/vt/ - Virtual Youtubers

>>16015542
I sort of kept adding more and more without even considering anon's endgoal. The story went too far from its original path too quickly, though it was intended, I didn't realize that that's not how good stories are made too little too late. Those meaningless moments in between action, those are what people loved the most, and I think the fact that I consider those moments "meaningless" is already proof of my unhealthy mindset for writing. I need to learn to slow down the pace and focus on the world building instead of throwing anon into scenario after scenario.

>>16033056
If I were to edit out the story, I'd literally just erase everything that happened after meeting the riverside vagabond desu, or perhaps taken the Indonesians in a different way, perhaps staying with them for a while before anything actually happened. In short, there's no editing to be done, only a complete redo would save the previous chapters. From now on it's just going to be a really bumpy ride to get back to order, and then once it's all wrapped up nicely, I can start doing better with the criticism in mind.

>>14532339
>those dead, lifeless eyes
I really have to wonder what they were thinking.