/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>3668956
Not even /beg/, so take it for what it's worth
The problem with your fist image is that the focus is on his face/knuckles, but it doesn't look like a face or knuckles. I'd post that picture of the cringing mummy, as a comparison, but fuck that thing.
I think the problem is the outline beneath the brows- the tear lines (?) are very thick and make it look like its own structure

>>3668957
I do not understand what this is depicting. I think it is either a barbarian warrior with a metal helmet or a figure in a robe looking trepid. If it is, the branch in his arm throws off the arms outline, and the vertical line above his index finger seems to be both his nose and the edge of the robe. The eye blotch seems like it should be shaped along the contours of a nose along the bottom side. I also believe he should have less lines on his body-like I said, first thing I thought of was muscles

>>3668958
It wouldn't match the style of the others but more bottles, for depth? I *would* also say do the inside of his eye with grey, but I'm not sure if that is actually a problem. I also think you should do something about his right wrist

>>3668959
No clue, sorry

>>3669209
Thank you. The figure >>3668957 is actually a french girl reading a book.

About the first image, I'm intentionally running away from realistic features, so that would explain a lot.

>>3668956
i think what's missing is that they're not very interesting, and also they're not very beautiful.

for interest i propose you make a series, 20 pieces exploring the same story/subject etc.

for beauty it's hard to say, it may be that you just need to do more until you come across the right look and capture it. or perhaps you need to put more thought into design.

i do think there's something there, and hopefully you'll continue to post here as i look forward to seeing how your style develops.

You need a more interesting medium that fits your style. Acrylic is trash
look into Woodcut or Linocut, or maybe even Screenprinting if you are feeling brave

>>3669666
>>3669669

Thank you, I agree with you all, I feel like my stuff needs more soul.

Do you guys think I will come across as pretentious if I do something like that?

Nothing is missing.

It is complete.

To me

these are beautiful as they are


The man sleeping and the woman crying are fabulous.
It is like orange peel unwinding to reveal an image

>>3669789


The woman crying looks like an Iris Flower and a female form at once

She has the form of a flower at first glance, until the leaves give way to hands holding her head in tiredness or distress.

>>3669789


Now when I look, I see the form of a pansy flower, not unlike Alice in Wonderland

Have you ever considered doing a scene from Alice in Wonderland in this style with the overarching flowers and a tiny alice below?

>>3669795
>>3669797
>>3669798
>>3669801

You're very sensible, thank you so much, and no, I've never considered it, but I will.

Solid lines would be better.

>>3669789
This was my first impression lol. Probably says more about me than about your art though.

>>3671587

The black and white one is pretentious?

>>3668956
>>3668957
>>3668958
I think I've seen your stuff oh here before and I think I probably said the same thing then. I'd say they'd look cooler with more deliberate, solid lines. Particularly >>3668957

Like I'm a huge fan of Mondrians whole schtick, and you could kind of apply his kind of ideology about looking planned and deliberate AND chaotic and emotive, it'd be cool maybe idk.

I'm normally a big proponent of the whole wabi sabi concept and all the imperfection and impermanence memes. Generally I say that embracing mistakes and bad brush strokes add humanity and novelty to art. But for your aesthetic I kind of think the opposite. The schmeary edges on a lot of the lines are distracting. The imperfections and the ink (right?) bleeding out on the paper and some of the lines not being opaque is doody.

and i think the fingers being fucky is interesting on op but annoying on >>3668958 .

and >>3668959 is pretty cool as it is tbphwyf. you could probably sell blue and red "3d" prints of streetlights or whatever that shit is in that style to all kinds of bozos. Nice and comfy and the subject is both nonoffensive while making the dingdong looking at it think about what and why and stuff. That one even works better with the schmeary wabi sabi lines. Do more 3d print looking things tbphwyf

>>3671549
>>3671927

I will definitely do something more deliberate without losing the chaotic aspect of it. Thank you for the insights, very helpful.

>>3668956
Your work looks like its on wrong medium. Change to ink and paper or learn how to use adobe illustrator where you can do good and clear vector art.