/lit/ - Literature

>>11001975
>first line
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>making your own thread
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>>10439289
I was half tempted to say that this was bait to make me read it

>>10439330
>I can't spoil the story to tell you why it's badly written.
Then let's look at something you wrote which isn't even in the story itself:

>When your life was only but simple and plain and your mom's death hurts, and then uncover something life-changing, can I live to tell what really happened?
Just look at how you switch from "your" to "I", and how you run on with all these "and"s, repeatedly giving the reader the impression that you were done with the sentence but then slogging on; it's honestly atrocious. Your tense changes are probably bad too, not that I've read the story. There's always a way to use mistakes on purpose, but you won't know how to do that before learning how to just write without them, so just write without them. Don't try and pass off your shortcomings as artistic quirks.

>>10182383
1500 words is short. Around 3k words for me feels like a solid television episode, if you need a frame of reference, and if this is genre fiction you're probably going to try and be ambitions in the first chapter.

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