/lit/ - Literature

>>15692204
I loved this except for 'besmear.' The tone is casual and conversational except for that choice of word.

>>15692364
First paragraph I would change >But his uncle to: >Still, his uncle

In general I think several short sentences read better than one long one (I'm a pleb I suppose). IMO, first sentence, second paragraph, would flow nicer like this: "Elliot knew that Grandma has been modest. She was one of the many shy and repressed women of the twentieth century. Her life was steeped in shame in submission." The first sentence of the last paragraph: "this all seemed to serve as a sort of epilogue to a narrative" I'd drop entirely.

>>15693356
This anon gets it

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