/ic/ - Artwork/Critique

>>6155817
Thanks you for reading it, and you are totally right anon, i will improve the script, and also it's my fault for not adding dialogue boxes, so it's pretty simple confuse the dialogue and the narration(the more little dialogue isn't that important, just to be there besides the sfx that i will add latter)
I just overlooked to script to get out of the loop that i was, but i hope what i did write was enought to make the idea of how it should be, i was prioritizing the composition and the paneling so i could start drawing and finally get the things in order without make a drastical change in the pages and the order and those things


Also i wanted to make more a little bit more of narration to explaing a little bit how the mc actually feels so people could conect that with whats going on in the art, but i just don't know if they would overlap and make everything more convoluted
And i'm sorry that i'm so confusing and hard to understand, i'm simply have a mess in my head trying to do this, and thanks for the advice