/lit/ - Literature

>>19369197
This is actually my memoir, but somewhat fictionalized. Basically, my diary desu.
>We say Filipina for women
Hmm, okay. I forgot about the -o and -a signifying male and female. Filipino girl might come across as ladyboy, which I assure you she was not.
>This is a good observation but you might want to be less informal, as it grates against your voice throughout the piece
Thank you, this is very useful. It's hard to keep my "voice" consistent because my own mind is constantly going back and forth between vulgar simplicity and poetic, flowery prose.
>but it's all too serene at the moment
I suppose so. I never meant it to be an act of violence but a passionate sharing of flesh, a most intimate display of total surrender and carnal sacrifice in pursuit of a mutual body lust.
>What? Did you leave a bit out?
Yes, I screwed up and had to ctrl-z to bring back a bit. The missing writing is in pic related.
>This gives me Perfume vibes, you should read it.
Who is the author? I would be happy to. Smell is a very underrated sense by the general public.

Also, thank you, thank you, thank you anon! I really appreciate your response; it made my day.