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10360525 No.10360525 [Reply] [Original]

A challenger approaches.

>> No.10360531

>>10360525
>Nicolas White

Too bad he'll never get published. He should pick new themes too. Snow isn't very diverse.

>> No.10360533

>a warm bed
>not his own bed

What a little slut.

>> No.10360542

>>10360525
the tiger guy was better

>> No.10360551
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10360551

>snow tastes good
>now take some
>bites
Is this saying that the person offering the snow *bites* the recipient, or is it demanding the person "take some bites" of the offered snow?

>> No.10360554

>>10360531
chalky white was black

>> No.10361029

>>10360525
>When your done
>YOUR DONE
Guys, was he trying to emulate Joyce here?

>> No.10361041
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10361041

Kids are the best poets.

>> No.10361048

>>10361041
Do you think in composing that he counted all numbers up to 710,711, and 712 and those just happened to be the first 3 consecutive numbers whose syllables make a haiku?

>> No.10361098

>>10361041
that's unironically the best haiku I've ever read
not that that is saying much

>> No.10361102

Pretending these are good is the worst /lit/ meme.

>> No.10361105

>>10361041
top kek

>> No.10361126

>>10361041
I love this

>> No.10361139

>>10361098
guess you haven't read
very many haikus dude
you should go read more

>> No.10361140
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10361140

>>10361102
I hope you get eaten.

>> No.10361147

>>10361102
They're not particularly good but they are cute coming from children.

>> No.10361148

why are kids so good at writing poems

>> No.10361211

>>10360525
Kill yourself

>> No.10361214

>>10361102
The Tiger is actually good, the rest are just a silly meme

>> No.10361219

>>10361148
They are alive, unlike adults.

>> No.10361355

It's actually not bad. I mean the indentations are meaningless and IDK about bringing up kites in a poem about snow but it invoked that snowy-day feeling.

>> No.10361358

>>10361048
Fucking kek
This kid is dedicated

>> No.10361405

>>10361355
When it's snowing it's time for snow, not kites

>> No.10361414

>>10361102
Go away, Rupi. Nobody here likes you.

>>10361148
They write from the heart without pretense.

>> No.10361420

>>10361414
really when i was a kid everything i did was full of pretense...

>> No.10361451

>>10361420
Post some of your writing.

>> No.10361469

>>10361451
From my childhood? I might've, if I had access to it. From 6 to 8 years old I wrote a lot of stuff that was inspired equal parts by Tolkien, Deltora Quest and Warcraft III - moreso by what I thought they represented than their actual content, I'd only had the Hobbit read to me by my dad. Every time I tried to read Lord of the Rings I only made it a chapter in or something, even though I had two friends that had finished the books when I was 8. I remember getting good marks for using the words "horde" and "exodus" in an Australian state-wide student assessment thing. One of the characters in my little notepad stories was called 'fag'.

>> No.10361502

>>10361041
This is great.

>> No.10361503

>>10361469
>One of the characters in my little notepad stories was called 'fag'.
Was the character autobiographical?

>> No.10361504

>>10361102
The tiger is an actually good poem, the rest are merely good for second graders

>> No.10361516

>>10361451
just gonna take this time to remind the newfriends of the greatest piece of literature ever written by a child:
https://warosu.org/lit/thread/3642888

>> No.10361568

The snow it is
Not time to fly kites
Bite
BITE
Try to sled

>> No.10361576

>>10361140

That second YES has daddy's handwriting

>> No.10361585
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10361585

>>10361098

>> No.10361655

>>10361585
The last line should be the first. Other than that it's golden--or should I say pearly white?

>> No.10361691

>>10361029
>your done
It is indeed joycean wordplay: a reference to the river Jordan, its baptism waters frozen, the dove of the Holy Ghost merely an absent cardboard figure (the kite), the cold tomb turned here a warm bed, for death only may soothe the icy pain of barren bites from the flesh of a fallen god. The likes of Pound or Yeats might have felt pride had their nib outlined such lucidly distilled playful agony. Alas!,--the muse has favoured Nicholas.

>> No.10361703

>>10361041
Holy fucking shit dude I am dying of laughter.

>> No.10361748
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10361748

>>10361655
Perhaps crimson?

>> No.10361806

>>10361516
Forgot about this, thanks. That OP was based.

>> No.10361821

>>10360525
Lick my dong
Very long dong
Snowy longer dong

>> No.10361859

>>10360525
nicholas white is a hack

>> No.10361861

>>10361503
lmao I did turn out to be a faggot unironicall.

>> No.10361870

>>10360551
when you eat snow, it is bitingly cold. He's making a play on words obviously...I wouldn't expect you to understand

>> No.10361890

>>10361861
will you be my gf (male)?

>> No.10363242

>>10360525
Holy shit, just noticed that the capital letters spell the title of the poem

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