/lit/ - Literature

Hello e/lit/es,
Every time i start reading something i get so bored after 5 pages despite wanting to continue reading what the author has to say. Eventually i stop and repeat with another book. It seems like such a grind to get through something page after page that it becomes overwhelming and i give up. I know it shouldn't be like this but i can't find the solution. How do i read more?

>>16048235
Based and Islampilled

>>15065438
I gotta confess,I read through this thinking; why do I care about the color of this smoke?
This piece doesn't seem as thight and emotional as I think it should be, it just seem... descriptive?
Also, as a general adivce, if you write fiction don't post a piece of it to be critiqued with random made up words, flashy names, races which we know nothing of. If you want as to get a glimpse of your world, you can do it- without expecting that writing "Volratharian" meant anything to us besides a tiring read. >>15065322
This is very powerful imaginery, very direct and I kinda like it, I feel the listing takes a lot of power away. I would keep my descriptions more tight and maybe even a little more flowery but you're onto something.

Mine's pretty short, it's a poem:

You’ll hear in the deepest second of the night
A machine:
A quiet hum,
The sound of iron biting itself
And a hearthless drum.

The ground will shake, time will freeze and, shining, a light
Will guide
The lonely beggar,
The fallen kings and queens
And peasants in between.

In this restless moment they’ll reach,
And touch, and scream
At the Mother of their dreams;
Forgetting, waking up, the horror they have seen,
When the flow of thigs repeats

It hums, and beats, the smoke of memories
Filling up the ceiling of reality
Poking a little hole