/lit/ - Literature

itt: you're the midwit, not me!!

>>8608896

it's so sad because it's so true

>>8603147

You have some good ideas but your lack of writing technique really hinders what could potentially be a good novel — although that does come with experience.

A couple things come to mind when I read your little query. You lack sentence variety. Your sentence lengths feel off.

The way you write just feels awkward at times and I shouldn't have to be re-reading parts of a query because it didn't read properly in my head. This comes from your run-on sentences and bland writing style.

Also look up the em-dash. Learn it and apply it to your writing. it will help you in building emphasis on your writing.


AHHHH your story just bleeds high-school overachiever.

Usually if I get something like this I like to reply by suggesting that the author take some English writing lessons passed the rudimentary level. It's condescending enough to either teach you to take criticism or completely kill your desire to write a novel.