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Last Thread >>47772931
Pastebin: http://pastebin.com/vrqYhnpu

Here is some OC for you guys.

>> No.47777575

>>47777499

>> No.47777596

>>47777499
Does it have waifus?

>> No.47777606

>>47777596
No. It does not.

>> No.47777612

>> No.47777613

>>47777596
I just looked over it.

You may be able to romance some of the characters, but trust me, you don't want to.

>> No.47777621

>>47777606
Then what's the point?

>> No.47777648

>>47777612
Although I understand why, I find it funny that the power "Seductress" is in a category different than the category "Seductress."

>> No.47777654

>>47777499
Good first attempt OP! But, try to make your next attempt at CYOA closer to >>47777612

>> No.47777660

>>47777621
Power, dear anon. The raw destructive power of the apocalypse being at your disposal is the point. to be able to decide the fate of entire nations and races is the point. Becoming a force of incredible power is the point.

Plus, there wasn't a four horseman cyoa yet and I wanted to make one.

>> No.47777679

>>47777499
This is like a more destructive, maybe edgier version of the Sins cyoa. Oh, and I pick Pestilence. We're going full Papa Nurgle.

>> No.47777684

>>47777621
Like I said, you CAN have waifus in this...

if you're into guro or something?

>> No.47777689

>>47777654
>Good first attempt.
I've made about three other pdf cyoas before this (one of which is being reworked, and the other needs a little lore but is mechanically finished.)

>> No.47777700

>>47777499

I choose to become the horsewoman of death! The vile plague of humanity has persisted to long! It's time to clean this place up!

If I'm deathless, then who will be my friend when humanity's gone?

>> No.47777702 [DELETED] 

>>47777612
I always knew I was some kind of sex demon on the inside.

>> No.47777710

>>47777612
This cyoa will never be finished just like the Short Superhero cyoa. So please stop posting it.

>> No.47777716

>>47777679
I'll be honest, that cyoa inspired me a little.
Also, I thought Famine would be better suited for the god of decay.

>> No.47777721

>>47777702
"Tortured Chaos."

That doesn't sound succubus-like at all! That sounds like some sort of edgelord!

>> No.47777727

>>47777721
Make a metal band.

>> No.47777732

>>47777702
>Deadly Curse

Wow, how fucking edgy is my name.

>> No.47777733

>>47777499
I'll be honest, Death sounds the least horrifying.

>> No.47777734

>>47777721
As such you are now named Egdenon go for and spread your edge

>> No.47777737

>>47777700
Nobody. Animals, maybe, but no humans. Though that should take quite a while given there are seven billion humans on the planet right now.

>> No.47777745

>>47777702
>wicked virgin
I can't even get any as a succubus...

>> No.47777755

>>47777721
Wait, I read it wrong. It's actually "Tortured Silk."

Which is better, but doesn't make much sense.

>> No.47777756

>>47777499
Not really a lot of choice here, OP.
>Pick a horseman
>The end
I feel like you could easily flesh this out over time. Add optional powers you can with points, add drawbacks like being hunted by another horseman, add options for escaping the cycle, etc.
Your writing is pretty good, but this seems kinda unfinished.

>>47777700
I'm picking Death too, we'll be Deathless buddies in a cold, dead world.

>> No.47777761

>>47777702
Blazed Heat, thanks mom.

>> No.47777764

>>47777702
>Eternal Goddess
Would be nice except I'm a guy.

>> No.47777771

>>47777732
Better than Wicked Chaos. I wanted something more sensual... like Sensual.

>>47777721
I feel your pain.

>> No.47777774

>>47777764
Not anymore.

>> No.47777776

>>47777756
But how can you two be Deathless if you're both Death?

>> No.47777784

Luscious Escort
Well then

>> No.47777789

>>47777702
>Tortured Escort
Well, it sort of fits. Not because I'm a masochist, but because I have really weird issues with sex, so being a sex demon would seriously fuck with me.

>> No.47777798

>>47777776
GODDAMMIT

I wasn't even paying attention to the numbers until now, but this was so close.

>> No.47777804

>>47777562
Anyone a sauce on tihs?

>> No.47777809

>>47777756
To be honest, I kind of wanted a simple cyoa to try out an Idea I've had for the longest time and to better my writing skills for lore. Will not try and flesh it out too much more (maybe some challenges) but will work on another cyoa.

Also, thanks for the compliment.

>> No.47777812

>>47777804
I posted it last thread for you.

>> No.47777818

>>47777804
Tower of God manhua.

>> No.47777820

>>47777776
>Off by one
Alternate universes, my man.

>> No.47777822 [SPOILER] 

>>47777702
>Eternal Bliss

>> No.47777845

10 cyoas of your choice become animated movies/shows. What are they?

>> No.47777847

>>47777702
>Hardened Virgin
I'm not actually a succubus, I just take care of finances.
Sometimes you need to shank a bitch.

>> No.47777848

>>47777702
>erotic passion
Meh. at least the last part fits

>> No.47777857

>>47777737

It doesn't matter how many there are! It must be done! The old Gods command it! They chose me!

>>47777756

>we'll be Deathless buddies in a cold, dead world.

Ok!

>>47777702

>Delectable Virgin

Ooh sexy!

>> No.47777860

>>47777812
Oh well, not for me but thanks

>> No.47777862

>>47777847
>Hardened Virgin
God, that's too perfect.

>> No.47777869

>>47777721
I got that one too.

>> No.47777872

>>47777612
>loli

>Aphrodisiacs
>Relaxing area
>Charm
>seductress
>Ambrosia
>Lust eyes
>Flight
>Weirdness factor
>Metabolism
>Own production

>Lili
>Alli

>> No.47777875

>>47777499
it needs more depth.
or if i where to shitpost it at you "IT NEEDS MOAR MOAR!!!11ONE"

>> No.47777888

>>47777845
Traveler 10 times.

>> No.47777897

>>47777875
What do you mean by depth? I'm curious now, what can I do to improve it?

>> No.47777928

>>47777702
>Fierce Virgin
th-thanks

>> No.47777938

>>47777888
Like- what kind of story, it could work but you'd need to do it as a set of Stories about individual Travellers infinite-chan.

>> No.47777963

>>47777897
perhaps there is more to this world ending then simply four horsemen?

perhaps there are perks?
perhaps multiple horsemen that specialize in subschools of said horseman?
maybe more than four...'classes' many other religions have MANY different world ending entities or world STARTING entities that you could draw inspiration from?
perhaps you have a choice of settings (fantasy lands, grimdark future, modern day erf, etc.)

which direction do you want to go? there are many types of depth. hell look at traveler or star dust or any of the big wig cyoas.

maybe you've got a new big wig idea churning...

>> No.47777984

>>47777845
Monster Hunter Anime
Kingdom Crusher/Diplomacy tv or animated show.
Dungeon-meister anime
Battlemage anime
Overlord show
Solar Inheritance show

But why keep asking, anon?

>> No.47778000

>>47777702
Thanks to one of you jackasses sending me this, I'm now Eternal Virgin, the neckbeard succubus.

>> No.47778015

>>47778000
Good luck finding the spirit energy you need to live.

>> No.47778023

Saw this posted last thread but hadn't had a chance to make a build. I'll post then read.

>>47777702
Warm Chaos

I feel like this name generator has a whole lot of dud options.

>> No.47778027

>>47777499
Thumbs up from me mate. Nicely done so far, will post proper feedback in a mo.

>> No.47778050

>>47777963
While this sounds good, when I was creating this I wanted a simple one choice cyoa, much like pic related (has been a decent influence, thanks again Quiet.). Though If complexity and depth is what you want, I have good news for you.

I am currently working on the remake of the energy cyoa to add more lore, perks, and companions (maybe now I will add a faction or two.) However, I have run into a few problems. Firstly, I am not sure whether to make the cyoa a form of mid fantasy (only a few know magic and creatures like werewolves don't exist) or soft sci-fi. Secondly, I still need to work on companion backstories and names, which might take a while (though I am taking suggestions if anyone wants to leave one.)

>> No.47778051

>>47778023

>> No.47778082 [DELETED] 

>>47778023
So the Avatar of Hope lived, on average, 19.99 years each life? That's a bit shit.

>> No.47778148

>>47777702
>Blazed pleasure

Hope you're all ready to get high.

>> No.47778175

>>47777612
>Big
>Aphrodisiacs
>Love potion
>Relaxing area
>Charm
>Induce arousal
>Targeted arousal
>Flight
>Metabolism
>Own production
>Alli
>Remme

>> No.47778194

>>47777702
"Blazed Agony"

Oh god, I've become That Guy

>> No.47778293

Alas, I lost my stardust folder and I wish to restore it. Post the recent stardust along with the dlc/romance/modules if you have it. Here's some art in the meantime.

>> No.47778472

>>47777702
>Tortured Compassion

Fitting.

>> No.47778477

>>47778293
kiss the cyoa author

>> No.47778501

>>47778477
apparently 4chan hates my pngs now

>> No.47778510

>>47777702
>Alluring Bliss
That's fine.

>> No.47778526

>>47778501

>> No.47778533

>>47778050
Pride is the best by far in terms of abilities, followed by Sloth.

>> No.47778546

>>47778526

>> No.47778549

>>47778533
True, but Gluttony has the potential for the most raw power.

>> No.47778568

>>47778546

>> No.47778593

>>47778568

>> No.47778614

>>47778593

>> No.47778628

>>47778614
and i think that's it

also updated one portrait in this one because it was outdated

>> No.47778644

>>47777702
>Luscious Chaos

I can live with this.

>> No.47778690

>>47778023
>Class
Vanguard. Adaptability and survivability are good traits, and a good starting point when I hope to have a very long lifetime of experience.

>Weapon
Dearg.
Speaking of adaptability, spears are very flexible weapons and having anti-magic capabilities are very important to me.

>Armor
Revier.
Speed and Maneuverability. Soar was another close choice but I think I'll take the lightning over it. It's close enough that I'd probably pick whichever one looked coolest, to be honest.

>General Skills
Stamina
Camouflage
Tame
Packmule
Acrobatics
Hot Blooded*
Cold Blooded*
Really stressing the theme of survival here. I can go just about anywhere and be unnoticed while I'm there. Tame is a great combination with Camouflage and while Breath would be another important skill I just don't have room for it. Packmule is maybe not as important and Quick Study just sounds like something everyone in this position would have.

>Special Skills
"My love for you...
Indomitable
"My love for you... combos well with Stamina to help ensure I'm at the top of my game most of the time. Indomitable is almost a must-pick for me in a setting that even hints at mind-altering enemies.

>Basic Spells
Blink
Purify
Analyze Item
Grappling Hook
Hyper Jump
Earth Wall
Utility spells, mostly. Planning to mostly rely on my strength and my spear when directly in combat.

>Advanced Spells
Nullify
Air Burst
Arc Lightning
Cure
Heal Major
Second verse, same as the first. Decided to take one direct-damage spell in Arc Lightning instead of Shockwave, figuring that Air Burst could handle the knockback role.

>Companions
Emilia
Hell yeah. Girl's gonna get buff working with me and we can tell her parents to frick off.
Ann
I swear I'm not just picking battle waifus! Ann's skill in tactics and strategy is definitely something I'll need starting out.
Aron
Seems very bro-status and I admire his drive and work ethic. Kind of a poor move with that childhood friend, though.

>> No.47778710

>>47777702
>Branded Goddess

i sound like a tavern

>> No.47778712

>>47777612
Succubus Time!

Body Type
>Big

Perks
>Passive-Aphrodisiacs,Relaxing Area,=2
>Active-Lewd Area=1
>Seductress-,Ambrosia,Round Two=2
>Misc-Flight,Tail Control,Weirdness Factor,Metabolism,Increased Production=5

Roommates
>Alli and Keki

>> No.47778796

>>47778628
Thank you senpai I bestow upon you the blessings of a thousand stars

>> No.47778818

>>47777702
>Luscious Ecstasy
Hmm, not too bad I guess, I'd probably go by Lu to keep it simple

>> No.47778837

>>47778796
Where we at so far.

>> No.47778881

>>47777612
Loli
Own Production(9)
Increased Production(8)
Ambrosia(7)
Aphrodisiac(6)
Relaxing Area(5)
Charm(4)
Emotion Link(2)
Seductress(1)
Tail Control(0)

Remme, Alli.

>> No.47778888

>>47778837
Quiet stop posting and get back to work. That way we can get further.

>> No.47778915

>>47778796
thanks, i will tell the cosmic neighborhood of your doings

but i'm not muslim

>> No.47778942

>>47778888
O-Ok...

I am going to make it hurt anon. And, you're going to like it.

>> No.47779015

>>47778942
>m-muh symbology

Looking forward to it.

>> No.47779021

>>47777702
>Got deleted despite not being a roll CYOA

>> No.47779034

>>47778942
Please make it hurt, Quiet. I like it that way.

>> No.47779053

>>47778023
>Pure Blood
I was bit by a wereloli

>> No.47779094

can anyone post the newest version of this?
thx

>> No.47779098

Hey, just had a question for everyone, what do you think about Portland, Oregon as a city-state for Urban Fantasy?

I went there about five years ago and liked it, so I did write it up a while back but now I'm not sure if I should put it in.

>> No.47779121

>>47779098
Sounds good.

>> No.47779141

>>47779098
I'd fucking love it

>> No.47779159

>>47779094
Yeah, totally. Just finished. My fever got worse, so I didn't proofread it. I don't think proofreading would do much in the state I'm in.

UPDATE - 2 new girls.
(1/20)

(4/20) - >>47770161 → Fei La & Mishe
(5/20) - >>47710938 → Twile & Harmony
(6/20) - >>47710983 → Omne & Pan
(7/20) - >>47711012 → Alice & Andrea
(8/20) - >>47711031 → Kaila & Jeanne

>> No.47779160

>>47779094
It's in the last thread, at the top.

>> No.47779184

>>47779159
20 images? Nigga make a pdf

>> No.47779187

>>47779159
(2/21)

(9/21) - >>47711047 → Kataline & Floof
(10/21) - >>47771855 → Saki & Oki
(11/21) - >>47711085 → Chere & Yin
(12/21) - >>47713393 → Lillan & Bloom
(13/21) - >>47713427 → #056 "Bunny" & Medi

>> No.47779194

>>47779184
>PDfs are magic

>> No.47779216

>>47779141
>>47779141
If any of you have questions about what it'd be like, imagine Life is Strange but the city is less shitty, the urban magic is a lot cooler, and the people a lot nicer. That's the most I can say without giving too much away, but sadly, I came to a bit of an issue.

Either Portland or Paris has to go.

Portland
>Described above.

Paris
>Major big name schools.
>Super, super 'free' culture.
>Slightly racist people.
>Great art schools.
>Moderate combat culture.
>Current political upheaval.

So, you guys pick one.

>> No.47779220

>>47779187
(3/21) - Steam(punk) and water

(14/21) - >>47740655 → Flo & Beyn
(15/21) - >>47754845 → Melody & Falchion

(21/21) - >>47754884 → Miya

>> No.47779243

>>47777499
I have a question. I have a CYOA idea I want to make, but I'm wondering what program people use to make theirs? I've used paint for simple ones, but should I use photoshop or something if I wanted long pages?

>> No.47779251

>>47779220
Whoops, forgot this link in the previous post.
(16/21) - >>47770008 → Caldera & Lyze

This is:
(17/21) - Reworked Avarice & Hex a tad, in some wording. Also a typo was fixed, I think.

>> No.47779263

>>47779251
(18/21) - Gia & Buoy
NEW PAGE
Hasn't been proofread, so please point out mistakes.

>> No.47779268

>>47779243
Can't really answer that question for you; all of my cyoas are in pdf. I did try Paint.net a while ago, though it's text editor confused me a little. Might need to watch a tutorial. I'm sure someone else on this thread can help.

>> No.47779286

>>47779243
Stick to programs that you're most comfortable working with anon.

Most of the well known authors here use photoshop or Gimp and while a vast majority of the shorter cyoas are made in paint.

>> No.47779290

>>47779220
"gia and her people don't age past a certain people"

>> No.47779294

>>47779263
(19/21) - Library 1

I feel awful.

>> No.47779306

>>47779263
>Can get robotic clockwork bird wings
I like this a lot more than I should. It's one of my favorite wing aesthetics.

>> No.47779310

>>47779243
People largely use Photoshop or GIMP for engaging design or backgrounds, not just long CYOAs. You can get away with Paint if you're fine with it looking a little bland.

Personally I don't really care much about the design in that sense, so it doesn't matter what you use to me.

>> No.47779314

Posting again because I posted late last thread.

>> No.47779320

>>47779220
>>47779251
beri pls

now i can't decide between saki and gia

>> No.47779322

>>47779294
(20/21) - Library 2

>>47779290
Technically, if that "certain people" is young adults, it still works. Thanks for pointing it out, I'l fix it.

>>47779306
Glad you do!

>> No.47779334

>>47779251
Could I earn good boy points by "servicing" Avarice

>> No.47779340

>>47779216
LiS is a lot more Northern California than it is Oregon. Either way, I'd go for it over Paris any day.

>> No.47779346

>>47779243
I built a small web app to do it so I have to figure out how to not sameface everything I do.

>> No.47779363

>>47779320
Stick with Saki; everyone else hates her! She can be yours and yours alone.

>>47779334
Yes, & she'll get you all the chicken nuggies you can eat.

>> No.47779365

>>47779263
Hmm, so Buoy can also alter the density or force down water? Is that why she weighs more than she looks? I imagine it's psychosomatic.

>> No.47779384

>>47779363
very well

>> No.47779392

>>47779365
You are completely correct. It says it more explicitly in the library page for the anons that aren't good at picking up those kinds of things.

>> No.47779400

>>47779392
You need your rest, Beri. You're sick.

>> No.47779451

>>47779400
But I couldn't take a break on a bad note. I had to get something else out there. 'sides, I know the secret to health. I just need more water.

>> No.47779459

>>47779286
>>47779310
Thanks for the advice, I'll try GIMP.

>> No.47779481

>>47779263
I'll try to proofread before starting up my build, so. Only proofreading the new pages. I might miss some, but I usually get most things on the first sweep.

>Gia and her people don't age past a certain people.
Mistake should be obvious hear.

>hot coffee aorund her again.
Around.

>localized floding
Flooding.


Now on to Gia's page. Gia... gear. I just got that.

>Alright, whats your game?
What's your game?

>... Rommate?
Should be roommate.

>poured it out to hide
I'm not sure what this means.

>sacreligious stoves.
Sacrilegious.

>to such as status.
To such a status.

>to do anything to myself.
To do something to myself. As you have it now, it means something... quite different and kind of horrifying if you think of it.


I don't see as much in Buoy's, but here's what I have.

>when meeting too people.
When meeting new people.

>Or well,
Or, well,

>and be immune to the pressure of it.
Not technically wrong, but awkwardly worded... "and be immune to its pressure" perhaps?

>on your size.
In your size.

>limited lime offer
Limited time offer. Unless she only manipulates citrus juices.

>T-to for the link,
F-for the link, (or maybe you meant something else, idk)


Library (new entries only)

I see no errors at first glance.
I have noticed some assorted mistakes in earlier passages, but I didn't want to seem like a grammar nazi... Maybe later, I can proofread the whole thing. When it's not the night.

>> No.47779483

>>47779294
Hope you get better soon cyoa general needs you!

>> No.47779488

>>47779451
Those would be cool and refreshing on a hot day.

>> No.47779498

>>47779314
I like Lugers, but I think the jew hate will get me in trouble, and I don't know about becoming aryan.
I'll go with M2, it's not easy to get one, free trip to USA and nobody invades my shit.

>> No.47779505

>>47779481
>Mistake should be obvious hear.

>> No.47779534

>>47779459
>Thanks for the advice, I'll try GIMP.
Good luck.

>> No.47779567

>>47779187
>30 Girls
This is impressive mate, you just keep pumping them out. Ya wanna know what'd be really impressive? 80 Girls. :D

>> No.47779641

>>47779481
Thanks, Anon. You're a huge help!

> >poured it out to hide
>I'm not sure what this means.
All the best assassins know that even if the lights are off, somebody is home is the tea is hot.

>To do something to myself. As you have it now, it means something... quite different and kind of horrifying if you think of it.
Really? I don't get it. I'll change it anyway, though.

>Unless she only manipulates citrus juices
No... but that's in her domain.

Thanks again. I fixed them all.

>>47779483
Thanks!

>>47779488
lewd That's for romantic interests only.

>>47779567
If I get more than 40, Miya would have to start being NSFW in the intro pages.

>> No.47779650

>>47779220
>when beri releases so many girls so fast you actually missed some

good fucking god man, how many pages, when will you stop? Never?

You, you can't possibly make over 100 equal waifu's. c-can you?

>> No.47779654

>>47778023
>>47778051
>1 weapon, 1 armor and 1 object
Where are the objects tho

>> No.47779658

>>47779263

Orb of Life
Library of the Supernatural - Electric surfin' go go!
Surveillance - For when the goons break in, this is useful.

GIA:
The missing link between her world and ours... a "metal Gia," if you will.

Lover - She's gotta get with my friends first, though.

New Components - So I'm not completely defenseless, I choose weaponry.

5-Second Glass - Never know, could be useful...

Bonus - ...Like clockwork. (Augments.)

Ranks: #26, between Chere and Lillan. I was never into the whole steampunk thing… I do think the technology she introduces could be wonderful though.


BUOY:
Say, she doesn't look fat at all. Where does the "600 pounds" come from?

Orb of Life
Library of the Supernatural - I need control, we all need control...
Surveillance - Waterproof my house please.

Cleaning - Dry seems like a bit much work for her, if she needs to constantly concentrate like that.

Float - I ain't Jesus, but I'm walking on water.

Smart Solutions - Yeah. I'm just gonna take this now.

Bonus - Splash. Mental Link sounds more useful than anything, especially when she's being unstable.


>>47779505
That was... a joke! I swear! ...Yeah, I fucked up. In my defense, why would I proofread a proofreading post?

>> No.47779670

>>47779658
Oops, forgot to rank Buoy. #19, between Alice and Bunny--she's a cute little destructive cinnamon roll.

>> No.47779705

>>47779658
>Where does the "600 pounds" come from
Float works both ways, based on her mental-state. And... she gets nervous when it comes to scales. Or was your statement sarcastic? I can't tell.

>> No.47779707

>>47779654
Author said last thread about dropping those while it was being made and forgetting to remove the reference to them. There's a few other mistakes (skills/skill descriptions being duplicated) that are probably going to get fixed at some point.

>> No.47779768

>>47778023

>Vindicator

>Dearg
>The Flag

>Quick Study
>Acrobatics
>Strength
>Meditation

>Indomitable
>...is ticking clock
>Aura
>Beast Master

>Hyper Jump
>Heal Minor Wounds
>Blink

>Light Beam
>Wave

>Misha
>Azek
>Himme

Honestly just picked stuff that sounded fun and would fit the Heroic theme. Misha and Azek cover stealth and magic, and Himme would be fun to train as a hero. Also Misha's Dandere personality and Azek's blatant flirting are both fetishes of mine.

>> No.47779796

>>47778023

>Dragonlord
Not wasting energy is paramount in any endeavor. Doubly so on the battlefield.
Soothing and controlling beasts is nice.
Strengthening your armor and generating magic shields is goat.
Potentially riding a dragon into battle is bucket list.

>Equipment
Weapon
>Pouret
This staff is seriously OP. It beats all others hands down.

Armor
>Blaze
This armor coupled with Dragonlord damage reflection makes it damn hard to fight you without beating yourself up in the process

>Skills
>General
Anicipation
Acrobatics
Strength
Stamina
Going for basic coverage on this one. Stamina works well with being a Dragonlord.

>Special
"My love for you
Indomitable
Pocket Dimension
The first to a self explanatory. Pocket Dimension because fuck carrying anything but the basics.

>Spells
>Basic
Blink
Grappling Hook
Heal minor wounds
Blind
Purify
Hyper Jump

>Advanced
Heal Major
Shockwave
Rend
Arc Lightning
Elementalize

>Companions
Emilia
Riley
Ann

>> No.47780052

>>47779641

This is an amazing CYOA, so many waifus! I love the avarice perks, but waaaay 2loli4me. So close yet so far. I just wanna be rich without doing anything, is that so much to ask?

I know you covered all the deadly sins with her, but I would love another evil type waifu, especially one that lets you make deals or pacts or such with her.

>> No.47780060

>>47779314
>M1 Garand

we /ENGINEERING/ now

>> No.47780061

>>47774822
Fuck yeah man I'd be down for that.

>> No.47780105

>>47780052
Evil really wouldn't fit, why not a rich girl who isn't evil?

>> No.47780117

>>47780061
That would be awesome! Only started reading it a little while ago, but I would love that.

>> No.47780135

>>47780052
Glad you like the CYOA & her. You *can* convince her to use Sex Money when necessary, but she'd never keep the form up. I feel that if I added another "evil" type, that I'd get shot. It isn't received well by most.

>> No.47780151

Does anyone have any neat ghost-themed powers they'd like to see in a CYOA?

Alternatively, what are some monstrous body modifications (think horns and claws) with special properties you'd like to see?

>> No.47780159

>>47780061
>>47780117
Rachel a shit

>> No.47780235

>>47779220
gibe centaur

>> No.47780240

>>47780235
Hero Academy has horse pussy if you need it.

>> No.47780244

>>47779314
>that nagant
even if i chose the Garand the thought of fighting an army with the nagant, and a slav army coming out of nowhere to fight and annoy the shit out of my enemies seems like a 10/10 weapon.

>> No.47780285

>>47780151
invisible penis

>> No.47780335

>>47780285
Invisibility is definitely in.

>> No.47780344

>>47780151
>ghost
soul sight, astral projecting, sapping the life/emotion from people, controlling objects, cold temperature control, anything/everything to do with 40k eldar soul-powered technology

>monster body mods
wings, undead parts (think strangelove), brain enhancements Ala mindflayers, ooze organs, photosynthetic skin, Dr. jackle/Mr. hyde type super juice implant thing, dragon breath organ, beholder eyes, super reflexes ala giant jelly flying jellyfish.

>> No.47780386

>>47780344
Lots of neat ideas, thank you. I'll put in as many as I can, I'd be most happy with at least 30 of each, maybe more, but this is a good start. Can't promise all will get in though. Anyway, I'm passing out but I'll check out all further suggestions in the morning.

>> No.47780392

>>47780235
You know, that's the only MonMusu that I don't have a webm that's Suu + them for.

>> No.47780417

>>47780240
Should I add more non human companions? I intentionally didn't include many because I was scared of generating a shit storm.

If I did what should I add more of? Should I include new races? If I do what kind?

>> No.47780418

>>47780151
>Ghost
Levitation/Flight
Possession (Both people and items)
Invisibility
Immaterial/Astral Form

>Body modifications
Venomous/Toxic/Poisonous Blood
Scales (For blocking attacks and hitting harder)
Hardened Bones
Increased Muscle Production (In other words, gaining absurd amounts of muscle for a short time)
Regeneration

>> No.47780436

>>47780417
I'd like it, I enjoyed the ones you had but I'm a complete xenophile (took the dwarf, snek, and centaur).

Anyway, why not start from other traditional fantasy monstergirls? A nice wolfgirl or drider, you know. Maybe a slime.

>> No.47780448

>>47780417
Not him, but it's fine as is.
If it ain't broke, don't fix it. If you do, you might end up making a monster girl universe instead of a fantasy universe (not that the two are mutually exclusive, but you know what I mean)

>> No.47780456

>>47780448
Well he's working on some DLC general companions along with the new schools iirc, no harm in sprinkling some in there.

>> No.47780573

>>47779263
>Buoy's personality.

Hrk, my heart.

>> No.47780595

>>47780573
Just help keep her spirit afloat, anon.

>> No.47780614

>>47780573
Glad you like her.

I'm gonna go collapse for the rest of the night, now. Goodnight, thread.

>> No.47780627

>>47780417
I think "more" is generally a good choice. There's nothing I'm particularly looking for in nonhuman companions but there's nothing I'm particularly looking for in human companions either. Just having more variety in options is fun.

>> No.47780748

>>47780614
Goodnight Beri, I'm very fond of Gia; flights of steampunk angels fly thee to thy rest!

>> No.47780784

>>47779159
I hope you feel better Beri

>> No.47780843

>>47779322
i wish buoy's outfit was a sukumizu

>> No.47780903

Confirm or Deny

Every good CYOA must have waifus and husbandos

>> No.47780992

>>47780903

Confirm. Well there are exceptions where it is basically import your own waifu into a setting at a point cost.

>> No.47781022

>>47780903
An outlook like this is basically everything that's wrong with /cyoa/, choking the life out of it.

Go get a fucking girlfriend. You don't need a magical fantasy land for something that's available all over the place in real life.

>> No.47781052

>>47780903
Deny

Don't get me wrong, I quite enjoy waifu-builders (or be-the-waifu-builders) but there are plenty of good CYOAs that don't have Waifus, and if I'm being honest, I ignore the waifu expansions for stardust and conduit because they take away from the experience.

>> No.47781072

Did people end up liking this CYOA?

I'll make a full version, and sequels, if people do.

>> No.47781090

>>47780903
Rejected. I have long since placed such opinions in the trash where they belong. Your CYOA is no better than anyone else's just because it caters to a subgroup of users. Improve the content if you want it to be good.

>> No.47781098

>>47780843
Beri should fix that.

>> No.47781102

>>47780903

Deny, waifus can be fine, but too much of them fucking everywhere makes things monotonous and boring. Same with fetish stuff. Sure its fine, but when you just hose everything down with it, it kind of makes things boring. Sure they might consume one or two threads, but I swear they're the quickest cyoa to fade away. Larger more complex cyoa take work, but pass the test of time.

>> No.47781121

>>47781022
You don't need the escapism of the CYOAs if you go live an interesting life.

>> No.47781127

>>47780903
Deny. Too overdone.

Becoming a waifu is good though

>> No.47781130

>>47780903
I would rather become one.

>> No.47781133

>>47779314
Probably the Colt, but the M1 Garland seems cool too.

>>47780151
Underused ghost powers:
>Sensing other spirits - able to detect other ghosts currently invisible/possessing someone/hiding in walls/etc. May detect sensitive humans as well.
>Pulling 'spirits' of items out, effectively making a copy usable only by ghosts and spirit-sensitive people. Side effects include increased rate of decay until the spirit's put back in. Do NOT mix and match types.
>Pulling people's spirits out, as above or that episode of Pokemon. Can be used for impromptu bodyswaps, but not healthy in the long term.

>> No.47781135

>>47780903
Sure, if you want to appeal to the bottom of the barrel.

>> No.47781152

>>47781121
On the contrary, there is nothing fantastic or even exceptionally interesting about getting into a romantic relationship. Shit like that doesn't need to be shoved into CYOAs in the vast amounts as vast as it is. All it does is make something that's supposed to be about fantasy stale and boring.

>> No.47781154

>>47781135
People who like to have power fantasies are so much better.

>> No.47781196

>>47781154
I'm glad you agree.

>> No.47781206

>>47781152
Call me when you've found an succubus who gives me my ideal body.

>> No.47781245

>>47779251
Hex's still abduct innocent people and arouse them?~ Well NTR anon would be very happy about it~

Yeahh there's some typo in the new things, but well not bad update in general

>> No.47781250

>>47781206
You don't need a waifu for that. Hell, you didn't even include a waifu in your example. If the CYOA is about you being given an ideal body then there is no need for it to go into detail about the succubus' personality.

>> No.47781296

>>47779263
>you should no better

>> No.47781314

>>47779294
>>47779322
So is the Librarian going to be a waifu choice in the future?
I mean the intro girl was.

>> No.47781366

>>47781130
>>47781127
>>47781052
>be the waifu

You people disgust me

>> No.47781394

>>47778593
Can I get the Clothing pic in it's fullest?

>> No.47781413

>>47781072
tons of people enjoyed this CYOA.
you new?

>> No.47781417

Sneak Peak of A QuietCYOA Cosmic Horror DLC, coming out with Urban Fantasy next week.

>> No.47781437

>>47780903
Deny. What makes a good cyoa is almost entirely subjective. The only things that are almost universally needed for a cyoa to be good are things like balance and aesthetics. For instance, while you would like waifus, I prefer power.

>> No.47781440

>>47781417
When're you going to post your notes hoss?

>> No.47781446

>>47779314
1911
9
1
1

>> No.47781468

>>47781440
As I've explained multiple times, I lost my old computer and, along with it, the notes.

>> No.47781472

Checked a whole 400 posts
Didn't see the traveler mega link or whatever
please post

>> No.47781475

>>47781440
Never, ever.

>> No.47781492

>>47781468
If I may ask what were those notes about?

>> No.47781507

>>47781492
Symbology and mystery.

>> No.47781525

>>47781468
Could at least drop something you can remember

if not its fine but something is better then nothing

>> No.47781539

>>47781417
Whats the main CYOA

>> No.47781550

>>47778023
>Death Knight of Hope
I see no issue with this whatsoever.

>Dearg
A weapon made of determination, it would feel wrong not to use it.
Also anti-magic can always come in handy.

>Blaze
For more conventional threats.

>Quick Study, Meditation, Weapon Mastery, Strength

I'm like an edgier witcher...

>*is ticking clock, *Magnetism, *Indomitable

except not because ROW ROW FIGHT THE POWAH

>Detect Evil, Hyper Jump, Earth Wall, Purify, Zap, *Analyze Item, *Fireball
Spells for investigation, support, combat, and travel. Class spells further round this out.

>Elementalize, Heal Major, *Spirit Claw, *Cure, *Wave
Buffs, anti-armor, utility, and nuking to round things out.

>Mike, Misha, Himme
AND ON MY SOUL I SWEAR I WILL PROTECT THESE SMILES, EVEN IF MISHA PROBABLY DOESN'T SMILE MUCH

>> No.47781563

>>47781539
Just gonna post the first page enjoy

>> No.47781586

>>47781366
>not wanting to make yourself useful as a cute girl and be happy knowing you are able to brighten up the day of the man you love by doing things such as cooking meals for him, tending to his health and making sure everything is nice and clean for him to enjoy Including your own body at night
Why wouldn't you want to be a waifu? I'd give up just about anything to be a fertile, cute loli waifu.

>> No.47781611

>>47781563
Is it not complete?

>> No.47781613

>>47781472
https://www.mediafire.com/folder/1qgcvbwf6qm7z/Traveler_CYOA_by_Highlander_v1.11
Found it in my history

>> No.47781617

Guy who created the four horseman cyoa. Just wanted to let you guys know of my other projects.

Firstly, I have finally decided to man up and work on the color cyoa (yes, I know one other anon made one, but that seemed more like a joke cyoa.)
Secondly, I have decided to try my hand at image cyoas. I will start by making short and kind of stupid ones first, before moving on too turning my pdfs into images.
Lastly, i'm still thinking about companions for the new and improved energy cyoa, but if anybody wants to see a type of companion in the cyoa, just mention it and I will consider it.

>> No.47781631

>>47781611
No its done just that there are 11 pages

I can post the rest if people want

>> No.47781634

>>47781611
Not Quiet, but it's complete. Would post it if I had the images.

>> No.47781642

>>47781613
https://www.mediafire.com/folder/43r0qdm4sm895/The_End_Approaches
woops, Got the wrong one. Thats the right one

>> No.47781651

>>47778023
>warlord
>living inferno
>blaze(burn baby burn)
general
>hot blooded(i think i have a theme plus my armor keeps me nice and toasty so i don't need cold)
>stamina
>breath
>weapon mastery
>strength
specials
>pocket dimension
>is ticking clock
>indomitable
spells
>blink
>grappling hook
>heal minor(for the middle of a fight)
>analyze item(because im paranoid)
advanced
>flamethrower
>lava circle(duh)
companions
>penny(ambition is always dangerous)
>M(to mess with the heads of whoever I'm fighting)
>Ann(because my strategy is going to be hit them until they die)

>> No.47781659

>>47781642
1.15 soon Brother.

>> No.47781666

>>47781563

Fuck it 2/11

>> No.47781672

>>47781586
You people blur the lines. I can never tell if you're serious or if you really want to be a little girl

>> No.47781687

>>47781666
3/11

>> No.47781693

>>47781631
Please do

>> No.47781703

>>47781687
4/11

>> No.47781724

>>47781659
Im just glad he didnt put my characters in without altering them to fit. Makes it a lot easier to work up the courage to submit them

>> No.47781728

>>47781703
Remember Alex best waifu

>> No.47781757

>>47781703
6/11

>> No.47781763

>>47781724
Well in fairness all companions are a little autistic, its finding balance in that autism, and remembering these weirdos go home and sleep at the end of the day.

>> No.47781770

7/11

>> No.47781781

>>47781672
I am. I'm pretty much useless right now outside of housework and would at least be useful and all that as a girl. It'd be much better for me to be useful by helping out a man with his everyday life than being a useless part of society too so that'd also be a bonus.

>> No.47781788

8/11

Remember in Quiet cuteness is a weapon

>> No.47781791

What are some interesting fantasy cyoas you guys can recommend me to read up on/look at?

>> No.47781808

>>47781788
9/11

Almost but hold your but its about to get dark

>> No.47781815

>>47781808
10/11

>> No.47781819

>>47781413
No, i just made it.

I didn't really remember much more than a lukewarm reception though, which is why i was asking.

>> No.47781833 [SPOILER] 

>>47781815
11/11
Mystery Box remember the answer was inside you all along

>> No.47781845

>>47781781
Brah, you're a grown man. You can do all those wonderful things and still be a dude. Just find one of those career chicks that wants a stay at home bf or become a nanny or some shit idk

>> No.47781847

>>47781417
You wrote primer instead of "premier". I look for to seeing the rest

>> No.47781872

>>47781563
Whoa I really like the dark tone of the CYOA it makes it more exciting!

>> No.47781885

>>47781872
I can't tell if you're being sarcastic, but Thank you.

>>47781833
OHHH! You guys will finally get the significance of Released: Phantasm when urban Fantasy comes out.

>> No.47781897

Thanks for the Quitedump

>> No.47781903

>>47781897
Your welcome buddy

>> No.47781943

>>47781885
Hmm, so this cyoa is your namesake? Looks nice, has good potential for power, might create a build for it if I get the time. Will definitely have absolute will in there some where.

On another note, a while ago you expressed dissatisfaction with one of your cyoas (the seven sins one) and suggested too me to "fix" it if I wanted. I might just take you up on that offer, though it may take a decent sum of time.

>> No.47781946

>>47781833
>>http://archive.4plebs.org/tg/thread/42371102/#42378916

I have had this for a bit but it does have some answers to some of the stuff in quiet.

I have waited for a long time for the rest now I am sad.

>> No.47781958

>>47781943
>too me to "fix" it if I wanted.
Please do. I'd love to see that concept done properly.

>>47781946
Aww, don't worry anon, another week before Urban Fantasy comes out and, hopefully, the discussion starts all over again.

>> No.47781975

>>47781845
While it'd be hard to do and I'd still rather be a loli, I guess I could try finding a woman like that and attempt to do something to make myself useful. Thanks anon.

>> No.47781983

>>47781975
for the advice*

>> No.47781986

>>47781885
Fuck.
If it means what I think it means, then Grimdark!JoJo Phantasm CYOA when?

>> No.47781995

>>47781958
Alright, I'll try my best. First thing on the agenda is slightly reworking the powers of some of the Sins. I'll let you know what I come up with soon enough.

>> No.47781999

>>47781958
All I ask of you quiet is when it starts to die down post the notes for it man

>> No.47782011

>>47781885
I'm not sarcastic, after so many "you become a super badass" or "choose your waifu" Is refreshing. and the censured faces in the extended home option makes it kind of more creppy than the broken home (Nothing is so perfect)

>> No.47782026

>>47779251
Caldera is best grill(pun intended)

>> No.47782081

>>47779322
I like this CYOA, but saving all the new images, especially the Library ones, gets really tiring.

>> No.47782112

>> No.47782141

>>47781833
Damn this shit is cool I'll probably post a build for it later.

>> No.47782150

>>47781999

>>47781468
>As I've explained multiple times, I lost my old computer and, along with it, the notes

The best he could do is sit down for a few hours and type up as many notes as he remembers which he should totally do after Urban Fantasy is finished.

>> No.47782160

>>47781563
Tough choice between animu and mystery box.
This is probably a terrible idea, but fuck it.
>Within: Grandeur (87)
Let's have fun.

>Bookworm, Tactician (57)
Let's be smart, why not?

>Brook, Blake
They'll handle whatever fighting we'll need, I'll provide battle plans. (27)

>Extended Home (7)
I want to have a cute little sister.

>Unknown family
I don't want to deal with any noble power struggles.

>Minne, Twin (7)
Leave my sis to deal with the paranormal stuff in our group, and having a twin seems interesting.

>Intricate Bond, Disliked (0)
I wonder is people dislike me because of how fucking creepy me and my twin are?

>Threat Level +1, Threat Level +2, Marked (60)
There's no possible way this could possibly come back to bite me severely in the ass! Legit though, I always make it point to be "unlucky" in games if I can. It's more fun that way.

... Ah, this isn't so bad! I can live with this!

>Scream;Call
That's ominous as fuck and I love it. Once again, though, this is clearly a terrible idea.

>Gabriel, 'Gantz, Cainard, Alisha (15)
Buncha fighters and a smart kid to help us out.

>Deuetude: Glamour
Might as well go all the way with my creepy twin wait no that's no what I meant

Use the last 15 on Library, Hypermind, and big bro Garret.

Alright, looking forward to seeing how this fucks me up!

>>47781666
>666
How fucking appropriate

>> No.47782163

>>47781975
No problem, just keep the loli thing to yourself around normies. I'm sure you'll make a great hunsbando some day.

>> No.47782172

>>47781999
I definitely will this time man. I have them backed up in an email, along with my .psd files and everything else. I'm not losing everything again m8.

>>47781995
Excellent! I look forward to it.

>>47781986
Slightly off but you're in the right place.

>>47782011
Thank you!

For all the attention, have a preview of Urban Fantasy.

>> No.47782195

>>47781617
Sounds interesting. btw what program are you making your pdfs in?

>> No.47782224

>>47782081
All you need is 3. Intro page introducing the girl (number 3). Page with the 2 girls info (number is variable). and Library page 2, until it hits library page 3. The other pages beri was posting for completeness of the start and end of the cyoa i'd guess.

>> No.47782242 [SPOILER] 

>Page One. Spoilers! for Urban Fantasy!
>Hope you can see the blatant shit in this page!

>>47782160
I like this.

>>47782150
As the demand is so high, I guess I'll do my best after the week is over.

>> No.47782266

>>47782242
Dammit I was about to relax and sleep and then you pulled me in

>> No.47782276

>>47782266
>sleep
NO. ABSOLUTELY NO.

>> No.47782293

>>47782172
Alright, though you will have to deal with pdf rough drafts; I don't want to put it into image format until I am certain everything is good enough. As for what I have so far...

Oddly enough, All I feel I need too do with Wrath, Lust, and Pride is to specify or change the descriptions of some of their powers (some people have complained about Wrath's Ira being hot enough to melt diamond.) Otherwise, at this moment, I see nothing wrong with the powers.

Sloth is mostly good, though I thought about removing the mental degradation, but keeping the physical. Makes more sense for someone who has a small library full of rituals.

Envy is a good choice, I admit. Despite this, many have complained about him being so weak compared to the likes of Wrath and Gluttony. I thought about adding a third power, one similar to Mimicry, Which would allow Envy to copy one power from other chosen. The catch is that he has to observe them using it, and he can only have one at a time.

I was also considering putting in a few more challenges, like in pic related. So far there is only one guaranteed. Don't want to give too much away, but let's just say it might be a leviathan of an addition.

Thoughts so far?

>> No.47782323

>>47782195
Google drive, then saving them as a pdf. Sorry if that is disappointing.

>> No.47782335

>>47782242
I do like the whole picking how you want to die

>>47782293
Gonna be honest never liked The Kronoial he felt like the ultmate mary sue

>> No.47782337

>>47782242
wait does brutal death cost 40 points or give 40 points?

>> No.47782339

>>47782293
Sounds very interesting. But, consider it your CYOA now, my input should be equal to that of another anon m8. You gotta decide what to do and what not to do. I like what you've written so far (although personally I always thought that Envy was very well balanced (all he has to do is copy the powers of the chosen's companions).

>> No.47782350

>>47782337
It cost 40 points from what I can tell

>> No.47782352

>>47782337
It costs 4 points.

That's right, even suffering isn't free in this world.

>> No.47782368

>>47782350
>>47782337
What you guys think is the zero is the currency sign.

It's like thinking that $10 is 550, because the dollar sign looks like a five. But, the eye sign thing is the currency.

>> No.47782371

>>47782172
I was thinking more along the lines of Anubis or Thoth, with some SMT demonsmixed in than the standard punchghost, but it's an obvious place to Steel that option from.

>> No.47782374

>>47782339
I thought of that too, except with stealing.
Thanks for this opportunity, I will not try and let you down.

>> No.47782384

>>47782352
liar, slow death is free and you get to slow suffer as you wast away on life support machine that only makes the pain feel more real, trapped forever in the shackles of flesh, crawling in thy skin

>> No.47782387

>>47782163
>Don't spook the normies
>on 4chan

And the tumblrforming continues.

>> No.47782394

>>47782384
Slow death now costs one point.

Nah, just kidding. But yes I forgot that.

>> No.47782398

>>47782293
>The Kronoial particularly hates Pride
>Since Pride is all about getting people to worship him, the Plague will almost certainly fuck him over the hardest
>The Order of God considers Pride their primary target
HELP
Ironically though, Pride is still the most OP by far.

>> No.47782414

>>47782352
Well this is actually super edgy

>> No.47782423

>>47782414
It only costs that much because it's better than the default.

>> No.47782445

>>47782335
>The Kronoial he felt like the ultmate mary sue
Doesn't that just make it more satisfying to kill him?

>> No.47782453

>>47782423
Question Quiet will there be a chance to consume mother.

I have a dream now

>> No.47782457

>>47782423
What are the chances of going mad with the slow death option?

>> No.47782463

>>47782453
Find out in a week!

>>47782457
Practically zero. She ensures that you don't have any lingering effects from your death in your next life.

>> No.47782479

>>47782414
bismuth doesn't look like that naturally and is softer than gold
muh autism

>> No.47782491

>>47782242
I love the side effects for gender twister

Fave is summoning of the "Hand"

>> No.47782504

>>47782463
Ok that was my greatest fear, because you have to think in the long run, and having more points but getting all traumatised for suffering a slow dead Is a no no, now I just have to endure.

>> No.47782509

>>47782479
Really? how they make it into that shape?

>> No.47782514

>>47782504
But Anon your family and friends will suffer just for your cruel and heartless gains

You monster

>> No.47782518

>>47782463

>>47782371
Forgot to mention Super Fly and the corpse as good examples.

>> No.47782529

>>47782371
>>47782518

>> No.47782541

>>47782514

>> No.47782554

>>47782529
>>47782541
And there goes any chance of a restful sleep tonight.

>> No.47782555

>>47778023
I like this CYOA. I hope the creator fixes the minor errors.

>> No.47782578

>>47782529
Is that a congratulatory
/ | | \
\_U_/
or a smug one?

>> No.47782607

>>47782578
Why not both?

>> No.47782672

>>47782352
And with that, you've lost me.

>> No.47782741

>>47782242
I'm sorry, but I can't get over the
>Hey
>Hold up

Every time I see that, I instinctively want to go
>AYO HOL UP
I've been spending too much time on this damn site.

>> No.47782757

>>47782509
Bismuth crystals like that require a careful process of melting and slow cooling cooling without letting the overall mass of the metal solidify. It's actually not too hard to do, if you had some bismuth you could do it on a stove top (bismuth has a low melting point), it just doesn't occur naturally.

>> No.47782758

>>47782242
s^t

>> No.47782819

>>47781072
I liked it as well. People tend to underrate these short picking CYOA but I like them.

>> No.47782832

>>47781072
Yes, was just thinking of this cyoa the other night.

Please make full version n sequels.

>> No.47782939

>>47779263
New girls are mediocre for me. Don't really care about them or anything they have to offer.

>> No.47782953

>>47782242
No need to have plus minus symbol for true recreation.

>> No.47782987

>>47782819
>>47782832
I think i'll make it my 3rd priority, after the High School CYOA and the Necromancer CYOA, if i ever finish them.

Thanks for the encouragement, some of my CYOAs get barely a response.

>> No.47783066

>>47782555
You don't like it enough to post a build?

>> No.47783127

>>47779251
Hex hits basically every fetish she can and yet I'm too afraid of her abusive dominance.

I would enjoy having her use Ideal Form on me, followed by arouse. Both the arousal and forced orgasm appeal to me, but the ability to add fetishes feels very wrong and overly abusable. Wouldn't even mind her using Absolute Dominate for a few things I wouldn't have the willpower to do myself, like making me NOT masturbate with Arouse.

Of course she's more interested in forcing people to be slaves and get off to humiliation and torture, and that's probably the light stuff. Funny how the powers to fulfill my sexual fantasies can turn them into nightmares with the wrong person.

>> No.47783130

for the Konosuba I was thinking of including stats (which are only used to determine what job you can take).
Problem is you're playing you, so I need Anon to be honest when distributing stats - that is, pick the stats you believe to have, then see if you can get the job.
Or will that be a horrible failure?
I can skip stats, sure, I'm only in the rough idea phase

>> No.47783222

>>47783130
I sure hope that lv0 commoner is an option.

You could make it so that one of gifts offered by the goddess is a chance to increase your stats.

Also expect everyone to have above average intelligence.

>> No.47783280

>>47783222
The PC has super low stats except for "slightly above average intelligence" and "The highest luck ever seen". But "luck isn't important to an adventurer", but that's stupid as fuck Luck is a God-stat. Dude is a NEET, and the closest you'll get to the average anon.

He has a generalist class. Super weak, but can theoretically learn ANY skill if taught it by someone.

>> No.47783283

>>47782757

>> No.47783296

>>47783222
Most everyone who would be responding probably does have above average intelligence. Average is so terrible that they could barely figure out how to work this site, and they sure as hell wouldn't be posting on /tg/

>> No.47783300

>>47782112
Thanks a lot, Anon!

>> No.47783336

>>47782242
>gender twister
>not sex change
I remember that from Quiet, and I'm ready this time
>1.
the state of being male or female (typically used with reference to social and cultural differences rather than biological ones).
"traditional concepts of gender"
Basically you fuck over your brain but you still have a dick. Have fun being transsexual!

>> No.47783404

>>47781072
For me that Iron Maiden CYOA didn't float my boat simply because I can't relate to the songs and albums since I've never listened to Maiden much.

>>47782987
This I can relate to since I am kind of a thriller/slasher/horror movie nut so I really like this one. Would probably go with Fem Death (Immortality, gaming, female and work? Sign me up.) or Kayako because ghost family.

>> No.47783442

>>47783404
I had hoped it would become like a "bandchain" CYOA, with others copying to the really simple layout with the bands they liked.
That didn't catch on though.

I do plan to do other bands besides Maiden though, one day.

>> No.47783481

>>47781072
Has neat powers, never quite got around to making a build for whatever reason. Wouldn't mind more of the same, or however you were thinking of expanding upon it.

>> No.47783520

>>47782987
(lady) death first choice. Maybe dracula, lilith or damien after that.

>> No.47783621

Looks like Dragonlord, Vindicator and Vanguard are popular, Dearg dominates wildly and Ann is very popular, too.
>>47776855
>No companions except Green (you went far to change the name).
Thanks a bunch
>>47774507
>I can learn strategy and improve my performance in the battlefield as a result
That was the idea of the character - if you'd like, she can be team leader while she teaches you how to be it.
>>47781651
That is a highly effective strategy given your power
>>47781550
Originally "Death Knight" had two more lines than all the other classes, saying
>why a Death Knight would be considered the successor to the Avatar is a mystery
but, well, see the Terror and Vampirism skill. Being a Hero isn't always just about being the Symbol of Peace. It can get dirty.
>>47778690
Anon, Aron had to disregard wenches and acquire knowledge

>still no one has picked Chika
She's in for a world of hurt when she realizes what happened, and you won't be there to protect her smile.

The plan for today is add 3-6 new powers to Short Succubus, do spellchecking and alignment and all that boring stuff, then see if I can come up with new skills to replace the duplicates.
Possibly, but I promise nothing, add Objects.

And to That Guy from last thread, I've learnt now never to say "I might expand on this later". It seems to trigger you a lot.

>> No.47783643

>>47783621
>Thanks a bunch
wait I fucked up, I thought you said
>no complaints (except for Green's name)
dang...

>> No.47783674

>bump limit reached

>> No.47783748

>>47783066
>>47778023
I was feeling lazy but since you asked so nicely.

>Class
Vindicator

>Equipment
Revier(weapon)
Revier(Armor) - I guess this is an accidental name

>Skills
Quick Study
Acrobatics
Meditation
Strength
Pocket dimension
Indomitable
Academic

>Spells
Blink
Heal minor wounds
Hyper jump
Elementalize
Heal Major
Shockwave

>Companions
Alistare (Ranger)
Maroon (Warrior)
Misha (Assassin)
Red (Mage) - If Red is too much of a bitch to deal with I'd sub her out for Aron or Azek

Basically my build is to hit hard and fast with Revier's abilities covering melee, range and magic. Shockwave can be used as a last minute defense if I can't doge an attack and healing spells are always useful.
My companions attempt to cover every aspect of a well balanced party and I try to make up for what is lacking.

>> No.47783796

>>47783621
I just noticed that the top left beta warning on Short Superhero was the same as on Short Succubus, so I'm afraid you'll abandon us again. I might have author seperation anxiety.

>> No.47783831

>>47781563
Lets see what this made of
Today;Always 12/100
Animu >>> not animu
>Powers
>Absolute mind 42/100
I guess eating more nutrients will fix the fact that I need more nutrients and keep my body healthy too?
>Tactician 57/100
What is keikaku without tactician mind
>Bookworm 72/100
I'll have enough time in this school to read books, tons of them
Maybe I should not use all of my points at second page? Nah, I think it's okay, I still have like 28 points left and tons of pages to go through and not like seeing, let me look at the hardships quickly
>Hardships
Oh, more FREE points
>Threat level +1 72/115
>Haunted 72/130
>A mistake 72/145
Oh no, not me, I haven't lost control
back to 4th page
>Powers
>Revolution 87/145
OP/10, protagonist rarely dies in his animu, right? I hope it's not from guy who made Re:zero
>Mundane 102/145
Master in programming, hand to hand combat and hardware engineering just in case


>Companions
And the finally companions, you cost too much my friends
>Yuki Kurisu 117/145
Someone to start search for evil in this school and good fighter

>Home sweet home
>Loving home 132/145
A sibling? Of course it's great for mental health too
>Unknown family
not like anyone cares

>Siblings
tough choice, on one hand Garret gives incredible gains to fix body problems on another Minne can see all supernatural
>Minne

>Trikets
>Gas Lamp 137/145

>Bits and Pieces
Library 139/145
If I'll survive to third year, I damn well will need more information, with bookworm it's even better
>Hypermind 142/145
Might be very useful.

So in the end, threat of 6 and some angry punks, two great companions, me master of keikaku and plot armor. Can't be that hard

>> No.47783838

>>47778023
Explain to me why everyone is picking the Revier armour. Is this is a closet contortionist forum?

>> No.47783859

>>47783838
That's the kind of trap that turns people gay.

>> No.47783869

>>47783838
Because it has the best effect by far, a passive Agility boost and access to teleportation-type movement.
This goes hand in hand with the Vindicator class, to whom defenses really don't matter.
The only armor piece that's comparable in usefulness is Shade, but the magic-nullifying spear completely shits on that.

>> No.47783885

>>47783838
Gotta fast, man.

The other armours are too niche in my opinion. Needs a set that improves CQC, range and magic.

>> No.47783911

>>47783796
>beta
and I repeat, I learnt my lesson. Never ever say you might add more.
I learnt also that I can't make a superhero CYOA. In the one I made you get far too many powers. I'd rather a few powers of various power levels - you know, perfect human strength, just barely superhuman strength and all the way up to "lift buildings with ease".
So I can't finish it, not that i see it lacking anything.

>> No.47783952

>>47783796
>I'm afraid you'll abandon us again.
but then why did you say
>please stop posting it, he's never updating it
?
Why can't you enjoy a cyoa that was 95% completed? You wouldn't have been mad if I said it was done, then updated it later on.
You'd have been happy.
>>47783869
> the magic-nullifying spear completely shits on that.
why? Your enemy doesn't have access to such legendary equipment.

>> No.47784059

>>47779251
To be honest, the new revisions for Hex (more specifically where she says "I see them as toys, not romantic partners") aren't as good.

I mean, the sentiment is good, but the way it's worded makes it feel like you're going out of your way to placate that anon.

I would perhaps revise it to be a bit more subtle, but then again, that's just my opinion.

>> No.47784079

>>47784059
At risk of summoning the cucking anon, that argument is exactly like the one used to justify cucking relationships "It's just sex, it's not a romantic relationship".

>> No.47784135

>>47784059
Duno what you're talking about, it perfectly fits with sentence before that. They want more sexual punishments from her, but because she sees them as used toys it's not fun. It's just sex, nothing serious
>NTR this, NTR that.
Good, they can yiff in hell with furfags

>> No.47784229

Did I fuck something up, or is Hero Academy really this small (pixels wise)?

>> No.47784243

>>47784229
I could've sworn the fontsize was bigger, or the background wasn't as distracting (gets worse on the latter pages)

>> No.47784250

>>47784229
I don't know what you did but I prefer this smaller version: easier to read and less scrolling required.

>> No.47784261

>>47784229
It's as big as I remember, preparing for new thread?

>> No.47784266

>>47780244
Иди к чёpтy. Mы зa тeбя нe дepёмcя.
>Fuckoff. We won't be fighting for you.

>> No.47784284

>>47784229
ask Box Wine

>> No.47784310

>>47784261
yes.
>>47784250
>>47784284
I went through the archive, looking for box wine's name because he must have posted it, and searching for "hero academy" wasn't particularly useful.
It's harder for me to read the text.

>> No.47784352

>>47779159
Let me see if I can proofread any of this for typos.

Roommate entry typos:

>lacking a bit in common sense
A bit lacking in common sense.

>skinship with herself
Kinship with herself. Unless you mean she loves physical intimacy with yourself, which is actually very possible. So ignore this if that was intentional.

>they believe there to be deities
I don't think that's technically wrong, but "they believe there are deities" is less awkward.

>Alisa is from far beyond the stars.
Alice is from far beyond the stars.

>from my monotony
From their monotony. This is probably intentional given Miya's personality, but just in case.

>divergence in time lines.
Divergence in timelines.

>gases lighter-than-air
"Gases lighter than air," or "lighter-than-air gases."

>Muses come in varies types.
Various types.

>Others paintings or sculptures.
Others, paintings or sculptures.

>so "Ride of the" seemed appropriate.
So "Ride of the Valkyries" seemed appropriate. (Unless this is intentional to save space.)

FEI LA:

>We need fed to live, you know.
We need to feed to live, you know.

MISHE:

>a mental-state
A mental state.

TWILE:

>an orginary rock.
An ordinary rock.

>if those are our specialization.
Specializations.

>then we share not only thoughts
Then we'll share not only thoughts.

HARMONY:

No typos that I can see.

OMNE:

>divine garb a cute maid uniform?
divine garb into a cute maid uniform?

PAN:

>ableto store
Able to store.

ALICE:

>(surprisingly not that much),
No comma.

>Great Pyraminds
Great Pyramids.

>I have on my ship a DNA splicer.
I have a DNA splicer on my ship.

>eternal blizzard on Tundras.
On Tundus.

ANDREA:

>tend to your every need.
Tend to your every need?

>even a house-wide mega-battery.
Like a house-wide mega battery. I think. I could be just reading it wrong.

KAILA:

>I've use this enchantment
I've used this enchantment.

>and a shoulders the next.
And shoulders the next.

>> No.47784375

>>47784310
what I tried to say was: That's what Box Wine posted, and I don't remember it being that small.

>> No.47784404

>>47784375
Someone else think the clubs are a bit strange when taken with certain drawbacks? Like Bookworm costs companions but you can still the Cultural clubs (cooking, fraternity, etc.) and the Sports clubs. Or you can be a Social butterfly and still join the Educational clubs.

>> No.47784438

>>47784404
yes, anon, the Social Butterfly and Bookworm drawbacks do weird things to the cyoa.
But hey, maybe the social retard took cooking classes hopping he'd/she'd make friends, but instead they're made to do the salad, standing in the corner?

>> No.47784494

>>47784438
I'd say that bookworms who do the cooking thing come out as Gordon Ramsay-like characters

>> No.47784573

>>47784404
You know that nerdy girl who aces every single test and has an incredible future ahead of her? That's you with Bookworm, except you're obviously gorgeous and the glasses somehow delude people into thinking otherwise until your post-graduation Hero debut. So you could still go to all those Clubs. You're just the school beauty with a pair of cursed glasses.

>> No.47784593

>>47784573
>this argument again
well, we're on page 8, so may as well

>> No.47784597

>>47780159
Yuri best gal

>> No.47784638

>>47784573
Box's fault for trusting anons to not abuse the living shit out of a drawback to become sociable demigods with "only" 3 lifelong best friends.

>> No.47784672

>>47784059
>>47784079
I think the best way to handle it would've been to imply she'd be willing to settle for just cursing you.

>> No.47784676

>>47784404
Since when does joining a club mean you make friends?

>> No.47784702

>>47784676
Are you allowed to be on 4chan if you've never watched anime? Isn't that against the rules?

>> No.47784710

>>47784702
>Everything must be like in my animes

>> No.47784724

>>47784710
>Everything must not be like in his animes

>> No.47784729

>>47784724
Just because some people can't make friends with their club doesn't mean the rest can't, anon.

>> No.47784750

>>47784710

>> No.47784753

>>47784729
Who even goes to a club where they don't have or rather can't make friends?

>> No.47784757

>>47784753
A socially awkward bookworm loser.

>> No.47784764

>>47779159
>>47784352

JEANNE:
>I'll disguise as your wife
I'll disguise myself as your wife.

KATALINE:

I don't see any typos. I guess that's pretty lucky.

FLOOF:

>all cool technology
All the cool technology.

>$(%*&0.
$(%*&0? (I know this sounds like a joke, but it's a question, so it actually should end with a question mark, not a period.)

SAKI:
...Say, how did the entire Earth even collapse like that, anyway?

>how time lines work.
How timelines work.

>a famous inventor's neice
A famous inventor's niece.

OKI:

>someplace that I could
Someplace where I could.

>I guess is doesn't really matter
I guess it doesn't really matter.

>My society had three roles for women.
Seems an extra space is in there.

>a few of my tribes treasures
A few of my tribe's treasures.

>lead the weilder
Lead the wielder.

CHERE:

I don't see any obvious errors.

YIN:

>I wish you never have to
I hope you never have to.

>to shock be back to normal
To shock me back to normal.

LILLAN:

>everyday, before miss office lady
Every day before miss office lady.

BLOOM:

>buy my own plant-food.
Buy my own plant food.

>"Assistant," was
No comma.

>every imaginatble way.
Every imaginable way.

#056 "BUNNY":

>more maleable than normal.
More malleable than normal.

MEDI:

>pretty maleable to me.
Pretty malleable to me.

>I'll spurge
I'll splurge.

FLO:

>These are the jokes.
These are jokes. I think you're trying to make Flo intentionally awkward here, but I'll mention it here in case.

>living together I guess.
Living together, I guess.

BEYN:

>especially my lips are
Especially my lips, are.

>but Rock soul is much tougher
"Rock Soul" should be capitalized, right?

>> No.47784787

>>47784757
That description really makes me want to bully them even more.

>> No.47784824

I just found this thing that I didn't finish. Should I?

>> No.47784829

>>47784824
As long as one of the gifts is ownership of her.

>> No.47784838

>>47784829
What fun stuff could you possibly do with a smug elder goddess?

>> No.47784845

>>47784838
>What fun stuff could you possibly do with a smug elder goddess?
This question answers itself.

>> No.47784859

>>47784838
Obviously to humble her.

>> No.47784866

>>47784845
You're one smug author I want to do stuff with. Like forcing you to make the cutest and fluffiest cyoa ever.

>> No.47784871

>>47779159
>>47784764

MELODY:
...Say, is the Voice Mic supposed to be a Detective Conan reference?

>of artistic inspiration, today.
Of artistic inspiration today.

>each 1 hour lesson
Each 1-hour lesson.

FALCHION:

I don't see anything at first glance.

CALDERA:

I don't see much here, either.

LYZE:

>potentialy wake up
Potentially wake up.

AVARICE:
I'm pulling my weight in gold... Call me anxious, call me broke; I can't lift this on my own.

...I don't see any errors here though. Except the error of her ways (lol).

HEX:

>"Abra Kadabra"
"Abracadabra," unless this is an intentional Pokémon reference.

>in their tiny planes
Maybe you meant "in the tiny planes"?

LIBRARY:

>plight of the magical-girl
Plight of the magical girl.

LIBRARY 2:
(I wonder what would actually happen if I got Melody's band back together. Also, can we toggle Hex's passive shield effect?)

Anyway, I don't see any errors on this page.


By the way, I noticed Page 3 is at its limit--if I may be so bold to suggest, if you're worried about Miya becoming NSFW, you can always find a pic of her in a state in between the three you already have, and then shift around the introductions.

(Proofreading notes: Some of my suggestions are actual errors, but a good chunk are just wording suggestions. You don't have to take all my suggestions if you feel like the original is better.)

>> No.47784873

>>47784824
Isn't the Locket objectively the best?

>> No.47784882

>>47784866
This is how you get a show like Madoka Magica, anon. Which... actually isn't a bad thing.

>>47784672
I agree.

>> No.47784886

>>47784866
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T8ywwBy8PNo

>> No.47784908

>>47784824
Hilarious, as long as she gets some sort of comeuppance at the end.

>>47784229
Say, anyone wanna post the rest of this? I just had a cool build idea I wanna do.

>> No.47784911

>>47784882
Agreed. Something less edgy on the surface and with more subtlety would be amazing. Quiet could make cyoa like Madoka Magica work.

>> No.47784938

>>47784911
Actually, Urban Fantasy if pretty much like that.

>> No.47784940

>>47784908
>Say, anyone wanna post the rest of this?
I thought it was implied I had hoped for someone to post the proper sized CYOA, but I guess I failed that.
I can post the 2small one, sure, but I really, really would love it if someone would post the bigger one (in the new thread

>> No.47784942

>>47784911
>Madoka Magica
>less edgy on the surface
I mean, I like PMMM, but come on, the later episodes got really edgy at times.

>> No.47784952

>>47784940

>> No.47784964

>>47784952

>> No.47784972

>>47784964

>> No.47784986

>>47784942
Yeah, the later episodes. But it started out pretty comfy.

>> No.47784993

>>47784952
reminder that Allyce is best girl and that I am a horse

>> No.47785069

>>47784993
reminder that you should go to work

>> No.47785073

>>47784229

[WARNING: POSSIBLE KILL LA KILL SPOILERS]

Name: Rookie Mattoid

Bio: Rookie Mattoid is the new transfer student at Ej Har Institute. No, she's not evil. She's just here because she heard one of the students here had information on who killed her dad, and she will stop at nothing to find out. As she wields a weirdly-shaped anti-magic sword, and has a uniform that helps channel her natural magic abilities, she is an incredibly tough opponent, if very edgy and reckless.

>Classes
Martial Combat x2
Ki Attunement x3
Arcane Magic
Maneuvers
Blood Magic - her uniform is powered by blood. This is very edgy.
Berserking [Exchange Student]

>Companions
Luvyna - not-Mako.
Yung Tashi - there's no teacher companion, so he'll have to replace Aikuro.
Kengen - not Sanageyama.
Trap-Catcher - not Gamagoori.
Mecherath [Pen Pal] - not Inumuta.

>Events
Y1: Battle Royal - not-Naturals Election.
Y2: Sports - Obstacle Course; not-Episode 4.
Y3: Battle of the Arts - not the Nonon battle? I'm kind of reaching here idk
Y4: Basilisk Den - not the Osaka battle.
Y5: Battle Royal - not-Tri-City Raid.

>Clubs
Rookie hates all the clubs because they're all after her for some reason. However, she is part of a Sports Club (Fight Club).

>Drawbacks
Exchange Program
Pen Pal

>> No.47785140

would anon be interested in post apocalyptic, sci fi and magic?

i'm not abandoning strange new world

>> No.47785145

>>47785140
yes, if you have enough waifus there

>> No.47785154

>>47785073
>spoilers
>post information from the first episode
I don't know, I don't think that's spoiling anything

>> No.47785176

>>47785145
i'll see if I can draw super cute waifu

>> No.47785184

>>47785140
Yes, having magic and using it to bully technophiliac nerds is way more fun than being one of those pathetic geeks.

>> No.47785188

>>47785140
Maybe if it's comfy enough.

>> No.47785191

>>47785176
If we don't see breasts, it's a trap. That's the law round here.

>> No.47785195

>>47785191
Lies. No breasts means it's a cute loli.

>> No.47785200

>>47784404
That's because bookworm and social butterfly don't actually make you socially retarded or an airhead.
The cost is just supposed to be the numerical thing at the top.
They're bad drawbacks.

>> No.47785204

>>47785200
>anon continues to be butthurt some people have more points than him

>> No.47785206

>>47785191
no traps, only opai lolis

>> No.47785207

>>47785195
>>47785191

>> No.47785209

>>47785195
Porky knows lots.

>> No.47785213

>>47785154
I was more referring to the fact that some of the supposed villains are companions (although I could just say I needed any character to fill in), and mentions of events that happen in later episodes.

IDK, I was just making sure no autists raged against me desu.

>> No.47785219

>>47785069
jokes on you I am at work

>> No.47785238

>>47785204
I'm butthurt that I can't take penpal without shooting myself in the foot.

>> No.47785240

>>47785140
"Post-apocalyptic science fiction" almost always loses the science fiction appeal for me. I like the ubiquity of the technology in settings, and gating it behind "all of this stuff was lost in the last war that destroyed civilization as we know it" is sort of dull and the re-integration of everything always takes too long to enjoy.

Basically I want to fly around the galaxy in my spaceship and do shit like EXPLOIT LAND-BOUND NATIVES, but cyberpunk and less far-flung sci-fi is good too.

>> No.47785244

>>47785073
>Luvyna- not-Mako

Comparing Luvyna to the meme goddess is blasphemy.

>> No.47785254

>>47785238
>Get access to things you're not supposed to
>Shot in the foot

>> No.47785264

>>47785244
You're right, Mako is way shittier.

>> No.47785267

>>47785238
>I don't like that drawbacks have drawbacks

>> No.47785270

>>47785244
There was no perfect or even close analogue to Mako, so I had to stretch a lot of things to make it fit.

>> No.47785279

>>47785238
Yeah, you should just be a nerd like us. They might make fun of us now, but we'll get back at them when we're twice the Hero they are. It's lonely having only 3 best friends and some fuckbuddies though but you get used to it.

>> No.47785301

The thread is almost dead, long live a new thread

>> No.47785325

>>47785267
I meant that I can't not take bookworm twice.

>> No.47785330

>>47785316
but you can, there is no "You have to take bookworm" in Pen Pal. I agree that bookworm and social butterfly need to be balanced

>> No.47785333

>>47785330
Make them mutually exclusive and bam.

>> No.47785339

>>47785325
sucks to be you the, double socially awkward nerd

>> No.47785351

>>47785330
Many people have headcanoned that bookworm makes you an awkward nerd and social butterfly makes you an airhead.
If that were made canon it could work.
plus this >>47785333

>> No.47785379

>>47785339
>implying I don't have more important things to do than making friends

Medicine won't develop itself.

>> No.47785387

>>47785379
>Implying anyone will trust a succubus in a hospital.

>> No.47785395

>>47785351
what do you think the drawback of skipping a class to have friends, or skipping friends so you can study, does to your character's personality?
>>47785379
and that's fine, anon. Just don't pretend studying rather than having a social life doesn't impact your social life

>> No.47785410

>>47785240
well, i'm making it a bit advanced for a post apocalyptic. so all the technology lost are replaced with other technology. I got this idea when i was cleaning my old comic folder
which i plan to post it online but never bothered to post it

>> No.47785420

>>47785333
Doesn't fix that you can take each one 2x for a lot of benefits. Making them mutually exclusive and able to only be taken once would fix that.

>> No.47785429

>>47785387
That kind of daemonophobia is not tolerated on Odesium. Don't make me report your behaviour to the school administration!

>> No.47785434

>>47785420
For a lot of benefits and a lot of cost senpai.

>> No.47785436

>>47785420
>you can take each one 2x
no, anon. We've been over this before, that's not what the cyoa says.
It says:
>Take two drawbacks
>Either pick two different drawbacks once, or the same drawback twice

>> No.47785439

>>47785429
It's not phobia, it's not letting a wolf into the sheep pen.

>> No.47785448

>>47785429
Are you kidding?
If you've seen how elves and kobolds are treated in the story why do you think demons get any better a deal?

>> No.47785459

>>47785448
Not that anon, but Odesium is explicitly mentioned as free from discrimination.

>> No.47785489

>>47785459
>as free from discrimination
I wonder why only elf chose to go to St Flares because they don't discriminate against elves, but not "free from discrimination" Odesium

>> No.47785500

>>47785489
She could just not live anywhere near Odesium, or not really share their scientific mindset.

I mean, Odesium DOES have a half-elf companion.

>> No.47785501

>>47785489
Why would an elf go study technomagic on a flying hunk of metal?

>> No.47785509

>>47785436
I mean that you can take bookworm 2x or social 2x or both once for +1 comp/course.

So to prevent someone from taking bookworm 2x and getting 4 fucking classes you limit them to only being able to take bookworm once and state that bookworm can't be taken with social butterfly. Then you do the same thing for social butterfly so you cant take an extra 4 fucking companions.

>> No.47785517

>>47785509
Nah. It's fine to get that many if you're willing to lose two friends.

>> No.47785521

>>47785517
Yeah so much so that almost everyone is taking it and flat out stating "I felt forced to take this because it's just too good". You damn munchkin.

>> No.47785522

>>47785395
That's not enough to turn you actually awkward, or awkward enough to balance the choice.
Plenty of people have become gregarious adults without ever going to prom.
If it made you so awkward you couldn't go out even if you wanted to it would balance out getting 4 whole classes out of it.

>> No.47785526

>>47785521
>Still butthurt people have more points than him.

>> No.47785529

>>47785509
ah, right, I thought you were that wanker who interpreted
>you can take two drawbacks and the same one twice
as
>you can take two different drawbacks, and pick each of the two drawbacks twice
sorry
It should be clear from the descriptions that you can't both be a harcore student and a social butterfly, but minmaxers gon' minmax

>> No.47785604

>>47785517
>Nah. It's fine to get that many if you're willing to lose two friends.

Except this is a cyoa and we have no emotional attachment whatsoever to these "friends". I'd prefer it if picking Bookworm caused you to literally lose 1 of your 5 friends randomly over your time in school. You'd have to roll 1d5 to find out which. THAT would be a drawback.

>> No.47785614

>>47785604
That seems pretty hard to justify lore-wise.

>> No.47785619

>>47781072
>I'll make a full version, and sequels, if people do.

Yes. I've been waiting for this.

Please do.

>> No.47785633

>>47785614
Not really. You lose one of your friends because you spend too much time studying and not enough time with them. That happens all the time. What makes it an actual drawback is that you'd have to roll (1d5) for which friend you lose. You can't just unpick that one extra companion you didn't give a shit about.

>> No.47785645

>>47785604
He's already said that the sequels with penalize you for having less companions. So why don't you wait before you have this 24/7 period about it?

>> No.47785649

>>47785633
what about people who picked less than 5 friends from the beginning?

>> No.47785664

>>47785649
Should they get free classes because they chose to not properly pick 5 companions?

>> No.47785671

>>47781072
Ooh, a music CYOA.

I have an ambition to do something like that, but I'm not sure how to pare it down to something workable. (Right now I'm thinking of just cutting it all down to hip-hop and making a rap battle CYOA.)

Anyway.
>Charlotte the Harlot
Hey! Take that back! My waifu is no harlot!
>Murders in the Rue Morgue
Objection!
>Run to the Hills
Retreat! Retreat!
>Still Life
Stop! Hammer time!
>Rime of the Ancient Mariner
I mean, I'm not good at taking care of pets. If they die by accident, but I didn't, like, kill them, that should be okay, right?
>Heaven Can Wait
Immortality? Sorta?
>Only the Good Die Young
Me? I flipped off a box of kittens! ...I'm not good at this evil thing.

>> No.47785672

>>47785664
Should you stop whining every time the CYOA is brought up?

>> No.47785675

>>47785664
They obviously need it.

>> No.47785690

>>47785675
You shouldn't get an extra piece of chicken because you chose not to take all the vegetables offered to you imo.

>> No.47785704

>>47785690
I meant that if they don't know how how to read the CYOA properly, they need extra classes.

>> No.47785710

>>47785664
>>47785690
questions wasn't about "get free classes". Question was if you pick only 3 friends do you still lose 1-2 or you have to force yourself to pick more people (to 5) and randomly lose them?

>> No.47785751

>>47785690
You shouldn't bitch about it every time the CYOA comes up.

>> No.47785767

>>47785710
I'd say that you could roll 1d3s in that case but I don't think Box would ever wants you to go with 1-2 companions seeing as how he has hinted their importance in the sequels.

>> No.47785818

>>47780748
>>47780784
thanks

>>47780843
Well, you can always give her one.

>>47781296
Wait, where's it say that? I can't find it.

>>47781314
Unlikely.

>>47782081
There's only 3 new / updated pages per girl.
Glad you like it.

>>47782939
That's a shame.

>>47783127
You're something of an exception to her ways. Especially if you don't take her bonus.

>>47784352
Oh, thanks. I'll fix these.

>>47784764
How did the Earth end up like that? Something about an evil plan by a race of lava people to conquer the world my making only hospitable to them.

>>47784871
Well, that's why I threw in "bowtie," at least.

Well, Abra Kadabra was an unintentional Pokemon reference. My mind went to the pokemon when I was typing the line.

Well, getting her band back together wouldn't do much aside from let them jam together. They can't get famous on their own, so you'd have to start a band: Anon & the Muses.

Yes, you can toggle the shield for Hex.

>> No.47785835

>>47785818
Hmm. Might be able to stop the future with Caldera then.

>> No.47785848

>>47785818
>an evil plan by a race of lava people

I love how you make subtle connections to the different girls like this. (Is that called lore? I never really 100% got what quite counted as "lore.")

>> No.47785849

>>47785818
Feeling better?

>> No.47785855

>>47785835
The future doesn't belong to you!

>> No.47785872

>>47785855
But the future refused to change.

>> No.47785890

>>47785835
In the event that Caldera isn't chosen (with the Library) The Collapse is the most probably future, but that's still years and years and years away.
>>47785848
Thanks. I think most people consider "lore" to be setting / information outside of what is explicitly an option.

>>47785849
Way better than last night, at least. Thanks for asking.

>> No.47785920

>>47781072
Hell yes, this was always one of my favorites.

>> No.47785921

>>47782242
Fuck me, I'm getting hyped for urban fantasy.
I want those points and don't mind suffering for them but, shit, I don't want my family to get traumatized.

Can I leave a note saying it's ok to just take the support off?
Why do you make us choose hard painful stuff like this?
why do I enjoy it so?

>> No.47785924

>>47785872
For the future! You have to stay determined!

>> No.47785946

>Working on that CYOA I promised
Time to learn the photoshops

>> No.47785974

>>47785921
Redone just for you. Mainly because I have a shitload of hell awaiting you, so giving you guys this isn't such a big deal for me.

>> No.47786084

>>47782339
Wait a minute, Envy can copy attributes? I always wondered how that worked.

>> No.47786087

>>47785974
Thanks, that takes a proverbial weight out of my proverbial shoulders.

>> No.47786097

>>47786087
Don't worry, plenty more to come.

>>47786084
That's his whole thing.

>> No.47786102

>>47782242
ayy, this is gureato daze

>> No.47786136

>>47786097
I mean, I understand he could copy the skills if he observed them, but does this mean if he observes a person's strength, he can copy it? For some reason, this just doesn't sound right.

>> No.47786168

>>47786136
>anon whining that Envy isn't shit anymore.

>> No.47786194

>>47786168
I'm not whining, just slightly confused over how copying something like an attribute would work. Maybe I'm just a retard. I'll stop if you want me too. Sorry for making it seem like whining.

>> No.47786224

>>47786168
>implying all the Sins aren't shit

All of this is obviously one of the Devil's games, hence you must simply refuse him to once more be embraced in our Holy Father's eternal love.

>> No.47786231

>>47785974
>B-B-BRUUUTALL DEATH!

It's the little things that make me chuckle.

Also, you misspelled metric in Slow Death.

>> No.47786233

New thread: >>47786230

>> No.47786246

>>47786233

>> No.47786252

>>47786224
I thinks there is a Virtues cyoa similar too the sins one. I'll post it next thread.

>> No.47786274

>>47786252
My personal headcanon is that refusing the Devil in the Sins cyoa, allows you to be one of the Virtues. Vice versa too obviously.

>> No.47786283

>>47786246
...Is something wrong?

>> No.47786411

>>47786231
Nope, that's on purpose.

>> No.47786439

>>47786411
Okay.

>> No.47786564

>>47782242
Are the typos intentional or do you want people to point then out?

>> No.47786593

>>47786564
with quiet, it is safe to assume everything, even why the options on page 1 and two don't have lines around it to box it in, is intention
which reminds me >>47786411
you're pulling that "gender vs sex" shit again.
>paying to be transsexual

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