/fa/ - Fashion

>>7225789
disgusting

that's not a suggestion, but thanks anyway :)

>>7225789
"business punk" logo looks shit- use a font that isn't so clashy with the other text, and give it a tiny bit of shadow so it doesn't look so flat.

The two renders on the side are showing the same thing, so ditch one of them.

I can't really tell how the bag works (some sort of special latch or handle? I don't know) So have a render of it in action, like opened up or opening.

Actually just ditch the whole 'business punk' thing. It's a tacky name, sorry.

>>7225809
came here for this

>>7225789
I think ASHK is a cooler title and the fonts are fooked up not the one on the bad but the other 2 also fix the pink and blue they look out of place and keep the 2 bags on the side and yea pusuiness punk isnt goood

>>7225789
I am a well known designer. Before I give you any suggestions, I ask that you post feet pics. Scratch my back and I scratch yours.

Also, what is your favorite toothpaste flavor? I am partial to cinnamon mint, but I find myself liking regular baking soda better.

>>7225840

>>7225809
Also post screenshots of your cad/rhino/whateveryouuse work so we can get a better preview of how it works.
Also I hope you're doing bigger renders of it. The one in your pic wouldn't be much good for anything above an A4 page.
Also don't centre the image's composition, it looks boring. Google 'rule of thirds' and read about it for 2 minutes.

>>7225809
>>7225869
This is good advice, but it isn't the best.

Before I give the best advice, I only ask that you tell me what your favorite toothpaste flavor is. I am a designer. Trust me.

>>7225873
Just the standard peppermint flavour.

Now tell your advice, Deiter van der Ives

I like mint

>>7225894
Haha, jokes on you. Now I can masturbate to the thought of a young female designer brushing her teeth with peppermint flavor toothpaste.

>>7225789
It looks kind of heavy, I don't really know where to grasp because those silver things look like they would cramp my hand if I gripped normally, cant you put a strap on it or some jet boosters? Also I thought ak was anne klein. U should make it ak47 because thats badass as fuck.

>>7226679
You are jester to the gods, the herald of wit. You make the stars weep with laughter and even fate itself pisses it's pants when you produce your golden banter.

>>7225789
this looks like it'd be really uncomfortable to hold.

How the hell does that handle work? op pls respond it's driving me crazy.

>>7225809 also this advice is golden btw

#shotsfired

>>7226709
was thinking mech legs but jet boosters sound even better
>>7226718
It's just an elaborate magnetic clasp. Because the metal parts all touch in more or less the same place it means it stays together in that way , but you open it like so.

>>7226718
Shit render but fuck it. not waiting again.

>>7226717
Not really. all the pressure goes on two cm thick round bars that never meet, so the pressure distro is better than a single round clasp or similar.
Also the handles don't move around when under tension so it would feel pretty firm.

>>7226726
Trajan? srsly?

>>7225855
that's a great gif
polite sage

>you will never slide your penis in and out of this purse as the magnetic force firmly pulls the cold metallic clasps together

>>7226716
I laughed

i feel like you'd need giant man hands to hold this since the metal things are so wide, I'd also do away with "BUSINESSPUNK" and "AK" you shouldn't use your real name for a design alias because "Ashley" is just kind of a basic white girl name, no offense

what CAD program u usin

what skool u @ if u dont mind my axing? is this for kent state uni?

amazes me that someone taking design courses and who seems to have a handle on the technical side of things could be so clueless as to use three different fonts like this. and the pink and turquoise? wtf? you have no taste at all.

>>7226830
What do you have to submit? Just the one page of renders or a few pages with technical diagrams/drawings/orthographics?

>>7226951
haha ashley is my english name. Thought it sounded more /fa/ than Reiko.
I'm using blender (we don't even USE cad other than illustrator on this course, at least not this year) and I don't know where kent state uni is, guessing that's america.

>>7226959
and it amazes me that you find time to go on 4chan in between your tight schedule of dick sucking. Point taken though. never been great with colours.

>>7226968
just the renders. supposed to look like a magazine ad, we were taught how to use illustrator for this but the bitch teacher never specified what we use to make it so I thought fuck it I'll make it look good and use renders.

>>7227012
>Ashley
>Reiko

I'm really not seeing how those names relate...

>>7226709
Hmm....

>>7227012
>Thought it sounded more /fa/ than Reiko.
i actually can't tell if that's a joke? :|

>>7227012
Reiko is literally a billion times more /fa/ than ashley

>>7227033
they have to? well fuck.
>>7227047
really? haha thank you (:
always used ashley because I was embarassed.

>Given name Reiko
>Changes name to Ashley
>"More /fa"

???????????? you literally have Rei K.'s name in ur name

>>7227055
Rei is short for Reiko.

>>7227043
Drop the letters. Whats the thing on the side, a jet thruster? Use helvetica and come up with a better name. Remove the handles

>>7227110
You did see what that was a reply to, right?
The handles are functional. there's a shoulder strap that attaches to them. I'll see what it looks like though.

>>7227141
I just think it's a little much now, try minimalist. AK47 is really cheesy. What materials do you see it being made out of? Maybe change it to leather, and maybe add "reiko" centered in the middle like pic related

>>7227173
whops

>>7227173
Really liking the idea of making a cheap and chic kind of tough vynil/pvc bag with some aluminium/thin steel braces inside it (the two bulges) to give it shape and structure, as well as holding it open when you put stuff in it. Leather might work though

>>7227173
to my eye this looks a bit too minimalist, but maybe I've been working on it

>>7227223
...too long, heh

>>7227173
HEY!! THIS LOOKS GOOD!

>>7226716
nice

>>7227257
I'd much sooner buy this than the bag in the op.
Then again, I masturbate to pictures of Common Projects Low Achilles in spotless white.

>>7227325
>Common Projects Low Achilles
why do they cost so much? @_@

>>7227257
I like that much better. Rule #1 of design: kill your darlings. Try it in leather, and maybe change the font to helvetica. And for the final layout you should try white on black helvetica neue lt com with the leather bag in a subtle white light

>>7227354
That kind of leather in that quality is relatively expensive. Now then they make sure they're made with a higher attention to detail than your average shoe that you see in the mall. Cause with such a design, the only way to differentiate yourself is by quality.
Then they multiply that by whatever the fuck they want because what are you going to do? Buy the weird-toebox/worse-leather Kent Wang replica's?

>>7227375
What kind of leather?
Thanks for the help by the way. feels like I'm learning a lot :)

>>7227375
>Helvetica

Please don't, it's such a basic choice. Choose another grotesk, like New Rail Alphabet, Galaxie Polaris or ARS Maquette (pictured).

Meh... don't know if leather suits the design.

>>7227534
Maybe not, got way too dark now, was worth a shot though. Maybe go back to where you were and making "reiko" a bit smaller? Maybe with one of the fonts
>>7227430 recommended

>>7227024
not even this guy but was that meant to be an insult?

>>7227563
if it's someone you love I guess it's ok, or if it's your job.

>>7227534
what if you used a hexagon tessellation of hard white plastic instead of the all over plastic.

>>7227556
kinda hard to get those fonts atm, will probably do that when I've got the design right.

BUT! you were on to something with the leather. Not sure about the white velvet trim, but the leather definitely seems to work...

>>7227216
yes yes this pleases me. The jetpacks could be used in self defense or if you need to escape through a metal wall when the mechs descend upon you.

>>7227706
make it sort of cylindrical where someone would have to actually grip it, be it those metallic clasps or comfy gripz or a wrap around buckle or whatever. if you had a really thin but long silver chain to put on your shoulder that might b siq 2

>>7227706
Yeah, this has potential. It's pretty dark now and perhaps too shiny. Maybe try working with the texture so it looks more like the leather in pic related. When do you have to deliver?

>>7227975
ahh, shouldn't be too hard. thanks!
due before next term, so 2 months. Pleeeenty of time x)

Thank you so much for helping btw.
I have no sense of style at all and you've really pointed me in the right direction. You're awesome :)

>come to /fa/
>see a girl posting about a /fa/ related item
>someone actually helps and contributes
>girl stays and thanks the people that helped her

Well /fa/, sometimes you amaze me.

>>7228067
I didn't even realize it was a girl until you pointed it out.

>>7227062
Non-american/english is always like 10x fa multiplier bonus doe

>>7228008
oh, i thought you were going to deliver like today. keep uploading renders if you do anything more, fun to see the process

>>7228078
yeah if I'd known she was a girl i wouldn't have helped

stay out of our specail club GIRL

>>7228098
you guys are funny XD
>>7228087
Will do! got a shitload of other stuff to do as well so wanted to get this out of the way, but I really like this design now so i think I'll try and make more out of it :)

>>7228087
Done!
Added the clasp just to show what it did, but I think it looks better without it xp
thank you so much stahlwerk,
and everyone else who helped. /fa/ is AWESOME!

>>7228201
oops XD

"businesspunk" ohh so revolution, so edge.

>>7228207
that looks really good, the clasp works much better with the black leather. huge progress from your original picture

>>7228207

That strap is looking rather polygonal. Looks nice other than that though.

>>7228252
Thanks! I had doubts about coming to /fa/ for actual help, but fuck me I got a surprise XD
>>7228264
oops... forgot to subdivide haha
thanks for pointing it out man

>>7228207

the metal clasp things are just way too fucking industrial. The rest of the purse is a minimal futuristic look, the handles, especially being brushed metal like that, just totally kill it. White trim, velvet or not, looks really good.

>>7228008

Why are you designing something if you have no sense of style? I don't get it. What is this for?

>>7228207

The clasp detracts from the rest of the bag. Have you tried making it white or making it smaller?

Did you know how to do any of this before going to school? I want to go to school for whatever this is.

>>7228067
>Actually she's being a bit of a bitch

>>7228207
It only now just hit me how much Reiko looks like Seiko.

I had a dream last night that I was at a gig and I saw a disabled person trying to open your initial design for the bag, but couldn't and threw it on the ground in a fit of rage.

You then got told off by your teacher.

>>7228207
maybe make the metal clasp more smooth and sleek?

>>7230952
How did she look?
Where her feet pretty?

>>7229356
Yeah I've been using blender for 3 years so this is self taught. fashion school teaches us to kill our imaginations by drawing 200 of every fucking thing we make.

>>7230963
Could see how it comes out but I'm trying really hard to keep an original style

>>7230928
thought that too so I changed it to lowercase

>>7231337
The one on the right looks the best out of everything you've posted so far.

There's no reason you can't make a magnetic clasp work, but the one you've got looks way too big and out of place compared to the rest of the bag.

If you got the bag on the right and added a magnetic clasp to it that was more minimalist it would look perfect.

you should make the logo scrolling led text, that would be badass. the handle needs reworking though. how am i supposed to fit that on my arm while I'm drinking coffee and texting kanyeezus about my day

>>7231417
It's wide enough to be that narrow. It's flexible.

>>7231386
Not bad

Also made a smart bracelet to go with the collection. Does it fit?

>>7231483
looks good, how about you try having the reiko embossed instead like the writing on some of the other stuff posted

>>7231483

the lettering looks whack

>>7225789
Would buy if real/10

It would need to be longer in width for paperwork.

Am I the only one who would prefer a zipper to a clasp? Clasps are fidgety. :(

>>7231697
slide to open a watch? so dumb

>>7231843
I think that's an iOS screenshot... probably a placeholder.
Please think before you comment.

>>7231808
Good idea! I'll make one big enough to fit an A4 sketchpad with a shoulder strap

reiko is the better name, obviously. I think the design with hard white plastic was a lot more successful than the black leather, it went from something I would buy to eh.

>>7232218
Different tastes, different flavours :)
>>7231811
It pretty much closes itself if you leave it.
There's a zipper inside for waterproofing/insurance
>>7231808
done :)

>>7231483
this looks sexy, would gift to my gf

if i had a gf

>>7232291
oops...
>>7232312
Awwh thanks sweetie!

>>7232322
the one in the middle makes me happy, would wear

>>7232322
Think the middle looks dope. I really prefer the white over the black but both are shaping up.

I think you should size up the font just a bit though.

>>7232322
Middle is best now
Then right
Then left

>>7232355
agreed

>>7232370
Left one is meant to be a work/student bag for carrying sketchbooks folders and other stuff.
So it needs to look a little more HD and func.

>>7232666
I got a waffle maker just looks like that.

>>7233156
reiko makes it seem even more 'appliancey'

>>7233224
reiko reminds me of eleiko which is probably the most expensive brand in weightlifting. So I like it.

>>7233224
cunts like you are why I have an english name -_-

>>7233231
haha thanks. I think.

>>7233242
lol. sorry

>>7233249
Grrr =~=

>>7233260
(⌐■_■)=/̵͇̿̿/'̿'̿̿̿ ̿ ̿̿ ヽ༼ຈل͜ຈ༽ﾉ Keep Your Dongers Where i Can See Them

cross eyed stereoscopic view too (:

>>7225789
Ditch the AK logo. Looks fucking stupid. Also there are already companies which use AK. Granted all of them are shit as well.

>>7234686
read the fucking thread