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There you go.
Garret was a little impatient, but he held himself still nevertheless, foot stomping the ground like a startled rabbit.
This is the last time.
Mom-
I said this is the last time, I will hear no more of this, you hear? Eleana dunked the towel in the bowl again, squeezing blood and water out as she brought it up to his nose once more.
This isnt ending anytime soon, you know, Garret. One of these days youre going to have to change.
But they started it!
And so when will you end it?
When I beat them.
Oh? And what if theyll come back the next day?
Then Ill He was squeamish to say what next, Eleana made sure to keep his face up to hers.
Youll what? she said, hand eagre to slap the next word that comes out of his mouth.
Nothing, he said.
Eleana continued rubbing his nose. Good.
Garret resigned himself to his silence, but in his mind a hundred hails and furries raged about like a thunderstorm, little clasps of wind passing through the seethe of his unsteady breathing.
Even if you did, Eleana surprisingly continued. You wouldve just brought the wrath of their friends and families would you have done them too?
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And suppose you even got them too, she interrupted him. Would you get their friends and families, and their friends and families, and the friends and families after them, until youve got nothing but enemies all over the world?
I dont care, he said.
You wouldnt care to light the whole world on fire for just a little vengeance?
No! he said.
Then thank the Watcher youre still a child, for youd make a worthy adversary, indeed. She picked up his scrawny arms.
I dont care, he said again.
One day you will. She sighed. One day you will. Youre stronger than you look Garret, but this isnt where your strength belongs. You should use your powers to help people, bring them up from their squalor not go off to make more for yourself.
Am I not entitled to use my strength to defend myself?!
Yes, you are. But thats not what Im saying. What I AM saying is that
Eleana! said a voice from outside. Come here and help me!
Just, she sighed again, just stay out of trouble for now, ok? We will speak more of this tonight, little man. Dont think youre getting away with this.
Eleana turned and went. Garret smiled and nabbed the bloody towel. Oh but I will, he said. He went out through the backdoor of their house, the bloody towel in tow of his pants. He was going back to pay an overdue debt, and this time he made sure to bring back interest