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I miss Lulu bros...

>>10772570
To that anon requesting the Uruka gets buff prompt. It's a bit long but what the hell, I don't see much other Phase Connect stuff. Hopefully the story didn't feel too ham-fisted in between the flexing.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRV0iDRl907-sIlI5PvPjxEcUqS1gmG3NAqSox2wkAo1sK-RWtzBmm7uSuaha0cAfebxnM2-zLoi_5-/pub

Tags: FMG, Action, Comedy (?), Drama

I wrote this story back before i discovered /wg/
It was originally published to ao3 but I figured I might as well share it here too

this was the first piece of creative writing id done in years so its defiantly not perfect but I hope someone can still enjoy it.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vRh92LEVm6CA7R39Pmh_ef3LM_k7H_fSKLd8SdhAdRaETQ1enxH44zcTpsUDPQcXcfof1-L0f1ZFgSF/pub

>>10773573
ah shit forgot
>>10772570

>>10773573
Did you ever follow up on this? The story's a bit too short to judge, though it has an interesting premise

>>10773573
Was worried at first but that was a fun, short little read.

>>10772593
I'm looking to sharpen my writing skills. Gimme a difficult prompt.

>>10778404
The death of your oshi through an accident (You) caused but nobody knows that.

>>10778548
Who should the oshi be? Should she even have a name or just be called "your oshi" for the whole story?

>>10778653
Yours specifically, whoever she may be.

>>10778404
Check the prompt archive first for anything you might be interested in.

>>10778548
You and Ina are both piloting a mobile suit and you have to destroy an asteroid before it collides with the lunar colony.

>have an elaborate, complex smut plot and wrote half while horny with the idea
>now numb to it and don't have the correct mental juices to accurately translate my imagination with any justice

>>10778718
>>10778957
Ain't got an oshi but I'm fine with using Ina. The story I have so far begins with you inadvertently killing Ina after concocting a plan to meet her in person. You refuse to tell your friends/family about what happened, and the guilt eats you up inside more and more with each passing day. Eventually, the guilt is so great you decide to tell someone you trust- just as detective Watson declares Ina's death a homicide.

>>10779031
Damn, my problem is just
>Try to write smut
>Suck at it

>>10779419
I can go one step further than that.
>try to write
>brain insists i vacuum my room, do the dishes, take the garbage out and generally not write

>>10778404
Explain what a vtuber is 'in-universe' when it comes to the fanfiction/works that depict them looking the same as they do on stream.
Hard mode, do it while making it not seem like exposition.

>>10772570
https://rentry.co/gfspa

Hello again, friends! It's 2 AM(e) and I'm back with another chapter of Detective Watson and Inspector Anon. Chapter five now, and I think we're getting into the story? I agonized for a long while over what I wanted to do with the story and how I wanted to take it, but in the end I decided on this.

All criticism is greatly appreciated, even stylistic differences! If you would've done it differently, let me know how! I just hope that I haven't ruined everything by going down the route I currently am.

>>10778404
Ding dong ding dong
A pink hair woman in black robe holding a huge scythe ringing the bell on her hand
She say: "Congratulation, you're the 1.000.000 who passed away in my area. As a bonus, I can give you a wish"
As she introduce herself as Mori Calliope the apprentice reaper, you look at your lifeless body hanging nearby.
Then you look bạck at her, still trying to cheer you up

>>10772593
UMISEA expansion
>Aqua tries spearfishing with a sharp wooden stick
>She saw a large fish swimming under the large rock
>Aqua imagine a jumping down stab attack like in Sekiro would work, so she jumps
>But it's Gura is swimming below and she point her trident upward mid jump
>Aqua spooked, dropping face-first in the seawater
>Marin saw that scene and ask Ina for help
>Ina asks Marin if she drop a golden Aqua or a silver Aqua, while holding a yellow onion and a white onion on each tentacle
>Marin tells the truth and she is rewarded with a big purple onion
>Marin proceed to talk to that onion like Aqua then the real wet Aqua screaming at her from behind

>>10780269
oooooooooooooo I'm interested in how Ina ties into this story, and I think the city part with the pencils was pretty cool. These are still a bit short though in my opinion, and I think you should remove the weekly chapter thing and instead take some time to write a lot then release it instead of the small parts like you're doing now. But that's just my opinion because I like reading longer works.

>>10773397
Original requestor here. Holy fuck that was amazing. I can tell a lot of effort went into the characters, and the flow of the story itself. Did you, by any chance, get any inspiration from the recent "morning" stream Lia and Uruka did recently?

Love so many things about the story, from the effort put into the various different types of strength feats, to the actual repercussions, and the sweet and happy ending. There was drama, there was tension, there was muscle. I fucking loved it. You even put effort into the little things, from getting Tenma's speech patterns down, to Lia's having a "green aura" (a.k.a. her 144p greenscreen live2d crapout) at one point.

Just one tiny nitpick. I noticed at some point, you started calling Lia "Ria". May just be a typo.

I honestly did not expect this to get filled. Thank you very much anon.

>>10781867
NTA but as soon as I saw the synopsis my first thought was something like "I hope it makes that one guy happy"
Glad to see that was the case

>>10778404
Try a comfy fic with Gen 0 (AZKi, Sora, Roboco, Miko, Suisei). I notice they don't get a lot of love as a group, but from a fiction standpoint if might be interesting to see their personalities bounce off of each other. Maybe they're all at AZKi's studio for a recording session and sleepover?

>>10780269
Out of all of the weekly chapters that you've made. This is the best that's come out yet, the writing is super fucking compelling, even if at this point the other girls from Myth are still just plot devices that don't actually feel like characters this arc is going great and I eagerly await your next chapter. Keep up this quality anon, this is great chapter.

>>10781867
Glad to hear you liked it! I hadn't watched the "morning" stream yet (I think it was 4 or something where I was) when I was writing it, so it was more from clips and a few streams before that.

The "Ria" thing was just me brainfarting and trying to romanise an already English name. I'll admit watching their streams has gotten me interested, so you've definitely succeeded spreading the world about your girls. Particularly Tenma almost solely for her speaking mannerisms and Pippa since she seems sweet. Again, happy you enjoyed it. Had a blast writing it as well.

>>10773573
I like the darker tone of the story, I prefer serious ones to fluffy ones, but the concept just doesn't make that much sense though. Ame shoots Gura and then almost Immediately decides that's a mistake and wants to undo it, not that it's unbelievable, there's just not a lot of buildup to that. You could've definitely made this longer and explored what brought Ame to this point. I think it's is more of a prompt than a chapter one, there's too much things not established for me to get engaged.

>Want to set up audio for something
>Not sure if I care about clashing styles or if I should try to make everything sort of similar sounding relating to the theme
>From there there's the issue of trying to find stuff that actually fucking works
It shouldn't be this difficult but I'm retarded
I just want to make it a bit more immersive

>>10782654
Are you adding audio to your stories? Or are you making a soundpost? Either way some sound could be pretty cool for this thread.

>>10782964
The former. I've been playing with the idea for ages but never want to commit to it due to lack of a good selection of tracks. I have approximately two like I can find a fit for before there's not a great amount I feel like I can use

>>10783039
Nice, this sounds interesting.

>>10783039
I don't know if this is a similar idea to yours but I've been wondering about linking a playlist to my story during a karaoke scene. Sounds like you're going for something beyond that, which sounds pretty cool. Good luck with that.

>>10783039
Forgive me for asking, but isn't this just putting in a hyperlink where appropriate on like a good line for the music you want/youtube link?
I've seen this done on stories before for stories posted on forums before and that's usually how it's done unless you're trying to do something crazy, cause I'm pretty sure you can just do it like that.

>>10783681
Yeah, that's exactly how it goes. I'm just picky about dumb shit that doesn't matter. I have two tracks which sound fairly believably samey for the setting but trying to find others that match that style individually are hard. It doesn't help that half the shit I search directs me to some 3 hour DnD Playlist that's 80% Witcher 3 music or some such rather than something interesting.

>>10783821
Anon you're looking for background music, you literally just need it to give some atmosphere and set the mood. You don't need some perfect fitting bgm.

The word of the thread is...

Feckless adj. lacking initiative or strength of character; irresponsible.

Who would win in a fight? The Anon in Holofantasy or the Anon in Holocalypse?

>>10784612
Depends on whether or not Holocalypseanon has a gun.

>>10784612
It depends. For holofan, are we talking the end of part 5 anon where he has all the overpowered items from Fubuki and Ina, or the anon from an earlier chapter? And what does the holocalypse anon have, just his machete and Glock or does he have the entire armoury of Albatross at his disposal? Or are they both just naked in an arena, no magic/weapons? I think holofan anon would stomp holocalypse anon in most scenarios but not all.

>>10784612
Depends on gear given. Magical shield plus ability to quickly relocate via grappling - as well as disarming - is a pretty significant deal though

>>10784612
if the holocalypse writer had a stat sheet for his anon, we could probably talk AA into rolling for it

>>10784957
I mean, I wouldn’t mind writing a stat sheet (even though I’ve never done so before) but I don’t want to pressure AA to roll for it if he can’t be bothered or doesn’t want to.
This is all an interesting idea though, but I think realistically my anon would get crushed. Holofan anon can make clones of himself and overall just has a lot of magic items at his disposal, while holoca anon is just some guy who’s good in a fight and can use guns.

>>10786690
yeah, poor wording on my part. just seemed like a fun thought

>>10772593
I've already posted it before and someone expressed interest in it already, but nothing set in stone. So in case that anon forgot or someone else wants to give it a go:

(You) died young from an exceptionally severe pneumonia (or tuberculosis, up to author) and go to the afterlife. Or at least, that was the plan. Fortunately, the Grim Reaper's apprentice offers you a deal: She would give you a new body in exchange of becoming her assistant for her side gig as a live streamer.

After your reincarnation, you decide to hold a journal to chronicle your thoughts and experiences about this new occupation, the rather colorful coworkers you now interact with, as well as your growing feelings for the pink-haired beauty who gave you a new lease on life.

>>10773397
Not OR, but I had a good laugh. Thanks, anon.

>>10780269
Awwww yeah, now we're getting somewhere interesting. I like the way you showcased the panic of Anon throughout the chase by using metaphors and vivid descriptions to hammer down the point,. Like the other Anon said, this is the best that's come out yet and I implore anyone who was put off by the first chapter to keep reading as things are finally going somewhere. I eagerly await the next chapter

Hi I'm new, are there any good Fauna or Botan texts?

>>10787441
Nah, it definitely was a fun thought. If AA is on board then I think it would be cool to try writing a stat sheet or something.

>>10781867
I'm glad to see your story finally getting made, Guess all that wait finally paid off, huh ?

>>10788079
Don't think there's any on Fauna as far as I can think of, but there are a few for Botan. The Bully girls four parter is pretty good for NSFW. Holocalypse is also pretty great but Botan is only one of many chuubas in that fic but it's still fantastic.

Also the fic "Just you wait" is now unavailable so AA should probably update that.

>>10773573
I kind of have to agree with the other anon here, this feels more like a weirdly disjointed prompt rather than setup towards a story. Especially since Ame having to kill Gura feels completely pointless if she knew already knows what was going to happen.
Also if you've already posted it to AO3 there's no reason to republish it via Google docs, there isn't actually any stigma or taboo regarding AO3 here.

>>10776026
>>10782568
Yeah that’s the feed back I got when I first shared it, I honestly didn’t know where I was gonna take this when I started so that probably explains some of it but it could certainly do with expansion/ elaboration.
Maybe if I ever wrangle up the time I’ll try doing a rewrite to better fill things in.

Thanks for giving it a read and the feed back!

Archive Anon, when you see this could you do me a favor and change the links to For We May Or Might Never and In The Jungle to these links? I put them in controlc before I knew about publishing and I prefer them like this.

For We May Or Might Never:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQRf3PAijqY-nsp2yTpgBhfY9FcBORwXWCJ653epr7au9vhazTQgG5CCdW3jJnQbvDnYQxAbqyuAMqN/pub

In The Jungle:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTEdLOiQrIZ3DCgwTPwPnAa68uq-6GnUDotOw4DM-ZUeQ7VnoVp_WAT61pZv0i2c737j1WuXD6hTpZ5/pub

>>10789408
I actually wiped my ao3 account a few months ago so that’s why I shared the doc.

>>10789632
Otherwise yeah i definitely would have just shared that link, the less versions floating around the easier it is to control

>>10788626
Just finished reading the Botans, good shit. I hope my EN oshi gets some good stuff too.

>>10789632
Why'd ya wipe it?

>>10791158
Eh variety of reasons. Biggest one was that I wanted some separation between what I write and my online persona.
If someone asks if I wrote a piece I’ll tell the truth but I don’t want everything immediately linked to me ya know?

Plus it only had like 3 stories on it one of which I shared here a while back so no great loss.

I still use the account for stuff like following series/ authors, just don’t think I’ll ever publish to it.

Hope that was coherent, sorry if it wasn’t

>>10772593
i want to fuck aqua

>>10792235
NTA but I kind of relate. Ever since I came here I've been more conscious as to how much information of myself is out there and what links what together. I changed my username in some sites, scrubbed info saying "I made this" if it related me to something else. For example my Rule34 page had some really bad drawings from when I first learned how to draw digitally and it looked like a child's work. Now I don't want someone searching my name looking for my art on my other pages and getting a link to those awful things so I changed up the name. I also regularly go through my comments on other sites to see if I'm oversharing information that could lead to me (including sharing my stories from here in other platforms) . I search my name on Google every month or two to find out just how much info one could dig up on me if they learned my name. I erase my pictures and private my accounts as well as block any mention of my name from other people's accounts. So I kind of relate.

>>10792850
Funny how Aqua has one of the most sexiest bodies in hololive but she's too autistic to make use of it.

>>10793933
indeed. i find that social retardation incredibly sexy though

>>10793835
I share the same exact name as a gay porn star so i try not to google myself
he is pretty good looking though

>>10794182
>he is pretty good looking though
Anon...that's gay. You're a prancing la-la homo man.

>>10779480
same for me, but drawing

>>10792850
Aqua is made to be gaslighted into having rough, babymaking sex. Eventually ending up with her getting mating pressed into the bed with your weight crushing her because she's so short and light.

>>10793933
>>10793976
You never realize how fucking awesome sex with a retard is until you have it. They literally just stand there absent minded giggling and squirming while you pound away. Hottest thing that ever happened to me was this one chick with down's that let me rough facefuck her and didn't fight back. Good shit, recommend it.

if the author of "Fuck is this shit?" is still around
nice title, bro

also i came H A R D

>>10794827
got a hearty chuckle out of me

when you got her to strip, did you tell her that her clothes were haunted? by casper, by any chance?

Annual request for snugly sex with Juniper

To the anon who wrote "what da dog doin", I'd like to write a more detailed/expanded version of it since the basis of the story really pulled me in(and I'm a bit of a sucker for fluff). If you would allow it, I'd write it with a more complete ending, and maybe even make it into a mini-series.

>>10795128
>that pic
Was about to take a nap but I'm wide awake now. Thanks for the nightmare fuel Anon.

>>10795253
Go for it, friendo! I originally wrote that little blurb to tug at my friend’s heartstrings, and I think he’d be delighted to know that there’s someone that wants to write about his oshi in a fluffy setting like that

>>10795451
Ah, that's nice to hear. I'll do what I can, but the only other thing I'll request is to just give me some time to write it out.

Don't die on me now.

>>10797610
I count 10 phones. That's 10 boyfriends, and at least 10 dicks that Ayame is getting railed by. Ayame gangbang fic when?

>>10794323
I cannot deny this

I had something really important to say to this place but I forgot...

>>10800846
you mean that our deal owl mumei is a masturbation addicted pervert?

>>10780269
Holy shit, the suspense is killing me. Nice job.

>>10788270
Go ahead I just woke up and that sounds funny
HF sheets don't exactly have things to worry about like stats, just fear attributes and maybe a special ability or two innate to them

>>10804315
Gear not fear what the fuck
>>10789575
Yeah ill get around to it
Pekora without the ears is really cute still, I like the hairstyle change

>>10788079
Don't worry, fellow deerfag. One day Mommy will have a fic.

>>10804648
Thank you
Yeah, she's still cute, but like Botan's new outfit with the short hair she's looks an entirely different character to me.

Did that nursing catto sequel ever get finished?

>>10772593
One of the Holohags trying to understand crypto and NFT's but failing to do so.

>>10805026
>f-fungible? Anon, I don't even know what that means!
>OUR ENTIRE LIFE SAVINGS!?

>>10805026
Not Buttons. The cougar's technological adept seems like it would translate well into understand crypto.

>>10805377
I swear to Christ I proofread this.

>>10805458
You got your point across so cares? But extending your thing, who is the most tech illiterate holohag?

>>10805681
Probably Mio.

>>10805377
I didn't get it.
>>10805458
Also how did my white skin Polka edit of that black Polka art get so popular? I've seen it everywhere in /vt/ recently

>>10807835
It's genuinely cute. As far as I know, I'm the only a few people including (me) use it. I just happen to be one of the biggest deerfags in vt.

As for my actual post, Buttons is an intentional misspelling of Botan and cougar is a pun because raion-obasan.

>>10808737
I swear I'm not an ESL. I just type faster than I think.

>>10772570
https://archiveofourown.org/works/33456187/chapters/84105946
The completion of this chapter involved deleting the word "now" about 20 times.

>>10808737
Holy mother of ESL please write a story it would be great material for my possible future Haachama peppeloni speak style story.

>>10804315
Alright, I’ll give it a shot. Do I have to stick to 4, 6, 8, 10, 12, 20 dice or can I make up random die numbers?

>>10810539
I normally go with the normal dice, I don't get that wacky with it. Could always make it roll more than once ie 2D6 or some such, or roll above/below a certain number on something like a d100

>>10808923
Thanks writeanon, smut really is delicious after a good buildup. Do you have something you want to write next?

>>10811711
It's not done yet.

>>10810539
For reference, this is the most recent revision of what HF Anon looks like, taken from the header of the next chapters in progress I fully expect a gun to drain mana very quickly.
https://pastebin.com/KfgEdYsd

>>10811754
Nice, looking forward to it

>>10773397
>>10781867
>>10781906
>>10782199


So Uruka is playing Westward right now and apparently Sakana sent her a copy of the Uruka Buff story. She hasn't finished it yet, but she is aware it exists and is mulling over reading it on stream. Stream is still ongoing, timestamped links later maybe.

Sakana is not only /here/, he is in this thread.

Hi Kevin.

>>10812219
>Another chuuba reading a story on stream

>>10812219
Good Lord not again, kek.

>>10812219
"I kind of want to read it. Should I dedicate a stream to that? I kind of want to read it."

Hey holocucks, how many of your oshiis have read your fanfics on stream?

>>10812457
I'd probably kill myself if my oshi read my fic about her on stream.

>>10812457
zero and thank fucking god for that

>>10812219
Is this the Final Yab?

>>10812457
I'm happy that the holos don't read stuff from here.

>>10812219
oh god it's happening again

>>10812219
If anything it looks like she didn't hate it. She was not disgusted by it. And we know because later in that stream we heard what disgusted Uruka sounds like when she googled what the My Little Pony Jar was.

>>10812870
How does she not know about the jar? Is she a native english speaker?

>>10812961
Anon please... take a moment to imagine yourself in a normal person's shoes. No ordinary person, Vtuber or not, would know about some jar filled with rotten old cum with a figurine of My little pony inside it that was posted in an image board for pedophiles, psychopaths and retards. It's more niche than you'd think. The average person doesn't even know about 2 girls 1 cup, the cum jar is even more obscure. Your standard life is not the world's standard

>>10813233
The cum jar makes sense for being niche but there's no way that 2 girls 1 cup is that obscure.

>>10812219
Lurking chuubas... I don't know how to feel about this.

>>10813294
nta but 2g1c lived and died in like a couple years.
i can't remember the last time i heard 2g1c brought up
also had no fucking clue what the cum jar was until people started hooting about gura's 'chum jar'.

>>10813305
I mean, chuubas have lurked here since the board's inception; before that, even. This wouldn't be the first time a chuuba has heard of something about her being spawned from this place. It probably won't be the last. Luckily(?) most massive chuubas probably won't give a remote fuck about what's written here.

>>10813398
Guess I need to unironically touch grass then.

>>10813505
Yep, s'truth, but it hasn't even been 24 hours since that story was posted. It's not just lurking chuubas... it's ACTIVE lurkers, and at least one of them browses this little section of degeneracy

I could be replying to one right now, even

>>10813523
nah touching grass would make life less fun

>>10813664
oh shit

>>10813233
Bro if you don't watch Whang i don't even want to know you.

>>10808923
The women of the village seem oddly fine with their men fucking Mumei in front of everyone

>>10812219
She said she loves superhero stuff. She is literally a superhero in this story.

Please read it trash bear. The fanart that comes from it would be fucking great.

>>10813741
Bro if you never listened to Ctrl Ult delete before he became Beau Jordan you shouldn't even look in my general direction.

>>10813741
Who?

>>10813935
He's a guy who looks into unsolved internet mysteries then usually he and his fans solve them in minutes. The Cursed Farm Game, the boy who became a gas pump, the Tapeworld monster, Kitty Shack etc. Mostly old mysteries, but with a fresh set of eyes on them, they get solved more often than not.

Still hasn't found Saki Sanobashi yet.

He interviewed the cum jar guy iirc.

>>10812219
Who is this Sakana of who you speak?

>>10814134
Phase Connect CEO a.k.a. Kevin a.k.a. MAYBE Uruka's brother or groomer, depending on your flavor of rrat.

>>10814224
>brother or groomer
Why not both?

>>10814224
What if he's the brother and groomer of Uruka?

>>10814224
Sick. Thanks for the information. I guess it'd make sense for a smaller company to probably have some sort of interest in what goes on here on /vt/? Kind of wild either way. Hope Uruka enjoys the story at least. The Temako one was very well received from what I recall, even if the author went through every stage of grief back to back.

>>10812219
When roughly was this? I only tuned in a while before she started reading superchats. Honestly the idea she is even aware of it is great.

>>10814337
Well, Pippa's entire gimmick is that she's /here/.

>>10814734
https://youtu.be/rvGZhJrWCW8

23:40 in

>>10813825
I don't think they're fine with it so much as there's nothing they can really do about it. What can they do, push them off the stage?

>>10814927
Cheers. I'm not gonna expect anything but if she does end up reading on stream it'll probably be the biggest (You) I've gotten.

>>10811840
I dunno, should I make his stats balanced so that he can put up a good fight, or more realistic? Because as I said I think HF anon would crush HC anon in reality.

>>10815460
Go balanced. Current ideas for this is a Dream Arena where two heroes from different worlds are brought to compete for otherworldly spectators; I imagine they'd try to make things more even between the two.

I think the better question is if the menhera wrangler could stand a chance

I think the better question is if the Matsuri's baby carrot anon could stand a chance

>>10816110
Menhera Wrangler anon would take a bullet to the face and be down in an instant. He usually only survives throughout the series due to intervention from other characters.

But would they be able to defeat corrupted-Nene?

>>10815649
Yeah, makes sense. I also didn't realise that because of his new coat Holofan Anon now has 10 DMG resistance, plus the adamantine badge which has a 40% chance to negate 5 DMG. I'll probably need to use dice that are over 20 to actually deal some damage, especially because he also has healing magic in his sword and the amulet of embers.

>>10816110
>>10816270
I think he might last longer with the aid of the fucking fox magic soul link thing fubuki put on him but that's pretty much it without pulling on theoreticals and extrapolating.

>>10816454
I imagined every shot dealing 20 at least with a burst option and a high skill check to naturally dodge alongside the inability to parry. Lot of cover around the arena since I don't think HP Anon can win a straight up fight if HF Anon can just immediately reach out and disarm him via grapple.

>>10816454
considering HC Anon's assassin training, I imagine he'd be good at targeting a person's weak points. which could translate into each hit having a chance to ignore armor/damage resistance or something like that

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTaA5_38W_xpQkfkz14bJie8HnLlqGcTNj9y8Uw3fS1N2w8MiOCe6WPJCZM4HBkPnGRCOyqQJdPWv7U/pub

Thoughts? Too overpowered/underpowered? Anything you think I should add or remove?

>>10816110
he'll happily take a bullet/blade to the chest and tell the other two to be proud of how far they've come.

>a highly-trained supersoldier
>a squire with more magic bullshit than God
>a guy trained specifically to wrangle batshit idols
>meanwhile Cover High anon is just a regular-ass high school student
Maybe he could challenge them to a game of UNO or something.

>>10818190
if anime tells me anything it's that high school students are the most powerful force in the universe

>>10818190
nah I know that nigga got some super powers or some shit

>>10817704
That rifle is absolutely going to fuck him up if he can't narrowly avoid being grazed unless it becomes a cover battle

>>10818190
>Transfer student suggested they play the game, is winning every round.
>Wrangler is just happy that he gets to hang out with some people.
>Four didn’t play the first game, but reluctantly joins for the second one because he has nothing better to do. Everyone has to teach him the rules.
>Anon is the most excited about it and wears an innocent smile while trying to have fun.

>>10818264
Only "power" I can think of is that his Perception stat is probably through the roof from having to deal with all of Pekora's traps.

>>10818580
Yeah, I tried to balance it out by giving him no reloads, a chance to miss and allowing bullets to be blocked. D30 damage is probably too much though, even if HF anon has a lot of damage resistance.

>>10818925
High perception and contacts. His net is rather extensive.
>>10818958
I read this right out of the shower and thought it ignored armor. If every individual round is subject to damage resistance that's not too rough, but if it's a batch (IE, a roll I just did came up as 17, 22, 24, 9, and 9) then it could be a hard fucking hit. In that example it'd be 77-10, potentially 15, out of a total HP pool of 75 that only has a chance to refresh even slightly if he can somehow directly deal damage. If it's individual, though, that'd still absolutely fucking hurt, but it may be a bit more survivable. It'd just be a matter of baiting shots and hoping to God that grappling between spots would be enough to avoid getting hit.

>>10819205
Ah, yeah I was thinking individual. So it would be more like 17 - 10, 22 - 10, etc.

>>10819358
Alright, not too bad. Last question: If I were to draft up a brief introductory section, would you be willing to provide some HP Anon dialog for the occasion before I get down to brass tacks and begin the several dozen rolls to figure out who wins?

Now I'm thinking about what everyone's roles would be if they were all partied up together.

>HF Anon: Main tank, can soak up a ton of punishment and deal decent melee damage in return
>HC Anon: Ranged DPS, can do melee in a pinch but really shines when he's got his guns
>MW Anon: Squishy melee DPS (monk?). Probably has the highest CHA of the group, so is usually the one in charge of diplomacy/negotiations
>Transfer Student: Thief, has no combat skills but excels at detecting/disarming traps

>>10819613
Hell yeah man, a collaboration story? That sounds fun as fuck, I was under the impression that you'd just do the rolls and tell us who won.
You definitely don't need to spend too much time on it if you make it a proper story though, I don't think it's worth that much effort; especially when it's technically just two OCs going at it.

>>10819806
Berserker Hag Anon when?

>>10819806
You forgot
>HF Anon: Highest luck stat of the group by far

>>10820290
Well yeah, that goes without saying.

>>10819836
It's just a quick couple of page intro to introduce the combatants and give them a reason to kick the shit out of each other, that's all. I have a brief snippet where the "commentator" for the fights gives a brief introduction of who the contestants are, and I feel like it'd be most respectful to let you write your own. This is what I got so far; if you want to make a brief section to go in after this, I'd be appreciative. After that, I can go ahead and get started on the fight itself.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/11HvcmCXecQwJe9Z6fYXeMSMdnWc7N5JLJZbHifDbugM/edit?usp=sharing

if you're going to have two anons duke it out, i vote for narrative purposes you name them thing 1 and thing 2

>>10821078
Do you want me to send you my email address or something through your email? I feel like there are some anons here who might try turning this into smut or some shit and all the suggestions might become a bit confusing.

>>10821260
It's just comments as far as I can tell (I hope to God I set that up right), but yeah, sure, go ahead. Email is the same as it always is. I'll happily plug it in where appropriate.

>>10808936
A: I'm not ESL. I am white and was born in Virginia in a middle class neighborhood. I just posted without doing any proofreading.
B: I have zero aptitude for writing. Otherwise Fauna would have greentexts in the archive.

>>10808923
Nice to see that you're still working on this.

>>10821421
Truly the mind of a EN gen 2 fan at work then, your brain impediments will feel like the same thing as being an ESL desu.

>>10822119
My oshi is Botan. I just happen to like Fauna the best out of all the ENs.

>>10822261
I'd gotten this far, but fuck you I'm not finishing it now.

"Freude trinken alle Wesen an der Brusten der Natur. (Joy all beings drink from the breasts of Nature)" - Friedrich Schiller, as made popular by Ludwig van Beethoven

>be birder Anon on a birding trip in the Shenandoahs
>we haven't called it birdwatching in decades, go fuck yourselves

>>10772570
Short fun thing I wrote of Kiara and her cats. I want to write more hologirls and their pets. https://archiveofourown.org/works/34271953

>>10822415
>"Aw, that sounds sweet-"
>Those tags

>>10822415
> i apologize for any grammar mistakes
Least of what you should be apologising for. Disgusting.

When's the next one with Ame.

mfw reading about the great Anon collab makes me want to try to make Inspector Anon less of a blank self-insertable slate

>>10823242
Absolutely the worst. It'd be disgusting if you made Bubba mount Ame while she was setting up her Half-Life Alyx stuff on the floor.

>>10824029
I'd jack off to that

>>10824029
It would also make you a complete monster if you made bubba's knot keep the two of them locked together so ame has to start a stream with her dog buried deep inside here

>>10822415
>those tags
What the actual fuck is wrong with you ? I sincerely hope you don't own pets.

>>10780269
Glad to see the story picking up steam now! The part with a certain priestess inserted her in an interesting way and felt very surreal in all the right ways. Stylising text with the bold and italics also helps it read easily. The bit with Ame nursing you up was also pretty sweet.

Since you asked, there are some nitpicks. In "This exchange of words...opinion", the "in your opinion" bit feels a bit odd. Maybe "in your mind/head?"

In "The door shuts...east one", you could probably break up the "you bound down the east on" into another sentence, since it felt odd in the same sentence.

That said, all those were nitpicks. Don't want to tread over your writing style if that's what you intended. If it's also you below talking about making Inspector Anon less of a self-insert, there's definitely room for him to grow as he takes on the case. Looking forward to the next chapter!

>>10824352
Cry More Bitch Nigga. I for one am thankful we have anons catering to this god-tier fetish.

>>10824352
... why are there so many fucking faggots in this place? I can somewhat understand crying over a story (no I don't) but goddamn, complaining about tags of a common as fuck fetish as if it was new or impressive? Jesus grow some fucking balls kid, but you need to be 18 to use this site.

>>10824308
>Conditioning Bubba so that anytime Ame has to do anything more than crouch down she gets mounted
>When Smol Ame did her little leg lift on stream Bubba came sprinting in to begin licking

>>10818209
Given that VTubers are anime, that logic is completely sound. Cover High Anon wins, easily.

>>10825178
all the fics are actually about the power of friendship.

No really, look at them.

>>10824352
This isn't even the worse this thread has to offer, now, go back to where you came from.

>>10825226
You're right, but CH Anon still has the advantage, since the Power of Friendship favors the high school students for some fucking reason.

Stop fucking replying to bait, fucking hell.

>>10825304
But HF Anon is a apparently a shota, so it could go either way.

>>10825349
You're... right, actually.
Well, then I guess HF and CH Anons could be evenly matched, assuming what you said applies.

>>10825178
CH Anon doesn't actually have that many friends. There's Astel, Moona and Pekora(?), but the rest are acquaintances at best.

>>10825109
Doesn't Ame have two more pets? The more the merrier.

God whenever I remember how bad one of the stories I posted here was my whole body clenches with cringe. It's one of the most embarrassing things of my life, and I've been molested in public before so that's saying something. Why did I ever think it was a good idea to make it or post that?

Thread is going quick, which is a sure as hell sign that this thread is going to shit already.

>>10825888
Same but not to that degree. Whenever I jack off to the chuuba I wrote it about I remember the shame I felt after I posted it.

>>10816110

As the writeanon for MW, I would wholeheartedly say that he would not stand much of a chance. I'd say he can stand his ground for a while, but then get shot/stabbed/cut pretty quickly afterwards. In fact, he has never truly "won" any of his encounters, only survived them thanks to various external factors(looking at you Fubuki), and his mental fortitude. Why do you think he suffers the most from PTSD?

Also, he's dead in the main timeline, so are you really gonna make him remember all those hellish memories of his past life just for the sake of entertaining an extradimensional crowd?

In any case, seems like a fun collab project you guys are doing, and hope to see it soon. These ideas>>10819806>>10818771 also sound fun.

Man, good thing /wg/ is about writing about your chuubas and not random anons.

>>10825985
I know, I reported them all for being off topic already. Hopefully the jannies will do their job this time. We are entering OC territory again.

>>10826015
Didn't realize this happened before lol

>>10825985
>>10826015
Imagine being this boring

>>10825985
nigga shut up

>>10825888
I'm cringing just thinking I had to ability to write a story. Thank god I stopped.

>>10826870
Nah man don't be like that, you should write more and try to improve so that you can make some really good shit.

>>10825888
You have to be bad in order to be good.

>>10827211
>t. Pekora, seconds before ordering a napalm strike on civilian evacuees

>>10827805

>>10822415
When I saw those tags I knew it would be by someone from here
ame doko?

>>10826905
Three sentences in and you could already I tell I had no idea what I was doing. All style, zero substance. The archive will have to wait for a deerfic another day.

>>10828594
The only way you can get good at something is by being bad at it first- Lao Tzu

>>10828594
Believe me dude I felt the same with my first story, but I pushed on and when I posted it a few people actually liked it. Most people think their work is worse than it actually is. Trust me man, your writing ability is nowhere near as bad as you think it is.

>>10828594
Also, the majority of people here aren't Shakespeares but people fantasising about their oshi with whatever knowledge of creative writing they retained from school. They're hardly going to rip into your work, seeing another of them just trying to write about their chuuba. I remember people being quite forgiving with my first few fics before I found my rhythm.

And if you're worried about taking up a prompt, don't be. People who want to write deerfics will still go ahead and do it. If you're not someone who writes often, you might feel it being empty since you're drawing from other works you might have read and enjoyed, which is fine. Even if you start off with something like a greentext, you'll be able to get a feel for these things and write something you like.

At the end of the day, my advice is the same as every other anon's. Just start writing, incorporate helpful feedback and get a feel for it. It's fine if you feel like you don't have anything to post right now, but when you do, there'll be people wanting to read it.

>>10828594
Anon, if my basic-bitch prose can get praise, then so can yours.

>>10828594
You can't possibly write anything worse than what I have. I received about 4 (You)s, and from memory, every single one was criticism without praise.

>>10811754
HELL YEAH BABY I FUCKING LOVE BAD CIV

BEEN HOOKED ON THIS FOR AGES BECAUSE MY BRAIN ABSOLUTELY ROTS THINKING ABOUT THIS PERVERTED OWL

>captcha: V8ASS

>>10829323
What story was it?

>>10828594
Anon, you can write coherent sentences and given that you're posting here you can probably grasp how to write.
You're half way there already, keep writing and practicing and you can make it.

>>10772593
Yagoo provides some tickets to the animal girls at Hololive to a 'resort' to shake out some stress from streaming. Only, a devious anon has scammed him into sending his girls into a sex training facility. Abusing their primal instincts, you embed cues into their head to wet themselves at a moment's notice, go into heat or straight up take a spin on your rod. Like Pavlov's dogs, their lower mouths salivate at the beck and call of their master. How will the story go? Perhaps Mio is the last of the girls to enter this resort, just in time to see the degradation of her genmates into sex toys. Maybe Botan tries to escape the facility, only to be made your personal slave. OR MAYBE, Korone uses her dancing skills to pitch an idol contest in a bid for survival - impress you with a first row seat to the hololive concert your poor and bitter ass couldn't see years ago, or leave you to continue on your merry way and snuff out all hope of their escape. There's a story for everyone here!

(Maybe I'll someday pick this up if I finish what I have right now and figure out all the girls' character enough, but hey, go shoot.)

Who do you guys think is the best mother among the holos that is also hard to think of sexually? I was thinking Mio but she makes me horny, so maybe not her.

>>10829578
Knife-ears, though I appear to have selective memory, as I believed the feedback was worse than the archive shows it to have been.
It was still a terrible story nonetheless.

>>10831104
Watame

>>10831211
Anon if I'm remembering right that was the story that effectively served as an extended prompt for the flare amnesia fic, and while I guess you could take that in a bad way, you could also be proud because that fic spawned something greater.

>>10831104
Definitely Watame but she makes me horny in a " I want to be spoiled by her while having loving sex" way.

>>10825876
I like the way you think.
I'll for sure try my hand at a story on Amelia and her pets!

>>10831689
holy based

>>10772593
Requesting a fic about Gen One shortly after their debuts, before the whole covid thing, taking a trip to Las Vegas to bury Hitomi Chris' corpse in the Nevada desert and never speak of it ever again before having a fun romp through a casino and getting into wacky trouble!

>>10833194
God I wish I had the fucking comedic skills to do the black comedy from the spoilered part justice.

Keep that motivation going.

>>10831211
Really? I thought that one was pretty well received iirc

>>10833194
I could definitely see this as a Hachama origin story as she creates this American alter-ego to disassociate Akai Haato from the trauma of what she had to participate in

Sorry to anon from like two months ago that requested this to whom I gave a halfassed consideration about taking it up.
Sui-chan putting on a bit of weight in her backside and getting plowed in the ass:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vR2-aDslC22npO6yMyz67aiFTuj7kiVFHLWpuUhwPLyL2-a8w9imJtvZ_8LHSAGts91KFB4RtwJrUSR/pub

Never written vanilla sex as the main focus of a fic before, so let me know how well it worked out. It was a fun experiment nevertheless.

>>10834767
>>10772570

>>10834767
Magnificent.

>>10834767
God damn it. I only just got off 30 mins ago. Bless your soul, anon, words cannot describe how eager I am to read this. Will provide feedback later.

>>10834767
Allah's blessings upon you, anon. This is a true masterpiece in the field of literature. I intend to masturbate to this until my dick is purple.

>>10834767
Going to be honest the dialogue not really feeling like suisei kind of killed it for me. It just dropped me from the 'immersion' and getting into the mood for the smut.

>>10772570
For the few Anons who were interested, a brief collaborative work between the Holocalypse Anon and myself. A short cross over event ordained by the Gods...or something like them, at least. Featuring an actual plot so it's not just a throwaway fight.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTzN-w72VF-3RNYvQ6ePezBfZbPT9S9CQZX8IYfSA9L6FtMYbv-1VrTbREUaw8mD1E-60eFX8bdrm6J/pub
Spoilers:
This was very unplanned. It's funny. Dice are funny. It appears that hero based luck goes both ways.
>>10834767
I like the descriptions, the talk between the two of them, and the spanking. Really big fan of the spanking, along with breaking Suisei out of her quiet shell as she's embarrassed. I want Suisei to call me a chubby chasing pervert. Thank you for this. Has it really been two months? Jesus. Good on you for seeing it through.

>>10835196
That's why I almost gave up on it honestly. The direction I wanted the scenario to go was just so incongruous with her usual interactions with others that it was hard to find places to inject her personality, though I think it came through a lot stronger in the afterglow at the end. Eventually decided to just say the hell with it and force the insecurity at risk of the rising action feeling too OC-esque to get the damn thing finished and out of my head

>>10835605
Good on you for not being paralyzed by indecision.

>>10835547
I have the stupidest grin on my face right now

>>10834767
This was fucking amazing. Dirty talk and sex were hot as fuck, as well as the moments trying to comfort Suisei. Admittedly, some of the dialogue from her sounds off ( I guess she's supposed to be a bit more whiny and childish, dancing around the issue??), but I get how much of a pain trying to wonder if your chuuba actually says this or not is.

I think this is a typo? "reach and arm forward". Not much bad to say, maybe the spikes in verbosity like "coalescing its excess adipose" during the smut? Although I found it more amusing than anything, and was glad to be reminded of a few good words to use for myself. Props to you for following up with this two months after, I'm sure that anon and his buddy are pleased. Would love to see more if you decide on it!

>>10834767
>We didn’t give this hole much love today, did we?

Was going to say how nasty that would be, but then I remembered idols don't poop, so I guess it works out.

>>10835547
I went into this thinking it was going to be nothing but two OCs duking it out but I’m glad I was wrong. I’m glad there’s more chuuba presence than I’d expected and the fact that the Holocalypse Anon dropped a few backstory hints and some small plot progression for his own story makes it better, or rather, more meaningful. I still think it’s sort of OC with chuubas as a side note but it’s miles, and I mean MILES better than the Miyuki fic.
And I just can’t resist TTRPGs

Also Holocalypse Anon are you sure you’re alright with dropping hints like that on this story? They were pretty significant IMO and this story only feels half canon.

>>10835547
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5TQEsI8WdDA

>>10835547
this was a really fun read, and it actually inspires me to write more in my upcoming series. Thank you to both anons for this.

>>10835547
Oh shit, I didn’t realise you had posted it and so I made a couple small last minute changes. My bad.

But yeah I give most of the credit to AA, he wrote most of it and put in a lot of effort to see who would win between what’s technically just two OCs, so a big hats off to him. His work is as great as always. You guys should’ve seen him, this guy writes at twice the speed I do with twice the quality, on top of doing all the rolling and maths stuff.
I still can’t believe that they had a technical draw for both encounters, but I think HC anon definitely lost this one; he kind of died first and now looking back on it, ‘last stand’ is a pretty bullshit ability.

>>10837113
Nah, no worries there. It might help a little to read this but it definitely won’t be necessary to understand the plot. Anyone reading can go straight from part 5 to part 6 (once it comes out).

>>10835547
Just finished reading and holy shit, that was intense. I couldn't put it down until I'd finished it all. Wasn't expecting it to end in a draw, but on reflection I'm glad it did. The fact that it was such a close match made it so much more thrilling.

Which Chuuba is the most likely to cheat on you and which Chuuba is the most likely to comfort you during your time of need? Currently I'm thinking of Matsuri and Watame respectively.

>>10837921
You can't be serious. I don't believe you, any of you, that you feel this much emotion over a story. It's not a fucking movie. How the hell do you do it? What was your upbringing like? Do you consume lots of onions by any chance?

>>10838198
Ayunda and Risu

>>10835547
Holy fucking shit I was grinning like a mad man the entire time reading it, felt like I was back in 2012 and watching the Avengers for the first time with the whole "two heroes of different stories fighting each other". Shit was wack. The plot itself, while just a throwaway thing, was nice to have. I liked how it doubled down on the character's personal struggles while not actually revealing plot relevant details for each other's main story. Even if it amounted to nothing anyway, it was still, in my opinion, needed to make this thing work.

Glad to see that bullshit luck transcends worlds to bless our "heroes" The fact that this ended in a draw both times was actually hilarious and at the same time, thrilling. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time.
Also the line "So this is what it looks like. To face down someone who can’t afford to lose. You wonder if this is what everyone else saw." was pretty fucking slick. Really showed how they are both "heroes" in their own respective way.

And holy fucking shit you wrote this in a single day? All because someone was wondering who would win in a fight? You're a fucking mad man, holy shit.

>>10838230
Empathy doko?

>>10838230
anon this might not be the right thread for you

>>10838198
>Which Chuuba is the most likely to cheat on you
Ayame, easily
>most likely to comfort you during your time of need
Watame

>>10838198
I can agree with these choices. Both of them make a lot of sense. Maybe Nene instead of Watame?

>>10838459
I don't really get why Ayame is likely to cheat on you, does she have an NTR fetish or something? She seems like a really sweet person in character at least.

>>10838745
Extremely inconsiderate of others.

>>10838957
That's not grounds for cheating.
>>10838459
>>10838198
Watame isn't the comforting type. She is just naturally comforting but she doesn't do it actively. Mio, Choco, Roboco, Sora, Lamy and Nene would be good bets. But you don't watch them do you? So you wouldn't know. Sheep is fluff, Senchou is horny, Rushia is pettan. That's how it always is with you people.

>>10825035
>common as fuck fetish
Anon, I-

>>10839068

>>10839205
Beast is relatively common as a fetish all things considered, though. Maybe... Not with housecats, but it's certainly not *that* out there in the grand scheme of things. I'd wager there's more beast fetishist than there are scat fetishists in the world. The horse cock meme for horse girls alongside WWFD are pretty universally understood.

>>10839313
You know when people fuck horses they end up like Mr hands, right?

>>10839532
I was gonna say.

>>10838745
I think they may be referring to the dumb Ayame rrat/ meme of her whoring herself out literally.
Don't have the image but it's the multiple choice one.

>>10839532
First-hand experience, I take it?

>>10839532
Mr. Hands is only famous because he is an example of when things go wrong they go REALLY wrong. Kind of like nuclear energy being the safest but people always mention Chernobyl or Fukushima. A horse cock can be dangerous if necessary precautions aren't taken but it is actually quite common for farm people to go after them. Dogs, pigs, snakes, fish, horses, goats, sometimes even dolphins when available. Dogs and fish are the only ones that are actually popular, horse coming next. Even if they don't get fucked by them, sucking on horse cock is actually still pretty fun to do. Cats just aren't in the list because they don't care no matter how hard you try. Their spiky cocks feel nice and prickly, like a kinkier version of a dog's cock but they simply won't do it. Dogs on the other hand really love their owners and are always happy to mount them, and it is a really good experience for both sides. You have no idea just how pleasurable it is to have a beast mounting you and pumping without stopping until he finally lets out his seed inside. The knot doesn't last long because humans are much bigger (though some bigger dogs can do it for longer periods) but even so, the plop and the feeling of it going in are really enjoyable, comparable to anal beads but more warm and pleasant.

>>10839779

>>10839779
>>>/jp/

>>10839779

>>10839779

>>10839779
>fish

>>10835547
My inner chuuni thoroughly enjoyed this. Did you use a game system a particular for this or did you make it from scratch ?

>>10838198
Holy shit how could I forget Kanata? She 100% is one of the best when it comes down to being a supporting role. Kanata would be great at comforting you.

>>10834767
Holy shit that was my prompt. Writeanon I kneel. Thank you.

>>10840454
This made me remember that time where Kanata broke into Coco's room to comfort her when she was crying. Yup, she's probably one of the best at comforting people.

>>10840685
>Aggressive support

>>10840416
Have you read holofantasy in the archive? Highly recommend it. I’m pretty sure the writer just did for this story what he did for that story, except this time with another stat sheet for Four.

>>10840685
>>10840830
She didn't break in. Coco just began crying on stream because of the mod incident and Kanata came in gently hugging her, patting her head and cracking jokes while saying it was all gonna be ok.

>>10839779
I have the strangest boner right now.

>>10841042
I'm sorry Anon, but I think you have a new fetish now.

>>10841188
Drat, not another one.

>>10840912
I did (very good read BTW), I was simply wondering how the stat sheets were made is all.

>>10839779
But...why ?

>>10843787
I mean... why do you jerk off? Why do you like literature? Why do you like pussy(do you?)? It's all down to taste. Some people are... well, looking to have a little more fun. And you can never have too much fun, because if you do, you can just share it with others. And sometimes that "other" is your pet that loves you and you love him. No one is getting hurt in the process so why does it matter?

>>10844143
I mean, I get that, but this is too weird a fetish, even for me.

>>10844378
Zoophiles should kill themselves and get it over with.

>>10834767
>>10835020 here. I nutted so god damn hard. We've been absolutely STARVED for non-psycho Suisex so I'm incredibly happy you've written this.

On the objective side, your grammar and punctuation are as perfect as can reasonably be, and your verbosity does you great credit. The story flows smoothly from start to finish and at no point did I think events jumped ahead out-of-sequence. You maintained a great pace and had fitting dialogue for introduction, smut and conclusion.
I love your prose and the aggressive attitude you took towards Anon's observations and treatment of Suisei's posterior, culminating in some really sexy dirty talk towards the end. Spacing each line and the onomatopoeia served to emphasize it well, and in particular was helpful in keeping the scene vivid in my imagination.

I've got a couple of quibbles. As others have noted, Suisei is a little out-of-character, but it's not bad at all and I didn't mind. To summarize my thoughts in an analogy, it's as if Suisei's personality was replaced with character creation's 'default girlfriend' setting; it's not as if she took a 180 degree turn and started yammering like Ollie or something.

My penultimate personal pet peeve, however, is the senseless jamming of foreign objects into orifices. On a smaller scale, I'm referring to Anon jamming two fingers into her without foreplay - she wouldn't be wet enough for two fingers and it would hurt - but most of all I'm thinking of is Anon surprise-ramming his dick into her unprepared asshole. What have games taught us, anon? You can't sneak attack someone from behind without causing critical damage! Her unrelaxed sphincter would have been in agony, and it may have outright caused a tear. You also don't lube just your dick up - it's extremely important to work fingers covered with spit or lube in one-by-one, slowly easing it up before actually penetrating.

But that's it for negativity. This was a fantastic read and I blasted off one thick, sticky rope to it. Bless you, Anon.

>>10840680
Always happy to write about meaty girls. Preferably meaty all over and/or growing into it from a default lithe state, but any chance to describe some jiggly excess is worth at least a ponder

>>10772593
Needy desperate sex with your oshi, as if she'd die if she didn't get your cum.

>>10839779
Copypasta material.

>>10845387
I NEED this. Writeanons, please. I beg you.

>>10846884
Whos your oshi?

>>10845387
Isn't that literally the plot of Pollatio and it's sequel?

>>10829051
Thanks for the encouragement but I don't even WANT to be a greentext writer. English was my second least favorite subject after math.

I'm content to do what I'm actually good at which is apparently drawing birds.

>>10847207
That's more of a crippling cum addiction, I meant something a bit more emotional. Still great fics though.

>>10845259
Damn I wish my stories got this kind of critique and attention to detail from the reader. Good on ya anon.

>>10847075
Fubuki.

>>10847911
Literally just write:
> Fubuki anal
> Suisex
> Something about hags
> Literally anything EN
Boom, you'll get more feedback in one story than most writers here ever got in their lifetime.

>>10772593
Unearthed from ancient archives, the 4chan vtuber's vessel hungers for a soul. It's a thankless task that nobody's willing to do, but Hiro isn't willing to take no for an answer, and neither is Clover. Someone's going to have to be the 4chan vtuber, whether they'll do it consentually or not.
If you don't like green Mito maybe one of the other designs may appeal: https://archive.fo/MiXQY

>>10848228
Cope, seethe, mald. Pick one and keep at it

>>10847911
Just write

>>10843749
Very simple d10 VS d10 system that sometimes varies based on what's happening and coinflips/d100 rolls to determine procs, it's nothing too deep

Anon who wrote the Selen bestiality fic, I must know. Does the dragon's dick resemble that of a turtle? I read that fic like almost 2 months ago now and I can't stop imagining the dragon with a limp square turtle cock not managing to fit inside her. Please relieve me of this mental image

>>10853617
Stop being weird.

>>10843787
It’s bait, anon

>>10847911
You just have to be lucky whoever reads your story can give it critique.

>>10848228
Why are you like this?

New thread.

>>10854784

>>10854768
Prove me wrong fag. You can search through the archives all you want, you won't ever find a single story that received feedback with more than 300 words that doesn't fit under those categories

>>10854768

They're literally stating a non-controversial fact. Try writing a story about a HoloID member and see how many replies you get.

>>10835547
I really enjoyed the story, but I noticed there's a couple of inconsistencies regarding combat. Specifically:
>something louder than you’ve ever heard in your life, sounding more like a cannon than something a human being can carry in their own hands
Anon has heard a flintlock pistol at point blank range, which should be nearly as loud as a modern firearm. Whilst they are different, to a person inexperienced with firearms the difference would be hard to pick. Was this an oversight, or inexperience with black powder firearms? Nice touch about the distinction between penetration and power of rifles vs pistols vs Marine's flintlock though. I'm glad you thought to consider more than just bullet = damage.
>The strange armor they wear actually succeeds in dulling the bite of your sword somewhat, but a cut is still a cut.
Generally speaking, a human would be incapable of producing sufficient force to cut kevlar by slashing with a sword. Even if anon is thrusting the tip, it may not pierce, depending on the thickness of HC's kevlar. HC anon would only feel blunt force. However, this entire point can be nullified by the sharpening magic on anon's sword, I guess.

>>10834767
I'll jump on since it's getting a lot of genuine attention. Good story and detail during the sex parts. The formatting is great too except for the italicization used to emphasize, its use borders on the satirical sometimes
>the warm tightness of her /unprepared asshole/
>with how fucking /amazing/ it feels
>absolutely /dripping/ with pheromones
8.7/10, chubbed

>>10856260
> Was this an oversight, or inexperience with black powder firearms?
100% this. Thanks for the heads up.

>>10820202
Noble Phantasm: Ben Franklin's long lost wisdom.

An entire field of horny hags sprouting the ground, motivated by the regret of not getting enough dick in their later years.

>>10820202
Noble Phantasm: Ben Franklin's long lost wisdom.

An entire field of horny hags sprouting from the ground, motivated by the regret of not getting enough dick in their later years.

>>10856733
Noble Phantasm: my cock enters your ass

>>10857129
wtf is this power!?

>>10857129
That would be uncomfortable

>>10857129
This but it’s automatically forces a pekora outfit on the target

>>10858013
no