/lit/ - Literature

>>17208299

Ye that was the bulk of my critique in my little poem.

>>17208277

While I also write in a similar poetic-prose synthesis, I find the key of elegnece in poesy is when the structure becomes invisible and Form becomes purely functional.

The repetition of words and the constant use of “-“ is just plain ugly and takes me out of the textual-aesthetic experience.

Here’s an example of my own prose for context. I think though reference filled and the like it’s still capable of producing a aesthetic experience and imo the rhyme and alliteration work with the image and emotion and not against it. Free to call it shit of course!