/lit/ - Literature

>>16279280
What are some comfy books for someone who's started learning Spanish? My mother tongue is Italian, and given how similar the languages are, I'm tempted to start with classics for teens, instead of children's literature.

>>16279740
Watamote.

>>16003200
>One could even confuse her for an effeminate looking guy
BASED

I haven't watched the series, so I don't know if you're writing about an alternative setting, but I agree with what >>16003305 said in regards to info-dumping.
In any case, opening the story with a long stretch about the character's life is old-fashioned. It's more engaging to use a short introduction, or start in medias res, and then trickle in details as they're needed. It's also more coherent with the "show, don't tell" principle: a long introduction is a whole lot of "telling", and very little "showing".

>She must have been really tired.

You went from omniscient narrator to documentary narrator.

>Around an hour later, the colour on Mikoto’s face changed a little, [it was like she was having a bad dream. The dream wasn’t actually bad but it was ominous,] she was floating in ether and there was nothing but emptiness.

Cut out the part between square brackets. Have faith in your writing and the reader, and don't explain yourself. Writing is like telling a joke: if you have to explain it, it's bad, and if it's explained, it's ruined.

>Suddenly a lot of books started surrounding her forming a cylindrical pattern around her. It was hard to grasp what these books were but they’re were probably 100,000 of them, not that she could keep count since she was busy panicking.

The ideas are nice, but it needs to sound less like notes about a story, and more like a story. Unless you're deliberately going for a pulpy style, where the narrator makes remarks to themselves -- but that only works for first person. For examples, look in the comments of this video: https://youtu.be/HiOY9EynHdw

You could rephrase the above as something like,

>Hundred of thousands of books, more than she could count, coiled around her in a cylindrical pattern.

Not sure what you mean with:
>It was hard to grasp what these books were
Are you talking about their titles or contents? Or the fact that they may not actually be books?

There's a few places where you're missing punctuation, or where you should be using a period instead of a comma, such as:

>Well[,] I tried to wake you up normally[,] but it wasn’t working[.] So I [had?] to try other methods[,] but forget about that, it’s getting late, don’t you have practice today?

Try reading these sentences out loud. If you find yourself using a long pause, then it's a sign you should be using a period.

>>15682746
>can tell the guy I'm arguing with will BTFO me if we keep going
>start samefag arguing with myself instead
>no external reply

Name me one (1) thing Marx was right about

>>15662128
>I'm a woman(inb4 tranny, no)
Yawn
I know there's a girls only imageboard, crystal cafe. Though it's probably boring as fuck.

How do people even tell that you're a woman?
Do you tell them outright? That's going against the whole point of an anonymous board.
Is it because you read stereotypically girly stuff? Then consider branching out and reading other things.
Are you just shitting up /lit/ for cheap (You)s and attention? It worked.