/lit/ - Literature

[Anonymous No.22306222]

How do you know if your stories are cursed?

I've been spending my life writing a whole universe and wondering if it's worth it

[Anonymous No.22306267]

Most people's imaginary universes are of no interest to others, I'm sorry anon.

[Anonymous No.22306653]

>>22306222
It's not, but you'll do it anyway

[Anonymous No.22306741]

>>22306222
>"Alas" cryed king Salzar "my plan is becoming perfection!" King Salzar sat on his gold throne and watched as the two prize dragons eyed eachother.

Start learning grammar and spelling. Writing is an art form, so maybe you’d appreciate it more if you had more insight to its intricacies.

>>22306267
Everyone that’s not a soulless npc has one. Some desperately just want to bring it out but are trapped in a human body.

[Anonymous No.22306753]

>>22306222
Even your paragraphs are boring. Try dividing them into smaller parts with each different idea

[Anonymous No.22306773]

>>22306222
Wait…is this even your work or an elaborate troll post or something akin to sonichu?

[Anonymous No.22306777]

>>22306222
You couldn’t even pick better names for your characters?

[Anonymous No.22307021]

still better than Bakker

[Anonymous No.22307043]

>>22306741
>>22306753
>>22306773
>>22306777
It's a dragon breeding erotica book by anon's brother.
>>22306222
You need theme in your world as much as you need theme in your stories. If you have it, you have a world where you can place your story in. In my opinion dragon breeding is pretty cursed, but only because the writing is bad and there are no hooks for a reader like self inserting into a human character fucking a pretty dragon lady (I would write it like that).

[Anonymous No.22307419]

>>22307043
Lmao

[Anonymous No.22307567]

>>22306222
if you see bits of your narrative show up in other media over time it's definitely something, idk about cursed. seeing all of my cliches and idiosyncs show up in other stuff because of my procrastination turned me off of writing. the parts that don't show up in other stuff are probably the 'dead' parts and as such are not cured at all but also less interesting.

[Anonymous No.22307594]

>>22306267
Sonichu is pretty well known, at least infamous

[Anonymous No.22308093]

>>22307567
I ain’t got the luxury to quit. I’ve had my stories stuck in my head for years.

[Anonymous No.22308132]

>>22307043
>basic magic system
>can’t fucking spell
>can’t fucking grammar
It’s a masterpiece, so why isn’t he self publishing?

[Anonymous No.22308147]

>>22306741
Not him but what's wrong with that sentence? Punctuation?

[Anonymous No.22308155]

>>22308147
It’s missing commas and misspelled “cries”

And I thought my sentence structure was bad

[Anonymous No.22308157]

>>22306267
Says you, I love that kind of shit.

[Anonymous No.22308163]

>>22308147
“Each other” is two words.

Really bad sentence structure is like eating corn with a spoon in front of people in a fancy diner. You’ll achieve your goal but get a shit ton of flak.

[Anonymous No.22308267]

>>22306222
>>22307043
You think he wrote it with one hand then expected money from it?

[Anonymous No.22308871]

>>22308267
probably didnt care

[Anonymous No.22308888]

>>22306222
>queen Razlas entered the room and gased at the smell smell of smoke
>mfw i don't even

[Anonymous No.22308893]

>>22306222
George?

[Anonymous No.22308906]

>>22306222
>and wondering if it's worth it
The astonishing part is that you're still actually wondering.

[Anonymous No.22309496]

>>22306222
So this is some other guy’s erotica. At least he had the balls to share it with someone. Where’s your universe then?

[Anonymous No.22309688]

>>22309496
Still pushing it out

Sometimes I wonder if the efforts are worth it

[Anonymous No.22309748]

>>22309688
Checked. Can you give us a description of one of your obscure characters? Unless you’re going for a desolate wasteland, a universe is only as good as the characters living in it in most cases.

[Anonymous No.22309808]

>>22309688
Honestly, same, but I’m trying to keep my “universe” compact (making it a single town at the moment).

[Anonymous No.22309825]

>>22309748

My individual characters are just normal people, I think. Or what I think normal people are like. But I do have a gun toting priest who used to be a gangster. I have an obsession with male pain (not in a sexual way).

The whole universe and idea is questionable. To me they're exciting and interesting of course, that's why I keep working on it. But I wonder if I am being autistic about it and at the end of the day, I will have spent my life working on my product at the expense of other things in life such as stability, finding a desirable partner, and finances.

My story's universe revolves around this one particular military exoskeleton technology and a war between US and Russia. See, it already starts a bit autistic. The stories in the universe are about the individuals with their own motives who get wrapped around the exo tech and the war. I've spent my life exploring different things related to the characters to understand what I am writing. I tried horseback riding to simulate my characters' experiences. I tried archery because it's part of the weapons system I am coming up with (which I assume can seem autistic). I've ridden across the US with a redneck truck driver I befriended because I was trying to write out the life of a redneck guy who becomes a soldier. I called up random priests to ask questions. I pretended to be a wealthy investor and somehow convinced a representative of a exoskeleton company to give me a tour of their location. I spoke to scientists about theories of exoskeletons. I joined the military to get a better read of military culture, left, and thinking of trying another branch so I can harvest more material for my stories. This is all I have in my life. Somehow, I am not a virgin.

[Anonymous No.22309842]

>>22309825
Holy shit. If nothing else, at least your universe has inspired you to do some cool shit, if you’re not fucking with us

[Anonymous No.22309895]

>>22309842
I am not fucking with you. The stories in my head are what gave me the idea to go outside and experience things in the first place and get out of comfort zone. It's even the reason why I am physically in a much better shape than I would have with my fantasies and stories. I've also tried BJJ, becoming a personal trainer, becoming a pilates instructor, and I now mingle with professional dancers and athletes regularly. But, my life is pretty lonely at the end of the day, probably because I keep jumping around. There was also opportunity costs, like giving up a respectable career path as a software developer. I was developing health issues from being so sedentary, and I had to pick between sitting for writing stories versus sitting for an office job.

[Anonymous No.22309900]

>>22309895
*It's even the reason why I am physically in a much better shape than I would have without my fantasies and stories.

[Anonymous No.22309959]

>>22309895
>>22309825
Well fuck man, good for you. I try to do my inspiration in reverse. By that I mean I just do whatever and let that inspire me later. Way to get into shape.

As for “just normal people”, even the most milquetoast losers out there can become either the greatest heroes or the darkest villains or even the craziest psychos under the right circumstances. Like, their daily lives shape their personality and circumstances amplify them. That’s why I like the Deadrising series

[Anonymous No.22310356]

>>22309959
I don’t want to stop talking about this ever

[Anonymous No.22310863]

>>22306222
i know the feel anon. I have been working on worldbuilding my universes for years, and have never had the guts to show anyone. I wish i could publish my stories, but feel like a sperg like me would be unable to write something that would be interesting to others.

>>22309825
>revolves around this one particular military exoskeleton technology and a war between US and Russia.

Throw some characters in there and that sounds like a hit novel. Sounds like it could have Tom Clancy vibes.

[Anonymous No.22311100]

>>22310863
>Throw some characters in there and that sounds like a hit novel. Sounds like it could have Tom Clancy vibes.

The stories are character driven, the tech and the war are just the background. The details are in the personal struggles of the characters, such as losing their homes, finding new friends, getting into prison fights, getting into battles. These aren't an issue in themselves and I think the story has potential but sometimes I wonder if I am treading into Baki tier absurdity.

[Anonymous No.22311169]

>>22311100
That sounds great, like a sci-fi anthology set in the same setting but following different characters and how they interact with the world? I would totally read that.
>Baki tier absurdity
I am sure every fiction writer feels this once in a while. JK Rowling didnt know people would like her silly little wizard story. George Lucas and his space samurai probably seemed kinda cringy in their first draft. But the cringe levels reduce as they polish the story.

Also, keep in mind that Baki is a success. Not despite it being absurd, but because of it.

[Anonymous No.22311823]

>>22307043
Was there ever any followup with this post?

[Anonymous No.22312372]

>>22311169
>That sounds great, like a sci-fi anthology set in the same setting but following different characters and how they interact with the world? I would totally read that.

Yeah pretty much. It's labor intensive to write though because it's based on our world so I can't just make shit up.

>Also, keep in mind that Baki is a success. Not despite it being absurd, but because of it.

You right. Just pull it off well

[Anonymous No.22313109]

>>22311823
I wish. I need more lol lore in my life, lolore, if you will

[Anonymous No.22314425]

Bump

[Anonymous No.22315326]

>>22306222
Pyw

[Anonymous No.22316622]

>>22315326
Please

[Anonymous No.22316725]

>>22309496
It was anons brothers work not anon himself

[Anonymous No.22316742]

>>22316725
I know, I even said as much. I’m asking for OP to tell us about his work and he did

[Anonymous No.22317054]

>>22306222
Yes it is worth it.
You pulled The World, The Hermit and The Sun.
Keep going.

[Anonymous No.22317656]

>>22317054
>The World, The Hermit and The Sun
The hell is that?

[Anonymous No.22318321]

>>22317656
Fucking tarot card astrology bullshit

[Anonymous No.22318946]

>>22308163
how the fuck do you eat it, mr big city?

[Anonymous No.22319460]

>>22311823
You'll know when the first part of the dragonfucker saga movies comes out.

[Anonymous No.22319463]

>>22318946
I assume hands, but I made a bad analogy. I just thought eating corn ON THE COB with a spoon would be bizarre enough that even yokels such as yourself would cringe in confusion. I’m not from the big city btw.

Bad sentence structure is more like eating soup with a knife. You’ll succeed in some ways, but get stares from everyone and may even end up hurting yourself in the process. Your sentences should be like spoons, or at the very least sporks, but even spoons can fuck up sometimes.

[Anonymous No.22319486]

OP here. I am watching surgery videos to understand what I will be describing in my story. I hate blood. Fuck me right?

[Anonymous No.22319584]

>>22319486
Art is pain, darling, watch as much bloody, gut-wrenching shit you can to make the best of what you’re writing if if helps

[Anonymous No.22320208]

>>22306267
this is cursed

[Anonymous No.22321535]

>>22307043
"The forest dragons live in the forest."

[Anonymous No.22321539]

>>22307043
>Children are not born racist but adapt to the culture.

so children become racist for survival

[Anonymous No.22321877]

>>22321539
That’s such a leftist mentality. It’s animal instinct to want to cater to your own tribe, we just have to learn the exact opposite that other people matter to. Some to an extreme and dangerous degree. This is so sophomoric that I’m getting second hand embarrassment

[Anonymous No.22322692]

>>22321877
Its part of what makes this book so good

[Anonymous No.22322887]

>>22306222
Can't tell if this is genuine or a large but I'll take it as anon being honest.

As other anons have mentioned aim for variation with your syntax. Give us long sentences. Give us short sentences. Give us rhythm and variety and above all make sure they sound good when read out loud.

Also, this excerpt is in serious need of paragraph management. You aren't Jose Saramago and nor is this the 19th century. Pages-long paragraphs are monotonous and, personally, makes me think the writer needs to taper down his/her Vyvanse 'script.

[Anonymous No.22323619]

>>22322887
>a large
It’s a pretty large load, that’s for sure.

[Anonymous No.22324336]

>>22323619
kek

[Anonymous No.22324350]

>>22307043
>>22323619
Speaking of large, at 2,000 pages, if this shit ever gets released then it’ll be the longest book in history.

[Anonymous No.22325568]

bump

[Anonymous No.22326152]

>>22325568
This thread definitely deserves it.