/lit/ - Literature

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just trying to gauge if this is enjoyable so far to anyone
I know one anon seemed to like it, but I just want to check to make sure that wasn't an anomaly

>>19379499
Wow, thanks for reading all of that anon, your feedback means a lot.
Icarus is a weird guy, I wanted to write him like someone that tells you their life story on the train, insufferably dramatic and optimistic, and so I thought to *try* and do that by him waxing on, but yeah, there are probably better ways to go about it.
I'm glad you liked the eye guy! I was afraid people were going to think he was lame or "now you're just getting ridiculous" about it.
But yeah, that's actually something I'm struggling with right now, is the whole dynamic of "suddenly" "instantly" and how to make these things snap more. Just say them outright? That might be the best way to go now that I think about it, maybe.

Good luck on your editing man. The editing round for this is gonna give me the heebie jeebies.