/lit/ - Literature

>>13998710

>>14002116 here. One last thing.

Call it a hunch, but the whole kid voice thing combined with the no quotation marks thing reminds me a lot of Aimee Bender. Pic related is from Marzipan, itself from The Girl in the Flammable Skirt. Aimee Bender is superb at stepping into a character and letting her humor and values shine through her characters' action and voice.

If you aren't gonna include the adult voice at all, you may want to ditch the whole personal essay route and just go full-on short story. Treat the characters more like puppets, amping up certain body language and sensory details so your existential underbelly brims closer and closer to the surface without ever having to resort to merely "tell"-ing it. You definitely have the chops. Have fun with it! Go crazy!