/lit/ - Literature

>>21411800
>Lovecraft is unironically one of the most overrated 20th century US authors. He's not bad, but massively overrated
He's a weird case. I would say he was a second rate writer but a genius dreamer.

His purple prose is less offensive because it matches the subject matter so well. 'Congeries of luminescent orbs' is grotesque, but if he described the same as 'a bunch of glowing balls' it wouldn't be spooky at all.

>>20924317
You're really bouncing around between characters, images, and scenes. Cousin, courtier, husband, space, mars, jupiter, earth, the future, court, space, ruins, a broom closet on a ship, a luxury room, etc... It's like looking in a tumble dryer.

It's very rapid fire, giving the reader no chance to fully picture anything. Either pick one specific memory to monologue about, or proceed in chronological order through her trip. Decide what elements are important and cut the rest. Weave one theme or sense or metaphor through the whole thing to tie it all together -- for example, the sounds of these places, since that seems prominent in these descriptions.

>>20453141
All sci fi is set in the 'now but more so.' That's why old scifi feels so dated. Might as well just admit it.