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This has more substance than anything I've ever wrote.

>> No.12496969

Very good
Do you have anything more by Nael?

>> No.12496972

Can someone recommend a book like this?

>> No.12496976
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12496976

While Nael’s is the objectively better piece, I personally find more fulfillment in Galko’s rawness.

>> No.12496980

>>12496969
The nigger
He destroyed the West
No
NO
The nigger is out

by Nael, age 16
From Day of the Rope When, 4chan.org/pol/

>> No.12496983

>>12496980
Kek

>> No.12496986

>>12496980
>the nigger
More like kikes

>> No.12496987

>>12496980

KEK!

>> No.12496991

>>12496959
TAYGA MAFIA
COMMANDOS
DEADLY COMMANDOS
DROP ZE BOMBU MAN

>> No.12496994

>>12496980
based
a
s
e
d underratted

>> No.12497001
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>>12496980

>> No.12497007

>>12496980
this is how mafia works Xd

>> No.12497009
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12497009

The Tiger
by Soren, age 6

The tiger
Destroy your cage
Or don't
Yes
NO
You'll regret it either way

>> No.12497012
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>>12496980

>> No.12497015

>>12496959
The virgin
He destroyed his latest relationship after two dates
Yes
YES
He made this post

>> No.12497018

>>12497009
Based & faithpilled.

>> No.12497024

>>12497015
cringe

>> No.12497026
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>>12496976
>Galko's rawness

>> No.12497028
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>>12497009
Martin Lutha'
He done ruined Chris'endom
Lawd
LAWD
Oro pro nobis

>> No.12497029
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>>12496980
BOOMSHAKALAKA

>> No.12497032

>>12497007
The level 1 crook
He found some cash
Yes
YES
That's how mafia works

>> No.12497037

>>12496980
The cis white male
He needs to be castrated
Yass
YASSSSSS
This is a regular latte, I ordered a chai. Take it back, trash.

>> No.12497041

>>12497037
>the right can't into prosody

>> No.12497044
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12497044

The tiger
There's no cage
No
YES
The tiger is my property

>> No.12497058
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12497058

The tiger
He failed to destroy his chage
No
NO
The tiger is still locked up

>> No.12497059

>>12496980
Based

>> No.12497077

>>12496959
Someone explain why this is good and keeps being posted

>> No.12497123

Adolf
He destroyed his country
Help
ITALY HELP
This is the Jews fault

>> No.12497128

>>12496959
>anything I've ever wrote
I believe you.

>> No.12497137

>>12497128
based proofreader

>> No.12497150

>>12497077
it's shit, liking it is simply implies that you are so above today's poetry and culture, that for you even such a primitive scribble of a child is better

it's so simple every pseud has the ability to feel some emotion from it, and any flaw it has is excused, or rather completely invisible, as it was written by a child

>> No.12497279

>>12497150
thanks

>> No.12497294

>>12497058
more like.

the tiger
trapped? nobody seems to know
who knows
nobody knows
im going to die where i was born

>> No.12497627

It's unironically better than anything Joyce, Pynchon or Nabokov have ever written.

>> No.12497833

>>12496991
MOVIE MOVIE MOVIE MOVIE MOVIE

>> No.12497984

>>12497077
it perfectly captures the playful nature of a child

>> No.12498008
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12498008

>>12496959

That second yes has daddy's handwriting

>> No.12498054

The tiger is out
YES
He destroyed his cage
Yes
The Tiger

>> No.12498126

The Tigger is out
He destroyed his cage
Bounce
BOUNCE
The Tigger

>> No.12498253

>>12497150
What flaws does it have. It's perfectly reduced such that there are no unnecessary lines, the message is clear but broad enough to cover a wide variety of interpretations, and it has just enough literary devices to give it depth without going overboard.

Nobody thinks Nael is actually a prodigy or anything, it's just accidental genius, like a monkey at a typewriter.

>> No.12498290

>>12498253
>literary devices
what literary devices are employed in this? Asking genuinely

>> No.12498332

>>12498290
>brainlets on MY /lit/

>> No.12498346

>>12498332
come on, it's just repitition, what else is there in it?

>> No.12498397

>>12497015
lmao are you me?

>> No.12498399

Cigarettes

They burn my lungs
They sear my flesh
My mind goes numb
My penis goes limb
Why do I suffer myself to light these twigs
Satan is honing my strings

>John ages 26 4chan poster

>> No.12498419

>>12498346
allegory?

>> No.12498439

>>12498419
oh yeah

>> No.12498453

>>12498419
To what? Art is not great just because you can ascribe deeper meanings to it that the artist never intended for.

>> No.12498454

>>12496959
Better than any nobel prize winner

>> No.12498458

>>12498453
Google 'Death of the Author'

>> No.12498475

>>12496959
Top three big cat poem with Blake and Rilke imho

>> No.12498486

>>12496976
>Mom, do you see me?
>Yes, but I don't want to.
Jesus. Poor kid.

>> No.12498510

>>12498458
Seems like a bullshit book. Its publication date does coincide very well with the time art pretty much died, though.

Art becomes meaningless the moment you remove the artist from it. You can see patterns in randomness and noise. But it's still just noise, not art.

>> No.12498524

>>12498510
>art is dead
Johnny did you miss the school bus today? Why aren't you in class?

>> No.12498537
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>>12498524
If you appreciate this, you're either pretentious or just laundering money.

>> No.12498653
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>> No.12498671

>>12498653
That's pretty deep and grounded in science.

>> No.12498683

>>12498537
I think it looks pretty and is fun to look at because of all the random complexity, in what way is that pretentious?
You're the one who's being pretentious when you try to look for meaning in abstract art.

>> No.12498692

>>12498683
You're the one calling nonsense an allegory. You're the one claiming art requires no artist.

>> No.12498702

>>12497984
It has nothing to do about children. It's a good poem on its own.

>> No.12498710
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>>12498702
>It's a good poem on its own.

>> No.12498715

>>12498692
>being this much of a philistine
Go jerk off to gaudy baroque buildings on /pol/, pleb.

>> No.12498757

>>12498715
Like I said, pretentious. Your response to a disagreement is immediately "go back to /pol/".

Art is nothing without intent. All you can have without intent is conjecture or guesswork, and it will all be your imagination. It will all be your mind painting what the artist could not.

>> No.12498778

>>12498692
>You're the one calling nonsense an allegory
no I'm not, I'm just calling it pretty
>You're the one claiming art requires no artist
when did I claim that?
who are you even arguing with?

>> No.12498791

>>12497026
Based

>> No.12499893
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>>12498453
>>12498510
>"art is meaningless without the artist"

surefire way to spot a pseud.

>> No.12499928

>>12496959
Imagine if Nael peaked with that poem and the rest of his life is just a long, depressing downward spiral into mediocrity and self-hatred

>> No.12499963

>>12496976
unironically profound

>> No.12500904
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12500904

Yo fuck cages mayne.
- tiger

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12501037

>>12497009
>>12497028

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>>12496980
Based and redpilled

>> No.12501085

>>12496959
Can you explain why this is good or are you doing that effeminate thing where you glorify something dumb in order to seem intelligent?

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12501247

>>12501085
>he doesn't know
shh don't tell him

>> No.12501274

Penitentiary chances
The devil dances
And eventually answers
To the call of autumn

kanye is the greatest living poet and i'm being really serious

>> No.12501277

>>12496976
This hits hard

>> No.12501282

>>12496980
B&R

>> No.12501303

>>12501274
300 bitches
Like the romans

What a genius

>> No.12501375

>>12501274
>The priest wore black on the seventh day
>And danced around while the building burned
>You didn't know me for a minute babe, and I've never known the spring to turn
>So slowly into autumn

Still waiting for his collab with the man he clearly lifted that verse from

>> No.12501386

>>12501303
there's a latin tag 'our good homer himself occasionally nods'

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12501726

Step aside plebs

>> No.12501895

>>12498757
>art is nothing without intent
https://youtu.be/LVJcANp1zu4
This album was certainly made with intent, but the sound itself is so distorted that you any bits of the music that you make sense of are going to be completely different than anyone else's. If your argument was true then the purpose of the work could only be known by the artist, and subsequently, the artist would be the only one who would be able to properly consume this media. When I listen to the album, I find beauty. My imagination is sparked. I reason out my own problems and come to my own conclusions. I experience every function of art when I listen to this album.

>> No.12501914

>>12496976
Damn that kid's mom is a cunt.

>> No.12501944

>>12496976
This is actually beautiful.

>> No.12501954

>>12501895
art is a conversation with the artist

>> No.12502082

>>12496976
yes. this is so much better than pseud Nael.

>> No.12502739

>>12496976
this got my noodle goin'

>> No.12502769

>>12497984
And for that it becomes a true and powerful look at the author's soul through the lens of mere playful poetry. It is unironically a good piece when you consider the context of the author.

>> No.12502800

>>12501726
im literally crying shaking rn

>> No.12502809

>>12501726
Unironically carries a lot of meaning. Beifuss is taking a stance here that a machine cannot produce art, or at least not in the same way humans can, and so cannot possess a soul. Not to mention that he's demonstrating that beauty exists in all facets of nature, as evidenced by his observation that even a mathematical concept, numbers, can fit perfectly in a haiku.
This suggests a certain longing for simpler times when we would simply enjoy nature for all the beauty it contains, rather than trying to search for something more in an increasingly artificial world.

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>>12502809
a truly brilliant gestalt my friend

>> No.12504655

>>12501726

>4
>6
>4

>> No.12504675

>>12496976
>>12496959
holy shit, these kids are amazing

>> No.12504682

>>12497009
Funniest thing I read on this board

>> No.12504714
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12504714

The tiger

He can't destroy his cage
No
YES
He tells everyone he destroyed it anyway

>> No.12504735

>>12496959
>>12496976
These poems are honestly really good
wow

>> No.12504738

>>12496980
fuck off back to /pol/, kid

>> No.12504754

>>12496959
>>12496976
These are unironically good poems. It goes to show that it's not about your training or how much publicity you have behind you, it's innate.

>> No.12504768

>>12501726
(((((((((((((Beifuss))))))))))))))))

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12504825

>>12504714
You tiger
What is a cage
But something to be destroyed
Yes
YES
Tiger, at last ye are out!

>> No.12505244

>>12497009
Amazing

>> No.12505634
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12505634

>>12496976
This has me real fucked up.

>> No.12505707

>>12502809
You're entirely wrong. He's demonstrating that poetry operates by conventions akin to mathematical systems. The accumulative principle on display fulfills the syllabic demand of the haiku form according to numeral tradition; but is this a compromise of mathematics and its subordination to poetics, or a regulation and even constitution of poetics by mathematics? That is, the haiku form is accomplished here only as an instance of enumeration : thus, the poetic form is performative, performed by mathematics, perhaps a mere effect of it. At the same time, this particular enumeration also suggests a disruption of mathematical convention akin to that of poetic language, in the leaving out of the conjunctive "and", a grammatical (artistic) liberty evoking the poetic persona of a robot. However, this persona, opering exclusively according to the systems of mathematics, expresses itself (its self) as a machine, which you claim to be incapable of art. In so doing, this machine has produced an effect of literary language, and that through ignoring linguistic convention. Poetic convention and mathematical convention are rendered at best historical artifacts, the practices of each dissolved into a unified intellectual (or less culturally burdened, intelligent) activity, the practice of it a domain through which humans and objects fluently move, have exchanges and imitate each other. Rather it is a poem that challenges the soul by suggesting it (the poem) was not only made by a machine, but through a collaboration of man and machine ; that is, it causes the matter of the human soul to be contingent on the machine.

>> No.12506563

The alcoholic
He destroyed his life
Why
WHY
The alcoholic is dead

>> No.12506606

>>12506563
Derivative

>> No.12506866

>>12506606
Its a blogpost

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>>12504655
Anon, are you okay?
Sev-en hun-dred ten
1-2 3-4 5

What sort of bizarre dialect are you speaking if “seven” or “hundred” are monosyllabic words for you?

>> No.12507110

>>12496980
Somehow, the 6-year-old's writing still tops /pol/

>> No.12507633

>>12501726
Formalists btfo

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>> No.12508827

>>12496959
>I've [...] wrote
Yeah, it shows

>> No.12508831

>>12501726
Why do Americans say "seven hundred ten" instead of "seven hundred and ten"? Do they understand how retarded they sound to the rest of the English-speaking world?

>> No.12508846

>>12508831
>t. monolingual an(gl)o

>> No.12508850

>>12496959
No it doesn't. This board needs better memes.

>> No.12509072

>>12508850
Fuck off

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>>12508831
Do you also say 55 as "fifty and five"?