Porn Thread

[Anonymous No.3360930]

This is the thread for those who want to draw pornographic art and sexual imagery.
Post your WIPs and finished art to get critique or feedback.

[Anonymous No.3360934]

[Anonymous No.3360941]

la creatura..

[Anonymous No.3360942]

>>3360930
you had to use the shittest porn pic on ic didn't you op?

[Anonymous No.3360944]

>>3360930
Working on this atm.

[Anonymous No.3360949]

>>3360942
this thread is a bully free zone
thread was down for a whole day i gave you guys a chance

[Anonymous No.3360953]

>>3360944
hey bbc! how are you?

[Anonymous No.3360956]

>>3360941
fixed

[Anonymous No.3360966]

>>3360953
Just doing the old boring drawing stuff.

[Anonymous No.3360967]

>>3360944
BBC take me under your wing, be my tutor, be my sensei. I can't pay you but I promise I'm a cute girl.

[Anonymous No.3360970]

>>3360966
it looks great though
>>3360967
I am a girl and i want bbc to be my god

[Anonymous No.3360972]

>>3360956
fk u

[Anonymous No.3360977]

>>3360956
>Goblin futa
Ah, I see you're a man of culture as well...

[Anonymous No.3360982]

>>3360970
>worshiping the man instead of admiring his craft.
way to be a creep.

[Anonymous No.3360994]

>>3360970
Thanks.
Also, we all know there are no girls on the interwebz. Nice try!

[Anonymous No.3360996]

>>3360994
femanons exist, I know because I am one

[Anonymous No.3361001]

>>3360944
BBC are you taking commissions? I’d give you $700 for a single.

[Anonymous No.3361008]

>>3360996
>She was born without a penis
loling @ ur life

[Anonymous No.3361013]

>>3361001
I'm closed for the public atm. I don't think I'll reopen anytime soon.

[Anonymous No.3361023]

@Professional porn artists

How much do you charge for commissions?

[Anonymous No.3361026]

>>3360930
Blog for this guy?

[Anonymous No.3361039]

I posted a version of this in the previous thread, and made some changes.

[Anonymous No.3361077]

>>3361026
oh, cmon, stop shilling your shitty art already.

[Anonymous No.3361079]

>>3361077
Blog for your art?

[Anonymous No.3361081]

>>3361079
or at least don't be butthurt.

[Anonymous No.3361092]

>tfw no one talented is a macrophile
this is why I must learn

[Anonymous No.3361098]

>>3361077
hi, i started the thread with my art to get it started but I'm not
>>3361026

I don't have a blog anyway. Also, rude.

[Anonymous No.3361099]

>>3360876

Reposting this here because I guess this is the thred.

[Anonymous No.3361106]

>>3361099
her head is closer to the viewer than the blue haired girl so yes it's too small. They are on top of eachother so their heads should be the same size anyway

[Anonymous No.3361109]

>>3361106

Okay. I was working off of two different references for each girl so that's what created the difference in head sizes. I'll be more careful next time.

[Anonymous No.3361119]

>>3361099
Awful in every way. Work on your fundamentals. Especially your line work technique.

[Anonymous No.3361121]

BBC what's your blog or gallery?

[Anonymous No.3361223]

[Anonymous No.3361224]

Edgy girl + some stringys

[Anonymous No.3361231]

>>3361039
Her head is tiny.

[Anonymous No.3361245]

hands look like dog shit but I haven't drawn futa before-- does the dick look weird?

[Anonymous No.3361247]

>>3361231
Agreed, will play around with it

[Anonymous No.3361250]

>>3361245
The boobs are too high, but the dick is cute

[Anonymous No.3361252]

>>3361092
>tfw really like micro/macro/vore/feet/guro just because it's fun to draw and not out of any sexual gratification
Sucks because I'm too poor to draw leisurely and 99% of my art is commissioned. I keep saying I'm open for it but so far I keep getting vanilla requests.

[Anonymous No.3361254]

>>3361245
If that's the jawline, you need to put it much lower.

[Anonymous No.3361258]

>>3361252
I can see how it would be fun to draw a skyline and just insert a waifu front and center

[Anonymous No.3361266]

>>3361258
Well no that's not the fun of it. It's really easy to come up with dynamic poses and interesting perspectives and composition when you're doing requests like that.
I think I most enjoy drawing the inside of mouths. Should I just follow my dreams and make a vore account somewhere? Where is the scene for that kind of art?

[Anonymous No.3361277]

>>3361266
Ask /d/. Most shit i see is from
deviantart or tumblr

[Anonymous No.3361306]

>>3361266
Anything alternative, inquire /d/ !

[Anonymous No.3361374]

>>3361013
Would you do a single for $1000?

[Anonymous No.3361421]

>>3361374
Jesus christ man I'll do something for a fraction of that price,

[Anonymous No.3361428]

>>3361421
After posting a image of that retard, I will decline on that alone.

[Anonymous No.3361431]

>>3361428
lol?
who is he

[Anonymous No.3361445]

>>3361428
who is he? i dont have many reaction images

[Anonymous No.3361477]

>>3361121
Just google BBC Chan. You'll find all my galleries (tumblr, twitter, HF).

[Anonymous No.3361483]

>>3361374
A complex image for 1k would take me like 30 hours. I stopped doing stuff like that, cause it's too stressful. I prefer doing 3-5 hours sketches.
Btw, 1k is an unreasonable price for me. My most expensive artwork was 320 EUR (about 360 USD at the time) and it had 4 characters.
Money is not the issue here, anon. It's the time I have to put into this kind of art that burns me out. Sorry.

[Anonymous No.3361494]

>>3361445
sam hyde

[Anonymous No.3361574]

>>3361039
>>3361231
resized her head, touch up her arms and redid the hair

[Anonymous No.3361576]

>>3361098
pls make a tumblr, I'd really like to follow you

[Anonymous No.3361643]

>you will never squeeze Mami's milkies

[Anonymous No.3361649]

>>3361092
>>3361252
>tfw most decent macro/macro/vore art is furry shit that I can't stand.

[Anonymous No.3361652]

>>3361428
>After posting a image of that retard, I will decline on that alone.

Let me guess, you backed Dark Skyes, didn't you?

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3361671]

A WIP featuring Pit and Palutena. When the grayscale feels right, I will begin using gradient maps.

[Anonymous No.3361679]

>>3361671
Pits arms and hands are awful. Noodle arm/hand.

[Anonymous No.3361686]

>>3361671
Also her left leg connecting to her hips is very weird. Looks disjointed.

[Anonymous No.3361709]

[Anonymous No.3361712]

>>3361709
Looking much better, her hair line is encroaching on her face though. Particularly her left eye, pull it back just slightly. Not too much.

[Anonymous No.3361780]

What do i do once I have a sketch?
I have ever only done pencil and paper sketching.
I assume I do line art but I hate how clean the lines look.
Looking for guidance/nextsteps

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3361784]

>>3361686
Her left our the viewer's left?

[Anonymous No.3361791]

>>3361784
I explicitly said her left to avoid this exact problem.

[Anonymous No.3361809]

Gib me the stiffy uh

[Anonymous No.3361811]

I made this as joke for my friend

[Anonymous No.3361812]

>>3361811
Friend's oc just in case you wanna see

[Anonymous No.3361813]

>>3361809
Why has the torso and hips merged together? Are you drawing a mutant or something? You need to work on the foundation of the pose, as you’re not thinking it through.

[Anonymous No.3361815]

Probably my best work so far.

[Anonymous No.3361818]

>>3361421
fuck is toast

[Anonymous No.3361821]

>>3361815
You’re drawing and rendering in a far too concentrated manner. As a result the limbs look out place and don’t conform to the body well. Also, where are her back muscles?

[Anonymous No.3361876]

>>3361811
Great joke. Hahahah oh wow get a load of this great joke guys! HAHAHAHA

[Anonymous No.3361877]

>>3361815
Her torso looks all twisted and messed up senpai. Did you skip figure drawing fundies?

[Anonymous No.3361879]

[Anonymous No.3361899]

what im working on

[Anonymous No.3361912]

>>3360930
kinda furryish but not that furry dog boy i made

[Anonymous No.3361914]

>>3361483
Amazing you have the self-control to turn such an offer away. Honestly kind of curious if you've just had bad experiences in the past with this sort of thing?

You should charge a bit more for your work dude don't undersell. Even if you only increase by 5%, you deserve way more.

Props to you for sticking to your guns and knowing your limits though, a lot of people don't.

[Anonymous No.3361927]

>>3361914
As I mentioned, doing complex artworks that require tens of hours are much more stressful to me. That's the main reason I don't do that kind of things anymore. Also, I'm not doing art to get rich off it. I just want to have financial security with a job I'm really passionate about.

[Anonymous No.3361939]

>>3361815
those fingers

[Anonymous No.3361974]

>>3361428
>HEH I'LL PAY $1000 FOR A PIC
>nevermind plebian!!!!!!!!!!!!!

yeah i bet you were

[Anonymous No.3361979]

>>3360930
pg 1/16

[Anonymous No.3361983]

>>3361974
dude, just this statement alone is pathetic enough to be a turnoff kek.
>>3361421
>Jesus christ man I'll do something for a fraction of that price,

the guy obviously wants BBC's art. why would they accept an offer from a random desperate d/ic/k?

[Anonymous No.3362052]

>>3361979
wip of pg 2

[Anonymous No.3362053]

>>3362052
forgot pic

[Anonymous No.3362057]

>>3361979
HAHAHAHA THE ARMS, WTF ARE THOSE ARMS?

[Anonymous No.3362060]

>>3362057
chill

[Anonymous No.3362061]

>>3361912
Blog? Commissions?

[Anonymous No.3362073]

>>3361979
>>3362053
You absolutely need Loomis. What you're doing here is really really bad.
And please, don't ask for redlines. Redlining this would mean to redraw the entire thing from scratch.

[Anonymous No.3362093]

>>3362073
Thats not critique. Or good bait.

[Anonymous No.3362197]

>>3362061
here u go. Me and my gf share these accounts so if u see variation in style thats why.
https://soggytoaststudios.tumblr.com/
https://www.instagram.com/soggytoast_studios/?hl=en

[Anonymous No.3362201]

>>3362061
we also dont really have commissions setup rn but we will in the near future.

[Anonymous No.3362286]

Critique is welcome. I think my biggest issue right now is the lack of my ability to communicate the action, or get a good viewing angle on the important parts.

[Anonymous No.3362302]

>>3362093
That's no decent art either.
The guy needs fundamental training. Critiquing that beginner tier garbage would mean literal hand holding or spoon feeding.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3362429]

Thoughts on how to fix the hands? When I get back, I will be cycling through videos and drawing them through the remainder of the week until I can draw them properly.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3362430]

>>3361671
Also, a little better?

[Anonymous No.3362447]

>>3362429
>>3362430
Work on foreshortening, man. Your perspective knowledge is very very bad.

[Anonymous No.3362520]

>>3362447
Agreed >>3362430

Left thigh seems to be too short, better than before. I never noticed it before but her right thigh is a bit short and the rest of her right leg is too damn small. That is some terrible perspective. Still need to fix Pit’s right arm and hand

[Anonymous No.3362576]

>>3362302
K

[Anonymous No.3362634]

>>3362430

[Anonymous No.3362718]

boob-flop look alright? worried about how it connects to her pec. feels off but I can't say for sure.

>>3362286
that arm covering her head seems like a bad choice to me. it's an interesting idea, but with so much of the action already obscured, it might frustrate viewers.

[Anonymous No.3362722]

>>3362718

It's the head that you have to worry about. Her head looks like it's cocked back and this looks unnatural.

Add in the underside of the chin to correct this.

[Anonymous No.3362727]

>>3362722
oh yeah, i see it now. thanks!

[Anonymous No.3362776]

>>3361092
Ain't macro just big shit? Stepping on/eating small shit?

[Anonymous No.3362778]

>>3361983
>dude, just this statement alone is pathetic enough to be a turnoff kek.
Good thing for your career this is an anonymous board, eh? Because you seem like a whiny little bitch kek.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3362793]

>>3362634
>>3362447
>>3362520

Will detail the corrections tomorrow morning before my shift. But if anything still looks off, fire away.

[Anonymous No.3362815]

>>3362793
Not sure what your plan here is for the final but in case you aren't doing it, I think if you're going this heavy on values you probably want to tone down the lineart. Like particularly in places like Pit's abs it should probably be a darker tone of grey rather than pure black.

[Anonymous No.3362857]

>>3362793
Dude just move on. You're spending too much time on one drawing. Its been 2 weeks.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3362862]

>>3362815
Thanks for the tip.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3362865]

>>3362857
Actually, I have been going through a variety of commissions. I only recent got back into this piece as of recently, as well as my animation.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3362871]

This is my main personal project right now.

[Anonymous No.3362941]

>>3362718
update. think I fixed the boob and the head. maybe.

[Anonymous No.3362980]

>>3362941
Looks painful.

[Anonymous No.3362983]

>>3362980
the breast or the neck? or both?

[Anonymous No.3362993]

>>3362941
she's so exaggeratedly twisted it looks inhuman. it fails if you're aiming for anatomical accuracy, but it's a fun picture.

[Anonymous No.3362999]

>>3362993
ooh okay. yeah it's a bit exaggerated. been drawing such stiff figures lately -- this was an attempt at a dynamic pose.

[Anonymous No.3363004]

>>3362993
ooh okay. yeah it's a bit exaggerated. been drawing such stiff figures lately -- this was an attempt to break out of that with a really dynamic pose. guess I overcompensated.

[Anonymous No.3363051]

>>3361223
Please tell me theres a place i can find more.

[Anonymous No.3363167]

>>3363051
There are a couple of blogus, if that's what you're asking for, on pixiv and twitter, the former being the main one while also getting less frequent updates. There's not much content like this on them though, but they surely don't lack in legs and feet.

[Anonymous No.3363216]

>>3362778
are you seriously assuming this board could influence anyone's career in any kind of way? LMAO

[Anonymous No.3363219]

>>3363216
Stop it, anon! You're just spewing lies now!

[Anonymous No.3363235]

>>3362941
That looks pretty good but unless she is ms elastic you are doing it wrong
>>3362857
Shit nigga don't discourage people like that

classic artists could spend months in a painting

I know that professional people working on projects say it's usually better to screw up and move on but there is no reason to not try not to fix a piece when there is no deadline

>>3362871
the lineart in the feet is weird, random lines appear and dissapear.

[Anonymous No.3363241]

>>3362053
inks done

[Anonymous No.3363243]

>>3363241
>> showering naked like a slut
U wot, gurl?

[Anonymous No.3363249]

>>3363241
the first image in the left feels stiff from the waist up

a good rule of thumb is that if something feels off, try recreating that pose to check what is off

[Anonymous No.3363296]

>>3363241
>> showering naked like a slut

[Anonymous No.3363342]

[Anonymous No.3363349]

>>3363241
the butthole doesnt go that low

[Anonymous No.3363373]

>>3363342
Sweet style, but the foreshortening/structure on her lower back-pelvis-butt area is not conveyed well enough imo.I would add a line to completely delineate her right buttock.

[Anonymous No.3363379]

>>3363373
her LEFT* buttock.
Sorry for the blunder.

[Anonymous No.3363565]

>>3363241
I shower naked. 0_0.. am i a slut too?
Have i been doing it wrong?

[Anonymous No.3363567]

>>3363565
I used to shower in my underwear because there was no lock on our bathroom door.

There doesn't seem to be a lock (or even a door) in >>3363241, so it checks out. Link is a slut.

[Anonymous No.3363589]

>>3363567
I, uh...
Cool reasoning there, sis.

[Anonymous No.3363597]

>>3363567
But most people shower naked in the gym too. And there is only a curtain.

[Anonymous No.3363601]

>>3363597
>Gym rats and cardio bunnies aren't sluts

[Anonymous No.3363619]

>>3363597
I just live in Canada (not particularly liberal about nudity here) and most facility showers I've been to are communal, no curtains.

>>3363567
lold

[Anonymous No.3363622]

>>3363619
I mean, communal, no curtains, plus everyone is naked. Men bring in their little kids, too, nobody seems to gaf.

[Anonymous No.3363628]

>>3363622
That's what it's like here in the UK (in the gyms and pools I've been to).

[Anonymous No.3363635]

BBC-Chan, is Calixa your OC? She's my favorite OC, tbqhfam.

[Anonymous No.3363663]

>>3363635
>she

[Anonymous No.3363671]

>>3363635
Nope. OC of a friend. I only helped design and draw her.

[Anonymous No.3363672]

>>3363628
how does that work now that all the rapefugees are invading?

[Anonymous No.3363678]

>>3363672
take your cancer back to /pol/.

[Anonymous No.3363685]

>>3362941
It looks like well drawn pieces of 5 different pictures mashed together. Like I said it's well drawn, but the proportions are all off. Look at the size and placement of her ass and hips. Then look at her legs. Her head is also massive.

[Anonymous No.3363686]

>>3362871
The guy's hair changes to red in one of the last frames.

[Anonymous No.3363689]

>>3363241
Hyrule would not have showers or running water and plumbing and all that shit., they would take baths wouldn't they.
0/10 broken immersion.
also wtf is that door? its just some lines on the wall.. you call that done?

[Anonymous No.3363692]

>>3363685
damn, it's that bad? i'm not seeing any proportion issues with the legs or head -- though now that im looking at it with fresh eyes the exaggerated twist looks obviously wrong.

[Anonymous No.3363814]

>>3362941
>>3363685
okay i see what you're saying about the head size now. reduced it a bit and it looks better. if you've got a redline for the legs and hips issue i'd love to see it.

anyway, gonna go ahead and call this done and move on. thanks for the crits everyone.

[Anonymous No.3363824]

It's not finished...

[Anonymous No.3363847]

>>3363565
I bet you wash yourself with your hands too when you shower!!!
You promiscuous fanny shaker!!!
Lmao.

[Anonymous No.3363863]

done

[Anonymous No.3363897]

>>3363824
>Dat milf sideboob

[Anonymous No.3364014]

>>3363824
Do you have a tumblr?

[Anonymous No.3364020]

>>3364014
yes

[Anonymous No.3364049]

>>3364020
URL, pls?

[Anonymous No.3364050]

>>3364049
no

[Anonymous No.3364055]

>>3363863

I think maybe the eyes should be a bit more level. Her head isn't really tilted so it's a bit strange having one start halfway up the other.

[Anonymous No.3364110]

How long should I learn to/practice drawing before trying to jump into lewd art?

[Anonymous No.3364111]

>>3363689
The door is there. It will have a wood texture on it. Theres no screentones on the page yet. I'll post the page when theyre added.

>>3363565
Yes.

[Anonymous No.3364648]

I did some nier stuff. Like the style, or should I stick to western stuff and stop pursuing the animu dream?
Any other critique is appreciated as well of course.
1/2

[Anonymous No.3364649]

>>3364648
>I did some nier stuff. Like the style, or should I stick to western stuff and stop pursuing the animu dream?
>Any other critique is appreciated as well of course.
2/2

[Anonymous No.3364667]

>>3364648
I don't know why, but I would imagine the pounding she received from that cock would have resulted in a more swollen/engorged vagina.

Further I think the perspective on it is wrong, and it may be a case of the perspective being overlooked from the tits down. Just looks flat and off.

You got it down pat with >>3364649, so I'd suggest going over the first one and getting the perspective right. It doesn't look like she is laying down but is sliding off of a wall.

[Anonymous No.3364673]

>>3362865
you get paid for that? LOL

[Anonymous No.3364706]

>>3364014
Sorry, I don't currently. I'm just testing the waters so to speak

[Anonymous No.3364707]

>>3364667
I completely agree about the perspective. But I don't really care that much about mistakes like these honestly.
I realized stuff like this, when it comes to porn, is as important as cracks on a rendered wall.
It's cool to try to be a perfectionist, but lately I started embracing mistakes and instead I focus on speed and appeal.
That's all that matters if you are doing commercial illustration imo.

My mantra:
https://youtu.be/lRtV-ugIT0k

[Anonymous No.3364709]

Yeah, the anatomy is not great...

[Anonymous No.3364711]

>>3364709
Whoops, probably should have shrunk the file a bit

[Anonymous No.3364716]

>>3360930

Anyone else working on Peach commissions?

[Anonymous No.3364717]

>>3364709
Anatomy is not a problem. However the perspective on her/his right leg is off. You want to make that leg look like it's seen from above, not from the side. Look at the left leg and do a similar thing with the right one.

[Anonymous No.3364777]

did this for fun

[Anonymous No.3364783]

>>3364707
It doesn’t have to be perfect, but it doesn’t stop you from revisiting this and making it better. Pump some life into it, it comes off as something that someone will see and move on from. The second one gets someone to stop a look longer than 5 seconds. I don’t get that same volume in the first as I do the second even with perspective discounted.

[Anonymous No.3364804]

>>3364783
Oh, I know what you mean, but all these artworks to me are small experiments. I learn from my mistakes and then move on.
I revisit my old work a lot and try to understand where I should work on for improvement.
I never go back to an old artwork and fix it. I don't have the time to do this.

[Anonymous No.3364822]

>>3364648
>>3364649
I love the style and the pics overall. Dont stop pursuing bbc-chan

[Anonymous No.3364844]

Do you guys jerk you meat with your own drawings?

[Anonymous No.3364849]

>>3364777
>fun
>patreon watermark
You either stole this or are lying anon

[Anonymous No.3364855]

>>3364648
>>3364649
Looks the same as all your other shit

[Anonymous No.3364859]

>>3364855
Then you are either bad at observing or a crab.

[Anonymous No.3364864]

>>3364849
Are you implying someone can't draw for fun if they do art professionally or half time?

[Anonymous No.3364875]

>>3364864
yes

[Anonymous No.3364876]

>>3364875
Then I guess you don't do art professionally or half time and you have no idea what you're talking about.

[Anonymous No.3364886]

>>3364859
sorry but what makes than "animu" compared to all your other stuff. Cant even see the eyes.

[Anonymous No.3364911]

>>3364886
That wasn't my reply. And yeah, you make a very good point LOL. I thought about the eyes not being visible only later. I guess it boils down to the structure of the face (dot/line noses and the simplified mouths, exaggerated head vs body proportions, etc). The whole line art style is probably more cartoon-ish too.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3365271]

Going into colors first this time and seeing where things go. Fire the data cannons upon it, with impunity.

[Anonymous No.3365303]

>>3361979
awful arm anatomy

[Anonymous No.3365324]

>>3365271
Eyes should be spaced further apart.

[Anonymous No.3365349]

>>3364911
I like both style of your stuff. Just do what you enjoy most or mix it up every now and then. You're clearly capable of that so no reason not to

[Anonymous No.3365358]

>>3364649
Fuck I love angles like this, awesome to see it from you

[Anonymous No.3365364]

I feel pretty uninspired, would anyone mind redlining this ?

[Anonymous No.3365402]

>>3365364
i like it

[Anonymous No.3365429]

WIP

[Anonymous No.3365432]

>>3365429
nice posing -- what's up with her cervix? are the two holes a weird species thing?

Also her hands look a little blah, like they're not holding as much tension as the should for what they're doing.

[Anonymous No.3365456]

>>3365432
Imo that's her himen.

[Anonymous No.3365485]

>>3365432
FUCKING VIRGIN DETECTED

[Anonymous No.3365489]

>>3365432
That's a variant of hymen Anon.

lmao men.

[Anonymous No.3365490]

Could this pass as lewd material?

[Anonymous No.3365494]

>>3365432
H Y M E N

[Anonymous No.3365502]

>>3365429
>>3365456
>>3365485
>>3365494
It doesnt look like its her hymen at all. It looks like its like a centimeter thick and has 2 perfect holes.

[Anonymous No.3365585]

>>3365490
Cropped it, feels lewder this way.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3365686]

>>3365271
Quick update.

[Anonymous No.3365725]

It’s not super nsfw, but here’s something I’m working on

[Anonymous No.3365738]

>>3365494
oh... oh my god, i tihkn im gonna vomit

[Anonymous No.3365786]

[Anonymous No.3365788]

Slight update

[Anonymous No.3365790]

[Anonymous No.3365803]

>>3365788
twinhole still looks bad.

>>3365790
chisel brush masterrace

[Anonymous No.3365821]

>>3365788
That "hymen" resemble a pig's snout

I would go with using >>3365494's ref

[Anonymous No.3366265]

[Anonymous No.3366352]

Feedback wanted on pose, perspective, lighting, background, effects, etc.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3366400]

>>3365686
Update

[Anonymous No.3366426]

a shitpost gone too far

[Anonymous No.3366460]

>>3360942
>shittest
It's not bad though, it just has a bit of uncanny style to it, but it's not bad on a technical level

[Anonymous No.3366461]

>>3361266
>I think I most enjoy drawing the inside of mouths. Should I just follow my dreams and make a vore account somewhere?
I don't get it I thought vore was about people being eaten, but apparently some people just like seeing girls eat and their mouths?

[Anonymous No.3366464]

>>3363342
>>3365788
more to come in these demon auction series I hope

[Anonymous No.3366472]

>>3365364
I really like it, I don't see any glaring mistakes either, except the boobs could use some more work in how they are shaped

[Anonymous No.3366500]

>>3365788
Why the pig nose anon?

[Anonymous No.3366585]

>>3366500
dude youre so funny, ahahaha im laughing ahahaaha so damnn funnyyyy it only takes a genius to see the pig nose! aahahahaha ahahahaha you even gave it a suit ahahahahaha heres your (you) ahahahahah

[Anonymous No.3366600]

>>3366585
Draw better vaginas boi

Plus the upper half of the torso looks trash

[Anonymous No.3366624]

lol you guys are seriously vindictive, go make something and improve

[Anonymous No.3366639]

>>3364050
bls

[Anonymous No.3366646]

>>3366600
have you never heard of that kind of vagina? look it up anon, its a common thing

[Anonymous No.3366651]

>>3366646
and I wonder why that isnt more commonly represented.......Hmmmmmmmm

[Anonymous No.3366652]

>>3366646
I've been addicted to porn for 13 years and have seen tens of thousands of vaginae and I agree that it looks weird.

Do you have a reference?

[Anonymous No.3366656]

>>3365788
the type of vagina you're drawing doesn't look like a neatly symmetrical pig's nose. think of it as one opening with a little remaining bridge of flesh atretched across the middle.

here, i made you this.

[Anonymous No.3366663]

hi, i'm looking for someone to do art for my game. i can't pay you yet but i can put your name in the credits and i expect it would be pretty good exposure, maybe when i've made a name for myself and i make the sequal i can pay you. anyway i'm not sure what i'm looking for so reply to this post with your art, if i like it i'll reply, sorry if i don't reply i've got high standards. nothing so far in this thread as really stood out to me, but i don't mind if you reply with a different picture, maybe it will appeal to me more. good luck

[Anonymous No.3366665]

>>3366663
lmao

[Anonymous No.3366666]

>>3366666

[Anonymous No.3366667]

>>3366652

[Anonymous No.3366670]

>>3366663
>Actual Cancer
Porn games dont make money without art, the artists worth so much more than you lmao

[Anonymous No.3366672]

>>3366667
That looks nothing like what you drew. See >>3366656

[Anonymous No.3366673]

>>3366667
Anon should just draw a normal vagina, stop all the hassle of discussing the accuracy of non-appealing ones

[Anonymous No.3366674]

>>3366667
that's fucking disgusting, i have never seen a vaj like any of those

[Anonymous No.3366676]

>>3366665
>>3366670
>lmao
in both posts. samefag much?

and by the way i'm not making a porn game. i just thought i'd give some of the shitty tranny loving degenerates in this thread a chance, i thought they might at least be good at art, well, looks like they're just assholes

[Anonymous No.3366682]

>>3366676
Didnt samefag so cant say for the other guy but for me there was no other way to easily say "Holy shit this guys an actual retard , if I met them in the street i bet i'd do a double take to have a chuckle to myself"

[Anonymous No.3366683]

>>3366676
Also nobody is ever and i mean ever going to do the art for nothing but exposure an entire game

[Anonymous No.3366684]

>>3366676
>two people typing lmao must be samefag
no they're both laughing at you
porn artists make money more easily than any other type or artists, you HAVE TO PAY US, no good porn artist is going to work for exposure or just to get a credit in your shitty indie game

[Anonymous No.3366685]

>>3366682
fuck off degenerate cuck, why don't you be quiet and let the adults do business. unlike you i'm sure there are people in this thread who know what exposure can do for one's career

[Anonymous No.3366686]

>>3360949
SHiiit this is amazing, you got a blog/site?

[Anonymous No.3366688]

>>3366685
>what exposure can do for one's career
meanwhile..
>i've got high standards. nothing so far in this thread as really stood out to me
If someone drew better than every single other artist in this thread, they wouldn't have trouble receiving business and wouldn't sink several WEEKS of work into a game for free for 'exposure'. Do you know how porn artists work? They don't actually need 'exposure', they market to small communities online and usually do so by directly communicating with clients. Dream on, the only person who would do your game for free is people with dA-tier skills.

[Anonymous No.3366689]

>>3366685
>Not providing any proof yourself to show what standard you will be working at
Sulk in your incompetence closet homosexual

[Anonymous No.3366693]

>>3366685
>exposure can do for one's career

[Anonymous No.3366696]

>>3360941
This is what goblins would look like if one ever showed up in Alfie and fucked someone.

[Anonymous No.3366699]

>>3360956
...wait no, I changed my mind, THIS is what goblins would look like if one ever showed up in Alfie and fucked someone.

[Anonymous No.3366701]

>>3366685
Imagine someone expecting a coder to code their entire game 'for exposure'. See why that's unlikely?

[Anonymous No.3366710]

>>3366688
>>3366693
yawn, even good artists need exposure

>>3366689
i don't have art yet, the fuck do you want me to show you lol? i can tell the story if you want

>>3366701
actually my friend is doing the coding for free so i don't see the problem. it's an indie game, what, you want me to pay you a salary? get real

[Anonymous No.3366714]

>>3366710
Only thing we want is for you to fuck off, kiddo.

[Anonymous No.3366716]

God can we get a janitor in here? Isn't people trolling for free art frowned upon on /ic/ in general?

Leave us alone or at least go ask in >>3365246, if any sucker is going to bite they'll be there.

[Anonymous No.3366718]

>>3366710
Are you saying you literally have nothing that you could use to demonstrate coding?

No outline of the game with placeholder art?

Literally nothing?
and you expect somebody to trust you with their time?

[Anonymous No.3366721]

>>3366674
They're atypical hymens, the weird ones are not normal to see.

[Anonymous No.3366726]

>>3366718
>Literally nothing?
i told you we have the story right?
>an ogre named grok the pungent lives in a stinky swamp, where he is treated like garbage by a chad-like knight who hunts there and poaches his swamp hens
>one day, he is collecting firewood on the forest's edge when he sees the princess of the kingdom of trulippia visiting the nearby village
>he falls in love with her and stalks her
>he breaks into the royal palace and finds her sleeping with the knight
>he kills them both and becomes a fugative
>as he flees further into the wilderness, his surroundings become more and more otherworldly, and eventually creepy
>the heartbeat and breathing sound effects become louder and louder
>after a while, the screen fades to black
>the final image in the game is of grok flayed and crucified upside-down in a vision of hell, with the quote "And if thy hand scandalize thee, cut it off: it is better for thee to enter into life, maimed, than having two hands to go into hell, into unquenchable fire"—Mark 9:43
>the game returns to the main menu, whose background image has been replaced with an image of a man dead in a car crash, with a small grok doll hanging from his rear view mirror
there's also no point writing code with no assets, even a retard could figure that out

[Anonymous No.3366729]

>>3366726
>twas bait all along

[Anonymous No.3366754]

>>3366729
The funny anon you’re replying to is probably not the original dumbshit

[Anonymous No.3366800]

>>3365502
See, that's what I thought, that's why I thought it was a weird interpretation of the cervix since it looked too deep to be the hymen and also kinda thick--almost like a pig's nose.

[Anonymous No.3366840]

>>3366800
Yeah. I'm positive all the replies to you going 'lol virgin, it's a hymen' and stuff were the original artist. That's just not what hymens look like, imperfectly perforated or otherwise. (I gotta tell you though that no amount of manual stretching is going to make a cervix visible when looking at a woman's crotch, it's pretty far up there anon)

[Anonymous No.3366846]

>>3366800
Yeah. I'm positive all the replies to you going 'lol virgin, it's a hymen' and stuff were the original artist. That's just not what hymens look like, imperfectly perforated or otherwise. (I gotta tell you though that no amount of by-hand stretching is going to make a cervix visible when looking at a woman's crotch, it's pretty far up there anon. You'd need a gyno's tool to actually look at a cervix.)

[Anonymous No.3366885]

>>3366846
Wasn't me. I don't like to add to the discourse, there's enough of that already. I'm working on it.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3366893]

>>3366400
Anything about that should be redone, or does the whole thing gotta go?

[Anonymous No.3366904]

>>3366885
In that case, there's at least one person who saw your work and was like 'yep that's a hyman' which...is amazing

>>3366893
The weird tiny line-shaped highlights on her tits are really strange. I guess you were trying for skin texture but they look like little translucent hairs instead. Either get rid of them and do a more conventional highlight or re-attempt the skin texture effect with dots instead of dashes

[Anonymous No.3366907]

>>3366352
Her expression is more "fuck did I leave the iron on" and less "fuck I'm horny".

[Anonymous No.3366911]

>>3366500

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3366919]

>>3366904
Thanks.

Let me know if you guys have any other critiques.

[Anonymous No.3366983]

What do you think of my witch mommy?

[Anonymous No.3366997]

>>3366983
>ywn have the privelage of being her designated broom cleaner, by which you would only use your tongue

[Anonymous No.3367002]

>>3366983
this is fucking disgusting what the hell is wrong with you

[Anonymous No.3367006]

>>3366983
disgusting but also.. aesthetically pleasing
nicely done anon

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367008]

>>3366983
You made me feel things I never knew could coalesce into this quixotic mess of fascination, admiration, and disgust. Well played, you bastard.

[Anonymous No.3367009]

>>3366983
It's good! It's really gross.. definitely does not make me horny, but to each their own. The breasts look asymmetrical. Maybe it;s just that the nipple on the far one is too small? But it could also just be that it's too flat in general, or that the seam along the chest goes too high or something.

It's strange that she's wearing stockings, but her toes grabbing the mushroom don't appear to have fabric around them. Especially if youre going for a bit of stocking/foot fetish, the realism on the fabric would be good to have.

[Anonymous No.3367040]

>>3365585
Personally I feel disgusted by her ugly face, unappealing body language, and the ghastly tones of her skin that resemble a drowned corpse.
However, my tastes are very singular, so someone less sophisticated may find it arousing. It's not very likely though.

[Anonymous No.3367044]

I'mma leave it here.

[Anonymous No.3367045]

>>3367044
thats so much better

[Anonymous No.3367047]

>>3366846
> (I gotta tell you though that no amount of by-hand stretching is going to make a cervix visible when looking at a woman's crotch, it's pretty far up there anon. You'd need a gyno's tool to actually look at a cervix.)

No, I'm aware of this, anon-- It's just such a common trope in hentai manga, I just assumed the artist was trying to emulate it.

[Anonymous No.3367049]

Had to make some quick fixes, but I'm happy enough to leave it here. Thanks for the feedback.

[Anonymous No.3367065]

>>3365585
>>3367040
there, fixed it.
fucking retards with their anime garbage, how hard can it be to learn basic proportions for once?

[Anonymous No.3367146]

How cartoony do you like your proportions when you draw nsfw?

[Anonymous No.3367164]

>>3366983
I really love this. It's fun. Not really fappable, but as a picture in of itself it's got a good sense of style to it. I dig it.

[Anonymous No.3367239]

Doodle request for a drawthread on /b/

[Anonymous No.3367248]

Any thoughts on what the FOSTA/SESTA anti-sex trafficking bill will mean for porn artists?

[Anonymous No.3367254]

>>3367248
Link me and is it a US only thing?

[Anonymous No.3367255]

>>3367248
Nothing.

[Anonymous No.3367263]

>>3367254
https://www.engadget.com/2018/03/30/congress-just-legalized-sex-censorship-what-to-know/

SESTA passed Congress a week ago. It still hasn't been signed into law, yet in the past week all of the following have already happened:

* Reddit banned most subreddits dedicated to sales. In addition to preventing sex workers from promoting their content, this also banned subreddits dedicated to guns, drugs, and even homebrewing beer.

* Craigslist completely removed their personals section. In addition to preventing sex workers from having a platform to screen potential clients, this means that there is no more meeting people for dating or casual sex via Craigslist. The much-loved "Missed Connections" board was also briefly taken down, before being migrated elsewhere.

* Google Drive banned the sharing of porn, shutting down one of the easiest outlets for performers to send direct-sales and to share edits of content with each other. Many performers lost their entire life's work as Google has banned performers from saving their own content once it gets flagged.

* Consensual Sex Work advertising sites CityVibe and Nightshift have shut down completely.

* Microsoft has banned all "inappropriate" or "offensive" content from its platforms. They claim they reserve the right to view everyone's Skype calls to determine whether any violations occur, which is a huge privacy violation. In addition to preventing cam performers from doing private shows and full service sex workers from screening clients, this also prevents long distance couples from being intimate with each other over camera. These rules also apply to XBox and Office, so one can conceivably be banned for writing erotica on Microsoft Word.

[Anonymous No.3367264]

>>3366983
Pretty good buddy. Lacks appeal for lots of people in sure but in OP so what the hell do I know

[Anonymous No.3367265]

>>3367248
RIP

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367298]

Completed.

[Anonymous No.3367307]

>>3367298
hate her eyes and massive jaw, everything else is nice

[Anonymous No.3367317]

>>3367049
So you decided to draw her with her cervix visible?
Hawt!

[Anonymous No.3367377]

>>3367298
man face and wrong eye positions on the head

[Anonymous No.3367472]

>>3367298
I mean this in the most constructive of ways, but the way you drew her face makes her look like she has downs syndrome. The eyes are sized and positioned oddly, and the over-emphasized lacrimal caruncles (inner corner of the eyes) look swollen and are very jarring. The agape mouth makes it look like she's having trouble breathing through her nose, only furthering the "mouth-breather" look.

It's difficult to read what her expression is trying to convey; partly due to the eyebrows being hidden, and partly because the eyes themselves aren't very expressive. I get that you went for a more "realistic" design approach for detailing the facial features, but it just wasn't executed very well.

If you wanted to go with more realistic/western comic styled eyes, I'd try making them a bit smaller. I'd also show a bit less of her bottom row of teeth.

[Anonymous No.3367490]

>>3363814
oh man, now I see the butt/hip issue. 2 days later. why can't this stuff be immediately apparent?

[Anonymous No.3367550]

>>3367490
Aw geez anon, it's like the perfectly good-looking ass of someone sitting down, attached to running legs for some reason.

[Anonymous No.3367569]

>>3366983
Good art, bad porn. Sorry man.

[Anonymous No.3367571]

>>3367298
Your biggest issue is that you don't understand the concept of LESS IS MORE. You always overwork every single one of your artworks. This ,coupled with a pretty bad perspective knowledge, gives really unappealing results most of the time.

[Anonymous No.3367572]

>>3366983
I really like this but it reads as 'art that happens to depict sexual themes' rather than 'porn'. Dig what you've done with the mushroom as a symbolic phallus and the broom as a literal one. Everything is excellent on a technical level. Do you have a site/blog?

[Anonymous No.3367598]

>>3367298
From the neck down, its a pretty damn well done piece! Pretty fappable!
But from the neck *up*...?
Its really very bad. The actual eyes and mouth look more like they were copied and pasted on. The hair shading could use work and the head itself is far too wide and the jawline is way to strong.

You really have talent, but there are some big things you could work on.

>it looks more like a joke bara crossdresser cosplaying as her
>sure women CAN have wide and strong facial structures, but its uncommon and definitely unflattering
>especially since the actual character isn't like that at all

[Anonymous No.3367600]

im trying to practice drawing furry porn for money. how do i improve on anatomy and make it more fappable? i have no experience in drawing furries or porn pls help

[Anonymous No.3367608]

>>3367600
Study what you want to learn.

[Anonymous No.3367614]

>>3367600
>wants to make money off drawing
>doesn't have the skill to draw
sorry anon, but you don't acquire that kind of knowledge over night. get more realistic expectations and find a different job if you need money quick.
also, just because it's furry porn, you won't get easy cash. stop believing in that meme. if you want the furry bucks you'll have to get famous first, and people with this kind of skill don't get famous.

[Anonymous No.3367696]

>>3367572
I post mostly on DA and tumblr:
exodusisnear.deviantart.com
artretard.deviantart.com

[Anonymous No.3367712]

>>3367600
The face is very very fappable

[Anonymous No.3367715]

>>3367600
Is that...supposed to be a dick? That fuzzy thing? Good lord anon
Go to the beginner thread and read the top couple posts for learning resources

[Anonymous No.3367716]

>>3367298
jesus. I’m imagining what if she looked normal when the paizuri started and then in the middle she suddenly looked up and had the face of a muscleman like this. god what a jumpscare

[Anonymous No.3367722]

>>3366674
Obviously never been with a virgin then. Those are hymens.

[Anonymous No.3367731]

[Anonymous No.3367736]

>>3367722
Thanks for clarifying that. We definitely couldn't tell before your post.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367837]

I want to thank you all for helping me improve so much the last couple of months. Without you to break my stagnation, I'd be nothing.

I went back to the linework to experiment with another expression, and I decided to go with a tongue out expression. Let me know if its a hit, miss, or if I should haul my ass out.

Also adjusted the jawline and a few other complaints, such as deleting some unnecessary layers from the hair (not shown).

[Anonymous No.3367869]

>>3367837
The uncolored version looks way better

[Anonymous No.3367875]

>>3361811
that hands freaking me out man

[Anonymous No.3367879]

>>3364673
post work

[Anonymous No.3367885]

>>3365494
yeah alright thats it women are just not built right christ

[Anonymous No.3367911]

>>3367298
she looks korean

[Anonymous No.3367917]

>>3367837
looks alot better

[Anonymous No.3367935]

>>3367298
What the fuck is up with those tear ducts? Are they swollen? Those eyes are borderline cross-eyed. What in the world made you think pretty ass coloring could save this? Are those warts on her bottom lip trying to convey a highlight? Why is she wearing glitter on her face? Why do her eyelashes have highlights on them? Would it have killed you to spend a little more time trying to draw this on model? Why is there red showing on the bottom of her right eye?

Polished shit, very little fap material. What the hell were you thinking, man?

[Anonymous No.3367944]

>>3367837
And then you went back and turned up with this? Start over. Changing the face won't make this any better than the colored version you presented earlier. It boggles my mind to see that no one on this thread bothers to make ANY effort to draw their work ON MODEL. It only shows that you a) have NO IDEA how to draw on model, b) you still draw with your ego and c) you are all lazy as fuck. As a fan, I'll gladly pass on your work just to see if I can find the artist who's willing to draw on model for me. I don't want to jack off to your interpretation. Either deliver on model on find something else to devote your time to, like a REAL job.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367947]

>>3367837
Deleted some superfluous layers and will rework the expression in. Any artists you'd recommend I follow and learn from?

[Anonymous No.3367955]

>>3367947
Still garbage, guy. Now she looks retarded. Go ahead, take a step back, and see the down syndrome for yourself.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367961]

Roughed this out days ago. Commissioner is really liking how the roughs are coming out.

Keep it up, anons.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367962]

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3367985]

Circled this among friends and getting a lot more requests.

A guy who I play Blazblue with consistently asked me to do a page comic of Tager threatening to backhand Lamba, who responds equivalent to "Warning: A precipitous increase of saline water threatens your systems. Heed, target: alter your space or perish by malfunction, or by blades."

[Anonymous No.3368024]

>>3367947
The face is better (I’m concerned you’re going to over detail it into uncanny territory when you keep working, just try not to do that)
The jawline remains too big.

[Anonymous No.3368028]

>>3367722
Unrelated to the picture but do you guys really think the hands-stretching-to-show-you-vag is a part of normal sex (which is the only way you’d physically look at a hymen during sex?) It’s just a hentai trope, not an obligatory part of foreplay.

[Anonymous No.3368029]

>>3367962
>>3367985
Take a hint, guy. Your work is average, at best. Stop promoting it already, sketches and bad perspective are running rampant in your work. Suggest you take a three month leave and really practice on your work. And your "friends" are safe spacing you. None of them have the balls to tell you that your work needs more work.

[Anonymous No.3368031]

>>3368024
I guess you can't see the down syndrome on the look on her face either. Jesus, it's like the blind leading the deaf around here.

[Anonymous No.3368035]

>>3367962
Diluted expression. Commissioner, (a.k.a your friend) should reconsider this, and really push you out of your comfort zone.

[Anonymous No.3368038]

>>3368028
And virgins trying to teach other virgins how to draw hymens in pussies. Yikes.

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3368053]

>>3368029
Then help with the learning process. I will remain committed to pushing out work, but I will heed your advice and take time with perspective with each piece.

And how are "sketches running rampant" a detriment at this stage?

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3368057]

>>3368035
Will keep that in mind as I will work with him. Any tips to push the expressions to satisfaction, for me to incorporate into the line work? Thank you in advance.

[Anonymous No.3368096]

[Anonymous No.3368107]

Behold my newest masterpiece

[Anonymous No.3368255]

>>3368107
>chmok

[Hardstones McFlintcock No.3368449]

Played around a bit, fixed the jaw again, and adjusted the width and length of her left hand's forefinger and pinky.

Steps remaining:

1. Find the right saturation balance for the background.
2. Add highlights to the eyes, lips, and tongue to give a "wetness" to them that feels right.
3. Play around until the feel of the expression feels more natural.
4. Define the neck just a little more.

Anything else I missed? Keep the fire coming, you inglorious sons of bitches.

[Anonymous No.3368615]

>>3368449
You're polishing a turd. It looks like the retarded lovechild of anime and artgerm.

I know for a fact that you don't know how highlights work so you shouldn't use them until you actually learn them.
The rimlight all around her is unnecessary, it just adds a white line on top of the black linework. And where black and white meet, maximum contrast is created, which demands attention.
Also the main lightsource is the typical meme-lighting you would see from someone who is afraid to use actual light and shadow (or someone who doesn't know the shapes of the head and makes everything soft). You should befriend yourself with the "Asaro Head", it will help you tremendously.
The overall presentation is very amateurish. I know you made the background green to compliment her red clothes, but why tho?. The main focus is the tittyfuck and her face, not her bandana. Hair is overrendered, eyes are dead, tongue is too far out (seriously, do what she does infront of a mirror), overall style is slightly inconsistent.
I assume noone would read until here so here is a secret tip for you: pay attention to the resolution of detail throughout the image, you don't want something to look cutout and pasted. Especially the hair stands out too much against her face.

[Anonymous No.3368697]

I am having a hard time with a WIP I have going. I can't seem to get the crotch area right. Every time I try and draw it, it just looks tacked on and bad. This is my first time drawing the sort of pose I'm going for.

Is there a more fundamental issue with the legs that's causing this?

[Anonymous No.3368700]

>>3368697
Ah, I remember when I had the same issue years back. I did a lot of research, memorized the muscles, fat pads, folds etc, watched tutorials and all that.

It feels good to hold the knowledge and denying fags like you the magic pill

[Anonymous No.3368759]

>>3368697
>>3368700

I think I figured it out. Looked at a few references and found what I was going for.

[Anonymous No.3368857]

>>3362302
It's funny that's you're acting like you would even be able to redline it.

[Anonymous No.3368863]

if you arent team creme you should give up being a hentai artist

[Anonymous No.3368864]

>>3364673
You would think that with so much information on this site, people wouldn't fall into the dunning kruger trap but they be doing that.
You have to become more self-aware, Kruger-anon.

[Anonymous No.3368893]

>>3368697
you can do it

[Anonymous No.3369222]

>>3366983
The woman is disgusting but the art itself is good.

[Anonymous No.3369270]

>>3368857
WOAH, such quality bait! SUGOI!

GTFO

[Anonymous No.3369401]

[Anonymous No.3369590]

WIP crit?

[Anonymous No.3369608]

>>3369590
You'll get a crit when you're done, bitch.

[Anonymous No.3369615]

>>3369608
O-Okay dad...

[Anonymous No.3369647]

No critiques on this one? >>3368107 :/
I polished it a bit more, can I get some (You)'s ?

[Anonymous No.3369807]

[Anonymous No.3369864]

>>3368107
>>3369647
Lacks appeal. I'd say go over it all again and make it far more appealing.

No, appealing doesn't mean make it simplified/anime. It just isn't that appealing to look at and it seems stiff and lifeless.

[Anonymous No.3369944]

>>3369401
Muh dick! Though in the reflection the tits look very awkward.

[Anonymous No.3369949]

Can I get some help? It started as a doodle, but I didn't plan out the posing ahead of time so now it looks kinda scrunched and off, but I can't quite figure out what I can do to fix this.

advice or a redline would be greatly appreciated.

[Anonymous No.3370025]

>>3369949
Look at and observe your own work and redo it with proper planning being observed.

[Anonymous No.3370300]

>>3369270
>He thinks the truth is bait