/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

Alright, this is my rought draft, please forgive me for my shamefur display, i know that that i'm not conveying what i want with the dialogue, but if i try to fix the dialogue i end up in a loop where i have to fix the paneling and so on, so i have been more careless with the dialogue since is faster change the dialogue to match the felling of the story and the panel, that change the paneling, please be honest and as harsh as you can with it
Anyways this is the closest that i its to a final form so any advice is well recived, i'm sorry, i'm really sorry, but please ask anything that you don't understand
Now i will take a nap, since i have been sleeping like shit and my blood pressure has been low as fuck, so please be honest https://imgur.com/a/G2hEwCZ