/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>65480074

>>53460647
damn bro that's deep, and I think a perfect explanation for why she wouldn't bother to punish zaion. I'm also going for this thing where Kronii is the least emotionally invested in anything of the entire council, so that works there too.

>>49501350
That's rad anon. May we all make it to Koreabro's translations someday.

Holy shit she's a proper hag now. They fixed the character.

>>47548716
Mutual leg worship.

>>47400665
Good for you anon!

>>46638438
>Spoiler
That idea sounds pretty dang good. Being a blacksmith would land Kaela an appearance in my series at some point. Her being a foreigner in wherever the setting is at the time could also work out really well. I might take that bit if you don't mind.

>>44905426
>Suisei's face when the DNA test confirms you and Anon are actually related and were separated at birth

>>43628831
I think the dialogue is just fine. As you continue to write more you'll think of little ways to present it to strike more of what you might be going for. As of this chapter everything read fine, I could hear the grittiness in some of the conversations as well as the exasperation.
>Spoiler
I can't speak for everyone, but I love that kinda shit. I also like to take a "wait and see" approach when it comes to unanswered questions I might have in regards to the plot or characters if a story is unfinished or part of an overarching story. Some questions are best left answered later. Be proud of this chapter and keep on striving to get even better.