/lit/ - Literature

>>10124643 (Me)
https://pastebin.com/2jM4hNZp
Took some of my prof's and an anon's suggestions into account for the first chapter, didn't touch the second yet. Look up a text-difference checker on google if you want to jump to the major revisions; I tried making the narrator describe his past life and downfall a little more to generate more interest and display his character more clearly. I also changed the beginning of the third day a bit and had the boy do exercises while the narrator tried to determine the boy's motivations. The changes are a little underwhelming (because I've got shit to do), but nonetheless strike me as a direct improvement over what I'd originally posted.


>>10127606
I might read over it again, but there probably isn't much for me to say at this point.