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General criticism thread
My attempt at writing like Céline. Rate edgy/10

>> No.8663367

Bump

>> No.8663390

>>8663323
Nice, would read more

>> No.8663391
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Does this make sense? and am I using this semicolon correctly?

"Now I bring them from the dark and calm where they were cultivated back into the light; the light wherein I bla bla bla bla"

(Reposting from a previous thread)

>> No.8663393

>>8663323
Not horrible OP. Try using less "I"s though and to let some of the descriptions become less personalized.

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>>8663323

>> No.8663400

>>8663391
It's probably correct but you should make it two separate sentences

>> No.8663403

>>8663323
>not a single ellipses
0/10

>> No.8663406

>>8663403
No dialogue

>> No.8663413

>>8663406
What does that have to do with anything

even in his least ellipses-infested work by a mile (Journey, which is at most the only one you've read if you think this, and you didn't even pay attention to that) he uses them multiple times a page when narrating.

>> No.8663414

>>8663323
>like Céline
>
>in english
>
??