex:>>51546786

>> No.51551974

>>51551031
If only Botan was an actual /k/ommando.

>> No.51551994

>>51551974
Just marry her and let her move to America.

>> No.51552159

>>51551994
Would she be a tacticool black guns or a fudd cowboy?

>> No.51552261

>>51552159
Neither just a woman who loves guns but is inexperience and barely knows anything about them. Maybe an enthusiast?

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>> No.51552912

>>51552714
Thank God it's censored.

>> No.51553798

>>51551994
But I don't want to move to America with her...

>> No.51553871

>>51553798
Why not? America a best

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What is one of your favorite moments in a fic?

>> No.51555316

>>51551031
botan kakkoi

>> No.51555540

>>51555284
i like the part in paradise lost where anon says
>i bet you could'nt shit in my mouth
and then fubuki shits in his mouth

>> No.51556862

>>51555540
Truly a turning point for fanficdom as a whole.

>> No.51557165

What makes good written horror? You can't exactly frighten your readers with some words. Is it more about instilling a feeling of dread?

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>>51557165
It's about capturing the sensation of dread.
Basicslly, set up an inescapable conclusion. If it's something the protagonist can cope with and get past, then change things suddenly and make things worst.
Keep snuffing out hope, as you subtly introduce new characters, elements, and settings that could potentially muddle the mixture. Do it in such a way that the reader is focused on the present threat and doesn't notice thing changing.
By the time the protagonist is truly fucked beyond belief, deliver your twist, or capitalize on your old threat with a new set of circumstances and characters to deal with. If it's a short work, this is the spot where you end it. If it's a long work, then you continue with a new threat, while keeping the other looming threat in your back pocket to occasionally reintroduce, or potentially reenter the game.

>> No.51557587

>>51555284
Draco trance in Holofantasy was pretty hype.

>> No.51557672

>>51557165
The only time I’ve ever been scared by a written story was when I was a kid. I got to a point in the story when the protagonist was trying to hide from something and was close to being found. I didn’t want to continue reading because I was scared of them being discovered.

>> No.51558270

>>51557165
Horror is a tough genre now that everyone has consumed so much media that nothing is shocking anymore. For a horror story to be good I think it has to either mix in other genre elements or have a super unique premise/setting. You're right that the action will never be scary, suspenseful maybe but not scary. So you kind of have to focus on the vibes. Right now it seems to be popular to focus more on making the reader uncomfortable than straight up dread.

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>>51502967
I have to agree with the anon in the last thread. This just felt disjointed even if the opening started off well after they get to town the entire thing just feels like events happening without the necessary reaction to actually make it have impact.
To compare with one of your previous fics, its kind of like the weaker ryona scenes in "Let Me Feel Your Pain" or "Brown, Black and Blue Because I Love You" where the action are described but lack the reaction to actually make them stick with the readers..
You really need to do outlining and planning before making series like this. I know you can write fast but sometimes you need to slow down and improve the events already there rather than rushing off forward into the next event in story. Though with a writing speed like yours you could honestly adopt the first draft and revise till it's good model.
>Botan's horse
heh

>> No.51560252

>>51557461
why is she in there

>> No.51562106

>>51560252
To play your eardrum

>> No.51563583

Has anyone ever heard of denki anma? Weird as shit but I think it's my new fetish. I want Nene to do it to me and then be perplexed when it makes me cum in my pants.

>> No.51564593

>>51563583
Ive seen the denki anma challenge on tiktok where people do it to each other

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>>51563583
>Assume it's something involving in shock play
>It's literally just someone grabbing your legs and stepping on your cock but not too hard

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>> No.51567680

>>51502967
I hate to be that guy, but these chapters have a lot of telling and not much showing. I'll focus on the first chapter, because I think it was the better of the two. But essentially the sequence of events is: Anon shows up -> meets Botan -> suddenly she fights a mammoth man?? You gotta try to set that up at least a little.
Like maybe when Anon first arrives in town he notices that the temperature is unseasonably cold and no one is out working the fields, which he finds a bit creepy. Then when he first sees Botan she's examining some weirdly large footprints by the side of the road. When she's walking Anon to town, he starts telling her about the place since he's so well traveled and maybe he tells her there are underground tunnels or something in the center of town and she uses that knowledge during the fight to get the mammoth to fall through the pavement and get stuck. Just some rough ideas, but you should try and drop at least a few clues throughout to tie the whole thing together. Oh, and if a mammoth demon is eating people, the guys in the inn should have at least gossiped about it a little bit.
Also
>horse name lol

>> No.51570913

>>51564986
She actually blinked.

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>>51570913
Yeah, would I lie to you?

>> No.51576158

>>51573730
Maybe.

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>>51555284
In My Girlfriend Polka when Anon fends off the last of the bad bitch club by making a shrek reference, which summons Mori from the other side of the room and makes her cling to the bully like glue. I don't know what inspired the writer to do that, but it was a stroke of comedic genius.

>> No.51579907

>>51578221
That's pretty funny.

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God damn the board is flying what the fu-
>no less than 6 different gura threads
>pomu caused a shitstorm since she doesnt feel like she would fuck the purple half-dragon
Why don't people just want to talk about their own oshis and not fling shit over what other people's oshis say?

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Another dreamless, fox-less night.

>> No.51583461

>>51580078
Gift cards need to be earned somehow.

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>>51580078
>pomu caused a shitstorm since she doesnt feel like she would fuck the purple half-dragon
a totally real shitstorm by totally real fans

>> No.51584093

>>51583847
Them being monkeys is a really nice touch.

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>>51551035
HoloJourneys: (Across Deserts to the Oceans Blue, A Shining Star Debuts) Chapter 32: A Day Filled With Pride

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSgVvFxce3bSOGgWMsKkOYC5hpsLPyriXCr5bBdGn-ybYheWz8GWpbpOyX7eXWVhbkI1Bq0MtO9ZVoN/pub

Tags: (Watame, Flare, Polka, Nene, Pomu, Botan, SFW, Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Fluff)

I had an immense amount of fun with this one. I flexed some writing muscles creating some OCs. I didn't go into this chapter thinking I'd do that, but the scene I just found myself writing demanded for it, and it'll make a few scenes I have planned a lot better. We're approaching the main conflict of this arc, and I'm stoked to be getting there soon, there will even more hags, more action and maybe even something more involving hags. I'm always happy to read through feedback, and I hope you enjoy the read!

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>>51509763
Finally got to reading through this. I thought the dynamic and banter with Kiara was pretty fantastic. The smut was decent, the oral play was pretty nice, we sometimes don't get enough cunnilingus. I think I enjoyed the morning after most of all. It was pretty authentic for that type of experience. It's true not all of them end with another date like that, but it was incredibly cute how Kiara and Anon warmed up to each other that way. Like other anons said, give your grammar and formatting a few more lookovers and your future works will be sailing smooth.

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>>51551053
Going to the beach with your girlfriend Nazuna and she does increasingly erotic actions to keep your eyes on her and off the other girls at the beach

>> No.51589257

>>51588978
Does it end with you getting cucked?

>> No.51589358

>>51588978
>>51551053
Destroying Nazuna's relationship with her boyfriend through subterfige, public ridicule, and gaslighting until her hair turns white from the stress, and she fucks me on the rebound only for her to realize I am the only oneshe can rely on

>> No.51591854

>>51589358
I'm the boyfriend

>> No.51592877

>>51589257
>>51589358
Why is Nazuna so popular for cheating

>> No.51593223 [DELETED] 

>>51592877
Past life

>> No.51595288

>>51593223
Why is mikeneko so popular for cheating

>> No.51595468

>>51595288
concurrent life

>> No.51596958
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Saw cute Ram and Rem cosplayers and now I want to read a fic about having a threesome with popular Vtuber duo cosplayers, like Micomet or Noeflare

>> No.51597477

>>51596958
Pretty sure it would have to have a twist where they were actually them/another chuuba duo in disguise if you want it to fit here.

>> No.51599099

>>51597477
Nah there's tons of crossdresser fics

>> No.51599735

>>51599099
Yeah those fics in the archive still had them say they were the actual chuuba.

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>>51599735

>> No.51600228

>>51599914
Before pekofag deleted the pekofag fic he retconned the fic to retroactively be about Pekora (with a cock) in order for it to actually be archived.

>> No.51600243

>>51599735
You are quite the forgetful anon.

>> No.51600714

>>51600228
>>51600243

>> No.51600976

>>51600228
>Before pekofag deleted the pekofag fic
Why did he delete that thing anyway

>> No.51602446

>>51600976
Lost its soul

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>>51551053
Playing a harmless prank on your broski, selen (Breeding her)

>> No.51602705

>>51602446
It was soulless trash to begin with

>> No.51603566

>>51555540
He doesn't say that, he says “Fubuki, in America it’s illegal to defecate in public so please go in my mouth so you won’t get in trouble.”

and then she shits on his mouth

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>>51551035
Sup fuckers it’s phase connect time https://sys.4channel.org/derefer?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdocs.google.com%2Fdocument%2Fd%2Fe%2F2PACX-1vSNXsqVeN83bHiX5bDtidzhpRniJVKeXN5dNGX8adiY_ctVMaTTrcbIESGSh4hQOp5o7qjmSlf-8vxs%2Fpub

>> No.51604331

>>51604147
Forgot to tag.

>> No.51604415
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>>51604331
I’m aware.

>> No.51604560

>>51604147
It's the wediefag again

>> No.51604594

>>51604560
What’s up BITCH

>> No.51604928

>>51604147
You fucked up your link.

>> No.51605149

>>51551053
A creature that can replicate Chuubas is let lose on the studio.
Is up to you to guess who is it impersonating

>> No.51605164

>>51604928
God fucking damn it you’re right
My fault for trying to log off my computer for the night and take the link elsewhere
>>51551035
Fixed link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSNXsqVeN83bHiX5bDtidzhpRniJVKeXN5dNGX8adiY_ctVMaTTrcbIESGSh4hQOp5o7qjmSlf-8vxs/pub
Tags: wedgie, phase connect, Pippa, Lumi

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>>51605149

>> No.51608816

>>51602649
SOURCE ON THIS PIC?

>> No.51612027

>>51608816
Probably the draw thread I'd imagine.

>> No.51614531

>>51597477
How so? /vt/ has cosplayer threads, too. The only thing that's not allowed is writing about the roommates who are doing the vtubing in front of their PCs.

>> No.51615577

>>51614531
Pekofag was being a whiny bitch about it.

>> No.51615642

>>51614531
>The only thing that's not allowed is writing about the roommates who are doing the vtubing in front of their PCs.
Says who?

>> No.51615714

>>51614531
Because AA decided to negotiate with terrorists and set up a dumb rule

>> No.51615812

>>51614531
It was kind of established pretty early on (like /wg/ year one) that the writing that goes into the archive has to be vtuber fanfiction and not just vtuber related fiction since the thread soft agreed that a hypnosis fic about an OC that's a vtuber didn't really fit in even if it was inspired by a real chuuba.

>> No.51616706

>>51615812
>>51615714
>>51615642
>>51615577
I'd read a vtuber cosplayer fanfic regardless of whether it gets put in the archive or not. You could make it compliant by including some actual vtubers as characters, but what's the point? As long as it's allowed on /vt/ and writing-related it should go into /wg/, otherwise this isn't a general but a partial.

>> No.51616736

>>51616706
Boohoo QQ. Write about vtubers or fuck off.

>> No.51616782

>>51616736
Make your own board if you want to play janny, shitposter-kun.

>> No.51616813

>>51616782
Make your own writing general if you want to play ruler, shitposter-kun.

These are the rules we decided on and you need to obey them or fuck off.

>> No.51616933

Would Iroha still use de gozaru during sex or would you just like fuck it out of her?

>> No.51617006

>>51616813
But you and your nebulous "we" are who's trying to play ruler, citing some ancient rules that can never be changed because someone was bitching about a topic that offended them for no actual reason.
Let's agree to just not engage with any fics not to our liking, okay? I'll stop replying here, though you're free to argue with yourself as usual.

>>51616933
She should still use it, unless it's a plot point that you fucked it out of her.

>> No.51617070

>>51617006
Cry about it. You don't belong in this thread.

>> No.51618225

>>51551053
Hypnotizing a chuuba into graduation.

>> No.51618602

>>51616706
I think it’s a necessary rule. If we start allowing stories featuring only OCs and zero chuubas, it’s only a matter of time before we become a second /vtwbg/. We’ll get stories where Anons make their own OCs and write stories about their OC’s adventures, not once encountering an actual vtuber but using the argument “but it’s based off of a vtuber’s ___”. I won’t get aggressive like the other guy, and I mean this in the nicest way possible, but if you’d like to write about OCs I would recommend the kronii thread or /vtwbg/.

>> No.51619640

>>51618225
Romantic or Platonic?

>> No.51619819

>>51619640
College. Highschool if you want to be a bit more adventurous.

>> No.51620056

>>51619640
Supersonic.

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>>51619819
>"Oooooh, you want to pass your entrance exaaaams!"

>> No.51620674

>>51620134
Makes me think of
>Hypnotizing Gal Polka to clean up her act and ace her tests so you can both go to the same college.
Or
>Using hypnosis as the last resort to make sure Nene can at least pass the last term.

>> No.51623496

>>51551074
good stuff

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>> No.51623581

>>51620674
>Hypnotizing Gal Polka to clean up her act and ace her tests so you can both go to the same college.
Do this one.

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How's the wip going anon? Did you make any decent progress this week?

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Can we please

>> No.51624846

>>51608816
https://twitter.com/korewakana/status/1670246864
048779264
>>51624144
im taking a few days off, then diving into a collar prompt that is a bit different

>> No.51626243

>>51624846
is it a part of the-- what's it called again, collarverse? Kemonoverse?

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>>51626243
not really, the only thing i can say is that i got the breakthrough i needed thanks to this thread

>> No.51627494

>>51551053
Helping Aqua put a bit of muscle in her arms so she can open a plastic bottle on her own.

>> No.51628638

>>51626393
>>51551053
Noel calls bullshit on Iroha's claim that a Japanese katana, having been folded ten thousand times, could cut clean through a western longsword. They settle it with a "guaranteed replies.gif" thread on /a/: whoever gets the most (You)s will be considered as having the correct opinion.

>> No.51629471

>>51624144
Same old, same old. Still working.

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>>51624144
At snail's pace and reads like spaghetti but it's being written alright.

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>>51551053
Zoomer breeding

>> No.51630568

>>51630158
Good lord those are some meaty thighs. I want to suffocate between them

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>>51629471
>>51629895
I love to see it. Keep riding and grinding. There's nothing like a heaping spaghetti pile of words though.

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>>51630158
The amount of detail put into Bae's legs is insane. The curvature of her thighs. The dimples of her knees. The way that belt thing digs into her skin. A true masterwork of leg engineering the likes of which I've never seen before.

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>>51631728
Perfectly designed for wrapping around your waist as you inseminate her fit dancer body

>> No.51632196

>>51632033
If that's a real submission that's based as hell

>> No.51632303

>>51632196
It is real, the funny part is that her manager chose the maros to show on that stream.

>> No.51632338

>>51624144
I was able to do some editing on what I already have, but word count remains roughly the same. Writer's block is beating my ass.

>> No.51632373

>>51632303
Very nice, manager-san.
Now secretly open cock submissions so she gets flashed on stream repeatedly and has to rate them.

>> No.51632495

>>51630158
>>51631728

Is it worth watching her streams just so I can learn to write about her properly? Very tempted to invest that time because she has a
godly zoomer design and decent prompts being requested.

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>>51632338
Doing edits with a stable word count is key sometimes. It's also good to have some of your edits done before moving on if you're currently blocked on what comes next. With the edits you made, it will help you to shape the next scenes. I bet you'll knock down the wall that is blocking you soon bro. Keep at it.

>> No.51632745

>>51632495
100%. She has a lot of energy and there's rarely a dull moment. Clippers always clickbait the ''she doesnt know'' moments but she can go on several tangents about nothing and make it interesting, like make up, with just sheer passion
You could start with a zatsu and see if you like it

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>>51632495
Absolutely.
I'd also recommend reading "Horror Intolerance" in the archive. It's a pretty good and fluffy Bae story.

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>>51632495
I'd check out streams where she collabs in to be honest. That way you can get a true feel for how she interacts with others. Bae is an interesting character because she has gotta zoom fast bits, and then she also falls into a chill kinda almost empty headed state where she's just enjoying the lazy ride down the river.

>> No.51632973

>>51624144
On the vidya? Yes. On the writing? Just did a comm that’s all.

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One day there will be a Nakirin fic.

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>>51635327
I'm not sure how I would even relate the two. Because I mostly just think about fantasy bullshit, the only thing off the top of my head that could relate the two is if Ayame goes on some schizo streak and starts cutting trees and shit for no reason.

>> No.51637402

>>51637284
I mostly think about smut bullshit, so my first idea would be Fauna going to Japan and Ayame asking Fauna to stay at her place, resulting in a personal ASMR session that gets out of hand.

>> No.51637785

>>51632303
I can't imagine all the variations of mating press they went through.

>> No.51638752

>>51632495
Bae needs a good ole dick cheese feasting fic, being cheesed to meet you n all

>> No.51639734

>>51638752
Stop giving me good ideas

>> No.51640403

>>51638752
I think there's one on the archive.
Anyway Bae should get a sekuhara fic, where you exploit her shame and make her cum on her way home

>> No.51640535

>>51551053
Lui impregnation. I need more pregnant hags. I am not sated.

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I am so lonely.

>> No.51641623

>>51640403
oh shit there actually is. pretty short unfortunately, but it's funny at least

>> No.51642905

>>51641082
So is she, anon.
Can she feel your warmth from across the world?

>> No.51644692

>>51624144
Not really. Most of the week was spent in a grind on other writing projects.
That said, the past couple days I came up with a great idea for the revision of the first draft of the Selen bullying fic. I'm about 75% through an unsteady rough draft which should be finished next week provided I don't spend too much time taking it easy

>> No.51645206

>>51644692
You were in a grind? OMG anon I hope you're safe now.

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>>51645206
I'm safe now. Thanks for the well wishes, friend.

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>>51551053

>> No.51652726

>>51648634
I don't understand the prompt for this.

>> No.51654778

>>51652726
Mumei goes on one last trip to see the Tokyo tower after the end of the world.

>> No.51657410

>>51652726
Towa baby

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>>51659709
SLUT
L
U
T

>> No.51660284

>>51659792
Nene is a proper woman who never has sex outside of marriage.

>> No.51660808

>>51660284
not if drugs are involved

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>>51659709
No one can resist this sheep.

>> No.51663055

>>51661266
Why does Flare's face look so weird?

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> faggot Redditor is posting stuff from here again

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>>51664186
you okay anon? what the hell are you talking about?

>> No.51664671

>>51664186
Why do you know that?

>> No.51667200 [DELETED] 

>>51664186
t. redditor

>> No.51669997

>>51664186
There's a redditor stealing stories for le updoots?

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>>51624144
Working on an older WIP because I was in the mood to write about making a hag sad and I liked it's setting, though whether I finish it before getting distracted is another matter entirely

>> No.51671097

Anons, which Hololive chuuba do you think has the highest predilection for crime? Aside from Pekora and HoloX, of course

>> No.51671118

>Check the archive
>None of the stories I've waited for have been updated.
I'm losing hope, bros...

>> No.51671382

>>51671097
Miko
Matsuri
Mumei

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>>51671382
>Miko
>Matsuri
Heyyy that's pretty good. Mumei is already a character in the story I'm making, but those two would fit right in. Thanks, anon!

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>>51671118
What fics are you waiting for anon? I know where a couple of the authors went so I can tell you if you should still hold hope.

>> No.51671778

>>51671570
I'm waiting for Hag Orgy Part 3, While My Guitar Gently Continues to Weep, and Paradise Regained 2: Paradise Lost Again.

>> No.51671853

>>51670498
What have you written previously anon?

>> No.51672079

>>51671570
To be 17 again althought this one might be dead by this point
First summer memories is definitely dead
Auntie's little secret
Deal with the devil, but that anon said it's coming along so there's that

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>>51671778
>Hag Orgy Part 3
Didn't his apartment get hit by a missile?
>While My Guitar Gently Continues to Weep
Left us
>Paradise Regained 2: Paradise Lost Again.
Probably still here but probably isn't working on that.

>> No.51672214 [DELETED] 

>>51672124
Yeah, haganon literally died in Ukraine. Right at the start of the war, too. Extremely unlucky.

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>>51672079
>To be 17 again
Same author as
>Auntie's little secret
Probably still with us given that they recently wrote 'A Bond of Blood and Sin'. Last I heard, To be 17 again was the author having trouble with coming up with a better chapter/ending to the husband arc. No clue on what trouble they're having with auntie's little secret.
>First summer memories is definitely dead
Who knows where that anon is at this point. Vaguely remember them saying they were having trouble juggling uni stuff but that was literally a year ago so I could be wrong.
>Deal with the devil, but that anon said it's coming along so there's that
Yeah that anon recently came by to say he was working on it.

>> No.51672787

>>51672555
>Same author
Huh
Neat

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>>51671853
Quite a few things, with Borderline being the most recent but that's just barely over a short fic in my mind so for a real fic it'd probably be chapter 3 of Heartbreak Tokyo before that. Sad hags are a little further away in that and I wanna write about Feudal Foobs anyhow.

>>51672124
>Didn't his apartment get hit by a missile?
Even if it did he's driving for fun like 20 hours a day so he's probably fine.

Also he's a Brazilian living in Florida, or at least is there during the summer months

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>>51672908
>Feudal Foobs
Uoh, Chaste Courty love that slowly blossoms into passionate tragic romance after it gets consumated in secret.

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>>51673531
More 'Revenge quest leads back to the person she's come to love'

>> No.51674647

>>51671778
>Paradise Regained 2: Paradise Lost Again.
That title is more clever than what I'd come up with.

>> No.51674865

>>51674245(Me)
Actually, do have a question for the thread. Anybody got a good name for Fubuki's mom?

>> No.51674957

>>51674865
Tails McFoxtits

>> No.51674984

>>51674865
How about Daji?

>> No.51675021 [DELETED] 

>>51672214
Got warned for this kek

>> No.51675184

>>51674865
Satsuki

>> No.51676940

>>51674647
The seriousness of your titles adds to the comedic value.

>> No.51677187

>>51674865
Fubukaa, so Fubuki calls her ふぶかーちゃん

>> No.51677657

>>51674865
Dai Fubuki because according to foobs her mom is stacked.

>> No.51678398

>>51674865
Mombuki

>> No.51678425

>>51674865
Hare, meaning Clear/Sunny/Fair weather

>> No.51678457

Ok gang, question
Which chuuba to kill off for dramatic effect?
Not for any story in particular, just curious about who you’d go for if you did it, and why (like what dynamics would it affect, who would it hurt the most, etc.)

>> No.51678566

>>51678457
You say not for any story in particular, but the way you frame the question makes me think you’re asking which chuuba would I kill off in an already existing setting.

>> No.51678605

>>51678566
To add more context:
Take an existing dynamic, kill off one character. Who is it, why, and what does it do to that dynamic, in your opinion?

>> No.51679020

>>51678457
This question made me realise I need more stories with multiple chuubas. Most of my stuff these days focuses on just the one relationship between you and the heroine.

>> No.51679095

>>51678457
A chuuba who was the love interest in one of your previous stories, to take advantage of any lingering emotional investment.

>> No.51679393

>>51678457
It's absolutely going to have to be based off of what the story is currently going for, but without context... Fubuki.

>> No.51680501

>>51674957
I like this one the most.

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>>51678425
I actually like that as a thing since Fubuki means blizzard, so the entire family being weather related names might be cool.

>>51677657
>according to foobs her mom is stacked.
Oh I know, though she's got to be in her fifties by now. Not that that's a bad thing, pic related.

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>>51680830
>she's got to be in her fifties by now

>> No.51682086

>>51680830
God look at how old and stacked she is. That's so hot.

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>>51680830
>500 year old fox pussy
NEED.

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I had a fairly grand dream about Vtubers, but since I had to wake up in a rush, I don't remember any details anymore. All I remember is this feeling of hopelessness. I can't recall whether it was the Hologirls suffering, or if they were the ones inflicting the suffering, but it was a bad dream to be in.

Dream responsibly, kids.

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>>51682316
Fubuki is 102 fox years old, which roughly translates to 18 human years. Since she's been in Hololive for 4 years now, let's make that 124.8 fox years. It's reasonable to assume her mom would be between 224 and 280 years old at most, that being said, you can get creative here if you'd like to imagine that since youkais can live so long, the age where they have children is so much higher. If that's old enough for her to be wrinkly in Youkai years for you, then you can write it as such. I personally imagine 500 years to be the minimum age for a Youkai to be start being considered old, and 1000 for ancient, so I wouldn't write her mom as a wrinkly hag, even at age 500, but a hag she would be. A seductress, treating humans like toys given her age, since they live so little compared to her, despite Fubuki's embarrassment over her being so forward with her thoughts, given that she's lived together with humans for much longer than her mom despite their massive age gap (it was uncommon for youkais to share the world with humans when her mom was her age)... Great, now I'm creating a whole headcanon around this when I should be writing. And no, I don't care if Fubuki's official lore doesn't call her a Youkai, her lore is incredibly vague, so you can pretty much fill it in however you like. Personally I choose to write her as a fox spirit, fitting under the umbrella for Youkai.

>> No.51684506

>>51683567
I mean in theory you could use her Hololive alternative lore that has her actually be a youkai (well close enough) but honestly that setting isn't even interesting enough to steal ideas from barring giving good bases to start characterization for AUs where they aren't literally vtubers.

>> No.51684509

>>51680830
Sauce?

>> No.51684607

>>51684506
Does that refer to HoloAlt, or to my own prompt? Your wording is confusing. I even ran it through GPT

>> No.51684718

>>51684607
I was referring to this part
> And no, I don't care if Fubuki's official lore doesn't call her a Youkai, her lore is incredibly vague, so you can pretty much fill it in however you like. Personally I choose to write her as a fox spirit, fitting under the umbrella for Youkai.
And referring to the youkai/kami lore in official hololive alternative stuff.

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Writing useful feedback is quite difficult and often feels unnecessarily harsh

>> No.51684908

>>51684718
I got that part. Summarizing, you say that HoloAlt has her as a Youkai, but believe that her HoloAlt lore doesn't excuse using that for stories, since the setting of HoloAlt is uninspired? I don't think anyone here really plans on using HoloAlt anyway.

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>>51684908
I was more saying that if you wanted to have Fubuki as a youkai, in theory you could steal ideas from hololive alternative, more specifically the Yamato Phantasia manga for ideas; with an aside comment of my own opinion that the holoalt setting isn't really that useful for fics barring one use. I hope this helps esl-kun

>> No.51685231

>>51685075
I specifically mentioned the fact that her lore is vague, so your relationship with HoloAlt is puzzling.

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>>51685231
That's because her lore is much more clear cut in the manga compared to her actual lore.

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In any case, I want to write Fubuki's mom now to get to put some ideas to use, but at the same time, I feel like such a fic wouldn't have any legs to stand on at all.

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>>51684897
It's easier to point out flaws than it is to recognize something done well. The human brain is programmed to remember the bad more strongly than the good, it's a fault in our evolution. Its hard but so long as you are conscious of it, you can make the effort to have balanced feedback.
The real issue is with the nature of feedback itself, how do give feedback for something that's already good? You can say why or how something worked but ultimately it still just "Keep doing that." Still useful, but isn't necessarily going to improve your craft.

>> No.51685374

>>51685290
The manga is already a form of fanfiction in my eyes, even if it is officially sponsored. Taking ideas from someone else's corporate fanfiction is uninspired to me. I have a much better time coming up with ideas on the fly, whatever sounding best at the time.

>> No.51685385

>>51685314
Pekomama and Pekora were a great success, I'm sure Fubumama and Fubuki would be too.

>> No.51685544

>>51685385
Pekomama is official and has made multiple on stream and off stream appearances, sporting a plentitude of fanart and a well structured personality and lore. We don't even have a name for Fubuki's mom.

>> No.51685570

>>51685314
I mean Miyuki turned out alright for being a literal OC daughter. I'm pretty sure Fubumama has a bit more material to work with so don't worry about it and just write.

>> No.51685607

>>51685374
Pun intended?

>> No.51685754

>>51685607
Took me a sec.

>> No.51686158

>>51685544
That may make it harder to make her a character that feels "right", but it's not an impossible hurdle. Some authors tend to thrive on more freedom to invent, even.

>> No.51686175

>>51685607
eyyy

>> No.51686326

>>51684897
Feedback on pretty much anything tends to be like that. What's worked for me is to not just mentioning things that you think need to be changed, but also things that were done well. If there was a part of the story that you particularly enjoyed, go ahead and mention it. It's a lot more encouraging to hear the good and the bad together.

>> No.51686483 [DELETED] 

Question for a fic: does being shot in the head kill you?

>> No.51686557 [DELETED] 

>>51686483
It depends. You can be shot nonlethally in the head. You can blow a cheek off. You can blow your JAW off. You can take a bullet to the brain and still live, and there's several cases where this has occurred. It's not a guaranteed death, lots of factors can go on. But if you take like, a .45 between the eyes you're probably a goner. Look up medical stories of people surviving headshots for a better understanding.

>> No.51687675

>>51684897
Yeah, but it’s necessary. As long as you have reasons for your criticism there’s no problem. Writers need to be told what’s wrong with their works so that they can improve.

>> No.51687825 [DELETED] 

>>51686483
Most of the time it will kill, but there’s been exceptions.. If the bullet travels along your skull and only scrapes along the surface of your brain (which has happened before) you might be able to survive. Some people have even had portions of their brain penetrated by a bullet and survived, albeit with some of their everyday functions missing (like speaking).
Point blank there’s almost no chance of survival since the expanding gas from the barrel will basically blast an even bigger hole in your head, but it’s possible at a distance.

>> No.51687869 [DELETED] 

>>51687825
>Point blank there’s almost no chance of survival since the expanding gas from the barrel will basically blast an even bigger hole in your head
Thank you, this knowledge basically renders the question moot

>> No.51687914 [DELETED] 

>>51686483
The caliber matters. You have a higher chance surviving a 9mm gunshot to the head than a .22 because the .22 will bounce around inside your skull.

>> No.51688013 [DELETED] 

>>51687869
If you still want someone in your fic to get shot in the head at extremely close range, even half a metre can make a difference. Odds are still stacked against the person who’s copping the piece of lead, but their chances of survival go from zero to non-zero.

>> No.51689158 [DELETED] 

Bump

>> No.51689810

>>51684897
But it's necessary.

>> No.51689840

>>51689810
It isn't. If you don't have anything nice to say, you shouldn't say anything at all. Thus, you should only be complimenting authors.

>> No.51690236

>>51551053
Slave Fubuki but her master is a kind and gentle soul who'll never hurt her.

But instead of that, how about we change it entirely so it can be more interesting? What if instead of Fubuki being a slave she becomes a willing sex slave to her master because she's secretly a nympho with an insane sex drive and lives on a diet of cum? What if her master is (You) and the reason you are a gentle soul is because she milks the energy out of you around the clock that you become harmless and docile that she dotes on? what if the reason she became your sex slave is because you produce an ungodly amount of cum and she loves to extract that amount of cum out of your balls the second you get a boner? What if during the night, you suddenly have an insane sex drive like Fubuki does and the both of you fuck each others brains out until the early hours in the morning? What if during those sex marathons the both of you have, she's rough with you and she leaves you with a lot of scratch marks, bite marks to show her mark on you? And what if on the days you "aren't" in the mood (but you still produce a lot of cum) your fox slave still invades your personal space and either sucks you off or bounces on your lap despite your dick being sore and sensitive?

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>>51690236
I like your thinking, Anon. You'll go far in life.

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>>51684897
Even if the feedback itself isn't terribly robust or specific, it can spark a conversation or at least get the writer thinking about what they might have done well or sub-par. There is naturally a lot we can get into in regards to the negative, but even a simple statement about something positive goes a long way for some. Knowing how you can improve is something we all should strive for, but it can also help to know what we did well in someone's eyes, since maybe a writer isn't sure to expand on that thing again. Just like how a simple 1-2 line description can really make the difference in a scene, a small amount can go a long way when it comes to feedback.

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What are your word counts looking like anons?
Bonus Question: What's a one-shot fic you like and hope gets a sequel?

>> No.51692712

>>51674865
This talk of the foob mother has given me a thought

What if Fubuki’s mom comes co visit, only to find Foob being a total brat. After some kind of breaking point, Foobmom realizes that she’s gotta set her daughter straight the only way she knows how: a good, hard spanking. This is made doubly humiliating for our foxy friend because she’s a grown adult (and perhaps her grown woman friends are there and watching), but she ultimately deserved it (“if you’re going to act like a child, I’m going to treat you like a child”). Despite herself, foxy-woxy does end up learning a valuable lesson in the end, even if she can’t sit straight for a few days.

>> No.51693024

>>51692712
This but Fubumom does it in front of her granddaughter.

>> No.51693489
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>>51692653
Stagnant. The mojo just hasn't been flowing lately.
Bonus: Mio And Anon Are Two Old People In Love. Most of the hag fics in the archive involve (you) being younger, so having Anon be old too was a nice novelty. Especially since I'm also old.

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>>51692653
0...but I'm currently trying to outline the setting description and clothing before I get into it, since that chapter is gonna start off with that. Then I'll just need a general outline of the first couple of scenes to get myself rolling.
Bonus: I really liked Fanning the Flames, it was short, sweet, and hits my need for fantasy setting romance.

>> No.51694275

>>51692653
Trying to break out of my comfort zone by aiming for a higher word count than usual, no problems with that so far but it's going pretty slow for now.

Bonus: Rat Onahole. Shockingly hot premise and execution that included two of my favourite chuubas.

>> No.51695335

>>51692653
It's getting there is what I will say. 70 percent of the way.
Bonus: Ameranthine. No idea if the author has said anything about a sequel to that story, though.

>> No.51695842

>>51551053
>>/wsg/5144893

anon tries to molest choco, but shes into it way to much.

>> No.51695867

>>51684897
Writers should realize that if they receive feedback, it means that what they wrote was at least good enough to make people invested in your works improving. Or you're a complete retard. Either way it's better than being boring, forgettable, and (You)-less. No matter how harsh, getting any feedback is a huge W. So I don't think it's bad to give harsh feedback, as long as your aren't mean.

>> No.51695883

The Rat Family catbox link died

>> No.51696204
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51696204

>>51692653
500 words more than yesterday so progress, I guess

>> No.51696437

>>51696204(me)
forgot the bonus but Starsword Infinity

>> No.51697348

>>51693489
I promise to write hags and oji sans after I become an oji san too, anon

>> No.51697420
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51697420

>>51693489
i wrote that as a silly oneshot based around this pic, and i dont know if i could put out another of those unless its about father/step daugthers bonding that ends with subaru blurting dad
but people are welcome to give it their own spin, its not like i own the concept

>> No.51697445

>>51693024
This but the granddaughter misbehaves so it becomes a double spanking.
This could be tied into the fox family life getting out of control, and mommy fox showing you how her late father used to correct vixens that go into heat still.

>> No.51697527

>>51697420
>spoiler
Please, I need this

>> No.51697677

>>51695883
Rip. I think the Koreans might have a backup if it hadn't made it to the hard archive.

>> No.51698089 [SPOILER] 
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51698089

>>51624144
Good! Just finished chapter 3 of Balsa and it's going to be a little murder mystery. I'm definitely going to continue the trend of releasing it in 2-3 chapter installments as it allows me to go at a slower pace without having a chapter feel boring. The one thing I am a bit worried about is that it's too dialogue heavy. Not that it's a lot of expositing, but that maybe they're talking a little too much. Here's a little peek at the next chapter, do feel free to tell me if its too much and I'll edit it a little.

This isn't the majority of the chapter mind you, but I don't want to bore the audience.

>>51692653
Sitting at 7,400 words at the moment.

I can't think of a fic I'd like a squeal on. I've been too mentally exhausted to read much.

>> No.51698465
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>>51698089
As someone who likes to write a lot of dialogue, I don't see a problem with the length of that exchange. As long as the scene itself is interesting and you're using the conversation to move things along, or give the reader background information in an indirect way, it should be enjoyable. Casual and not exactly plot related conversation is also a good way to express what makes your characters tick. Personally, I could listen to my hags talk for ages and not be bored.

>> No.51698719

>>51698465
>Personally, I could listen to my hags talk for ages and not be bored.

dangerously based

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51698814

>>51698465
>>51698089
Take the VN pill. You'll never have to write a scenic description ever again.

>> No.51698872

>>51698465
But talk to them forever *after* you have put a child in them, please.

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51698902

>>51698814
But I like writing my scenes, painting the background, giving the world color and life. The feeling of satisfaction I get after writing a good flirting interaction hits like no other.

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51699052

>>51698872
I'll do both thanks.

>> No.51699343

>>51699052
Watame baby a cute

>> No.51700153

>>51699052
I hope those horns grew after birth

>> No.51700915

>>51698814
Technically you could already do this in docs since you can just embed images into Google docs and it just works when it gets published.

>> No.51701574

>>51697677
I mean we could just pull it from warosu since it was a screenshot of a greentext

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>>51700153
I hadn't actually thought about what the results of breeding these wonderful hags will look like at first. I'd probably say that little one's horns started out as little nubs at birth, and because its mom has such proud and strong horns, they grew out real fast. It'll definitely be fun thinking about what various offspring might look like.

>> No.51702974

>>51702428
The ones in that image look like younger clones

>> No.51703458

>>51692653
1000 words in and already feel halfway done. No idea how writers accomplish longer works without waffling on.
Bonus: I liked Pekofag's Orgy and hope it receives a sequel one day.

>> No.51703576 [DELETED] 

>>51686483
I got banned for 24 hours for this post. What the hell.

>> No.51704629

>>51702974
That's because they are, anon.

>> No.51704756

>>51686483
>>51703576
Wait legitimately what is happening here? It's not just the dude getting ban evaded or whatever because the entire reply chain was deleted as well. I thought it was a good question

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>>51702974
That can happen sometimes. Kinda the whole hereditary thing at work. At least in our fanfics they will likely be the spitting image of their mothers.

>> No.51705297

>>51705046
Does that mean our sons look just like me?

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51705444

>>51705297
Yea. I'll personally probably write any sons to have the mother's hair color and type.

>> No.51705992

>>51705297
I mean, you need to keep a certain balance or it will become too much for you to handle.

>> No.51706043

>>51702428
Flare's child should be blacker and Mio's should be autistic

>> No.51706631

Would it be cringe to start off a first-person story where (You)'re posting on /vt/ talking about a subject, or is it fine? I honestly can't tell. It'd be central plot point.

>> No.51706768

>>51706631
Depends on how seriously the story takes itself

>> No.51706996

>>51706768
Not a straight up shitpost, but not exactly Charles Dickens either.

>> No.51707039

> Matsuri actually streams naked

>> No.51708461
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51708461

>>51551035
Balsa: Chapters 3 and 4
Tags: (you), Botan, Nene, Polka, medieval fantasy, adventure

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQcKJTl5keC5qBwyLCmWA5BqZM1nNwtZhyLA4gNnUAAw_ttSHsQG8H-x94tVH7D4p_epu8GvqV-4Fku/pub

I tried to give a little more character to everyone as well as do a battle of wits rather than a battle of brute strength. Tell me how I did and feel free to make suggestions and critiques.

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>> No.51710025
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51710025

I'm lazy all day and just want to play video games. I have zero interest in writing. Then when night comes and I feel half awake and the need to sleep, I also feel a massive calling to write.

Does anyone else have this problem?

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51711269

Another update to "Shark in the Screen" my Gura drama animatic. This clip features a flashback to Gura's little brother. I'm planning on releasing one more sneak peek before the episode 1 premiere featuring Jenma and Omega.

https://youtube.com/watch?v=t-dE9ACxlyM

To watch all the clips so far here is the playlist:

https://youtube.com/playlist?list=PLZdwW1dn_6BaJmsNLLM3_jef7oxsEVDY7

>> No.51711406

>>51710025
I'm the opposite. I get so burnt out from writing that even video games seem like too much work. So I end up waffling between games and anime, basically just staring at a wall for an hour before I go "this is a waste of time. might as well write"
Grass is always greener

>> No.51711684

>>51711269
CUTE
I honestly can't think of anything to critique. The writing is sweet, the art and music accompany it well.
I wouldn't mind if all you did was these one scene snippets. Here's to hoping your project goes well!

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>>51708461
I see you added a little more paint to how characters converse with one another, so that was nice to see. The town itself was given a little more flavor, but I think you can still do more in that regard. I kinda feel like the speed of everything is set higher than the tone wants it to be. Like, I don't know if it makes a lot of sense, but the characters operate like they're in a rising action, but we're already in the thick of the full climax in the conflict. Formatting wise, I think you can easily combine some lines that are part of the same action, or rather a result of a phrase. For example:
“Absolutely.”

Mio closed her eyes, falling unconscious.
Could be something like: "Absolutely." You assure Mio, who closes her eyes and falls into unconsciousness.
The way it is now, kinda reads like a play script. A battle of wits was nice way to show off some of Botan's experience. You also had me in the first half, not gonna lie, I thought Finana was going to be a siren of sorts for the town. I admit I'm a little disappointed that it was just some kinda bratty shadow demon, but it still played out alright. I just think the feesh has good fantasy potential. I also think we are fast approaching on having too little info on the Anon and how he feels about almost anything. The anon can be used to show how (you); a not so spectacular human bystander would feel about seeing these situations play out. I also wanted to say I think Botan talks in a way that sounds a little too stiff for her, but after the info presented in the chapter, it kinda tracks. Overall, you got some interesting ideas for magic and stuff, but maybe let yourself cook, no pun intended, for a little longer. Fantasy stories really desire that flowery presentation to get you into things that aren't possible in our world. Keep it up and let's see where this story of yours goes.

>> No.51713206

>>51711684
Thank you that means a lot!

>> No.51713243

>>51707039
Because I like to reach through the doorframe behind her sometimes.

>> No.51714832

>>51712091
>Feesh could've been a siren

shit, I am angry I didn't think about that before, that would've actually been a great idea.

>having too little info on the Anon and how he feels about almost anything.

That's a good point that I'll be sure to rectify.

As for the rest, I'll be sure to slow down a bit. I always push the gas pedal a bit too much. Overall I'm glad you enjoyed it though. Thank you for sticking it with it.

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>>51714832
If it makes you feel better, you inspired me with the idea. At the very least I'll play with it somewhat. I've been trying to think of a way to include the degenerate feesh in a fun way. And thank you for sticking with it as well. You'll find your cruising speed with practice, don't worry.

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>>51551053
You befriend Fubuki and before long find yourself in a relationship with her. The next step is meeting her family, which consists only of her mother and her younger sister, in the Youkai world. However, when you get to her home and meet the two, you find it to be a lot harder to continue being faithful to your girlfriend Fubuki, as both her mother and younger sister don't hesitate to get in all kinds of strange situations when Fubuki turns her back.

>> No.51717604

>>51717581
All kinds of strange situations... with you.

>> No.51718591 [DELETED] 

>>51704756
The janny is overcorrecting and now every question needs to be framed in the context of a chuuba fic.

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>>51671570
>What fics are you waiting for anon?
One with a war criminal Botan general with her own private military company with the name "SSRB"

I actually wrote one fanfic about that in a national news style format
I based it off of the the current Sudans civil war but with anime girls, for shitpost

>> No.51719510 [DELETED] 

>>51718591
I reckon he's just buttmad we're sick of him playing fast and loose with the rules and is now doubling down.

>> No.51719527

>>51692653
3000 today but not on a chuuba fic

>> No.51720104

>>51711269
For feedback, honestly your prompt wrangling and prose is good enough that pretty much what's going to make or break the full episode is going to be in whether you can find enough amateur VAs willing to get their voice filtered via AI to fit the character since pure TTS really isn't going to work. Hope you can find those for the final cut because everything else is good enough that it'd be a shame for bad voice work to fuck it up.

>> No.51722289
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So I did a thing
no actually I used 2 dollars on a website to do a thing plus a bit of editing on my side. but it looks nice overall
Unfortunately I need something that looks like something out of the 90s. So I'll have to make stuff like this the old fashioned way
Anyway, this is the end of the thinly-veiled shillpost for my fic. Back to regular programming. I'm still working on Operation: Nimrod

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>>51722289
Wasn't sure what I was supposed to be looking at, but then the clear tell came. Nice job anon. You got me good with that. Keep strong comrade,

>> No.51725742

>>51720104
Thanks for the feedback. I've decided not to do any voices after all. It's extra work and it may make it worse if not done well so just gonna keep it to subs.

>> No.51726462

>>51711269
Yooooo, it's beautiful, man. Lighthearted yet emotionally compelling enough to feel for Gura. Can't wait for the full episode! I watched the first one you did and I like it a lot too. Also, yeah, it's better to not go with voices - it feels like I'm watching a static novel and it adds to the immersion.

>> No.51726790

>>51725742
Honestly, I could see it going either way with the voices. Though personally, I would err on the side of not having them, not just because they slow down the project, but because if somebody doesn't prefer them, they would have to mute the video and wouldn't get the musical accompaniment.
>may make it worse if not done well
This would be another concern. Voicefags tend to be picky.

You're broaching an entirely new medium of art, and I wish you well

>> No.51726842

>>51722289
This is why people say autism is a superpower.

>> No.51728211

>four stories
A good start for the week.

>> No.51728630

>>51711269
Gave it a watch and it’s really not my thing. Good art though.

>> No.51729106

>>51726462
Glad you enjoyed it! Next clip releasing tomorrow on Gura's birthday. It would've been nice to have released the full episode by then but I'm still working on the last few scenes.

>> No.51729902

>>51725742
Honestly, good call. Tech just isn't there yet to have this be fully be done by one guy unless you were already a VA that could voice it well enough (well barring elevenlabs use). Still it probably wouldn't hurt to read out your lines and edit them as if it was being VA'd there was still some rough bits there that could use another editing passthrough.

>> No.51729990

>>51708461
I'm liking the dual chapters, but I'm not liking how short they are. Feels like you could have combined both of them to get one decent-sized chapter instead.

>> No.51730487

>>51722289
I wish I had a quarter of your autism. A fucking drop of it even.
Your shit is next level.

>> No.51730811

>>51722289
At least you’re dedicated to your craft.

>> No.51731094

>>51729990
Nothing wrong with short chapters, though I do believe chapter 4 should have its separate link.

>> No.51731424

>>51728211
readbros eating damn good so far.

>> No.51731499

>>51722289
This is still the funniest goddamn thing I hope if you ever do more with this concept you do it in the style of alternate history webfiction and have asides from other historical sources like this that continue treating the events seriously like this.

>> No.51732243

>>51722289
I’m impressed with your dedication

>> No.51732726

>>51584656
>Chapter 32:
What posses you to write 32 chapters, anon? Seems a bit excessive don't you think?

>> No.51733226

>>51722289
You got your money's worth that's for sure. I have to ask, but where did you even find such a website in the first place?

>> No.51733597

>>51732726
HJAnon is peak chadwriter. Does for himself, shares it with us because he can.

>> No.51733766

>>51733597
Doesn’t even ask for comments or rewards. Just likes to write and wants to share that.

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>>51733226
https://toolkit.epentibi.com/
It's a paid thing and processing the video takes a while depending on the volume of users. He basically has a bot that ties elevenlabs, wav2lip, and video editing together. It's still in beta, so mileage may vary.

To everyone else who gave me (You)s, thank you all very much for the support. As always, I hope to meet your expectations when my fic comes out in full. I will also edit at least one or two more of these, though as I said I need something that looks like it's from the 90s, so I'll have to cobble together a video manually and it may take a while so I'll just finish the fic first

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>>51732726
>What posses you to write 32 chapters, anon?
Hags. Hags do. Overcoming adversity and the odds with the power of love and friendship? Yup, that's possessing me down to the bone to write. I love this hobby, and I love the story that I'm still telling. It's just the most fun I've had with something in a long time, and it feels like it's just a part of my soul that I'm finally given form and just letting live out there. Which by the way, thanks to anyone who has decided to join the crazy ride I've been sharing. I appreciate that you tag along and find some enjoyment out of these hags' and their slightly younger companions' adventures.

>> No.51735374

>>51735115
>Which by the way, thanks to anyone who has decided to join the crazy ride I've been sharing. I appreciate that you tag along and find some enjoyment out of these hags' and their slightly younger companions' adventures.
Sorry for not commenting on your updates.

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>>51735374
That's not something you need to apologize for. Comments are nice, sure, but no need to force them since they're not required. It's more than enough to know that people are out there reading at whatever pace is comfortable for them, and probably enjoying the same scenes I enjoyed writing.
I'm still extra proud of the oasis pool lion pack bonding complete with tongue bath scene I came up with. I'm already dangerously attached to these hags already and I'm gonna make the fucking most of it.

>> No.51736918

Do you guys ever write in a certain style for long enough that you start to think in that style?

>> No.51737013

>>51736918
I started even talking in that style ages ago. On the bright side, people enjoy talking to me because the way I speak is now engaging.

>> No.51737396

>>51735115
>>51736190
You seem to like writing a lot, I might come around and read your story on Friday.

>> No.51737579

>>51736918
Used to be me.
I used to try to carry my narrative voice with me. Then it started to dull out.

>> No.51737765

>>51708461
damn i haven't even read the previous two and now you've done another two? Bless you anon

>> No.51738242

>>51736918
Not with fiction but if it counts I’ve been doing code for so long I instinctively start counting at 0 now.

>> No.51738510

>>51736918
When I was working on a first person fic at the same time as a second person one, I would sometimes write in the wrong perspective.

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>> No.51739735

>>51731424
Yeah we are.

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>>51739668
damn horny brat

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>>51739668
To be fair, Cheese is pretty fucking awesome.

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>>51739668
>Laplus praises your lifting form by saying it's lewd
Damn brat.

>> No.51740750

>>51739668
Why are they like this?

>> No.51740940

I've been in the mood to read fanfics lately.
Are there any deranged, weird, or just plain entertainingly bad stories in the archive you guys would recommend?

>> No.51740988

>>51740940
talk to the wedgie guy or the bug guy

>> No.51741141

>>51740940
Ignore the shill >>51740988 and just type horror or gore on the search bar on the archive. Should be a good start for you.

>> No.51742269

>>51728211
You love to see it.

>> No.51742270

>>51736190
If more writers were like you, Anon.

>> No.51742285

>>51734094
Hope you finish the chapter soon. I’ll be waiting in anticipation.

>> No.51742535

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