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14339495 No.14339495 [Reply] [Original]

What are your general thoughts on quite long sentences, sometimes 3 or more clauses. Good or bad? Right or wrong ways to do it?

>> No.14339654

>>14339495
if it describes more than is necessary than it's not a good sentence

>> No.14339684

>>14339495
I like long sentences. People complain about how it confuses readers and so on. I don't know what the hell they're on about; why do you need the author to give you little juice breaks between clauses?
For instance, I could write the entire thing above as one sentence and it would be just as readable. The only thing is that the first five words don't go into the next few well enough.

>> No.14339707

>>14339684
>not using although instead of full stop

>> No.14339727

>>14339707
It would have required a touch more editing than only that, I think. It's surprisingly difficult to write a long-ago sentence that isn't just a run-in mess; semicolons can only really get you so far.

>> No.14339743

>>14339684
I like long sentences, but people complain about how it confuses readers, and so on; I don’t know what the hell they're in about; why do you need the author to give you little juice breaks between clauses?

>> No.14339753

>>14339743
yeah but I don't really like the but. It doesn't really have the same tactile (so to speak) feeling as no but.

>> No.14339760

>>14339495
Something something Thomas Wolfe.

>> No.14339819

>>14339753
Just use the word
>yet
instead of but. easy

>> No.14339833

>>14339495
i'm terrible at splitting things up, when i write for myself i'll go entire paragraphs without remembering to put a period here and there

>> No.14339866

>>14339819
That does actually works. How 'bout that?

>> No.14339899

>>14339866
How bout that and them digits. Checked

>> No.14339911
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>>14339833
>>14339866
>>14339899
Holy blessed thread of punctuation

>> No.14339927

>>14339911
What the fuck

>> No.14339934

>>14339927
Oof ouch my hubris

>> No.14339937

>>14339934
Nah it's ok bro ill get some cool digits to make up for your failure

>> No.14339943
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14339943

>>14339743
>I like long sentences, but people complain about how it confuses readers, and so on; I don’t know what the hell they're in about; why do you need the author to give you little juice breaks between clauses?

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>>14339833
>>14339866
>>14339899

>> No.14339973

>>14339495
i think all forms of punctuation would optimally be removed to fore the reader to abstract more from the words presented to them

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>>14339495
>>14339973
This is now a solar bones discussion thread

>> No.14340259

>>14340074
stupidest book i've read all year

>> No.14340302

>>14340259
How so? I was thinking of buying it with my birthday money around christmas time .That and Ducks, Newburyport