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Anonymous Sat Sep 17 00:12:46 2016 No.8517667 [View]
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>>8516880
the initial alliteration is off-putting, which is frustrating, because you have strength of diction in the following lines

I get what you want to do, but maybe tone it down a tad.

>>8517517
first couplet is weak, second couplet is really strong
the repeated line is interesting and make me want to convince you to turn it into a palindromic piece (think Trethewey's poem Myth)

here's mine (pic-related)

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