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This poem seems too simple. Am I missing something?

I've interpreted it essentially as the reality of old age and the process of dying (likely inspired by his father's death two years prior to publication). William's was also an imagist so that explains why nothing is blatantly explained.

Is there anything else?

>> No.9172888

>>9172881
>they are buffeted by a dark wind

BBBBBBBBBRRRRRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAAAAPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP

snnnnniiiiiiffffffffffff...oh yes my dear....sssnnnnnnnnnnnniiiiiiiiffffffff....quite pungent indeed...is that....dare I say....sssssssnniff...eggs I smell?......sniff sniff....hmmm...yes...quite so my darling....sniff....quite pungent eggs yes very much so .....ssssssssssssssnnnnnnnnnnnnnnniiiiiiiffffff....ah yes...and also....a hint of....sniff....cheese.....quite wet my dear....sniff...but oh yes...this will do nicely....sniff.....please my dear....another if you please....nice a big now....

BBBBBBRRRRRRRAAAAAAAPPPPPPPFFFFFFFFLLLLLLLLLPPPPPPPPPFFFFFF

Oh yes...very good!....very sloppy and wet my dear....hmmmmm...is that a drop of nugget I see on the rim?...hmmmm.....let me.....let me just have a little taste before the sniff my darling.......hmmmmm....hmm..yes....that is a delicate bit of chocolate my dear....ah yes....let me guess...curry for dinner?....oh quite right I am....aren't I?....ok....time for sniff.....sssssnnnnnnniiiiiiiiffffffff.....hmmm...hhhmmmmm I see...yes....yes indeed as well curry......hmmm....that fragrance is quite noticeable....yes.....onion and garlic chutney I take it my dear?.....hmmmmm....yes quite.....

BBBBBBRRRRRRRRPPPPPPFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFTTTTTTTTTTT

Oh I was not expecting that…that little gust my dear….you caught me off guard…yes…so gentle it was though…hmmmm…let me taste this little one…just one small sniff…..sniff…ah….ssssssnnnnnniiiiiffffffffffff…and yet…so strong…yes…the odor….sniff sniff…hmmm….is that….sniff….hmmm….I can almost taste it my dear…..yes….just…sniff….a little whiff more if you please…..ssssssnnnnnniiiiiffffffffff…ah yes I have it now….yes quite….hhhhmmmm…delectable my dear…..quite exquisite yes…..I dare say…sniff….the most pungent one yet my dear….ssssnnnnniiiifffffffffffffffffffffff….yes….

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9172903

>>9172888
Nice.

>> No.9172908

>>9172888
I don't know how much longer I can browse this site

>> No.9172919

>>9172881
William Carlos Williams is garbage.

>> No.9172924

>>9172888
best brap post of all time

even got trips

checked

>> No.9172936

>>9172919
>Garbage
It's the Puerto Rican side bleeding through. He should have stuck to being strictly a physician.

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9172990

>>9172888
I needed that

>> No.9173001

>>9172888
James Joyce is that you?

>> No.9173003

>>9172881

The stanza breaks are nonsensical and excessive. Other than that this is a fine poem.

>> No.9173007

>>9172919
seconded

>> No.9173187

>>9173003
maybe she/he wanted to preserve how the thoughts fell onto the page
no backspace. sometimes when it takes a moment people might (enter) involuntarily
and don’t want to fix errors because they’re writing for themselves, and not others
and if the other person wanted to understand, they would.

maybe she’he is writing to preseve their own moment in time
in its original standing/form. not for demonstration.

>> No.9173193

>>9173003
maybe she/he is an old lady who is too weak to edit, or too intelig3nt to care.

fuck your rules and adherences.


we never know what the author is going through, from where they are writing. i love how lit critique is one big bully party. analysis is fine, but i'd rather encourage expression and thought/intention as opposed to formulaic measures. aka i wont shit on a siberian mute for not speaking in eng dialect because ~ ~ hand symbols are worse than oral communication. ~

>> No.9173201

>write in stream of consciousness
>autist criticizes and overanalyzes it as if it's my master thesis

why do people do this? i don't owe you a care.

>> No.9173206

>>9172888
someone vocaroo this pls

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>>9173187
>>9173193
Not sure if pasta or autism. Maybe both.

>> No.9173261

>8 lines
>gap
>8 lines
>double gap
>2 lines

I hate this shit so much

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9173266

>>9172919
>>9172936
>>9173007

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9173270

>>9173261
you too

>>9173187
What the FUCK is wrong with you

>> No.9173279

>>9173270

not
to
be
an
emo
but

how that person writes is none of your business

just close your eyes lmao aiaihaiaha nigga

like

worry about your damn self

maybe that person has lost everything and they have nothing to uphold. fuck spellcheck and grammar. they'll do whatever they please because they don't care to impress you or anyone else. if it makes sense to the author, that's all that should matter. who said it needs to make sense? you're a selfish fuck


f
u
c u c k
k

>> No.9173287

>>9172908
i do, it's forever

>> No.9173401

>>9172919
Edgy

>> No.9174596

>>9172881
great poem.

>This poem seems too simple.

Try to write a better one, maybe one that you think is not too simple, post it here and we will judge which we like better.