/lit/ - Literature

>>18206719
it's a little corny, clunky, and a bit tone-deaf, and lacking in depth, and instead of achieving the effect of spookiness, it just gives rise to the idea that you were describing a Kaiju. sorry if this is a little harsh.

>>18210402
Fuck the poetry, I hope your situation changes for the better, man.

>>18216189
why is her grave like fiery hands?
there's just not enough meat in this, you need more meat.

>>18238743
phew, hardcore. very very good, witty, well structured, and impressive for off the top.

ok, here's my shit.

also, here's one for fun i did when i was in love

She's got style,
she's got grace,
she's got apples in her face,
she's wayne brady