/lit/ - Literature

>>22756270
This doesn't matter much because I know you are using a pseudo-jap title for weeb factor, but proper kanji for war is 戦争, Japanese is a SVO language so when you use の with rune for sen like that, it comes out as sen's x. You'd probably want to name it 腐界の戦争 following subject verb object scheme. Just an assoooomption.

Also, while furigana is normal for titles, it's very rarely in katakana unless you are autistic and want to insist on some word's specific spelling despite it not being so. えでん would work here fine.

I am just saying this because I'm a language autist.

>>22521859
>this is an encyclopedia entry, not a story.
I wrote a single page short story in form of a travel guide on a cyberpunk unholy abomination of California where San Francisco, Fresno and LA sprawled so much it turned into a single city with crime rate so fucking high that it required cops in power armor to basically work around the clock clearing out megablocks (that they ignored until they had enough warrants on a pop) using an AI-powered instant identification system connected to their HUD.

Also, a law passed allowing cops to summarily execute felons with 3 felonies, including ones that weren't yet on records, but were caught committing on camera. So in other words, you could be a valid kill if you:
>were a felon (free bingo)
>had a gun (felony times two)
>pointed it at a cop (assault on an officer, felony times three)
A format ate the story though. Sad. Maybe it wasn't that good to begin with.

>>22306233
>the art of my characters?
I will measure my success as a writer in the amount of fanart my characters get.

>>22186911
A hooker is probably not going to have long, complex thoughts. If the whole thing was more like the last bit, it would make more sense. Hookers are usually hookers because they fucked up somewhere in life, or never had a chance.

It may seem more "poetic" and "better prose" to write it fancy, but it makes the reader think the character is smarter and has deeper thought process than it should.
>But I didn't feel satisfied. I felt numb. Hollow.
Fine for someone of average or higher than average intelligence and angsty.
>But it didn't feel good.
Probably more fitting for someone who takes dicks for a living.

Keep in mind I'm just a guy on the internet.

>>12859039
heh